新教材適用2024版高考英語二輪總復(fù)習(xí)第4部分寫作技能升華篇專題2讀后續(xù)寫第2講微觀把握突破讀后續(xù)寫技法3打造讀后續(xù)寫的龍頭鳳尾課件

第四部分寫作技能升華篇專題二讀后續(xù)寫第2講微觀把握突破讀后續(xù)寫技法三打造讀后續(xù)寫的龍頭鳳尾技法點(diǎn)撥一、高分開頭如何寫好讀后續(xù)寫，在高考中博取閱卷老師的眼球，獲得夢寐以求的高分？如何讓學(xué)生的作品在高考中脫穎而出？這是很多老師和學(xué)生一直不懈努力的課題。一個(gè)好的故事開頭就好比是一個(gè)香味十足的誘餌，誘使讀者上鉤并且饒有趣味地讀完。而一個(gè)拙劣的故事開頭，一定會讓讀者大倒胃口，昏昏欲睡。妙招1巧用形容詞/副詞(短語)①Happilyandexcitedly,theywenttothesupermarketforwhattheyneeded.②Exhaustedandhungry,Iwonderedifwecouldfindourwayback.妙招2巧用分詞(短語)Seeingthemessinthekitchen,heimmediatelyunderstoodwhathadhappened,buthewasn'tupset.妙招3巧用高級句式①Iwasstuckforfiveorsixminutesthoughitfeltmuchlonger.Mybrothercameupwithanideathathecouldcutthepumpkinwithaknife.(同位語從句)②Attheverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Ithoveredoverthecamp,causingstrongwindthatblewthebearunsteadyonhisfeet.(非謂語動詞＋定語從句)妙招4巧用倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)Dadopenedtheboxandasweetlittledogappeared.HardlyhadthelittledogcomeoutwhenPoppycameovertolickitasifitwerealong-lostfriend.妙招5巧用強(qiáng)調(diào)句結(jié)構(gòu)ThatvideowaspostedthedaybeforeHalloween.Itwasmybrotherwhodidthatforamusement.二、漂亮結(jié)尾5法讀后續(xù)寫不能虎頭蛇尾，在篇末也要用心設(shè)計(jì)。由于文章的故事性、情節(jié)性強(qiáng)，所以續(xù)寫的結(jié)尾可以是自然的升華議論，亦可以是其他方式結(jié)尾。常見的結(jié)尾方式有畫面定格、對話收尾、主題升華、結(jié)尾留白和首尾呼應(yīng)等。妙招1畫面定格法(1)人物動作的畫面定格Slowly,almostreluctantly,sheplacedherarmwithapparentlyunaccustomedaffectionaroundhermother'sshouldersandgentlyguidedherbackintothecrowd.慢慢地，幾乎是不情愿地，她用胳膊摟住母親的肩膀，帶著明顯不習(xí)慣的慈愛，輕輕地領(lǐng)著她回到人群中。(2)特殊寓意的寫景畫面Lookingup,IsawthesunshinebrighterthanIeverknewbefore.抬頭一看，我看到太陽比我以前所知道的還要明亮。妙招2對話收尾法Whenaskedhowthereunionwithhisfatherwillchangehislife,Chestersaid,“Igotfamilyeverywhere,soitmightleadtomanymoretripsnow.”當(dāng)被問及與父親團(tuán)聚將如何改變他的生活時(shí)，切斯特說：“我到處都有家人，所以現(xiàn)在可能會導(dǎo)致更多的旅行?！泵钫?主題升華法Asaproverbsays,“Everycoinhastwosides.”Makingfulluseofyourstrengthisyourachievement.Pleaserememberthatinnocasewillyougiveupespeciallyintrouble.Godisfairtoeveryone.正如諺語所說，“事物都有兩面性?！背浞掷媚愕牧α烤褪悄愕某删汀Ｕ堄涀?，無論如何你都不要放棄，尤其是在麻煩中。上帝對每個(gè)人都是公平的。(借用名言警句來升華主題)妙招4結(jié)尾留白法“Wouldyoubeinterestedinjoiningmeinabitetoeat？”Iasked.“I'dloveto，”shereplied,hereyessparklinglikediamonds.And,thiswasthebeginningoftheendtomymonthsofheartbreakfollowingBetsy'sdeath.“你有興趣和我一起吃點(diǎn)東西嗎？”我問道。“我很樂意去，”她回答，眼睛像鉆石一樣閃閃發(fā)光。這是我在貝特西死后幾個(gè)月的心碎終于開始慢慢愈合。(故事結(jié)尾留白，給予讀者想象空間)妙招5首尾呼應(yīng)法開頭：Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.結(jié)尾：NeverhadIhadsuchathrillingyetdangerousvacationbefore.ThespecialtriptotheWildWestwasdeeplyengravedinmymind.真題體驗(yàn)(2023·浙江1月卷)Iwasinvitedtoacookoutonanoldfriend'sfarminwesternWashington.Iparkedmycaroutsidethefarmandwalkedpastamilkinghousewhichhadapparentlynotbeenusedinmanyyears.Anoiseatawindowcaughtmyattention,soIenteredit.Itwasahummingbird(蜂鳥),desperatelytryingtoescape.Shewascoveredinspider-webs(蛛網(wǎng))andwasbarelyabletomoveherwings.SheceasedherstruggletheinstantIpickedherup.Withthebirdinmycuppedhand,Ilookedaroundtoseehowshehadgottenin.Thebrokenwindowglasswasthelikelyanswer.Istuffedapieceofclothintotheholeandtookheroutside,closingthedoorsecurelybehindme.WhenIopenedmyhand,thebirddidnotflyaway;shesatlookingatmewithherbrighteyes.Iremovedthestickyspider-websthatcoveredherheadandwings.Still,shemadenoattempttofly.Perhapsshehadbeenstrugglingagainstthewindowtoolongandwastootired?Ortoothirsty?AsIcarriedheruptheblackberry-linedpathtowardmycarwhereIkeptawaterbottle,shebegantomove.Istopped,andshesoontookwingbutdidnotimmediatelyflyaway.Hovering(懸停),sheapproachedwithinsixinchesofmyface.Foraverylongmoment,thistinycreaturelookedintomyeyes,turningherheadfromsidetoside.Thensheflewquicklyoutofsight.Duringthecookout,Itoldmyhostsaboutthehummingbirdincident.Theypromisedtofixthewindow.AsIwasdeparting,myfriendswalkedmetomycar.Iwasstandingbythecarwhenahummingbirdflewtothecenterofourgroupandbeganhovering.Sheturnedfrompersontopersonuntilshecametome.Sheagainlookeddirectlyintomyeyes,thenletoutasqueakingcallandwasgone.Foramoment,allwerespeechless.Thensomeonesaid,“Shemusthavecometosaygoodbye.”注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2．請按如下格式在答題紙的相應(yīng)位置作答。真題體驗(yàn)Paragraph1：A

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