讀后續(xù)寫個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)類之Sally的生日講義-高考英語作文復(fù)習(xí)專項(xiàng)

讀后續(xù)寫原題目呈現(xiàn)：閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Sally'sbirthdaywasapproaching,buttheexcitementthatusuallyfilledherheartwasreplacedwithdisappointmentandstress.Turningelevenwasabigdeal,andshehadalwayscelebratedherbirthdaywithagrandpartysurroundedbyherfriends.However,thisyearwasdifferent.Theburdenofexcessivehomeworkandherparents’strugglingbusinessweighedheavilyonher,forcingSallytomakethedifficultdecisionofnothavingabirthdayparty,eventhoughitwasaneventsheenjoyeddearlyeveryyear.Oneday,duringthebreak,herbestfriend,Jane,withacuriouslookinhereyes,approached.“Areyougoingtohaveabirthdaypartythisyear?"Janeasked,sensingSally'ssadness.'No,"Sallysighedandrepliedsadly.“There'sjusttoomuchgoingonandmyparentsaregoingthroughfinancialdifficulties.”Sallysmiledweakly,tryingtoconcealherimmensedisappointmentandstress,butJanesawthroughherpretense(假裝)easily.Janenoddedthoughtfullyanddidnotsayanything.Afterthebreak,Sallysawhertalkingtooneoftheirclassmates,Sarah,secretively.Curious,Sallywentovertothem,butassoonasJanesawher,shequicklywalkedaway.SallywasstartledbyJane'sstrangeactionsandturnedtowardsSarah.“Whatdidshesay?”Sallyasked.However,Sarahsimplyshruggedandwalkedaway,leavingSallystandingthere,feelingleftoutandanxious.“Whatishappening?”Sallywonderedanxiously.“Aretheykeepingsomethingfromme?”AsSally'sbirthdaydrewnearer,Janewasoftenfoundchattingsoftlywithherotherclassmates.WheneverSallywentovertothem,theywouldjustwalkawayortellherthattheyweretalkingaboutasecretwhichSallywasnotallowedtoknow,“Janehasneverkeptsecretsfrommebefore,”Sallythought.Herheartsank.Evenherotherfriendsweredistancingthemselvesfromher!Sheswungbetweenconfusionandsadnesswitheachpassingmoment,desperatelytryingtofigureoutwhatwashappening.Whywereherfriendsdistancingthemselvesfromher?Andwhatweretheyhiding?P1：OnthedayofSally'sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroom

intotaldarkness.P2：TearssprangfromSally'seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiant(喜氣洋洋的)smile.閱讀原文好像沒有說明具體到校的時(shí)間，所以，對(duì)于P1處的“教室一片漆黑”，有點(diǎn)沒太理解了（是冬天來上早讀？）。不過，這個(gè)應(yīng)該對(duì)后面的續(xù)寫沒有太大影響。關(guān)于下水文的紅色部分，評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中說是要把“舉辦生日party的原因”寫在第二個(gè)段落內(nèi)，最初是寫在了第一個(gè)段內(nèi)，而且感覺寫在這里，也沒啥毛病。不過，非要按照評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)來的話，貌似直接把紅色部分平移到第二個(gè)段的段首也可以。續(xù)寫第一段：OnthedayofSally'sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.P1末端給出了環(huán)境描寫（外界刺激），銜接部分可以添加角色對(duì)此的反應(yīng)?！癢hatisgoingon?Wherearemyteacherandtheclassmates?”

murmuredSally,standingfrozeninthedoorway.(不可能一直愣在教室外)，所以可以繼續(xù)銜接角色的進(jìn)一步動(dòng)作:走進(jìn)教室，想要開燈。Withcautioussteps,shemadeherwayintotheclassroom,reachingouttoflickonthelightswitches.打開燈以后，角色可以看到或者聽到….WhatgreetedSallywasacolorfullyadornedclassroomandachorusof“happybirthday,Sally”fromherclassmates.添加細(xì)節(jié)：教室的模樣，同學(xué)們的表現(xiàn)Balloonsfloatedaround,confettiscatteredacrossthefloor,andthedeskswerepushedtothesidestomakespace,andabirthdaycakewasplacedonthedeskinthecenter.(教室)Herclassmates,includingJane,Sarah,andothers,stoodinfrontofthestage,eyestwinklingwithexcitement.（同學(xué)們）為了增加融洽度，我們?cè)谶@里說明同學(xué)們?yōu)镾ally

舉辦生日party

的原因。Janesteppedforward,holdingabeautifullywrappedpresent."Surprise!"sheexclaimed,"weknow

you'vebeenfeelingdownaboutnothavingabirthdayparty,sowedecidedtothrowyouonerighthereatschool."續(xù)寫第二段：TearssprangfromSally'seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiant(喜氣洋洋的)smile.首句是主角的情緒描寫，銜接部分可以繼續(xù)增加描寫內(nèi)容，也可以是主角的下一個(gè)動(dòng)作（情緒—?jiǎng)幼鳎￤ithtremblinghands,Sallyuntiedtheribbons,liftedthelidofthebox,anddiscoverednumeroushandmadecards,smallgifts,andheartfeltmessagesfromeachofherclassmates.

（有點(diǎn)刻意添加的動(dòng)作鏈）(看到禮物后的表現(xiàn))"Thankyou,Jane,"Sallywhispered,hervoicechoked,asshepulledherfriendintoatighthug."Andthankyou,everyone."(升華部分)Asthedarknessoftheclassroomwasreplacedbythewarmglowoffriendship,Sallyclosedhereyesandblewoutthecandlesonherbirthdaycake,silentlymakingawishtoholdontothesepreciousmomentsandtoalwaysrememberthewarmthoftheloveandkindnessthatsurroundedher.下水文1OnthedayofSally’sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.Captured

by

infinite

curiosityandconfusion（利用非謂結(jié)構(gòu)將情緒描寫與行為動(dòng)作描寫結(jié)合到一句話）,shegentlyopenedthedoorand

attemptedto

reachthelightswitch.However,beforeshetouchedtheswitch,thedarknessandsilencewerebrokenbyraysofflashlightandcheersfromherclassmateswhowerejusthidinginthecornersofclassroom.“Happybirthdaytoyou!Sally.”“Wishyoua

memorable

birthday!”Theywereclapping,singingand

approaching

toherwithcandlesandpresentsinhands.

Whatfurtheramazedher（疑問詞引導(dǎo)的名從）wasthat

theclassroomwas

elaborately

decoratedandabigcakeof

multiple

layerswasonhertable.Atthismoment,allconfusionandsadnesswere

erased

.TearssprangfromSally'seyesandherfacebrokeintoaradiantsmile.Overwhelmedwithjoyandgratitude,shehuggedeachofherclassmatestightly.Foramoment,theclassroomechoedwitharippleoflaughterandthesoundofsoftmusic.Thedisappointmentandstressthathadweighedonherforweeksmeltedaway.Surroundedbythewarmthoffriendship,Sallyrealizedthatitwasamomentshewouldcherishforever.However,wordsfailedherasheturnedandmurmuredherthankstoJane.Janesteppedforwardandhandedheranicegift,lookingatherwithatwinkleinhereyes.Sally'sheartoverflowedwithgratitudeandsheknewthatnomatterwhatdifficultieslayahead,shewouldalwayshaveherfriendsbyherside.下水文2OnthedayofSally’sbirthday,shewenttoschoolandfoundherclassroomintotaldarkness.Confusedaboutwhethertherewasapowerfailureorsomethingelse,shefeltherwaytowardsthelightswitch.Butbeforeshecouldreachtheswitch,achorusofsweet“Happybirthday!”

enteredherearsfromeverycorneroftheclassroom.Andoutofnowhereappearedallherclassmates,whogatheredaroundherandmadeSallythecentreandstar.ThelightswereturnedonandSallycouldhardlybelievehereyes.Decoratedwithfloatingballoonsandstreamers,theclassroomnowwasaabirthdayparty.Ontheteacher’sdesksatanelegantbirthdaycakeandonstudents’

deskswerewellpreparedbirthdaygiftsforSally.Immediately,Sallycametounderstandallthestrangebehaviorsherfriendsandclassmateshadpreviouslyconducted.Tearssprangfrom