讀后續(xù)寫專題第12章如何進行環(huán)境描寫講義-高三英語作文寫作復習

讀后續(xù)寫之環(huán)境描寫排比“意象+動詞”1、排比:意象1+動詞1,意象2+動詞2,and意象3+動詞3?擴寫公式:形容詞+意象+謂語動詞+副詞/方位介短句子練習(5個)[用:2022年全國1卷續(xù)寫]全篇練習(1篇)排比（23項）舉例：Hissenseofservice,intellectualcuriosityandcapacitytosqueezefunoutofanysituationwereallirrepressible.他的服務意識、求知欲和隨時隨地挖掘樂趣的能力都是十足充沛的。Thatmischievous,enquiringtwinklewasasbrightattheendas，whenIfirstseteyesonhim.他眼中那調皮、探詢的光芒，臨別時依然閃亮，一如初見。舉例：I'vetalkedaboutteachers'responsibilityforinspiringstudentsandpushingyoutolearn.我談到過教師激勵學生并督促他們學習的責任。I'vetalkedaboutyourparents'responsibilityformakingsureyoustayontrack,andyougetyourhomeworkdone,anddon'tspendeverywakinghourinfrontoftheTVorwiththexbox.我談到過家長的責任，要確保你們走正路,完成家庭作業(yè)，不要整天坐在電視前或玩xbox游戲。I'vetalkedalotaboutyourgovernment'sresponsibilityforsettinghighstandards,andsupportingteachersandprincipals,andturningaroundschoolsthataren'tworking,wherestudentsaren'tgettingtheopportunitiesthattheydeserve.我多次談到過政府的責任，要制定高標準，支持教師和校長的工作，徹底改善不能為學生提供應有機會的、教育質量差的學校。[whydowegotoschool我們?yōu)槭裁磳W習|Obama奧巴馬]MaybeyoucouldbeagreatwritermaybeevengoodenoughtowriteabookorarticlesinanewspaperbutyoumightnotknowituntilyouwritethatEnglishpaperthatEnglishclasspaperthat'sassignedtoyou.MaybeyoucouldbeaninnovatororaninventormaybeevengoodenoughtoeupwiththenextiPhoneorthenewmedicineorvaccinebutyoumightnotknowituntilyoudoyourprojectforyourscienceclass.MaybeyoucouldbeamayororasenatororaSupremeCourtjusticebutyoumightnotknowthatuntilyoujoinstudentgovernmentorthedebateteam.你或許能成為一名出色的作家甚至可能寫書或在報紙上發(fā)表文章但你可能要在完成那篇英文課的作文后才會發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的才華。你或許能成為一名創(chuàng)新者或發(fā)明家甚至可能設計出新一代iPhone或研制出新型藥物或疫苗但你可能要在完成科學課的實驗后才會發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的才華。你或許能成為一名市長或參議員或最高法院的大法官但你可能要在參加學生會的工作或辯論隊后才會發(fā)現(xiàn)自己的才華。[whydowegotoschool我們?yōu)槭裁磳W習|Obama奧巴馬]舉例TheGPNPisdesignedtoreflecttheguidingprincipleof."protectingtheauthenticityandintegrity(完整性)ofnaturalecosystems,preservingbiologicaldiversity,protectingecologicalbufferzones,_61and_leavingbehindpreciousnaturalassets(資產(chǎn))forfuturegenerations".[2022年全國乙卷]語法填空豐富有條理有畫面The"FirstInternationalTeaDayTeaRoadCooperativeInitiative"issuedattheceremonycallsforpeopleworkingintheteaindustrytoetogethertopromoteinternationalcooperation__67and_culturalexchanges.排比在詩詞中運用Ilovethreethingsintheworld:thesunthemoon.andyou.Thesunforthedaythemоопforthenightandyouforever."素材：意象+動詞/形容詞/介詞短語/副詞ourvoiceiswateropenbeneathstars,collectedfromabundantrain,gonetolowplaces.Thenightismoist,thegroundwet,airstill,treessilent,andtonightIloveyou.你的聲音如繁星之下開闊的水自豐富的雨水積聚而成，流向低地。夜晚微潤，地面潮濕，空氣寂靜，樹林沉默，今夜我愛你?！耙庀?動詞”sun/moon+shines(發(fā)光)stars+twinkle(閃爍)wind+blows(吹)rain+falls(落下)air+flows(流動)cloud/fog+spreads(擴散)tree+waves(搖曳)1、排比:意象1+動詞1,意象2+動詞2,and意象3+動詞3.(注意:優(yōu)先用原文的意象，再按需補充)?Thesunshines,thewindblowsandthetreewaved.陽光燦爛，風吹著,樹搖曳著。Toosimpleandsilly??[2022全國1卷]:Itwasthedayofthebigcrosscountryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.?擴寫公式:形容詞+意象+動詞+副詞/方位介短“冷冷的冰雨在我臉上胡亂地拍形容詞意象介短.方位副詞動詞●“Thesunshone”擴寫:(你任務:“thewindblows";“thetreewaved")?Themorningsunshoneonthegroundwarmlyandgently.?Thewarmmorningsunlightfellonthegroundmildly.形容詞+意象+固定動詞+副詞（9種）blazing熾熱的glaring耀眼的shimmering閃爍的lingering逗留不去的weak微弱的sun，sunlightsunshineshine發(fā)光/照耀burn燃燒(bright)brightlylikeanoven(烈日)像烤箱.dazzlingly燦爛/耀眼地lively_充滿活力地gentle/mild溫柔/和的soft柔和的weak微弱的white/silvery白/銀白的moonmoonlightshine發(fā)光glow發(fā)光weakly微弱地lightly輕輕地gently輕柔地softly輕柔地glittering閃閃發(fā)光的starstwinkle閃爍sparkle閃耀/爍glimmer發(fā)微光vividly生動地/活潑地quietly安靜地peacefully平靜地strong/strong勁(風)high/light大/小(風)chill/cold冷/寒冷biting剌骨的wind風a(light)breeze微風blow吹howl呼嘯roar怒號drop減弱fiercely猛烈地ruthlessly無情地gradually漸漸地crisp清新/涼爽的fresh新鮮的refreshing清爽的delicate柔和/清香的chill/cold冷的airflow流動envelop+sth籠罩surround+sth/sb圍繞totally完全/徹底地pletely完全地light輕/少的heavy重/大量的raindrizzle毛毛雨fall落下pourdown傾瀉而下beatdown打下來heavilydrummedthewindow敲擊窗戶thick濃厚的heavy重的black烏(云)grey灰thin薄(云)Cloudspread/move擴散/移動gatheredinthesky聚集coveredthesky遮蓋envelopedtheforest籠罩rapidly快速地inthedistancelikeawebthick濃(霧)dense密集的faint微弱的slight薄的whiteMistspread擴散envelopedtheforest籠罩swallowedtheland吞沒meltedinthesun消散hungintheair彌漫在空中rapidlypletelytotallygreentall/youngTreewaved擺動/搖曳shook(原形shake)搖擺shivered/trembled顫動flapped/swayed搖擺arounduncontrollably1、排比:意象1+動詞1,意象2+動詞2,and意象3+動詞3.(注意:優(yōu)先用原文的意象，再按需補充)步驟1:定續(xù)寫位置，找原文意象+動詞(可考慮結尾/升華句)步驟2:補充意象+動詞(形容詞+意象，動詞+副詞/方位介短)Thenightwindhowledruthlessly.夜風無情地呼嘯著Someunknowncreaturesmurmuredinthedark.在黑暗中喃喃自語Themoonlightshoneweaklyontheground.月光微弱地照在地上步驟3:擴寫，合成句子(形容詞/副詞/介短;最后的分句前加“and")Thenightwindhowledruthlessly,namelesscreaturesmurmuredinthedarkandthemoonlightshoneweaklyontheground.(例句原文出現(xiàn)了:animals動物，下過雨，來到了晚上)?練習:2022全國1卷步驟1,定續(xù)寫位置，找原文意象:forest(人Davidandclassmates,情緒?)步驟2，補充意象:forest+sun+air,Davidandclassmates,laughter構思:sunshone;airsurroundedD&C;laughterfilledtheforest步驟3，擴寫，組成句:(形容詞+意象+謂語動詞+副詞/方位介短)Thesunshonewarmlyonthetreeleaves,theheatedairsurroundedDavidandhisclassmates,andtheforestwasfilledwithlaughterofexcitement.陽光溫暖地照在樹葉上，炙熱的空氣環(huán)繞著大衛(wèi)和同學們，森林里充滿了興奮的笑聲。讀后續(xù)寫之環(huán)境描寫非謂語2、非謂語:意象+謂語動詞(主句)，非謂語動詞(分句)①動作鏈:Thestarstwinkledvividlyinthesky,lookingasbrightasdiamonds.②擬人式:SunlightshonegentlyonDavid,celebratinghisbravery.?擴寫:意象+謂語動詞,非謂語動詞+比喻/擬人likeThestarssparkledvividly,glazingatuslikeacuriouschild.2.非謂語句式:意象+謂語動詞1,非謂語動詞2.①動作鏈:意象+分解動作1,非謂語分解動作2.②擬人動作:意象+動作1,非謂語擬人動作2.(所有意象通用)?通用擴寫:意象+謂語動詞,非謂語動詞+比喻/擬人like2、非謂語:①動作鏈:意象+分解動作1,非謂語分解動作2例:“冷冷的冰雨在我臉上胡亂地拍”Thechillyrainslappedrandomlyonmyface.寫法1(上一個動作+地點):“(從天上)掉下來”Pouringdownfromthesky,thechillyrainslappedrandomlyonmyface.●寫法2(下一個動作+地點):“濺得滿地都是”Thechillyrainslappedrandomlyonmyface,splashingoverthewholearea.非謂語:①動作鏈:意象+分解動作1，非謂語分解動作2hick濃厚的heavy重的black烏(云)grey灰thin薄(云)Cloudspread/move擴散/移動(動作)gatheredinthesky聚集(動作)coveredthesky遮蓋(結果)rapidlyinthedistancelikeaweb自由組合：（搭配形容詞、介短和比喻；句子拉長，效果拉滿）Thecloudsmovedrapidlyinthedistance,envelopingthewholeforest.(云在遠處快速移動,籠罩著整個森林)Thecloudsmovedrapidlyinthedistance,gatheringintheskylikeaweb.(云在遠處快速移動,聚集在空中，如同一張網(wǎng))6種常見意象,動作拆分:.Therainpoureddownheavily,beatingagainstthewindows.(傾盆而下，敲打窗戶)Thewindwasroaring,uprootingabunchoftrees.(狂風呼嘯,把樹連根拔起)Thecloudsmovedrapidlyinthedistance,envelopingthewholeforest.(云在遠處快速移動,籠罩著整個森林)Thesunlightbrokethroughtheforest,shininggentlyontheground.陽光穿過森林，輕輕地照在地面上。Themoonlightshoneweaklyontheground,coveringeverythinginsilver.月光微弱地照在地上，將一切都籠罩在銀色之中。Dottingthesky,thenaughtystarsvividlylitupthenight.散布于天空中,調皮的星星們把夜色映得栩栩如生。2、非謂語:②擬人動作:意象+原生動作1,非謂語擬人動作2動作1:意象的原生動作(sun/moonshines;starstwinkle)動作2:擬人式動詞(好消息:基本可共用!)see/witness見證;watch注視;observe觀察;bring(帶來)share(分享);remindsbof(使人想到);celebrate(慶賀/贊美)?真題例句[2022年全國1卷]:SunlightshonegentlyonDavid,celebratinghisbraveryanddetermination.陽光溫柔地灑在大衛(wèi)身上，贊美他的勇敢和決心。Thewholeforestwasfilledwithlaughterandapplause,witnessingDavid'ssuccessinoveringthemonsteroffearinhim...充滿了歡聲笑語和掌聲,見證了大衛(wèi)成功戰(zhàn)勝了他心中的怪物恐懼。?練習:整座森林沐浴在陽光中,分享著David的喜悅。(按需改寫/擴寫)Thewholeforestisbathedinsunlight,sharingDavid'sdelight.Bathedinthegentlesunlight,thewholeforestwatchedDavidpassthelineandsharedhisdelight.(分詞前置)Bathedinthewarmsunlight,thetreeswavedinthebreeze,sharingthejoyandgleewithDavidforhiscourage.(Done..，主句，doingsth.)整個森林的樹都在歡快地搖擺,祝賀David成功克服困難和內心的恐懼。Thetreesallovertheforestswayedcheerfully,congratulatingDavidonhissuccessinconqueringthechallengeandhisinnerfears.?非謂語擴寫:意象+謂語動詞1,非謂語動詞2+比喻/擬人Thestarssparkledvividly,glazingatuslikeacuriouschild.星光熠熠生輝,像好奇的孩子一樣盯著我們。溫和喻體:●acuriouschild(lookingatuswithanticipation)一個好奇的孩子(期待地看著我們)●naughtychildren(lookingatuswithcuriosity)S頑皮的孩子(好奇地看著我們)●aquiet/keenobserverofsth安靜的/熱切的觀察者●anoldfriendwitnessingourdelight一位見證我們快樂的老朋友(換“喜怒哀樂”)激烈喻體:awildbeast猛獸;afiercemonster兇猛的怪物動詞:serveas/actas充當..角色;looklike看起來像..●Thetreeswaveddelightedly,servingasakeenobserverofDavid'ssucc