讀后續(xù)寫Life'sturningpoint講義高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)

續(xù)寫原題Theyear2013

markedaturningpoint

inmylife.InJune,myhusbandwasofferedanewJobinGhana.

FeelingthatIhad

hitacareerbottleneck

asaphotographerandcopywriter(廣告文字撰寫人),

I,withoutanyhesitation,

madethedecisiontorelocatewithhim.Whilemyhusbandengagedinwork,myvisadidn't

grant

methesameprivilege.Butthat

wasokay.Ididn'tknowwhattodoanyway.I

wasleftisolated,homesickandlackingpurpose.Ournewhomewasabungalownearariverthatcutacrossexpansivegrasslands.Withfewpeoplearoundourhome,Iturnedtonature,whichhadbeena

fondness

ofminesincechildhood.Everyday,Iwouldtakemycameraandwanderaround,photographingaimlessly.Itwasn'tlongbeforeSeptemberarrived,bringingthefullflowoftherainyseason.Afteroneparticularlybadthunderstorm,Ifoundafinch(雀)

apoorlittlething

barely

amonthold

withonewingbroken

ontheground.Evidently,hehadbeenabandonedbyhisflock,hisnestblownfromatree.Thesightwasheartbreaking.Hewasthesizeofmylittlefinger.Hiseyesweretightlyshutandhewasshuddering,tooyoungtosurvivealone.I

somehowfeltaconnectionwith

it.ImmediatelyI

scoopedhimup

and

cautiously

placedhiminacardboardboxwithtowels,mimickinganest,andstayedupallnightresearchinghowtocareforhim.Thenextday,heseemedtoregainsomeenergy.Hewokewithhismouthopen,

thoughstilltooweaktoletoutacall.Ifedhimsomefoodandchirped(嘰喳)athim.Tomyamusement,hechirpedbackandevenclimbedintomyhand.I

affectionatelygazedatthisadorablecreature,whowasnow

boldly

pecking(啄)myfingersnowandthen.

Asurgeofwarmthranthroughme.

Tenderlystrokinghisfeathers,Ichirpedalullaby,singinghimtosleep.Gradually,hiseyesdroopedandhedriftedoff.Icouldn'thelpbutchuckleatthescene

asfarashewasconcerned,Iwashismother.Para1.“Iwilltakecareofyou.”Imurmured,makingmypromisetohim.Para2.Atthatmoment,IrealizedthatasIdedicatedmyselftothefinch'scare,somethingwithinmechanged.續(xù)寫思考Step1:Exploringthethemethroughclues:1.RetellingthemainideaIfollowedmyhusbandtoGhana(hitacarbottleneckasaphotographerandcopywriter),butIdidn'tfeelgood(isolated,homesick,andlackingpurpose).Istartedwalkingintonaturewithmycameraandencounteredaninjuredbird,readytosaveit.2.Reflectiontheme:Thethemeisdesignedaroundtheproblem,andtherearetwoquestionshere:A)IlostmygoalinlifeB)Thebirdwasinjured.Fromthebeginning,Ilostmygoalinlifetofindingmygoal,istherealogicalrelationshipbetweenitandhowIsavedthebird?Ofcoursethereis,andthecauseandeffectareobvious.Therefore,thethemeshouldbe:Savethefind,Saveme:Ifoundthepurposeoflife3.文章中線索句可以轉(zhuǎn)換為主題句：2013年是我人生的轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)。作為一名攝影師和文案，我的職業(yè)生涯遇到了瓶頸。我被孤立了，想家，沒有目標(biāo)。由于家里幾乎沒有人，我轉(zhuǎn)向了大自然，這是我從小就喜歡的。不知怎么的，我感覺到了與它的聯(lián)系。4.Thedesignoftheplot:Para1:HowcanItakegoodcareofthisbirdandestablishabondbetweenus.Anddescribeacertainmoment,whichcanberecordedbytakingaphoto,becausetheauthorisaphotographerorthebirdcallstome,andthemomentIrespondtoitgivesmeanunderstanding.Para2:ThechangeIfeelinmyheartwhenthebirdsurvives.Isavedthesparrow,butthesparrowalsosavedmefromthelifeofisolated,lackingpurpose.5.可參考的語(yǔ)料：Plotstructure:Firstoutlinethemainplot(inafewwords),thenenrichtheplot(characterinteraction;expressiondescription,innerportrayal,andactionrefinement)para1：主要情節(jié)：照顧鳥tendtotheflinch;鳥痊愈ithealed.1.照顧鳥：接下來(lái)幾天，我細(xì)心照顧這只受傷的小鳥并慢慢接受了它。2.鳥兒治愈：每一天都見證著它的進(jìn)步，從毫無(wú)生氣的眼睛到好奇的眼睛，從下垂的翅膀到偶爾的堅(jiān)定節(jié)拍，仿佛在問候我或?qū)で笪业膼邸８淖儯河谑?，它成了我最親愛的伴侶，我熱情地接受了這個(gè)角色，忘記了所有的擔(dān)憂。4.較為自然的銜接：然后，有一天，當(dāng)我把它抱在手掌里時(shí)，它突然興奮地鳴叫，跳到我的前臂上，讓我目瞪口呆。"Iwilltakecareofyou,"Imurmured,makingmypromisetohim.Overthenextfewdays,Icarefullytendedtothefinch:feedingit,applyingmedicinetoitswings.Everydaywitnesseditsprogress,fromlifelesseyestoeyessparklingwithcuriosity,fromdroopingwingstotheoccasionaldeterminedflapasifitwasgreetingme,orseekingmyaffection.Andso,itbecamemydearestpanion,andIembracedthisrolewithenthusiasm,forgettingallmyworries.Then,oneday,asIcradleditinmypalm,itsuddenlychirpedexcitedlyandhoppedontomyforearm,leavingmeinstunnedsilence.para2：我變成了正能量的人：不孤獨(dú)——如何證明：每天拍鳥和我戲耍的照片，報(bào)社也采納我發(fā)給他們的照片（對(duì)應(yīng)突破職業(yè)瓶頸）Inthisforeignland,nolongerdidIfeelalone.Everyday,Icapturedmomentsofitsprogress:eachgentlepeckatmyhand,eachenthusiasticmealitconsumed,andmore.Meanwhile,Isentthesephotostothenewspaper,andtomysurprise,mostofthemwereaccepted.我感謝這只鳥：找到了人生的意義Ifoundasenseofpurposeinlife,anditwasallthankstothislittlecreature,orrather,mymuse.Iknewitwouldleavemeoneday,butIalsoknewthatinfaroffGhana,itmarkedaturningpointinmylife.Atthatmoment,IrealizedthatasIdedicatedmyselftothefinch'scare,somethingwithinmechanged.

Inthisforeignland,nolongerdidIfeelalone.Everyday,Icapturedmomentsofitsprogress:eachgentlepeckatmyhand,eachenthusiasticmealitconsumed,andmore.Meanwhile,Isentthesephotostothenewspaper,andtomysurprise,mostofthemwereaccepted.Ifoundasenseofpurposeinlife,anditwasallthankstothislittlecreature,orrather,mymuse.Iknewitwouldleavemeoneday,butIalsoknewthatinfaroffGhana,itmarkedaturningpointinmylife.官方范文：Iwilltakecareofyou,"Iwhisperedapromisetohim.Inthenextfewdays,Imeticulouslycookedforhim,tookcareofhisinjuredwings,andensuredthathereceivedthewarmthandattentionheneeded.Dayshaveturnedintoweeks,andmydedicationtocaringforthislittlebirdandrestoringitshealthhasneverwavered.Iwatchedasheregainedhisstrength.Hisonceclosedeyeswerenowbrightwithcuriosity,andhiswingswerealsohealing.WhenIwalkfromroomtoroom,hewillholdontometightly,evensnugglingagainstmyhair.Ourdailyinteractionhasevolvedfromsimplecaretotruepanionship,andIhavefoundfortinit.Thenonemorning,Iwasawakenedbyasharphungrysound.Iinstinctivelyputonmycoatandrushedtowardshim.Atthatmoment,IrealizedthatsomethinginsidemehadchangedasIdevotedmyselfwholeheartedlytot