讀后續(xù)寫個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)類：Green+Thumb+講義 高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)

讀后續(xù)寫原題目：GreenThumbAllIdidwasshowmylittlesisterhowtogrowplants.Digahole.Putinaseed.Coveritwithdirt.Waterit.Wait.“See,Laynie,"Iexplained,“awholeplantwillgrowfromthistinyseed.Allwehavetodoiswaterit.Layniehadherownwateringcansoshecould“help”meinthegarden.Oneday,aftereverythingwaswatered,sherantothefenceandstartedsprinklingwateronanotherspot.Iwalkedoverandsawafreshpatchofdirtnearthefence.Didyouplantsomethingthere?”Iasked.“Yes,"shesaid.“I'mgrowingapencil.Mypurplepencilgottoosmall,soIplantedit.”“What?But,Laynie”Ishouldhaveexplainedthingsrightthen,butIjustmuttered,“Uh...Inevergrewonebefore.LaterIgotwhatseemedlikeagreatidea.IdugupLaynie'spenciland“plantedabrandnewpurplepencil.Layniewasreallyexcitedwhenshesawit.“Mypencilgrew!”sheshouted.Afewdayslater,Layniewaswateringonthesamespot.Twodayslater,newcrayonsstickingtheirpointylittleheadsout,thankstome.Layniejumpedupanddownandyelled.“Theylooklikeflowers!”She"picked”themandranintothehouse.Next,Layniegrewanadultbeardollfromatinyone,asoupspoonfrom'ateaspoon,andahandmirrorfromapieceofglass.Whensheclaimedthatshehadgrownthesethings,Ijustkeptmymouthshut!Actually,itwasfuntryingtothinkofwhatshouldgrowfromLaynieseeds.Anditwascooltoseehergetexcited.OnedayIsawherpattingdownsomedirtnearthefenceagain,soIknewshe'djustplantedsomething.Myheartdroppedtomyfeetwhensheasked,“Howlongdoesittaketogrowagoldfish，Brad?”Icouldn'tspeak“Notlong,Ibet!”saidLaynie.Shekneltdowntowhisper“Grow,Molly.Grow,”beforesheskippedbacktothehouse.P1:

Isatdownwithmybacktothefenceandthoughtforalongtime.P2:LaterIfoundLayniesittingbythespotwhereMollywasburied.閱讀主要信息提取1.地點(diǎn)：屋外，花園內(nèi)2.時(shí)間：未知（常見環(huán)境描寫套句）3.角色：“我”和Laynie4.故事背景：Laynie在“我”的幫助下，成功的“種出”了彩筆、玩具、鏡子等5.具體事件：Laynie種了“一棵”金魚Molly6．情緒：Laynie開心，期待；“我”擔(dān)憂，矛盾情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)P1：我背靠柵欄坐下來(lái)，想了很久。P2:后來(lái)，我發(fā)現(xiàn)Laynie坐在埋葬Molly的地方。從P2處得知，Laynie應(yīng)該知曉了她所種下的Molly是不會(huì)長(zhǎng)出來(lái)了。由此推出第一個(gè)續(xù)寫段落主要講述“我”告知Laynie真相。而第二個(gè)續(xù)寫段落則是我?guī)椭鶯aynie理解真相，并安慰她，不要因?yàn)樽约旱腻e(cuò)誤（Molly被埋）而過(guò)分悲傷。第一段的情節(jié)展開：P1結(jié)尾處“我坐下想了很久”，根據(jù)主述推進(jìn)原則，這段的首句應(yīng)該緊跟“我”所想的具體內(nèi)容，（個(gè)人認(rèn)為首句不需要再去具體描述

“我”的糾結(jié)，而是只要表達(dá)出糾結(jié)的內(nèi)容即可）“我坐下想了很久”

我在想什么呢？我在想到底要不要告訴她真相。之所以糾結(jié)，一是，告知真相，可能會(huì)讓充滿期待的Laynie受挫；二是如果不告知，“謊言”必然不會(huì)持久，到時(shí)Laynie或許會(huì)更尷尬和失落。最終，“我”決定坦白，也因?yàn)镸olly被埋，自己有責(zé)任（Laynie之所以犯種金魚這種錯(cuò)誤，皆因“我”的所為（換鉛筆

鏡子等），于是我感到內(nèi)疚）第一句：“告訴她真相？”還是“繼續(xù)隱瞞？”第二句：不再糾結(jié)+原因。于是，我走向房?jī)?nèi)（協(xié)同閱讀信息）“我下定決心，去屋內(nèi)找Laynie”角色互動(dòng)，推動(dòng)情節(jié)展開：第三句：我告知laynie種不出金魚動(dòng)作描寫+對(duì)白第四句：Laynie的反應(yīng)“不相信”,

因?yàn)椤八呀?jīng)種出了鏡子、彩筆、玩具等”動(dòng)作描寫+對(duì)白第五句：我坦白“我換的…”第六句：Laynie的反應(yīng)失望、不解，轉(zhuǎn)身跑開（從房子內(nèi)跑出）第二段的情節(jié)：后來(lái)，我發(fā)現(xiàn)Laynie坐在埋葬Molly的地方為何Laynie坐在Molly

旁？傷心(好意卻做了壞事)，種植的熱情受到打擊首句：“我”走上前，繼續(xù)解釋為什么種不出來(lái)第二句：Laynie的回應(yīng)（委屈）“希望Molly長(zhǎng)大”第三句：安慰Laynie+繼續(xù)的解釋第四句：釋懷，告別Molly第五句：成長(zhǎng)（greenthumb）下水文

(highlight部分增加融洽度)P1:Isatdownwithmybacktothefenceandthoughtforalongtime.ShouldItellherthetruththatIhad

“planted”

thoseitems?OrshouldIletherbelieveinthemagicofplanting?

Thedilemmagnawedatme.Eventually,guiltovertookme,andIdecideditwastimeforaserioustalk.Takingadeepbreath,I

stoodup,andmademywayto

thehouse."Laynie,"Icroucheddownbesideher,"youknow,goldfishdon'treallygrowfromthegroundlikeplants.Theyneedaplace,likeafishtank,toliveandgrow."Laynielookedatmewithadeterminedglintinhereyes."Whynot?"sheinsisted,crossingherarmsdefiantly,"Imadethe

crayonsandthebearandthemirrorgrow!"“I,um,switchedthemoutwithnewoneswhenyouweren'tlooking."Iconfessed.Asuddenwaveofdisappointmentwashedoverher.Withoutsayingaword,shesprintedoutofthehouse.P2:LaterIfoundLayniesittingbythespotwhereMollywasburied."Laynie,"Isaidsoftly,

kneelingdownbesideher."Mollywasalivingbeing,andlivingthingshavediffrent

waysofgrowing.""ButIwantedMollytogrowbig,"Layniemurmured,hereyesbrimmingwithsadness."Iunderstand,Laynie,"Isaidgently,tryingtoexplaintheimportanceofcomprehendingtheneedsofdifferentlivingthings.Idescribedhowsomethriveinwater,whileothersflourishinsoil.Laynielistenedintently,absorbingthelessonwithaheavyheart.As