-2024屆高三下學(xué)期復(fù)習(xí)作文專項(xiàng)人與自然類 讀后續(xù)寫講評(píng) 課件

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Peopleusetheproverb“seeingisbelieving”todescribesituationswhereit’shardtobelievesomethingispossibleifyouhaven’tseenithappen.Iamheretodaytotellyouthattheproverbistrueandtosharewithyouhowagirlandhergrandmothermadeapositivetransformationinacommunity（故事的主線?。?ItwasayearagowhenIwasstudyinglifecyclesinmyscienceclass.Iwroteapaperaboutthelifecycleofthemonarchbutterfly(帝王蝶)andreceivedaperfectscore.Iwassothrilled;IcalledmygrandmotherNanaandtoldhertheexcitingnews.MytalkrecalledmemoriesfromNana’schildhood.“IrememberwhenIwasagirl,”shesaid,“thoseorangeandblackbutterflieswereacommonsight.Comelatesummer,therewouldsuddenlybehundredsofthem,andbeforelongthereweresomanyitfeltlikeyouwerestandinginanorangecloud.”“Itsoundslikeyouwitnessedamigration(遷徙),butwhathappenedtothem?”Iasked.“Tobehonest,I’veneverknown,”Nanaadmitted.“Buttheredoseemtobefewermonarchsaroundtheneighborhood.”NanaandIdecidedtoinvestigate.Thatweekend,wemetatthepubliclibrary.Ourresearchproducedplentyofinformation:somefascinatingandsomeconcerning.Apparently,thenumberofmonarchshasbeenindeclineforthelastseveraldecades.Housingdevelopmentshavedestroyedmuchoftheirhabitat.Someinformationwashopeful,though,likehowconservationists(保護(hù)主義者)areworkingtosavethem.Thebestwasthis—itdoesn’ttakelotsofmoneyorequipmenttodoso.Ittakesonlyalittlebitofland,someseeds,anddedicatedpeopletocreatewhat’scalledaMonarchWaystation(驛站).

“WhatifwesetupourownMonarchWaystation?”Isuggested.“We’llneedpeopletohelp.”Nanarespondedimmediatelyanddidn’twastetimetogetstarted.Para1:Thenextday,NanapresentedtheideatohergardenclubandItalkedtomyfriends.銜接句1：情節(jié)推進(jìn)：銜接句2：Para2:NanaandIcreatedablogandfrequentlyupdatedaboutthecommunity’sefforts.銜接句3：情節(jié)推進(jìn)：主題&結(jié)尾：朋友們的反應(yīng)（話語/表情/肢體語言）我們?nèi)绾锡R心協(xié)力共同打造MonarchWaystation外界（博客讀者）的反響MonarchWaystation項(xiàng)目效果卓越+monarchbutterfly翩翩飛舞盛況如昨——Nana的感想（回扣原文的遺憾）社區(qū)/眾人齊心協(xié)力達(dá)成某個(gè)目標(biāo)，人與自然和諧相處我們所取得的初步成效（銜接下一段community’sefforts）

Thenextday,NanapresentedtheideatohergardenclubandItalkedtomyfriends.Manypeoplestartedtoplantflowersintheirgardens.Nana’sgardenclubconvinced使信服thecitygovernmenttoplantabutterflygardennexttothecityfountain.MyfriendsandIspreadleaflets傳單/小冊(cè)子

tellingpeoplehowtobuildMonarchWaystations.Moreandmorepeopletookactiontomakeourcommunitymonarch-friendly.Asspringturnedintosummer,wefoundoureffortsstartedtowork!Afewdozenorangeandblackbutterflieswerespotted發(fā)現(xiàn)/看見visitingthewaystations.Assummerprogressed,themonarchsgrewmoreplentiful豐富,多.

NanaandIcreatedablogandfrequentlyupdatedaboutthecommunity’sefforts.Monarchenthusiastsfromacrossthecountycontacteduswiththeirownobservations評(píng)論,ideas,andreflections.Thenithappenedonedaywhenthesunwasshiningandtheskywasadeepblue.JustlikeNanaremembered,afewflutteringorangewingssoonbecamehundredsofsoaringbutterflies.Asmonarchssailedaboveandaroundus,Nanacriedtearsofhappinessandgavemeanenormoushug.Itwastrulyaspectacularexperience.NowIknowwhatitmeanstostandinanorangecloudofmonarchs.Iknowwhatpeoplemeanwhentheysay,“seeingisbelieving.”Ilearnthatifwebelieveinsomethingstrongenoughandworktomakeithappen,wewillseeourgoalbecomeareality.高考讀后續(xù)寫分類1．親子關(guān)系、親情友情（2017.11浙江卷；2020.1浙江卷；2021.1浙江卷；）2．自我完善、自我成長（2021廣州一測(cè)；2022廣州階段訓(xùn)練；2022廣州調(diào)研測(cè)試）3．奮發(fā)夢(mèng)圓（202010廣州階段測(cè)試；2021廣州二測(cè)）4．愛的禮物（2021年新高考全國卷）5．助人故事/人間溫情(2020年新高考卷（山東卷）;2021年八省適應(yīng)性測(cè)試;2022年廣二測(cè);)6．野外脫困(201610浙江卷;201706浙江卷;201806浙江卷;202007浙江卷;)1．親子關(guān)系、親情友情（2017.11浙江卷；2020.1浙江卷；2021.1浙江卷；）1)父親的愛就像陽光，帶給我堅(jiān)定和熱情，使我的意志更加堅(jiān)定。Myfather'sloveislikethesunshine,whichbringsmefirmnessandenthusiasmsothatmywillisstrengthened.2)母愛是讓一個(gè)正常人做不可能的事的燃料。Mother‘sloveisthefuelthatenablesanormalhumanbeingtodotheimpossible.3)直到那時(shí)我才明白，我們不應(yīng)該把愛視為理所當(dāng)然。Onlythendiditdawnonmethatweshouldnevertakeloveforgranted.4)友誼就像螢火蟲的光。越暗，光就會(huì)越亮。Friendshipislikethelightoffireflies.Thedarkeritis,thebrighterthelightwillbe.1．親子關(guān)系、親情友情（2017.11浙江卷；2020.1浙江卷；2021.1浙江卷；）1)父親的愛就像陽光，帶給我堅(jiān)定和熱情，使我的意志更加堅(jiān)定。Myfather'sloveislikethesunshine,whichbringsmefirmnessandenthusiasmsothatmywillisstrengthened.2)母愛是讓一個(gè)正常人做不可能的事的燃料。Mother‘sloveisthefuelthatenablesanormalhumanbeingtodotheimpossible.3)直到那時(shí)我才明白，我們不應(yīng)該把愛視為理所當(dāng)然。Onlythendiditdawnonmethatweshouldnevertakeloveforgranted.4)友誼就像螢火蟲的光。越暗，光就會(huì)越亮。Friendshipislikethelightoffireflies.Thedarkeritis,thebrighterthelightwillbe.1．親子關(guān)系、親情友情（2017.11浙江卷；2020.1浙江卷；2021.1浙江卷；）【友誼】Thelightofthesettingsunshoneontheboys,witnessingthestartofanewfriendship.夕陽的余暉灑在孩子們的身上，見證了一段新友誼的開始?！靖兄x母親】Iamforevergratefultomymother,whohasshapedmewhatIamtoday.我永遠(yuǎn)感謝我的母親，是她塑造了今天的我?！靖兄x父母】Iamsogratefultomyparentsforwhattheydidforme.我非常感謝我的父母為我所做的一切。2．自我完善、自我成長（2021廣州一測(cè)；2022廣州階段訓(xùn)練；2022廣州調(diào)研測(cè)試）【自信】Embraceeverypossibilityinyourlifeandbelieveinyourself.把握住你生命中的一切可能，相信自己。【遠(yuǎn)離手機(jī)】Withacellphone,wecandoalot.Butwithoutacellphone,alotmorearewaitingtobeexplored.有了手機(jī)，我們可以做很多事情。但是沒有手機(jī)，很多還有更多等待探索【遠(yuǎn)離網(wǎng)絡(luò)】Ajourneyinmindisbetterthanthemomentsonline.思想的旅程勝過網(wǎng)上的時(shí)刻?！颈３掷潇o】Itturnsoutthatthere’salwaysawayoutofanyplightaslongaswestaycalm.事實(shí)證明，只要我們保持冷靜，就總有辦法擺脫困境?！菊\實(shí)】NeverbeforeinmylifehaveIsofirmlybelievedhonestyisthebestpolicy.在我的一生中，我從未如此堅(jiān)定地相信誠實(shí)是最好的策略?！具^程比結(jié)果重要】Itwastheeffortsintheprocessratherthantheresultsthatmattered.重要的是過程中的努力，而不是結(jié)果。3．奮發(fā)夢(mèng)圓（202010廣州階段測(cè)試；2021廣州二測(cè)）1.Thereisnoelevatortosuccess,onlystairs.1.通往成功沒有電梯，只有樓梯。2.Betheflowerthatblooms,andbutterflieswillcome.4.做那朵盛開的花，蝴蝶就會(huì)來。3.Luckiswhathappenswhenpreparationmeetsopportunity.5.當(dāng)準(zhǔn)備遇到機(jī)會(huì)時(shí)會(huì)發(fā)生運(yùn)氣。4．愛的禮物（2021年新高考全國卷）Familyisauniquegiftthatneedstobeappreciatedandtreasured.5.家庭是一份獨(dú)特的禮物，需要被欣賞和珍惜?！痉窒怼縏heonlywaytomultiplyhappinessistodivideit.增加幸福的唯一方法就是分享幸福?！窘o予】Therealhappinessofthisworldisnottotakebuttogive.這個(gè)世界真正的幸福不是索取而是給予。Givingfromourneedinsteadofourabundanceisjustwhatweneedtodo.5．助人故事/人間溫情(2020年新高考卷（山東卷）;2021年八省適應(yīng)性測(cè)試;2022年廣二測(cè);)1.HavingheardwhattheMessengershared,thefolkscametounderstandthatitwaskindnessthatkeptthefireburningevenbrighterthanbefore.1.聽了使者的分享，人們才明白，是善良讓火比以前更旺。2.Fromthatdayon,everytimeImeetsomeon