2024年九省聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫-2025屆高考英語(yǔ)作文復(fù)習(xí)專項(xiàng)

2024九省聯(lián)考讀后續(xù)寫動(dòng)物篇梳理歸納縱觀這幾年的高考真題，以浙江省為例?？歼^(guò)的與動(dòng)物有關(guān)的真題有:2017年6月阿拉斯加與狼騎行2018年6月騎馬遇兔迷路森林2020年1月波比的小狗2020年7月不速之客北極熊2023年1月人鳥(niǎo)情未了2023年-2024年1月模擬考出現(xiàn)過(guò)的與動(dòng)物有關(guān)的續(xù)寫:2023年浙江四省聯(lián)考救助紅松鼠2023年3月浙南聯(lián)盟雪中救馬2023年4月溫州聯(lián)考女孩救隧道鱒魚(yú)2023年5月北斗聯(lián)考為建蜜蜂小屋籌款2023年5月浙江十校聯(lián)盟教室里的蛙2023年7月金華市高二十校聯(lián)考離家出逃的貓2023年7月寧波高二期末聯(lián)考森林精靈護(hù)女嬰2023年7月紹興高二期末聯(lián)考雨夜騎馬救牛仔2023年11月稽陽(yáng)卷

萊利太太的金絲雀2023年12月四校聯(lián)考小黑狗洗澡歷險(xiǎn)記2023年12月嘉興一模莫索普先生的雞2024年1月20九省聯(lián)考海豚的秘密人與動(dòng)物第一大類:遇險(xiǎn)脫困類第二大類:救助動(dòng)物脫困第三大類:趣事類不同故事類型，不同的情節(jié)構(gòu)思逃生脫困類:WrappingAngelicaintomytenderembrace,notuntilthendidIperceivehowwellGodtreatedme——HebroughtAngelicaintomylifeasarealangel,thebestChristmasgift,brighteningmeupinthedarkandcoldcellar.救助動(dòng)物脫困類:Thehummingbirdwashoveringintheairagainandagainasifconveyinghisgratitudetomeformyhelpinghand.趣事類:1.Theunexpectedincidentofbeingtrappedinthevasebroughtasurprisegifttomybelovedcat--ahugegorgeouscardboardhouse.2.Itdawnedonmethatwehumancouldliveinharmonywithanimals.Afterall,animalsare

essentialpartsofnature.

考生處理動(dòng)物類續(xù)寫文本，先快速瀏覽確定文本屬于上面三個(gè)大類中的哪一類，然后根據(jù)平時(shí)習(xí)作訓(xùn)練的語(yǔ)言語(yǔ)料積累，進(jìn)行接續(xù)內(nèi)容的行文情節(jié)構(gòu)思和句子架構(gòu)。分類可以梳理敘事脈絡(luò)并預(yù)判故事的發(fā)展走向，有助于故事新情節(jié)的安排，明確結(jié)尾。閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Lastsummer,Hildaworkedasavolunteerwithdolphintrainersatasealifepark.Herjobwastomakesurethetankswerefreeofanyitemssothatthetrainerscouldtrainthedolphinstofetchspecificitems.However,onedayaftercleaning,oneofthedolphins,Maya,presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank.WhenKatherine,thetrainer,sawthis,sheblamedHildaforhercarelessness.Upsetbutnotdiscouragedbythisevent,HildadecidedtodosomespyingonMaya.

Thenextmorning,Hildaarrivedattheparkearly.Sheputonherscubagear(水下呼吸器)andjumpedintothetankforherusual,underwatersweep.Findingnothinginthetank,sheclimbedoutofthewaterjustintimetoseeKatherinejumpinginontheotherside.Afterwhathappenedyesterday,Hildaknewwhatshewasdoing.ShewatchedasKatherineperformedherunderwatersearch,butHildawasn'tsurprisedwhenshesurfacedempty-handed.

Duringthetanksweeps,Mayahadbeenswimmingplayfully,butnowthedolphinstoppedsuddenlyandswamtothebackpartofthetankwherethefilter(過(guò)濾)boxwaslocated.Shestuckhernosedownbehindtheboxandthenswamaway.WhatwasMayadoingbackthere?Hildawondered.Shejumpedbackintothewaterandswamovertotakealookbehindthebox,andherquestionwasanswered.HildathenswamacrossthetankfollowingMaya'spathandemergedfromthewatertofindKatherineremovingherscubagear.AsKatherineturnedaround,hermouthdroppedopen.TherewasMayaattheedgeofthetankwithacomb(梳子)inhermouthwaitingforhertreat.

“Maya!Wheredidyougetthat?”demandedKatherine,takingthecombandthrowingherafish.“Iknowwhereshegotit,”declaredHildaclimbingoutofthetankwithahandfulofitemsstillwetfromtheirwatery,restingplace.“What'sallthis?”Katherineasked,obviouslyconfused.

Para1:“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.趣事類:Basicelements

DetailedinformationWhenwherewhowhatHowLastsummer,thenextmorningatasealifepark,inatankHilda,Maya,KatherineMaya

presentedHildawithacandywrapperfromthetank...Hildadecidedtofindoutthetruth...故事人物梳理Hilda:一名在海洋公園與海豚訓(xùn)練師一起工作的志愿者。她聰明、觀察細(xì)致，能夠發(fā)現(xiàn)并解釋瑪雅的行為。Katherine:

海豚訓(xùn)練師，最初因?yàn)檎`解責(zé)備Hilda，后來(lái)意識(shí)到Hilda的洞察力和瑪雅的特殊行為。Maya:一只聰明的海豚，喜歡收集物品，并將其藏在過(guò)濾箱后面。Beginning:Hilda作為志愿者在海洋公園工作，負(fù)責(zé)清理水箱。Build-up:Katherine錯(cuò)誤地責(zé)備Hilda粗心，因?yàn)镸aya呈現(xiàn)了一個(gè)糖果包裝紙。Hilda決定觀察Maya，發(fā)現(xiàn)了海豚收集和隱藏物品的行為。Climax:Hilda揭示了Maya的秘密，向Katherine展示了海豚收集的物品。Resolution:Katherine意識(shí)到了Hilda的洞察力和Maya的特殊行為，兩人之間的誤解得到了解決。Denouement:故事以Katherine對(duì)Hilda的認(rèn)可和對(duì)Maya行為的新理解結(jié)束，突出了觀察、理解和團(tuán)隊(duì)合作的重要性。故事情節(jié)梳理Para1:"ThisisMaya'ssecret,"Hildasaid.Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.1)WhatdidHildasaytoKatherine?1）WhatdidKatherineafterknowinghermisunderstanding？

2)HowdidHildaproveherexplanation?3）WhatdidKatherineseeandfeel?2)HowdidHildareact?3)Whatwastheendingofthisincident?(語(yǔ)言描寫為主，結(jié)合表情、動(dòng)作描寫.)(動(dòng)作描寫:直接告知或引領(lǐng)Katherine潛水看box)(動(dòng)作描寫+情感描寫)(及時(shí)道歉.)(作出反應(yīng).)(問(wèn)題解決，誤會(huì)解開(kāi)，聰明的Maya如何表現(xiàn)？...)主題？主題1：Katherine（海豚教練）與Hilda（志愿者）解除誤會(huì)，加深了彼此信任、尊重與友誼。

主題2：

海豚的聰明，關(guān)愛(ài)動(dòng)物。寫作思路1：

直接告訴Katherine關(guān)于Maya的秘密寫作思路2：間接告訴Katherine關(guān)于Maya秘密【帶著Katherine一起去filterbox，增強(qiáng)故事的畫面感，和情節(jié)豐富性】參考范文1Para1:“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.Inherhand,shedisplayedtheitemsshehadretrievedbehindthefilterbox.“She'sbeenkeepingthesefromthetank,notme.”Katherine'seyeswidenedassheexaminedthesmallpileofobjectsthatMayahadcollected.HildaexplainedhowshehadwatchedMayacleverlyhidetheitemsaway,turningthetankintoherownlittlecollectionspot.ThetensionintheairdissolvedasKatherinerealizedthatHilda'sdedicationhadrevealedMaya'splayfulhabit,notamistakeonherpart.參考范文1Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.ShelookedatMaya,thenatHilda,andhersternexpressionsoftenedintoasmile.“Ioweyouanapology,Hilda.You'veshowngreatinitiativeandcare,”shesaid,hertonefilledwithnewfoundrespect.Together,theywatchedMayaperformhertricks,understandingnowthatthedolphin'sbehaviorwasnotatrainingissuebutasignofherintelligenceandcuriosity.Thedayendednotwithblame,butwithlaughterandasenseofteamwork,astheyallenjoyedMaya'scleverantics.參考范文2Para1:“ThisisMaya'ssecret,”Hildasaidwithabigsmile.ShethengesturedforKatherinetofollowhertothebackofthetank.Together,theypeeredbehindthefilterbox,whereHildacarefullyreachedin.Herhandemergedholdingasmall,glitteringobject.Itwasacharmbracelet,shimmeringwithtinybeads.“Mayahasbeenhidingthingslikethishere,”Hildaexplained,hervoicefilledwithwonder.Katherine'seyesfollowedeverymovement,herinitialdisbeliefslowlyturningintofascinationassherealizedthedepthofMaya'splayfulantics.參考范文2Para2:NowKatherinerealizedwhathadbeengoingon.AlookofunderstandingcrossedherfaceasshewatchedMayaswimgracefullyaroundthetank.“Imisunderstoodthesituation,”Katherineadmitted,turningtoHildawithanapologeticsmile.“You'vedoneagreatjobuncoveringMaya'slittlehobby.”Theatmospherelightened,andthebondbetweentrainer,volunteer,anddolphingrewstronger.AstheywatchedMayaplayfullyinteractwithherhiddentreasures,asenseofunityandjoyfilledtheair,replacinganyearliertension.

【詞匯、語(yǔ)塊積累】makesurethetankswerefreeofanyitems-確保水箱內(nèi)沒(méi)有任何物品presentHildawithacandywrapper-給希爾達(dá)一個(gè)糖果包裝紙blameHildaforhercarelessness-因?yàn)樗拇中呢?zé)備希爾達(dá)decidetodosomespyingonMaya-決定對(duì)瑪雅進(jìn)行一些偵查surfacedempty-handed-空手浮出水面swamtothebackpartofthetank-游到水箱的后部stuckhernosedownbehindthebox-把鼻子伸到箱子后面emergedfromthewater-從水中出現(xiàn)removingherscubagear-正在脫下她的水肺裝備withacombinhermouth-嘴里叼著一把梳子waitingforhertreat-等待她的獎(jiǎng)勵(lì)handfulofitemsstillwet-一把仍然濕漉漉的物品描述Hilda展示Maya收集的物品的場(chǎng)景1 HildacarefullylaidoutMaya'scollectiononthepoolside,aneclecticmixofshinypebbles,colorfulbeads,andevenasmalltoycar,eachitematestamenttothedolphin'scuriousnature.Hilda小心地將Maya收集的物品擺放在泳池邊，這些五花八門的物品包括閃亮的鵝卵石、彩色的珠子，甚至還有一輛小玩具車，每一件都證明了海豚的好奇本性。2 HildaspreadtheitemsMayahadgathered,fromseashellstobottlecaps,beforeKatherine,eachpiecenarratingasilentstoryofthedolphin'sunderwateradventures.Hilda將Maya收集的物品擺在凱瑟琳面前，從海貝到瓶蓋，每一件都默默訴說(shuō)著海豚在水下的冒險(xiǎn)故事。描述Katherine對(duì)這一發(fā)現(xiàn)的反應(yīng)1 Katherine'seyeswidenedinastonishmentassheexaminedthearrayofobjects,herinitialskepticismmeltingintoadmirationforHilda'skeenobservation.Katherine在審視這些物品時(shí)目瞪口呆，她最初的懷疑轉(zhuǎn)變?yōu)閷?duì)Hilda敏銳觀察能力的贊賞。2 AmixofsurpriseandcontemplationcrossedKatherine'sfaceassherealizedthedepthofMaya'sactions,herperspectiveonHilda'scapabilitiestransformingwithnewfoundrespect.當(dāng)Katherine意識(shí)到Maya行為的深度時(shí)，她的臉上露出驚訝和思考的表情，她對(duì)希爾達(dá)能力的看法隨著新發(fā)現(xiàn)的尊重而轉(zhuǎn)變。帶著Katherine一起去filterbox1 Withagestureofshareddiscovery,HildaledKatherinetothefilterbox,wheretheycarefullyunearthedahiddentroveoftrinkets,