讀后續(xù)寫隧道里的鱒魚講義高三英語二輪復習寫作專項

讀后續(xù)寫隧道里的鱒魚JuliaalwaysenjoyedrunningthroughTheDarkWalktowardsthelightattheendofit.Itwasadark,damptunnel

(隧道)

madeofsmoothbranches.Thisyearshehadtheextrajoyofshowingittohersmallbrother,Stephen,andof

terrifying

himaswellasherself.Onedaytheyfoundaholeononesideofthewalk.Insidetherewaswater,inwhichtheyperceivedapantingtrout

(喘息的鱒魚).Theywerebothsoexcitedthat

theywerenolongerafraidofthedarknessastheybentdownandpeeredatthefishpantinginhistinyprison,hissilverstomachgoingupanddownlikeanengine;otherwisehewasmotionless.

Juliawonderedwhatheateandthoughtofhishunger.Shefoundhimaworm.Heignoredthefood,andjustwentonpanting.Bendingoverhim,shethoughthowhehadbeeninthere.Allthewinter,inthedarktunnel,allday,allnight,floatingaroundalone.Nobodyknewhowthefishgotthere.Hermothersuggestedthatabirdhadcarriedtheegg.Herfatherthoughtthatinthewinterasmallstreammighthavecarrieditdownthereasababy,andithadbeensafeuntilsummercameandthewaterbegantodryup.Beforetheywenttobed,Stephenaskedhismummythewholestoryofthetrout,notreallyinterestedintheactualtrout,butinthestorywhichhismumbegantomakeupforhim,andJulia,inherbed,presentedherbacktothemandreadherbook.Butshekeptoneearcocked.“Andso,intheend,thisnaughtyfishgotbiggerandbigger,andthewatergotsmallerandsmaller…”Passionately,sheturnedaroundandcried,“mummy,don'tmakeitahorribleoldmoralstory.”Hermomevenbroughtinafairy(仙子),

whohadmadeitrainandfilledthehole,sothat

thetroutcouldfloatawaydowntotheriverbelow.Staringatthemoonsheknewtherewasnosuchthingasafairyandthatthetrout,downinthetunnel,waspantingforhislife.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數應為

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左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。ShesatupinthesilentnightandStephanwassoundasleep.Juliapouredthetroutoutofthepotintotheriver.【參考范文】ShesatupinthesilentnightandStephenwassoundasleep.Shegotoutofthebedroomandrantothepoortroutwithapot.Althoughshewasscaredinthedarkness,

asenseofresponsibilitywelledupinherheart.

"Nevercanthesmallholebeyourprison."Shemurmuredtothepantingcreature,"buthowcanIrescueyoufromthedeephole"Suddenly,

itdawnedonherthatmaybeshecouldfilltheholewithwaterlikeafairy.

NextthreehourswitnessedJulia'seffortinfillingtheholewiththewaterfetchedfromtherivernearby.Finally,shegraspedit,putitintothepotandracedouttotheriver.

Juliapouredthetroutoutofthepotintotheriver.Staringatthedisappearingtrout,Juliawasingreatjoy,

awaveofhappinessfloodingoverher.

Withoutanydelay,shechargedbackhomelikeanarrow

andannouncedthenewstothewholefamily.

Havingconfirmedwhatshehaddone,herparents

gaveathumbsup

topraiseher."Youmustbetheveryfairy"yelledStephen,hiseyestwinklinglikeadiamond.Thebrightsmilefromeveryonelitup

TheDarkWalk.

Hadn'titbeenforJulia'sbraveryandMom'sweird

story,thetroutcouldn'thaverunthroughthedarkholetowardsthelightriver.譯文翻譯：她在寂靜的夜里坐了起來，斯蒂芬睡著了。她走出臥室，拿著一只鍋跑向那條可憐的鱒魚。盡管她在黑暗中感到害怕，但一種責任感涌上了她的心頭?！斑@個小洞永遠不會是你的監(jiān)獄。”她喃喃自語地對氣喘吁吁的生物說，“但我怎么能把你從深洞里救出來呢？”突然，她意識到，也許她可以像仙女一樣把水裝滿洞。接下來的三個小時里，朱莉婭用附近河里的水把洞填滿。最后，她抓住它，把它放進鍋里，然后沖向河邊。茱莉亞把鍋里的鱒魚倒進河里?？粗谙У镊V魚，朱莉亞非常高興，幸福的浪潮涌上了她的心頭。她毫不拖延地向家里沖去，向全家人宣布了這個消息。在確認了她的所作所為后，她的父母豎起大拇指稱贊她。斯蒂芬喊道：“你一定是個仙女?！彼难劬ο胥@石一樣閃閃發(fā)光。每個人燦爛的笑容照亮了黑暗之路。如果不是因為朱莉亞的勇敢和媽媽的離奇故事，鱒魚不可能穿過黑暗的洞穴跑向光明的河流。【解析】本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀文章可知，講述了作者兩兄妹看到在隧道里看到喘息的鱒魚，請教大人，在媽媽講的故事中得到靈感，親自救了鱒魚并把它放生到河里的故事。段落續(xù)寫：

①由第一段首句內容"她在寂靜的夜晚坐了起來，斯蒂芬睡著了"可知，第一段可描寫作者走出臥室來到隧道旁邊，從小河里取水并成功地將鱒魚捉住并飛快地跑到河邊。②由第二段首句內容"茱莉亞把鍋里的鱒魚倒進河里"可知，第二段可描寫作者將鱒魚放生后，全家人都贊揚她的舉動。寫作時注意準確運用時態(tài)，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系，盡量使用自己熟悉的單詞句式，同時也要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型使文章顯得更有檔次。【點評】本書面表達要點齊全，上下文連貫，使用一定數量的句式結構，讓句子更加生動豐滿，同時運用了許多高級詞匯和固定短語，提高文章的檔次，體現了對英語的熟練的駕馭能力。例如：Althoughshewasscaredinthedarkness,asenseofresponsibilitywelledupinherheart.運用了讓步狀語從句；Nevercanthesmallholebeyourprison.運用了倒裝句；Suddenly,itdawnedonherthatmaybeshecouldfilltheholewithwaterlikeafairy.運用了賓語從句；NextthreehourswitnessedJulia'seffortinfillingtheholewiththewaterfetchedfromtherivernearby.運用了過去分詞作定語；Staringatthedisappearingtrout,Juliawasingreatjoy,awaveofhappinessfloodingoverher.運用了獨立主格結構；Havingconfirmedwhatshehaddone,herparentsgaveathumbsup(豎起大拇指)topraiseher.運用了現在分詞的完成式作狀語，賓語從句；"Y