專題16讀后續(xù)寫之九省聯(lián)考2024浙江首考真題方法指導與詳解-高考英語寫作題型全面突破

專題16讀后續(xù)寫之九省聯(lián)考、2024浙江首考真題方法指導與詳解（2024年九省聯(lián)考）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethetankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,onedayaftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,thetrainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.Thenextmorning,Hildaarrivedattheparkearly.Sheputonherscubagear(水下呼吸器)andjumpedintothetankforherusual,underwatersweep.Findingnothinginthetank,sheclimbedoutofthewaterjustintimetoseeKatherinejumpinginontheotherside.Afterwhathappenedyesterday,Hildaknewwhatshewasdoing.ShewatchedasKatherineperformedherunderwatersearch,butHildawasn'tsurprisedwhenshesurfacedemptyhanded.Duringthetanksweeps,Mayahadbeenswimmingplayfully,butnowthedolphinstoppedsuddenlyandswamtothebackpartofthetankwherethefilter(過濾)boxwaslocated.Shestuckhernosedownbehindtheboxandthenswamaway.WhatwasMayadoingbackthere?Hildawondered.Shejumpedbackintothewaterandswamovertotakealookbehindthebox,andherquestionwasanswered.HildathenswamacrossthetankfollowingMaya’spathandemergedfromthewatertofindKatherineremovingherscubagear.AsKatherineturnedaround,hermouthdroppedopen.TherewasMayaattheedgeofthetankwithab(梳子)inhermouthwaitingforhertreat.“Maya!Wheredidyougetthat?”demandedKatherine,takingthebandthrowingherafish.“Iknowwhereshegotit,”declaredHildaclimbingoutofthetankwithahandfulofitemsstillwetfromtheirwatery,restingplace.“What’sallthis?”Katherineasked,obviouslyconfused.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答?！癟hisisMaya’ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【文本解析】1.厘清人物及性格特點WhowhatcharacteristicsHilda:海洋公園志愿者負責清理海豚訓練的水箱。聰明、觀察細致Katherine:海豚訓練師起初因為誤會責備Hilda，后來意識到Hilda的洞察力和瑪雅的特殊行為。嚴厲的Maya:海豚喜歡收集物品，并將其藏在過濾箱后面聰明2.運用故事山來梳理文本情節(jié)發(fā)展：Opening:Hilda作為志愿者在海洋公園工作，負責清理海豚水箱。Buildup:因為Maya呈現(xiàn)了一個糖果包裝紙，Katherine錯誤地責備Hilda粗心沒打掃干凈。Hilda決定弄清真相，通過觀察，最終發(fā)現(xiàn)了海豚收集和隱藏物品的行為。Climax:Hilda向Katherine揭示了Maya的秘密并展示了海豚收集的物品。Resolution:Katherine意識到了Hilda的細致觀察和Maya的特殊行為，解開了兩人之間的誤解。Ending:故事以Katherine對Hilda的贊賞和對Maya行為的新理解結(jié)束，突出了觀察、理解和團隊合作的重要性。3.段落構(gòu)思由第一段段首句“海達微笑著說那是瑪雅的秘密哦”和第二段段首句“現(xiàn)在凱瑟琳明白事實真相了”可知，第一段主要描寫海達揭示秘密，凱瑟琳的反應以及解釋秘密如何被發(fā)現(xiàn)的三部分。第二段主要描寫凱瑟琳向海達道歉，并對瑪雅行為表示理解，并突出觀察、理解以及團隊合作的重要性這三部分?！痉段馁p析】“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.【真相大白】Inherhand,shedisplayedtheitemsshehadretrievedbehindthefilterbox.“She'sbeenkeepingthesefromthetank,notme.”【凱瑟琳反應】Katherine'seyeswidenedassheexaminedthesmallpileofobjectsthatMayahadcollected.【秘密發(fā)現(xiàn)的過程】HildaexplainedhowshehadwatchedMayacleverlyhidetheitemsaway,turningthetankintoherownlittlecollectionspot.【冰釋前嫌】ThetensionintheairdissolvedasKatherinerealizedthatHilda'sdedicationhadrevealedMaya'splayfulhabit,notamistakeonherpart.NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.【凱瑟琳態(tài)度的轉(zhuǎn)變】ShelookedatMaya,thenatHilda,andhersternexpressionsoftenedintoasmile.“Ioweyouanapology,Hilda.You'veshowngreatinitiativeandcare,”shesaid,hertonefilledwithnewfoundrespect.【理解萬歲】Together,theywatchedMayaperformhertricks,understandingnowthatthedolphin'sbehaviorwasnotatrainingissuebutasignofherintelligenceandcuriosity.【突出主題】Thedayendednotwithblame,butwithlaughterandasenseofteamwork,astheyallenjoyedMaya'scleverantics.【點睛】詞匯積累：eyeswidened瞪大眼睛herstern（嚴厲的）expressionsoftenedintoasmile嚴厲的表情化為微笑oweyouanapology欠你一聲道歉asenseofteamwork團隊合作意識Blamesb.for因...責備某人mouthdroppedopen（由于吃驚）張大嘴巴[高分句型1]Katherine'seyeswidenedassheexaminedthesmallpileofobjectsthatMayahadcollected.【無靈主語、定語從句】[高分句型2]ThetensionintheairdissolvedasKatherinerealizedthatHilda'sdedicationhadrevealedMaya'splayfulhabit,notamistakeonherpart.【無靈主語、賓語從句】[高分句型3]ShelookedatMaya,thenatHilda,andhersternexpressionsoftenedintoasmile.【無靈主語，且創(chuàng)新使用了soften】[高分句型4]Thedayendednotwithblame,butwithlaughterandasenseofteamwork,astheyallenjoyedMaya'scleverantics（滑稽）.【無靈主語，not...but,endwith】（2024年浙江首考）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Evaspentthefirstweekofhighschooltryingtokeepherheadabovewater.Oneofthemajorheadachesforherwasfindingherwayinthehugeschoolbuilding.Itwasasixstorybuilding.Oneachfloor,hallwaysstretchedinfourdirections,leadingtoclassrooms,laboratories,andteachers'offices.Somewhereinthebuilding,therewasalsoalibrary,acafeteria,andagym.Havingapoorsenseofdirection,Evafounditimpossibletogetaroundinsuchahugebuilding.Allthedifferenthallwaysandroomsweretoomuchtothinkabout,letalonemittomemory.Shedecidedthatshewouldmemorizewhereherclasseswereandthenpretendthattherestoftheplacedidn’texist.InherfastP.E.class,EvawasshockedwhenCoachPittannouncedthateveryonehadtorunonemilearoundthetrackoutside.Shesearchedthefacesofherclassmatesforsignsofpanic.Therewasnothingshefearedmorethanhavingtorunawholemile.ToEva,"amile"wasusedtodescribelongdistances.Itwastenmilesfromherhometohergrandfather's,andthatalwaysseemedlikealongway,eveninacar!WhenCoachPittblewhiswhistle（哨子）,Evafiguredshewouldbeleftinthedust.However,whilesomeofherclassmatesedgedahead,othersactuallyfellbehind."It'sjustthebeginning,"shethought."I'lleinlastforsure."SoonEvabegantobreathehard,withherheartpoundingandlegsshaking.Feelingdesperate,Evastartedusingamindtrickonherself.Shestoppedthinkingabouttheword"mile."Instead,shefocusedonreachingtheshadoweastonthetrackbyanoaktreeupahead.Thensheconcentratedonjoggingtothespotwherethetrackcurved(彎）.Afterthat,shetriedtoseeifshecouldpleteherfirstlap.Onelapturnedintotwo,thenthree,thenfour.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1:WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework!"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【文本解析】1.主題語境：人與自我；面對恐懼、適應新環(huán)境、自我成長和克服困難文本大意：Eva在高中的第一周艱難適應。對于沒有方向感的她來說，一個重大難題是在一所樓高六層，每層有四個方向走廊的學校建筑中找到自己的路，同時體育課上跑步也是一個巨大挑戰(zhàn)。2.故事山梳理故事情節(jié)Beginning:Eva開始了她的高中生活，在這個新環(huán)境中她艱難適應。最大的挑戰(zhàn)之一是在巨大的學校建筑中找到自己的路。建筑物龐大，使她感到迷茫。Buildup:Eva在巨大的學校建筑中迷路的問題逐漸升級，她決定只記住自己上課的地方。此時，體育課上的一個新挑戰(zhàn)出現(xiàn)了：教練要求每個人跑一英里。Eva對跑步感到極度恐懼，認為自己無法完成。Climax：跑步的時候，Eva開始感到絕望。然而，她使用了一個心理技巧：不再想象一英里到底有多長，而是專注于逐漸實現(xiàn)小目標。她的心情由恐懼慢慢轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)樽孕牛蝗τ忠蝗Φ貓猿?。Resolution:Eva最終成功地完成了跑步，并意外地獲得了教練的表揚。她意識到，她所害怕的距離實際上更多是心理層面的挑戰(zhàn)。她決定將這種分解任務的方法應用到學校的探索上，逐步熟悉整個建筑。Ending:Eva通過逐步攻克學校建筑的復雜性，成功地適應了新環(huán)境。故事以她的成長和自信的提升結(jié)束，她從一開始的迷茫和恐懼變得更加自信和適應。這個故事不僅是關(guān)于學習和適應的，還強調(diào)了面對挑戰(zhàn)時心理策略的重要性。【范文賞析】WhenCoachPittsaid"Nicework"toheratthefinishline,Evawassurprised.Despiteherinitialdoubts,shehadnotonlypletedthemilebuthadalsokeptpacewithmanyofherclassmates.Herheartstillpoundedfromtheexertion(n．費力；盡力）,andherlegsfeltlikejelly（緊張得發(fā)軟）,butasenseofacplishmentsurgedthroughher.Breakingthedauntingdistanceintosmallerachievabletargetshadmadetheimpossiblepossible.Sherealizedthatfocusingonimmediate,reachablegoals,likethenextbendinthetrackortheshadowofatree,haddistractedherfromtheoverwhelmingideaofthemile.Evadecidedtousethesametricktodealwiththeschoolbuilding.Insteadofbeingdauntedbyitsenormity,shebrokeitdownintomanageablesections.First,shefocusedonmemorizingtheroutefromtheentrancetoherfirstclass.Gradually,sheaddedotherlandmarksthelibrary,thecafeteria,thegymtohermentalmap.Dayby