地道英語寫作教程(下冊)-unit-11-College-Application-Writing

RequestingforAdmissionFormGraduationCertificationandNotarizationUnit11CollegeApplicationWritingPersonalStatementLetterofRecommendationKeytoExercises制作單位：中國政法大學(xué)RequestingforAdmissionFormGRequestingforAdmissionFormGeneralintroduction

Structureofarequestingletterforadmissionform

PointstonoteRequestingforAdmissionForm

RequestingforAdmissionFormArequestingletterforadmissionform,asortofbusinessletter,asksthereaderforsuchspecificinformationasadmissionformforcollegeapplication.Sincesuchaletterrequiresaresponse,itisessentialtomaketheletterspecific,clear,conciseandfriendlysothatthereaderunderstandsiteasilyandprovidestheinformationyouneed.GeneralintroductionRequestingforAdmissionFormRequestingforAdmissionFormIntroduction(firstparagraph)Body(nextparagraph)Conclusion(finalparagraph)StructureofarequestingletterforadmissionformRequestingforAdmissionFormIRequestingforAdmissionFormIntroduction(firstparagraph)●averybriefintroductionaboutyourself●yourpurposeofwritingthisletterStructureofarequestingletterforadmissionformRequestingforAdmissionFormIRequestingforAdmissionFormBody(nextparagraph)●yourbackgroundandgoals●howyoumeettherequirementsoftheuniversity’sprogram●howyourbackgroundandambitionscoincidewiththemissionofthisprogram.StructureofarequestingletterforadmissionformRequestingforAdmissionFormBRequestingforAdmissionFormConclusion(finalparagraph)●expressinggratitudeforthereader’sattentiontotheletter●acknowledgingtheinconvenienceoftherequestStructureofarequestingletterforadmissionformRequestingforAdmissionFormCRequestingforAdmissionForm●Briefandenoughinformationshouldbeprovided.PointstonoteRequestingforAdmissionForm●

RequestingforAdmissionFormSample:DearMs.Doe,IamveryinterestedinTheUniversityofReadingandwouldappreciateyousendingmetheapplicationformofyouruniversity.Briefly,myacademiccareerhasbeenfocusedonbiologyandIhaveconsistentlymaintainedaGPAof90.Ihavealsosuccessfullybalancedmyacademicinterestswiththefollowingactivities:[athletics,hobbies,volunteerorganizations,etc].Ilookforwardtohearingfromyou.Sincerely,LiMingRequestingforAdmissionFormGraduationCertificationandnotarizationGraduationCertificationGraduationNotarizationGraduationCertificationandnGraduationCertificationGeneralIntroductionAcertificateofgraduationisaformaldocumentattestingtothetruththatyouhavesucceededinfinishingthe4-yearcourseandgraduating.Itisaveryimportantevidenceofyouracademicabilitywhileyouareapplyingforuniversityabroad.GraduationCertificationGeneraGraduationCertificationContentofgraduationcertificate●Theopeningsentenceisusually“Thisistocertifythat…”,”Thisistocertifyasfollows:”●Whatisattested?●Certificatenumber,●Nameofthegraduate●Genderofthegraduate●Dateofbirthofthegraduate●Placeofbirthofthegraduate●Coursesattendedbythegradate●Dateofissue●Issuingunit&signature●Nameoftheprincipal&signatureGraduationCertificationConte

GraduationCertificationSample:CertificateofGraduationCertificateNo.:00241904ThisistocertifythatMr.GuoRui,borninJune,1981,wasadmittedtotheaccountingspecialtyofthisuniversityinSeptember,2005andsuccessfullyaccomplishedallthecoursesrequiredbythefour-yearundergraduateprogramandearnedenoughcreditsbeforeune,2009.Thus,heisallowedtograduate.InaccordancewithRegulationsonAcademicDegressofthePeople’sRepublicofChina,Mr.GuoRuihasbeenawardedtheBachelor’sDegreeofScience.Principal(Signiture):NameofUniversity(seal):ShandongUniversityDate:July,2009GraduationCertificationSamplGraduationNotarizationGeneralIntroductionGraduationnotarizationistheformaldocumenttomakethecertificateofgraduationofficial.GraduationNotarizationGeneralGraduationNotarizationContentofgraduationnotarization●Theopeningsentenceisusually“Thisistocertifythat…”,”Thisistocertifyasfollows:”●Whatisnotarized?●Notarizationnumber,●Notary&seal●Notaryoffice&seal●DateofnotarizationGraduationNotarizationContent

GraduationCertificationSample:NOTARIZATIONLETTER(97)JingZi,No.369ThisistocertifythattheprecedingduplicateisinaccordancewithitsoriginalcopyofNo.950001GraduationCertificateissuedtoXuYangbyPekingUniversityinJuly,1996.Boththeofficialsealoftheabove-mentioneduniversityandthesignatureofPresidentontheoriginalcopyarefoundgenuine.Notary:(Signature)BeijingNotaryPublicHouse(Seal)ThePeople'sRepublicofChinaMay7,1996GraduationCertificationSamplPersonalStatementGeneralintroduction

Significanceofpersonalstatement

StructureofapersonalstatementPointstonotePersonalStatement

PersonalStatementPersonalstatementsareaboutwhoyouare,whathasinfluencedyourcareerpathsofar,yourprofessionalinterestsandwhereyouplantogo.Itspurposeistopersuadetheadmissioncommitteethatyouareanapplicantwhoshouldbechosen.Itshouldmakeyouyourselfstandoutfromamongaseaofsimilarlyqualifiedcandidates.GeneralintroductionPersonalStatementPersonalst

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theonlypartthatisnotbasedontestscoresorotherpeople’sperceptionsofyou●theonethingthatdistinguishesyoufromotherapplicants.●theopportunitytopresentaspectsofyourselfandyourbackgroundthatmaynotbeapparentfromtheotherpartsofyourapplication.SignificanceofpersonalstatementPersonalStatement●theonly

PersonalStatementStructureofapersonalstatementIntroduction(firstparagraph)Body(next2-4paragraphs)Conclusion(finalparagraph)PersonalStatementStructureoPersonalStatementIntroduction(firstparagraph)●thedesiretostudythesubjectofinterest●themotivationthatinfluencedyourdesire●abriefexplanationthatsupportstheclaimstatedStructureofapersonalstatementPersonalStatementIntroductionPersonalStatementBody(next2-4paragraphs)●importantclassorclasseswhichstimulatedyourdesireforgraduatestudy●researchyoumighthavedone●Yourworkexperience,ifthereisany.StructureofapersonalstatementPersonalStatementBody(next2PersonalStatementConclusion(finalparagraph)●aconclusionthatreferstotheleadandrestatesyourthesis.StructureofapersonalstatementPersonalStatementConclusion(PersonalStatementEffectivepersonalstatementsmusthavethefollowingthreeareas:●Whythissubject?●WhyYou?●Areyouinterestingandunique?PointstonotePersonalStatementEffectivepeLetterofRecommendationGeneralintroduction

SignificanceofrecommendationlettersStructureofrecommendationlettersPointstonoteLetterofRecommendation

LetterofRecommendationAletterofrecommendation,alsoknownasareferenceletter,isaletterthatmakesastatementofsupportforacandidate.Thislettershouldpresentawell-documentedevaluation,providingsufficientevidenceandinformationtohelpanadmissioncommitteegetabetterpictureofyouandyourpotential.GeneralintroductionLetterofRecommendationAlet

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Strongletterscanstrengthenyourapplicationandmakeupforanyweaknessesyoumayhaveinotherpartsofyouradmissionapplication.SignificanceofrecommendationlettersLetterofRecommendation●St

LetterofRecommendationStructureofrecommendationlettersIntroduction(firstparagraph)Body(next2-4paragraphs)Conclusion(finalparagraph)LetterofRecommendationStrucLetterofRecommendationIntroduction(firstparagraph)●thenameoftheprofessor●thenameofthestudent●thetimesincewhenhashe/sheknownthestudent:year,classorotheractivity●theresearchworkthestudenthasundertakenStructureofrecommendationlettersLetterofRecommendationIntrodLetterofRecommendationBody(next2-4paragraphs)●thecandidatestudent’sskills,attitudes,personalattributes,andgrowth,aswellashis/hercontributionsandperformance●Theassessmentofthestudent’scapabilitiesStructureofrecommendationlettersLetterofRecommendationBody(LetterofRecommendationConclusion(finalparagraph)●anoverallassessmentofthestudent’spotentialtofulfilltherequirementsoftheprogram,●thedegreetowhichyourecommendthestudent●theEncouragementtocontactyouforinformation●personalsignatureStructureofrecommendationlettersLetterofRecommendationConcluLetterofRecommendation●assuranceoftheapplicant’sabilitytodohighlevelgraduatework●relatednessoftheapplicant’sexperiencetohisorherchosenareaofgraduatestudy●evidenceoftheapplicant’sspecialskillsrequiredinthechosenareaofstudy●theapplicant’spotentialtomakeasignificantcontributiontotheprofessionorthedisciplinePointstonoteLetterofRecommendation●assuKeytoExercises1.NotarizationJ.Zi,No.1233ThisistocertifythatXiaoZheng,male,borninMay,1977,studiedChineseLanguageintheChineseDepartmentofTianjinNormalUniversityfromSeptember,1996toJuly,2000,andthenhewasenrolledinSeptember,2000tostudyintheChineseDepartmentofBeijingNormalUniversityasapostgraduateonModernChinese.HehadbeenstudyingthereforthreeyearsandfinishedthecoursesinJuly,2003.Notary:(Signature)Zhang.LiBeijingNotaryPublicHouse(Seal)ThePeople'sRepublicofChinaJuly7,2003KeytoExercises1.KeytoExercises2.1)Althoughthiswriterattemptstobespecificinhisintroductionthroughtheuseofthedate("September16,1990"),overallthisintroductionisvagueandbloatedwithwordsthatdon'tconveyanimage.Thewritersaysthathefelt"indescribabledisbelief"whenhismotherfelldownthesense,butwedon'tknowwhat"indescribabledisbelief"actuallymeans:washestunnedintoinaction?didhescream?Withoutthedetails,thewriter'sattempttohookthereaderfails.Theopeneralsocontainserrorsinpunctuation("OnSeptember16,1990Iexperiencedtheworstfeelingofmylifethefeelingofincompetence.")andusesthesameword("feeling")toomanytimes.KeytoExercises2.KeytoExercises2)Thisopenerisquitestrong.Thewriter'sdescriptionofherfather'sactionasa"divorce"isveryvivid,andmuchmoredescriptivethanifshehadwrittenthathe"left"her.Thewriteralsoexudesaquietconfidence;sheshowsussheissmartbydescribinghowherfatherhelpedinstillherpassionfor"art,literatureand...languages."Wealsoknowthatsheisbynomeansaperfectperson;herhonestyindescribingherownfailuretogiveherfamilyapriorityinherlifeispoignant,andthereaderwantstolearnmoreabouther,howsheresolvedhercrisis,andwhatshehaslearnedfromit.KeytoExercises2)ThisopenerKeytoExercises3)Thiswriterisgoingtodescribehergreatestaccomplishment,butshetakesmuchtoolongtomakeherpoint.Theopeningsentencereliesonacliché("Wehavenothingtofearbutfearitself")tomakeitspoint,andtheessayreliesonthevagueword"it"muchtoooften.Inaddition,someofthewriter'swordchoicesareinappropriate("Iwalkedtowardstheofficealittlepondered"--"confused"or"worried"wouldhavebeenmoreappropriate)andindicateatendencytorelyonbigwordswhensimpleroneswilldo.Thewriterisalsoabitwordy("allofmyseventeenyearsonthisearth;""Itliterallycameintoeffect").Theintroductionalsocontainsirrelevantinformation("thatprincipalonlyhandledthemathandsciencedepartmentsoftheentireschool.")anddoesnotprovidethereaderwithasensethatthewriterhasreflectedonherexperienceandextracteditslargermeaning.Wearenotquitesure,forexample,howthestatementaboutfearconnectstotherestoftheparagraphorwhatthemainideaorthesisis.KeytoExercises3)ThiswriterKeytoExercises3.PersonalstatementAsachildIoftenaccompaniedmyfathertohissmallcoinshopandspenthourswatchinghimwork.WhenIwasolder,Isometimessetupdisplays,waitedoncustomers,andevenbalancedthebooks.Thisexperienceinstilledinmethedesiretoownandmanagemyownbusinesssomeday,yetIunderstandthatthebusinessworldtodayismorecomplex.Thiscomplexityrequiresmoreeducation,andwiththatinmind,IamapplyingfortheMaster’sofBusinessAdministrationProgramatIndianaUniversityBloomington(IUB).KeytoExercises3.KeytoExercises3.Inadditiontomyhelpingoutinmyfather’sbusiness,Ihavehadmanyotherworkexperiencesthatfurtherenhancemyqualificationsforthisprogram.MyresumeenumeratesthevariouspositionsIhaveheldatKerasotesTheaters,Chili’srestaurants,andIndianaUniversity’snewStudentRecreationalSportsCenter(SRSC),andwhatallofthesepositionshaveincommonisanemphasisonservingthepubliceffectively.Further,asanassistantmanagerattheShowplace11andastaffcoordinatorattheSRSC,Ihavegainedvaluableexpertiseinmanagingemployeesandcreatingworkschedules.Bothofthesepositionshaveallowedmetodevelopmysalesandpeopleskills,whichareextremelyimportantinaaservice-orientedmarketplace.KeytoExercises3.KeytoExercisesNotallofmyworkexperiencehasbeenasapa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KeytoExercisesMysuccessfulKeytoExercisesLetterofrecommendationDearAdmissionOfficer,IamwritingthislettertosupporttheadmissionofLiMingtotheHarvardBusinessSchool.IwasMr.Li'steacherandadvisorforseveralyearsbetween1995and1999.