高考英語(yǔ)作文范文應(yīng)聘家教

高考英語(yǔ)作文范文：應(yīng)聘家教題目：Youhaveseenanadvertisementfromacouple,wholiveinAustralia,for

someonetoteachtheirtwochildrenyourlanguageforayear.

Writealettertothecouple.Inyourletter.explainwhyyouthinkyouwouldbesuitableforthejob.

.

saywhatelseyoucoulddoforthefamily.giveyourreasonsforwantingthejob范文：221words，7分，保留了所有錯(cuò)誤，閱讀時(shí)請(qǐng)注意識(shí)別。DearSirandMadam,IamalongstandingIndiancitizenwhoworksasaprofessorintheGiujaratUniversity,Guijarat,India.IamwritingthistoapplyforajobatHindilanguageteacher,whatyouarelookingfor

yourchids.TheforemostreasonofapplyingforajobisIhavedonePHDinHindaliteraturesuccessfullyfromthereputedGiujaratUniverityofIndia.BesidesthisIamteachingtheHindilanguageprofessionally

sincelast15years.Ihaveawideexperienceofteachingamongdifferentinstitutionsandfromthechildrentoyoungerone.ConsideringallthesefactorsIfeelthatIamasuitablecandidatefor

this

job.Moreover,IcanalsoteachtheHindilanguagetootherfamilymemberifrequiredsoIcanmakeyouallawareaboutIndiancultureanditstraditions,asIhaveavastknowledgeofallthattoo.AsIalreadyhaveso

manyyearsinmyhomecountryIndia,nowIwanttomigratetodifferent

nationsoftheworldsoIcanlearnaboutthepeople,theircultureandtraditions.Iwillalsoprovidemetheopportunitytogainknowledgeandsomeinvaluableexperiences.IstronglyfeelthatcomingtoAustraliacouldbegreatopportunityforme.Inanticipationwaitingforyourpositiveresponseatearliest.Yoursfaithfull,Vipal這篇為什么有7分？有些錯(cuò)誤你是否沒看出來(lái)？修訂后的簡(jiǎn)潔版本？

↓↓↓考官評(píng)語(yǔ)：這是正式的申請(qǐng)信，考生全文語(yǔ)氣一致，充分回應(yīng)了三個(gè)寫作任務(wù)。信息組織邏輯清晰，行文流暢。連接詞使用恰當(dāng)，分段合理。使用了非常用詞，如longstanding,citizen,invaluable,以及詞匯搭配如wideexperience,suitablecandidate,vastknowledge,greatopportunity，但存在拼寫錯(cuò)誤，如Giujarat應(yīng)為Gujarat,第一段第二句的forajobat應(yīng)為forajobas,

chids應(yīng)為children或kids,Hinda應(yīng)為Hindu,第三段第一句的familymember應(yīng)為復(fù)數(shù)，第四段第二句的Iwill應(yīng)為Itwill，落款faithfull應(yīng)為faithfully.考生展示了多種復(fù)雜語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)，多數(shù)句子準(zhǔn)確無(wú)誤，除了少數(shù)冠詞和時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤。組長(zhǎng)解析：（1）字?jǐn)?shù)過多，考場(chǎng)上會(huì)占用時(shí)間，應(yīng)練習(xí)寫精煉的句子；（2）題中提到了acouple發(fā)布的招聘廣告，所以范文的稱呼恰當(dāng)，也可以是DearMr.andMrs.Smith（廣告中通常會(huì)標(biāo)記聯(lián)系方式和姓名），范文署名不妥當(dāng)，應(yīng)署全名；（3）172words語(yǔ)言簡(jiǎn)潔準(zhǔn)確修改版如下：DearSirandMadam,Iamwritingtoapplyforthe

jobasa

Hindilanguageteacherthat

youarelooking

for

yourchildren.I

believethatIamqualifiedforthisposition

becauseIhave

aPhDdegreeinHindiliterature

fromGujaratUniversity,

the

mostprestigiousuniversityinIndia.Moreover,

Ihave15years'experienceofteaching

Hindi

toyoungsters,whichexactly

suitsyourneed.Inadditiontoteachingyourkids,

Icanalsohelpanyofyour

familymemberswithHindilearningaslongastheyareinterested.Besides,itwouldbe

mypleasuretoshareknowledgeof

Indianculture,customs

andtraditionswithyouall.

SinceIamapplyingforAustralian

permanentresidency,Ireallyneedthisjobtolearnmoreaboutlocalpeopleandlife.It

isangreatopportunityformetogainpracticalknowledgeandinvaluableexperience

thatwillbe