2024屆高考讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)思維模型構(gòu)建 -人小俠心大-火場(chǎng)互助自救篇課件

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)

Theevent(that

standsoutinTom’smemory)happenedonemorningwhenTomwasonlytenyearsold.HewasathomewithhiseldersisterJane.Tomwasdoinghishomeworkwhenheheardraisedvoices.Atfirst,hethoughtnothingofit[sincecustomersinthemotorcycleshopdirectlybelowtheirflatoftenbecameloud],buthesoonrealizedthistimeitwasdifferent.“Quick!Quick!Removethemotorcyclesfromtheshop.”Someoneshouted.Thenathickburningsmellfilledtheair.WhenTomopenedthefrontdooroftheirflattoinvestigate,(athickcloudof)smokegreetedhim.Themotorcycleshophadcaughtfireandpeoplewererunningandcrying.Jane,(whohadbeenplayingtheviolininherroom),hurriedtothelivingroom.Theyrushedoutofthedoorandalongthecorridor(走廊)throughthesmoke.

TheywereheadingtowardsthestairwayatthefarendofthecorridorwhenJanesuddenlystoppedinhertrack.Sheturnedaroundandheadedbackthewaytheycame.Tomhadnoidea(whatshewasdoing,buthefollowedher.)

Janehadsuddenlyrememberedtheladyinher70s(wholivednextdoortothem),(whothey/called/Makcik.)JanebeganbangingonMakcik’sdoor,butgotnoanswer.Asthesmokethickenedaroundthem,Tomcouldseemanyoftheirneighbours---somestillintheirpajamas(睡衣)---runningforsafety.

Thethoughtoffearcrossedhismind.“Shewouldhaverunforsafetylikeeveryoneelse!”Tomcried.However,Janerefusedtogiveup.“IknowMakcik’sstillinside.”ShesaidshewasfamiliarwithMakcik’sdailyroutineandwascertainshewouldstillbesleeping.Shepoundedagainstthedoor.“Godownstairs.Gonow!Go!”What/HowWhen/WhereWhoWhy文本解讀SettingCharacterPlotTheme

WhenwhowhereonemorningTom&Jane(Tom’seldersister)Narrator敘事者“thirdperson”perspective第三人稱(chēng)視角Tense:________________SimplepasttenseMom文本解讀SettingCharacteraflatbuildinginflamesCharacteranalysisDetails.文本解讀...Janesuddenlystoppedinhertrack.Sheturnedaroundandheadedbackthewaytheycame.Tomhadnoidea(whatshewasdoing,buthefollowedher.).....

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Janehadsuddenlyrememberedtheladyinher70s(wholivednextdoortothem),(whothey/called/Makcik.).....

...shewasfamiliarwithMakcik’sdailyroutineandwascertainshewouldstillbesleeping.Shepoundedagainstthedoor....

WorkouttheconflictortheclimaxBeginningDevelopmentConflictClimax/Ending.Themotorcycleshophadcaughtfireandpeoplewererunningandcrying.

Remembertosolvetheconflict..TomwasathomewithhiseldersisterJane.Hewasdoinghishomeworkwhenheheardraisedvoices.

文本解讀+創(chuàng)設(shè)情境Asthesmokethickenedaroundthem,Tomcouldseemanyoftheirneighbours---somestillintheirpajamas(睡衣)---runningforsafety.Thethoughtoffearcrossedhismind.PlotA.

anemergency.B.afire.C.Thoughtfulnessandkindnessinafireemergency....Janesuddenlystoppedinhertrack.Sheturnedaroundandheadedbackthewaytheycame..

....Janehadsuddenlyrememberedtheladyinher70s(wholivednextdoortothem),(whothey/called/Makcik.).clue

線(xiàn)索文本解讀+主題探究Theme

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Tomnoticedtheflame(火焰)wasreachingup

根據(jù)第1自然段給出的首句，可以判定：火情危急，已由一樓沖至他們所居住樓層。

創(chuàng)設(shè)情節(jié)突出主題Analyzethe2givensentencesandtheoriginalpassageAddsomedetailsbyraisingquestions

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Analyzethe2givensentencesandtheoriginalpassageAddsomedetailsbyraisingquestions

[Luckily],someneighbors(passingby)stoppedandofferedhelp..

根據(jù)第2自然段首句

可以判定：她們姐弟倆一直沒(méi)下樓，所以，路過(guò)的鄰居看到他們的舉動(dòng)后才會(huì)停下來(lái)并提供幫助。那么，他們?cè)谧鍪裁茨?？?？梢猿@個(gè)方向發(fā)散思維，構(gòu)思情節(jié)，方能達(dá)到完美收尾效果。

所見(jiàn)所聞所感所思外貌描寫(xiě)環(huán)境描寫(xiě)語(yǔ)言描寫(xiě)動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)心理描寫(xiě)情感描寫(xiě)所見(jiàn)所做所感Appearance/SurroundingsConversations/LanguagesBehavior/Actions/VerbsEmotions/Feelings通過(guò)細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)呈現(xiàn)出情節(jié)的________跌宕起伏UP---DOWN--UPUsethedescriptivetechniquestoenrichthedetails創(chuàng)設(shè)情節(jié)突出主題

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Tomnoticedtheflame(火焰)wasreachingup.[Frozenwithfear],hestoodrootedtothespot.HecomprehendedthegravityofthesituationandheldJane’shandtightly.Bothofthemwerecoughingandtheireyeswerestinging.Timeseemedtostandstill,[thoughtheywereprobablythereforonlytwoorthreeminutes.]TombeggedJanetorunforsafetyasquicklyaspossible.Janetriedtoshieldhernosefromthechokingsmokeandshookherhead.Shekeptpoundingagainstthedoor.Tomburstoutcrying.環(huán)境烘托范文賞析心理描寫(xiě)心理描寫(xiě)

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[Luckily],someneighbors(passingby)stoppedandofferedhelp.AsenseofstrengthimmediatelyreplacedthemountingfearandanxietyinJane’smind.ShetoldthemMs.Makcikmustbestillintheroom.Theyforcedthedooropen[withalltheirmight].[