備考2024屆高考英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)第二部分讀后續(xù)寫專題二熱考話題素材9遇險(xiǎn)救援

熱考話題9遇險(xiǎn)救援[2020浙江改編]Onefall，mywifeElliandIhadasinglegoal：tophotographpolarbears.Wewerestayingataresearchcampoutside"thepolarbearcapitaloftheworld"—thetownofChurchillinManitoba，Canada.Takingpicturesofpolarbearsisamazingbutalsodangerous.Polarbears—likeallwildanimals—shouldbephotographedfromasafedistance.WhenI’mfacetofacewithapolarbear，Ilikeittobethroughacamerawithatelephotolens.Butsometimes，thatiseasiersaidthandone.Thiswasoneofthosetimes.AsElliandIcookeddinner，ayoungmalepolarbearwhowasplayinginanearbylakesniffed，andsmelledourgarlicbread.Thehungrybearfollowedhisnosetoourcamp，whichwassurroundedbyahighwirefence.Hepulledandbitthewire.Hestoodonhisbacklegsandpushedatthewoodenfenceposts.Terrified，ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew.Weyelledatthebear，hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshellsintotheair.Sometimesloudnoiseslikethesewillscarebearsoff.Notthispolarbearthough—hejustkepttryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws（爪子）.Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp.Hetoldmeahelicopterwasonitsway，butitwouldbe30minutesbeforeitarrived.Makingthebestofthiscloseencounter（相遇），Itooksomepicturesofthebear.ElliandIfearedthefencewouldn’tlastthrough30moreminutesofthebear’spunishment.ThecampmanagersuggestedIusepepperspray.Thesprayburnsthebears’eyes，butdoesn’thurtthem.SoIapproachedouruninvitedguestslowlyand，throughthefence，sprayedhimintheface.Withanangryroar（吼叫），thebearrantothelaketowashhiseyes.Afewminuteslater，thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Atthatverymoment，thehelicopterarrived.人物主要角色"I"和mywifeElli：從文中的描述"yelledatthebear，hitpotshard，andfiredblankshotgunshells""radioedthecampmanagerforhelp""Makingthebestof...tooksomepicturesofthebear"可知，"我"和妻子在面對(duì)熊時(shí)沉著冷靜、勇敢，續(xù)寫時(shí)可以通過(guò)動(dòng)作描寫凸顯人物的這一特征。主要角色apolarbear：從文中的描述"pulledandbitthewire""tryingtoteardownthefencewithhismassivepaws（爪子）""angryroar（吼叫）""loudnoises...willscarebearsoff"表明，熊兇猛但害怕大的響聲，這也為續(xù)寫第二段直升機(jī)到來(lái)時(shí)的巨大聲音暫時(shí)嚇退熊埋下了伏筆。情節(jié)及情感線"我"和妻子到一個(gè)研究營(yíng)地拍北極熊的照片（感到興奮、刺激）→一只饑餓的北極熊被"我們"的食物吸引過(guò)來(lái)（感到害怕）→嘗試各種驅(qū)趕方法無(wú)果后，"我"用無(wú)線電向營(yíng)地經(jīng)理尋求幫助（感到放松了一些）→聽(tīng)從建議，用胡椒噴劑驅(qū)趕熊（擔(dān)心圍欄支撐不到救援到來(lái)）主題根據(jù)原文中的"ElliandItriedallthebeardefenseactionsweknew""Iradioedthecampmanagerforhelp"以及"usepepperspray"可知，本文主要體現(xiàn)面對(duì)危險(xiǎn)要沉著冷靜，充分利用資源逃脫危險(xiǎn)的主題。續(xù)寫第一段根據(jù)原文和本段的提示語(yǔ)可知，熊被胡椒噴劑刺痛眼睛，被激怒，洗眼睛后返回營(yíng)地，緊接著就該講述熊發(fā)動(dòng)更猛烈的攻擊以及"我們"的反應(yīng)和反擊。尾句銜接第二段提示語(yǔ)："我們"與熊的斗爭(zhēng)到了千鈞一發(fā)之際。本段側(cè)重通過(guò)動(dòng)作和感受描寫體現(xiàn)人熊大戰(zhàn)的激烈場(chǎng)面。續(xù)寫第二段本段首句提到直升機(jī)的到來(lái)，接著該講述直升機(jī)到達(dá)后"我們"安全撤離，交代熊的去向，并講述"我們"的感受等。1.Thebearlookedatusangrilyandranforward.①用glareat代替句中的lookatangrily，更加簡(jiǎn)練、形象地描述"熊怒視我們"的狀態(tài)。Thebearglaredatusandranforward.②為句①增加熊齜牙的面部表情，并用現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)，進(jìn)一步凸顯熊的憤怒和狂躁。Thebearglaredatusexposinghissharpteeth，andranforward.③用時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句改寫句②，營(yíng)造出一種熊邊跑邊齜牙和怒視的恐怖氛圍。Thebearglaredatusexposinghissharpteethasheranforward.2.Wewerefrightened.①用具體的感受描寫表現(xiàn)"我"的害怕，用肢體動(dòng)作描寫表現(xiàn)Elli的恐懼，體現(xiàn)用詞的豐富性，也使人物形象更豐滿。IcouldfeelthecoldnessfloodingfrommybackandElliwasrootedtothespotwithfear.②為句①Elli增加面部表情描寫，并用獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)，更進(jìn)一步體現(xiàn)Elli的恐懼。IcouldfeelthecoldnessfloodingfrommybackandElliwasrootedtothespotwithfear，hermouthwideopen.③為句②補(bǔ)充原因狀語(yǔ)（seesuchaterriblesight），并用現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)，使上下文銜接更緊密、行文更流暢。Seeingsuchaterriblesight，IcouldfeelthecoldnessfloodingfrommybackandElliwasrootedtothespotwithfear，hermouthwideopen.3.Werantothehelicopter.①增加"我們"逃離熊時(shí)的動(dòng)作細(xì)節(jié)，使句子更有畫面感。Westeppedawayandrantothehelicopter.②為句①的動(dòng)作增加副詞，體現(xiàn)"我們"逃脫困境時(shí)的急切和敏捷。Weinstantlysteppedawayandrantothehelicopterfast.③用as...assb.can句式升級(jí)句②中跑向直升機(jī)的動(dòng)作，將緊迫感進(jìn)一步具象化，讓表達(dá)更高級(jí)。Weinstantlysteppedawayandrantothehelicopterasfastaswecould.Afewminuteslater，thebearheadedbacktoourcamp.Heglaredatusexposinghissharpteethasheranforward.Andagainthebearstoodonhisbacklegs，wantingtobitethefencelikeamonster.Seeingsuchaterriblesight，Icouldfeelthecoldnessfloodingfrommyback（感到后背一陣?yán)湟猓゛ndElliwasrootedtothespotwithfear（嚇得呆住了），hermouthwideopen.Ihadtotakeaction.Igatheredupmycourage（鼓起勇氣）andtriedtofrightenthebearawaywiththepeppersprayagain，butfailed.Atthatverymoment，thehelicopterarrived.Itlandednearourcampanditsloudnoisesscaredthebear.Hebackedupafewsteps.Weinstantlysteppedawayandrantothehelicopterasfast