讀后續(xù)寫備考指導(dǎo)

建后續(xù)寫備考讀議卷東山交流問題一、山東卷讀后續(xù)寫題型解讀及能力要求二、讀后續(xù)寫閱卷心得（評分標準及備考建議）三、案例式教學示范及優(yōu)質(zhì)資源推薦一、山東卷讀后續(xù)寫題型解讀及能力要求提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容、所給兩段段落開頭語進行續(xù)寫（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)合理、完整的短文。Tounderstandisonething,toepressisanotherToappreciateisonething,tocreateisanother王初明教授---“促學效應(yīng)”1釋放創(chuàng)造力和想象力2融入讀物提供的語境學習語言3語言可模仿，內(nèi)容則要創(chuàng)新4順著語篇續(xù)寫，學習連貫表達5補全的是語篇，而非單詞或短語6語言理解與產(chǎn)出結(jié)合緊密，顯著提高外語學習效率7對外語教學和學習幾乎無負面影響。一、讀后續(xù)寫題型解讀及能力要求*要求考生在理解一篇不完整文章的基礎(chǔ)上，充分調(diào)動想象創(chuàng)新思維，大膽預(yù)測文章缺失部分的內(nèi)容走勢，進行充滿個性色彩的設(shè)計，并用英語進行續(xù)寫表達。所提供短文多以記敘文故事類文章或夾敘夾議類文章為主，故事情節(jié)有曲折有起伏，但故事線索的邏輯性比較強。*創(chuàng)造性邏輯性豐富性1沒有劃線詞，難度增加。2時間劇情均跨度較大3主題意義鮮明（人與自然，人與社會，人與自我）4新的評分標準山東卷讀后續(xù)寫的特點：山東續(xù)寫浙江續(xù)寫總則總分為25分，按7個檔次評分總分為25分，按5個檔次評分1.內(nèi)容質(zhì)量、完整性、與原文情境融洽；2.詞匯&語法結(jié)構(gòu)準確恰當多樣；3.上下文銜接&全文連貫1.與所給短文&開頭語銜接；2.內(nèi)容豐富&劃線詞使用；3.語法結(jié)構(gòu)&詞匯豐富準確；4.上下文連貫詞數(shù)少于120的，酌情扣分詞數(shù)少于130，從總分中減去2分22—25分（優(yōu)秀）

1.創(chuàng)造了新穎、豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整，與原文情境融洽度高；

2.使用了多樣且恰當?shù)脑~匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達流暢，語言錯誤很少，且完全不影響理解；

3.自然有效地使用了段落間、語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，前后呼應(yīng)，意義連貫。21-25分（優(yōu)秀）

1.與所給短文融合度高，與所提供的各段落開頭語銜接合理；

2.內(nèi)容豐富，應(yīng)用了五個以上短文中標出的關(guān)鍵詞語；

3.所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準確，可能有些許錯誤，但完全不影響意思表達；

4.有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。山東續(xù)寫浙江續(xù)寫1讀（5-8mins）：原文閱讀信息梳理讀情節(jié)讀語言讀線索2后續(xù)（5-8mins）：潛心構(gòu)思情節(jié)預(yù)設(shè)明確方向關(guān)注“兩線”---情節(jié)線&情感線關(guān)注“四點”---四處銜接3寫（20-25mins）：初稿勾勒潤色提升正規(guī)謄寫讀后續(xù)寫基本流程：二、閱卷心得（評分標準及備考建議）1明確續(xù)寫的評分標準2反思學生續(xù)寫中存在的主要問題及應(yīng)對措施3備考續(xù)寫的幾點思考1明確讀后續(xù)寫的評分標準評分:先根據(jù)整體情況對文章進行定檔，然后依據(jù)該檔的相應(yīng)要求來確定或調(diào)節(jié)檔次，最后打分。打分主要從續(xù)寫內(nèi)容、詞匯語法、篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三方面考慮。1創(chuàng)造情節(jié)的質(zhì)量、續(xù)寫的完整性及與原文情境的融洽度。2詞匯、語法的準確性、恰當性及多樣性。3上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。讀后續(xù)寫的高考評分標準各檔次給分范圍和要求:總分為25分，按7個檔次給分。評分檔次描

述第七檔（22-25分）

優(yōu)秀檔①創(chuàng)造了新穎、豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏輯性，續(xù)寫完整，與原文情境融洽度高。②使用了多樣且恰當?shù)脑~匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達流暢，語言錯誤很少，且完全不影響理解。③自然有效地使用了段落間、語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清晰，前后呼應(yīng)，意義連貫。讀后續(xù)寫的高考評分標準各檔次給分范圍和要求:總分為25分，按7個檔次給分。評分檔次描

述第六檔（18---21分）

良好檔①創(chuàng)造了比較豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，比較有邏輯性，續(xù)寫比較完整，與原文情境融洽度比較高。②使用了比較多樣且恰當?shù)脑~匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，有些許語法錯誤，不影響理解。③比較有效地使用了段落間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。讀后續(xù)寫的高考評分標準各檔次給分范圍和要求:總分為25分，按7個檔次給分。評分檔次描

述第五檔（15---17分）

一般檔①創(chuàng)造了基本合理的內(nèi)容，有一定的邏輯性，續(xù)寫基本完整，與原文情境相關(guān)。②使用了比較恰當?shù)脑~匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達方式不夠多樣，表達有些錯誤，但基本不影響理解。③使用了語句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)比較清晰，意義比較連貫。讀后續(xù)寫的高考評分標準各檔次給分范圍和要求:總分為25分，按7個檔次給分。評分檔次描

述第四檔（11---14分）

較差檔（低級語法錯誤，如主賓格使用混亂，時態(tài)錯誤，拼寫錯誤等）①創(chuàng)造了基本完整的故事內(nèi)容，但有的情節(jié)不夠合理或邏輯性不強，與原文情境基本相關(guān)。②使用了簡單的詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，有部分語言錯誤和不恰當之處，個別部分影響理解。③尚有語句銜接的意識，全文結(jié)構(gòu)基本清晰，意義基本連貫。續(xù)寫得分技巧：*1）內(nèi)容上鼓勵大膽想象，有創(chuàng)新意識（不離奇，重邏輯），情節(jié)豐富，盡可能合理展開，并注意前后文呼應(yīng)，與原文融洽度高。*2）寫作盡可能傳遞正能量要提煉有思想性、體現(xiàn)價值觀和傳遞正能量的元素（例如珍愛生命，學會合作，學會感恩等）*3）記敘文語言表達流暢，避免低級語法錯誤，注意連接詞的正確使用，使上下文連貫；注意句子結(jié)構(gòu)的多樣性和語言的豐富性。*4）檢查，謄寫---檢查文章的連貫性、邏輯性，規(guī)范性。最后謄寫要做到字跡工整，清晰美觀。2反思學生續(xù)寫中存在的主要問題及應(yīng)對措施：*閱讀方面，學生的問題主要是詞匯貧乏和閱讀能力不夠或時間緊張沒有意識到解讀文本的重要性；*續(xù)寫寫作部分，主要在內(nèi)容（邏輯性、合理性），詞匯和語法（豐富、準確），以及語篇（連貫性，前后呼應(yīng)）這三大方面存在問題*文章理解不到位，續(xù)寫情節(jié)與原文脫離。*情節(jié)沒有得以展開，體現(xiàn)不出豐富新穎。*所創(chuàng)設(shè)的情境違背真實生活，缺乏合理性。*融洽度不高，銜接不合理。*大量對話無意義，段落間分布不均衡。*主題升華牽強或跑偏。內(nèi)容（邏輯性、合理性）---情節(jié)構(gòu)建中的問題：詞匯和語法方面存在的問題：*詞匯---使用過多的上義詞，不會替換相應(yīng)下義詞；重復(fù)使用同一詞語；基礎(chǔ)詞匯拼寫及詞性錯誤較多*語法---通篇都是簡單句的堆積；非謂語的使用出現(xiàn)語法錯誤；時態(tài)、語態(tài)的錯誤；低級語言錯誤如主賓格不分，謂語動詞單復(fù)數(shù)使用混亂等*銜接不符合邏輯，如要求續(xù)寫的第一段最后一句與所給第二段首句連接不當，或兩段間毫不關(guān)聯(lián)；*句句間邏輯不嚴密，不能有效借助連詞、代詞、副詞等語言手段建立清晰合理的邏輯關(guān)系。語篇的銜接連貫方面：針對上述問題的應(yīng)對措施：分期有計劃地進行讀后續(xù)寫專題指導(dǎo)課：*如何有效構(gòu)建續(xù)寫情節(jié)*如何打磨續(xù)寫語言（詞匯和句式兩個層面）Show,don'ttell!3備考讀后續(xù)寫的幾點思考：1讀后續(xù)寫，讀是基礎(chǔ)。讀的深度決定寫的高度。2要想學生寫得漂漂亮亮，清清楚楚，大量地道的語言輸入無疑是必不可少的做好高中三年閱讀規(guī)劃，精讀與泛讀有效結(jié)合。（21世紀報，新概念2&3，黑布林英語閱讀，書蟲，典范英語閱讀）3課堂教學的指導(dǎo)上：可以組織學生進行小組討論，讀寫展示活動、小組互評活動等多。同時，老師們要有步驟地進行寫作方法微技能的指導(dǎo)。4寫作輸出方面，幫助學生規(guī)范寫作，形成素養(yǎng)?？偨Y(jié)歸納如下：學&教如何寫：1情節(jié)---二條四點定框架細節(jié)補充指向主題2語言---邏輯連貫（連詞、代詞等）生動形象3規(guī)范---字數(shù)卷面美顏如何教：1明確評分標準（16，16---21，22---25）2指導(dǎo)方法（文本解讀情節(jié)構(gòu)建結(jié)尾升華）3修改評價高一年級：重基礎(chǔ)讀經(jīng)典多仿寫高二年級：重積累理邏輯提表達高三年級：重打磨抓規(guī)范勤思背高一續(xù)寫示范課（兩節(jié)）高二續(xù)寫寫前指導(dǎo)課（淄博實驗中學吳美麗）高三續(xù)寫寫作專題指導(dǎo)課高三續(xù)寫寫作講評課三、案例式教學示范及優(yōu)質(zhì)資源推薦人教版選修小說欣賞入門典范英語黑布林英語閱讀高考真題完型填空加工再利用新高考寫作高效提分教程---讀后續(xù)寫優(yōu)質(zhì)資源推薦構(gòu)建語料庫讀后續(xù)寫的好詞好句反復(fù)應(yīng)用一、情感好詞：喜樂①Thesmileonherfaceshonelieadiamond②Asimileofunderstandingflashedacrosshisface③Arientranthroughthem④Laughterlingeredaroundtheroom⑤Hiseyestwinledwithondsandliile⑧Iwaswildwithjoy⑨Iwasileonherface?Hersmilelitu?Sheshedtearsofjoy?Hereyesweresonds?Shewasoverflowingwithhaent?Joywelleduusementgleamedinhiseyes憤怒：①Iwasseiedbyanger②Hewasfumingwithrage③Hisangerboiledover④Hecouldhardly/scarcelycontainhisrage⑤Hewasbreathingfireandfury⑥Hisvoicetrembledwithanger⑦Hegavemealooofburninganger⑧Heglaredatmewithburningeyes⑨Heflaredupattheword⑩Hisfacecloudedwithanger悲傷煩惱①Hestoodsilently,tearsrollingdownhischees②IfeellieIamfloatinginanoceanofsadness③HerhandswereshaingShewasonthevergeoftears④Hearingthenews,sodes⑥Shesobbed,hidingherfaceinherhands⑦Itriedtofightbactears/Myeyeswerefilledwithtears⑧Afrown（皺眉）nowstoodonhisface⑨Theysattherewithglumloosontheirfaces⑩Thenewscastacloudofgloomoverhisface?Hebrimmedoverwithsorrowwhen?Theywereimmersedinsorrow?Thesedayshewasinlowse,withhiseyesfullofhorror②Fearslowlycree/Fearfloodedoverhim⑦Herheartbeatsoviolentlythatshefeltnearlysuffocated（窒息）⑧Sheshooallover,feelingliesittingonmensely,we…②Tearsfillinghereyes,sheofferedherheartfeltgratitude③Withtearsstreamingdownherface,she構(gòu)建語料庫---來自平時積累（各種心情）讀后續(xù)寫的好詞好句反復(fù)應(yīng)用一、情感好詞：喜樂①Thesmileonherfaceshonelieadiamond②Asimileofunderstandingflashedacrosshisface③Arientranthroughthem④Laughterlingeredaroundtheroom⑤Hiseyestwinledwithondsandliile⑧Iwaswildwithjoy⑨Iwasileonherface?Hersmilelitu?Sheshedtearsofjoy?Hereyesweresonds?Shewasoverflowingwithhaent?Joywelleduusementgleamedinhiseyes憤怒：①Iwasseiedbyanger②Hewasfumingwithrage③Hisangerboiledover④Hecouldhardly/scarcelycontainhisrage⑤Hewasbreathingfireandfury⑥Hisvoicetrembledwithanger⑦Hegavemealooofburninganger⑧Heglaredatmewithburningeyes⑨Heflaredupattheword⑩Hisfacecloudedwithanger構(gòu)建語料庫---來自高考真題完型IjumetovisitmeFortunately,afterabriefstayinhosilymetuylove forASLAfterthat,feelingtheneedtoeeetingsYetinsteadofbeingdiscouragedbymyslowadeitaeetingsandlearnallIcouldInstead,iftherehadbeenanytaling,itwouldhavecausedustolearnless——2018年全國三卷構(gòu)建語料庫---來自讀后續(xù)寫語篇Sheturnedaround,hoountaintouchtobewithTomandherfamilyJaneroseatthebreaofday,hungryandthirstyShecouldhearwatertricling滴落）somewhereatadistanceAsshe,Janeheardahelicoswerelonggonebacintotheearthwasn’twalingwithhisusualsteomentslater,however,hewasonceagainwalinginthatslowycuriositygotthebestofmeIcreonhisjourneyHewascuashewaled:beingverycarefulnottosBranchesandthornssla——讀后續(xù)寫訓練語篇構(gòu)建語料庫——來自名著Carter'sfathermandingofficerweretoseehim,hewouldorderCartershotimmediatelyIfhedrotheedgeofthiscliff,itwouldfallforsihundredmetersbeforedisaents--thousandsofCarter'sfellowsoldiersBraveandstrongashewas,Carteralmostfaintedfromtheshocofwhathehadseen選自自編課程《名著短篇小說閱讀與欣賞》ThanyouforyourattentionNothingistoodifficultifyouputallyourheartintoit課后續(xù)寫錄播讀讀后續(xù)寫的評分標準綜述評分:主要從續(xù)寫內(nèi)容、詞匯語法、篇章結(jié)構(gòu)三方面考慮。1創(chuàng)造情節(jié)的質(zhì)量、續(xù)寫的完整性及與原文情境的融洽度。2詞匯、語法的準確性、恰當性及多樣性。3上下文的銜接和全文的連貫性。Whatisplotustfollowalogical,attractiveformatthatdrawsthereaderin“story”inthatithighlightsasajoreventsinthenarrativedefinedastheeventsthatmaeupastory,particularlyastheyrelatetooneanotherinapattern,inasequence,throughcauseandeffectAlogicalplotTwilightmergedintodarnessWiththeclassaingbactolifeAfterbreafast,Itoomycellyheartanagedtocalmdownandbeganmyclassasusual后續(xù)---Logicalplotting1續(xù)寫第一段的內(nèi)容設(shè)計既要考慮與上文的融洽銜接，同時也要考慮本段和最后一段開頭語的呼應(yīng)和銜接，而后者是容易忽視的部分。2續(xù)寫第二段是文章的結(jié)尾，要關(guān)注與文章開頭的遙相呼應(yīng)，凸顯主題，升華精神。***如何構(gòu)建續(xù)寫情節(jié)logicalplotting本節(jié)重點TheeesmorecomeofthestoryItishowthingsenduporturnoutforthecharacters續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題1文章理解不到位，續(xù)寫情節(jié)與原文脫離2違背真實生活，缺乏合理性3融洽度不高，銜接不合理4大量對話無意義，段落間分布不均衡5主題升華牽強或跑偏續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題1文章理解不到位，續(xù)寫情節(jié)與原文脫離ConnerrantoCaleb'sside,andtheboystriedtocomforttheirfatherTimdidn'tsayanythingbutcriedThetwobrothersgraduallynewthatitwastheirfatherthatcausedthisaccidentTimwasveryscaredHecouldn'thelpfeelingshoced,tearingrollingdownhisface續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題2違背真實生活，缺乏合理性ConnerrantoCaleb'sside,andtheboystriedtocomforttheirfather“Taeiteasydad,andI'msureyouwillbefine”ConnersmiledtohisfatherandencouragedhimAfterawhile,theymanagedtopulltheirfatheroutofthecar續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題3融洽度不高，銜接不合理Moreemergencyonthsofent續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題4大量對話無意義，段落間分布不均衡“Dad,weareyoursons!”“Dad,doyougetinjured”“I'mfineDon'tworry”“Dad,don'tworry,andI'msuretohelpyouout”續(xù)寫情節(jié)構(gòu)建中存在的問題5主題升華牽強或跑偏Afterthiseilydrivecarelessly,becausetheyhadnownthebitterresultbroughtbycaraccidentIndeed,lifeisbynomeansathingthatwecouldmaejoeonatanytimeHemetheratafortableSuddenly,heasedthewaiter,“CouldyouesomesaltI'dlietoycoffee"Theystaredathimwtihastrangeloo!Hisfaceturnedred,butwhenthesaltcame,heeIhavethesaltycoffee,IalwaysthinofmychildhoodandmyhometownImissitandmyparents,whoarestillthere"典例分析ShewasdeeovedAmanwhocanadmitthathe'shomesicmustlovehishomeandcareabouthisfamilyHemustberesetown,herchildhoodandherfamilyThatwasareallynicetal,alsoabeautifulbeginningoftheirlovestoryTheycontinuedtodateShefoundthathemetallherrequirementsHewastolerant,ind,warmandcarefulHewassuchagoodmanandhaditnotbeenforthesaltinthecoffee,she’dneverhavereallynownhim!Therestofthestorywasjustlieanyotherbeautifullovestory---theymarriedandlivedhaeshemadecoffeeforhim,sheesalt,thewayhelieditAfter40years,heydearest,eformycheatingyouallthetimeDoyoustillrememberourfirstdateinthecafe________________________Para2:Shewasshocedbytheletter,withthefeelingofbeingcheated______________________________________________________________典例分析1解讀文本，奠定續(xù)寫基礎(chǔ)***讀---（etherataarriedBeforedeath,heleftheraletterasingforforgivingwhyhow續(xù)寫內(nèi)容線索/意圖---（多為結(jié)尾或主旨服務(wù)）Hewastolerant,ind,warmandcarefulHewassuchagoodmanAndeverytimeshemadecoffeeforhim,sheesalt,thewayhelieditAfter40years,hepassedawayandleftheraletter2依據(jù)兩段首句推理情節(jié)發(fā)展兩個段首句是重要的續(xù)寫提示，在很大程度上指明了情節(jié)的發(fā)展方向。對段首句分析，進行設(shè)問，可有效地推理續(xù)寫的主要情節(jié)。第一段---三個邏輯上的銜接（原文段首句第二段段首句）第二段---關(guān)注與文章開頭的遙相呼應(yīng)（線索/意圖），根據(jù)具體語境弘揚真善美2依據(jù)兩段首句推理情節(jié)發(fā)展---（第一段）ydearest,eformycheatingyouallthetimeDoyoustillrememberourfirstdateinthecafe__________Para2:Shewasshocedbytheletter,withthefeelingofbeingcheated______________________________________________對第一段段首句進行設(shè)問：WhathappenedattheirfirstdateinthecafeWhatdidhedotocheatherandwhydidhecheatherWhydidhecheatherallthe40years2依據(jù)兩段首句推理情節(jié)發(fā)展---（第二段）forhislife-longlieWhyorwhynot*Shebroedown,regrettinghernaivedecisiontomarryhimNeverwouldsheforgivehimandneverwouldshemarryhimifgivenasecondchance*ReflectingonwhathehaddoneforherintheShewoulddefinitelymarryhimagainifgivenasecondchance3可根據(jù)需要合理增加情節(jié)*在不影響主要情節(jié)的前提下，可適當合理地增加部分次要情節(jié)*可依據(jù)需要增加適當細節(jié)描寫（環(huán)境，心理，外貌等）3可根據(jù)需要合理增加情節(jié)第一段可增加的情節(jié)：男孩對當時女孩接受他的邀請感到意外，其實他很討厭和咸咖啡，但為了愛，他忍受了40年；男孩無數(shù)次想告知女孩真相，但由于害怕失去最終沒能說出口ActuallyitwasentirelyoutofmyeyinvitationtodateCanyouimaginehowecitedbutnervousIwasinfaceofsuchacharmingyounggirlTobefran,IhatedsaltycoffeeHowever,eachtimeyoumadeororderedsaltycoffeeformeoutoflove,Ifeltstrangeandbadinmymouth,butsweetandwarminmyheartIhadtriedcountlesstimestotellyouthetruth,butIwasafraidoflosingyou3可根據(jù)需要合理增加情節(jié)第二段可增加的情節(jié)：桌子上他們的一張照片勾起了女主對美好過往的回憶，想起了丈夫為這個家做的點點滴滴，她理解并原諒了丈夫Suddenly,afamilyemoriescamefloodingbac,thoseecitingmomentswhentheysetogether,thoselovingmomentswhenheomentswhentheyhadtofacehardshipsbravely3可根據(jù)需要合理增加情節(jié)第二段可增加的情節(jié)：女主親自沖了杯咸咖啡品嘗一下，發(fā)現(xiàn)其實咸咖啡超級難喝，她想到丈夫竟然默默忍受了40年，最終理解了丈夫默默無私地付出Suddenly,sheroseandwaledintotheitchenHavingmadeacueltitoutofcuriosityAstrangeandbadsmellmadeitswaystraightintohernoseShehesitated,andthensimediately,sherealiedthatthemanwhotolerantlydransaltycoffeefor40yearswasworthcherishinganentlyAfter40years,heydearest,emberthefirsttimewedatedIwassonervousthatIsaidsaltActuallyIwantedsomesugar”Hesaidmanytimeshewantedtotellherthetruth,buthewasafraidoflosingherHealsotoldherhavingherwithhimwashisbiggesthae,hestillwantedtomarryherShewasshocedbytheletter,withthefeelingofbeingcheatedSheweaingtheehedranthestrangetasteofcoffee,herheartachedalotHerhusbandwassuchaind-heartedandconsideratemanthathehidthetruthforhiswholelifeHowdeeeday,someoneasedher,“What'sthetasteofsaltycoffee”“It'ssweet,”shereplied二后續(xù)寫指導(dǎo)讀1、解讀文本。過濾有效信息，把握文章要素。2、縝密構(gòu)思。文章中心內(nèi)容、段首句相結(jié)合。情節(jié)發(fā)展是主體，細節(jié)描寫是關(guān)鍵。3、打磨寫作?？焖俪醪匠筛?，然后升級詞匯與豐富句式，最后規(guī)范謄寫。讀后續(xù)寫寫作步驟***如何打磨續(xù)寫的語言vividwriting本節(jié)重點Waystopolishyourstory

strategiesconjunctions***sentencepatternswordsandphrases***1Advancedwordsandphrases1豐滿人物內(nèi)心（心情的表達）Richadjectivesandotherusefuleaeepressionspowerful3豐富故事情節(jié)（細節(jié)和連貫）ProperadverbstoenrichyourstoryShow,don'ttell小提示：1高級詞匯的選擇遵循具體性原則，晚詞優(yōu)先原則1agood/nicewomanawarm-hearted/generous/honestwoman2FindingthelostdiamondringwouldbedifficultFindingthelostdiamondringwouldbechallenging3Ashleigh'scarelessnesscausedthelossofthediamondringAshleigh'scarelessnesswereresponsiblefor小提示：2避免重復(fù)使用同一詞語1TheHannahsthanedorey,saying“Thanyouforyourindness,orwewillneverhaveit”againandagain2TheHannahsepressedtheirgratitudetoorey,saying“Thanyouforyourindness,orneverwillwehaveit”againandagain***2Abundantsentencepatterns思考翻譯：穿著白色裙子，這個女孩兒看起來非常漂亮。1Thegirlwearsawhitesirt,andsheloosbeautiful2Wearingawhitesirt,thegirlloosaingmefallinlovewithherChristmasDaywascomingIwasjustaidthen,andmybigsistertoldmetherewasnoSantaClausIfledtomygrandmabecauseshewouldbestraightwithmeInewGrandmaalwaystoldmethetruthGrandmawashome,andItoldhereverythingShewasreadyforme"NoSantaClaus"sheshouted"Ridiculous!Don'tbelieveitThatrumorhasbeengoingaroundforyears,anditmaesmemad,asshoomentsIjuststoodthere,confused,holdingthatten-dollarbill,wonderingwhattobuyandwhotobuysomethingfor典例分析IsuddenlythoughtofBobbyDecer,whowasaidwithbadbreathandmessyhairHesatrightbehindmeinMrsotheralwayswroteanote,tellingtheteacherthathehadacough,butweidsnewthatBobbyDecerdidn'thaveacough,andthathedidn'thaveacoatIwouldbuyBobbyDeceracoat!settledonaredone,whichlooedreallywarm,andhewouldliethat"IsthisaChristmaseone"theladybehindthecounterasedindly,asIlaidmytendollarsdown"Yes"Theniceladysmiledatme,eaMerryChristmasahelewraasaand1waitedbreathlesslyforBobbyDecer’sfrontdoortoopenandfinallyit典例分析寫作出彩高級且豐富的句式同樣重要1NeverhadIshoasshoomentsIjuststoodthere,confused,holdingthatten-dollarbill,wonderingwhattobuyandwhotobuysomethingfor4IsuddenlythoughtofBobbyDecer,whowasaidwithbadbreathandmessyhair5Hismotheralwayswroteanote,tellingtheteacherthathehadacough,butweidsnewthatBobbyDecerdidn'thaveacough,andthathedidn'thaveacoat6IwouldbuyBobbyDeceracoat,whichlooedreallywarm,andhewouldliethat7Theniceladysmiledatme,eaMerryChristmas***在續(xù)寫文本中，熟練應(yīng)用并列句5,7，三大從句4,6，非謂語動詞2,3,5和特殊句式1。***2Abundantsentencepatterns并列動作：Theniceladysmiledatme,eaMerryChristmas伴隨狀語：使用分詞形式、使用“with”結(jié)構(gòu)、使用獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)、使用形容詞、名詞、介詞短語Hismotheralwayswroteanote,tellingtheteacherthathehadacoughBornintoaily,BobbyDecerdidn'tevenhaveawarmcoatQuicly,weranintothecar,withourheartsbeatingwildlyTheyhuggedeachothertightly,tearsrollingdowntheircheesBobbyDecersawthecoat,confusedbutecitedThatevening,Grandmahelewraasetowrite"ToBobby,fromSantaClaus”onitThenwewenttoBobbyDecer'shouseWehishouse,andwewaledtohisfrontdoorSilently,IasanocedathisdoorQuiclyweranintothecarThenwewaitedforhimGradethestoryGrandmaandIwaitedbreathlesslyforBobbyDecer'sfrontdoortooothertogooutTheyhuggedeachotherintearsandeIdecidedtobeSanta'sheloment,IcametorealiethatSantaClausisineveryone'sheartifheiswillingtobeoneofhishelpersLet’shaveatry!1Sheasedmetowrite"ToBobby,fromSantaClaus”onitThenwewenttoBobbyDecer'shouseShewrote"ToBobby,fromSantaClaus"onit,afterwhichshedrovemeovertoBobbyDecer'shouse,ehishouse,andwewaledtohisfrontdoorGrandmaBobby'shouseTaingadeeaBobby'shouseThen,shegavemeanudge,whispering,“AllrightSantaClaus,getgoing”Taingadeepbreath,IdashedforhisfrontdoorLet’shaveatry!3Silently,IasanocedathisdoorQuiclyweranintothecarThenwewaitedforhimSeeingnootherasaandIcreptandhidinthecarLet’shaveatry!1BobbyDecerwentoutOutwentBobbyDecer/TherestoodBobbyDecer2Whenhesawthecoatinthebag,helooedverysurothertogooutSeeingthecoatinthebag,heouth,dumbstrucAfterawhile,heyelledathismothertogooutLet’shaveatry!3Theyhuggedeachotherintearsandsay“thans”toSantaClaus,Ifeltveryoment,IcametorealiethatSantaClausisineveryone'sheartifheiswillingtobeoneofhishelasinhisheartwillneverfindChristmasunderatreeItwasthatnightthatIrealiedthoseawfulrumorsaboutSantaClauswerejustwhatGrandmasaidtheywere:ridiculousSantaClauswasdefinitelyaliveandwewereactuallyonhisteamAahelewraasSantaClaus"onit,afterwhichshedrovemeovertoBobbyDecer'shouse,eaBobby'shouseThen,shegavemeanudge,whisasaandIcreptandhidinthecarAaandIwaitedbreathlesslyforBobbyDecer’sfrontdoortooouth,dumbstrucAfterawhile,heyelledathismothertogooutAfterhearingthemsay"thans"toSantaClaus,IfeltveryeId