新高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)示例與寫(xiě)作訓(xùn)練 (三)

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)示例與寫(xiě)作訓(xùn)練3

【寫(xiě)作示例】

【原文呈現(xiàn)】

閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

OnedaywhenIwas12,mymothergavemeanorder:Iwastowalktothepubliclibrary,and

borrowatleastonebookforthesummer.Thiswasonemoreweaponforhertodefeatmystrange

problem-inabilitytoread.

Inthelibrary、Ifoundmywayintothe“Children'sRoom,^^Isatdownonthefloorandpulled

afewbooksofftheshelfatrandom.Thecoverofabookcaughtmyeye.Itpresentedapictureofa

beagle.Ihadrecentlyhadabeagle,thefirstandonlyanimalcompanionIeverhadasachild.He

wasmysecretsharer,butonemorning,hewasgone,givenawaytosomeonewhohadthespace

andthemoneytocarefbrhim.Ineverforgotmybeagle.

Thereonthebook'scoverwasabeaglewhichlookedidenticaltomydog.Iranmyfingers

overthepictureofthedogonthecover.Myeyesranacrossthetitle,Amos,theBeaglewitha

Plan.Unknowingly,IhadreadIhetitle.Withoutopeningthebook,Iborroweditfromthelibrary

forthesummer.

Undertheshadeofabush,IstartedtoreadaboutAmos.Ireadvery,veryslowlywith

difficulty.Thoughpageswereturnedslowly,Igotthemainideaofthestoryaboutadogwho,like

mine,hadbeenseparatedfromhisfamilyandwhofinallyfoundhiswaybackhome.Thatdogwas

mydog,andIwasthelittleboyinthebook.Attheendofthestory,mymindcontinuedthefinal

sceneofreunion,onandon,untilmyownlostdogandIwere,inmymind,runningtogether.

WhenIfinishedmyreading,astreamoftearsrandownmychecks.ItwasuntilthenIrealizedthat

Ihaveovercomemyinabilitytoread.Thus,thiswasthnveryfirslbookformewhichIhadread

throughanddeeplyimmersedinrealsense.

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;

2.應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；

3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；

4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞。

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Mymotherscallreturnedmetotherealworld.Isuddenlyrealizedsomething:

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Lastyear,mymotherwassoproudthathissonwasrewardedaPhDinliterature.

【思維路徑】

［核心內(nèi)容］

文本主要內(nèi)容為：故事中的“我”從小患有閱讀障礙，某年暑假，母親鼓勵(lì)“我”必須

完成一本書(shū)的閱讀，于是“我”便去圖書(shū)館尋找讀物，偶然間，“我”發(fā)現(xiàn)了一本故事書(shū)，

該書(shū)的封面上是一只獵犬，這讓“我”想起了自己曾經(jīng)養(yǎng)過(guò)的小狗。在興趣的驅(qū)使下，我成

功的讀完了整本書(shū)，克服了閱讀障礙。

［寫(xiě)作思路］

(1)明確故事人物關(guān)系(characters)。故事中主要人物為患有閱讀障礙的“我”和“我”

的母親。

(2)理清故事主要事件(events)。故事主人公“我”患有閱讀障礙，主人公的母親為了讓

他克服這個(gè)障礙要求他暑假必須完成一本書(shū)的閱讀，于是“我”便去圖書(shū)館借書(shū)，一本關(guān)于

獵犬的書(shū)引起了主人公的興趣，他想起了自己曾經(jīng)的寵物，最后主人公成功看完了整本書(shū)克

服了他的閱讀障礙.

(3)根據(jù)已知人物、事件及續(xù)寫(xiě)段落首句預(yù)測(cè)故事發(fā)展(development)。故事總體的發(fā)展

應(yīng)該是主人公“我”開(kāi)始對(duì)閱讀產(chǎn)生興趣，每個(gè)禮拜都會(huì)去圖書(shū)館借書(shū)看書(shū)，并且一直到大

學(xué)他也從未停止過(guò)對(duì)閱讀的熱愛(ài)，畢業(yè)后“我”拿到了文學(xué)博士學(xué)位，并且成為了一名作家。

續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段：“我”開(kāi)始熱愛(ài)上了閱讀，在母親的鼓勵(lì)下，我每天堅(jiān)持去圖書(shū)館閱讀各類書(shū)

籍，并且我也嘗試著自己去寫(xiě)一些故事，到了大學(xué)，“我”主修文學(xué)，對(duì)閱讀的熱愛(ài)絲毫不

減。續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段：“我”成功拿到了文學(xué)博士的學(xué)位，母親為我感到驕傲，并且“我”也找

到了人生的方向，即成為一名作家，而這一切完全歸功于那一年暑假我讀的第一本書(shū)。

(4)結(jié)合下劃線詞羅列寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)(points)。結(jié)合下劃線詞和文本內(nèi)容，展開(kāi)盡可能豐富的

想象，羅列出盡可能多的故事發(fā)展情節(jié)。例如，第一段可以通過(guò)問(wèn)以下問(wèn)題來(lái)獲取寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)

“Didheovercomehisinabilitytoread?Didhegoonreading?Whatwastheinfluenceofthefirst

book?”等"第二段可以問(wèn)以下問(wèn)題來(lái)獲取寫(xiě)作要點(diǎn)："Whatwouldhappenedafterhegothis

PhDinliterature?Whywouldhechooseliteratureashismajor?Whatwouldhedoforhisfuture

career?Andhowdiditrelatedtohisveryfirstbook?等”

［參考范文］

Mymother'scallreturnedmetotherealworld.Isuddenlyrealizedsomething:Bookscould

beincrediblywonderfulandIwasgoingtoreadthem.Fromthenon,Ikeptgoingtothelibrary

moreoften.Inthelibrary,Iwasexposedtodifferenttypesofbooks:detectivestories,lovestories,

poems,fablesandsoon.Mymotherencouragedmetospendtimedoingmyfavoritething.Day

byday,Iwasfinallysucceedinovercomingmyinabilityloread.Moreover,Ibegantowritesome

storiesbymyself.WhenIwenttotheuniversity,Ichoseliteratureasmymajor.

Lastyear,mymotherwassoproudthathissonwasrewardedaPhDinliterature.Inevertold

mymotheraboutmy“miraculous“experiencethatsummer.ItwasIheveryfirstbookthatmade

mewhatIamtoday.Thisyear,Ibeganwritingmyfirstbookcarriedthetopicofmybeagle.I

hopeitcouldbemylifelongcareer.Thepowerofthewordshasheld.(174words)

［范文解析］

范文圍繞文章的內(nèi)容進(jìn)行了合情合理的拓展。第一段寫(xiě)了“我”在母親的鼓勵(lì)之下，一

直堅(jiān)持不懈的閱讀，在圖書(shū)館里接觸不同類型的各類書(shū)籍，最終完全的克服了閱讀障礙，本

著對(duì)閱讀的熱愛(ài)，“我”在大學(xué)將文學(xué)作為主修。第二段，我成功獲得文學(xué)博士學(xué)位，并且

成為了一名作家，開(kāi)始了第一本書(shū)的寫(xiě)作，而“我”的第一本書(shū)正是關(guān)于我的獵犬，與上文

對(duì)我人生產(chǎn)生影響的第一本書(shū)交相呼應(yīng)，符合故事發(fā)展的邏輯，升華了主題。

［提煉歸納］

1.展開(kāi)充分想象

續(xù)寫(xiě)有助于培養(yǎng)想象力，但是想象力貴在合理。這個(gè)“理”指的就是生活的邏輯性。續(xù)

寫(xiě)部分不應(yīng)該游離開(kāi)頭部分，應(yīng)該是開(kāi)頭部分的順理成章的發(fā)展。如文中第二段所給開(kāi)頭寫(xiě)

至Lastyear,mymotherwassoproudthathissonwasrewardedaPhDinliterature.以首句為前

提，進(jìn)行合理的想象，即“我”在畢業(yè)之后，開(kāi)始了我的寫(xiě)作生涯，并且成為了一名作家，

這符合文中發(fā)展，又充滿了豐富的想象，使得文章成為了一個(gè)有機(jī)的整體。

2.注意前后照應(yīng)

續(xù)寫(xiě)要注意前后照應(yīng)，防止自相矛盾。特別是給出開(kāi)頭的續(xù)寫(xiě)，必須要與上文緊密聯(lián)系，

使上下文融為一體。如文章前面提到“我”所讀的第一本書(shū)對(duì)“我”的意義非同小可，所以

在續(xù)寫(xiě)中，“我”開(kāi)始了一本書(shū)的寫(xiě)作，而第一本書(shū)的主題剛好就是關(guān)于“我”的曾經(jīng)養(yǎng)過(guò)

的獵犬，與前文相互照應(yīng)。

【寫(xiě)作演練】

1.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

Itwas1stJanuary,thefirstdayoftheyearandaholidayforme.Whatluck!Idecidedto

withdrawsomemoneyfromthebank,Thebankperson,anelderlygentlemanwithawhitebeard,

repliedindifferentlyasusualtomypolite“HappyNewYear.^^HenoddedandIsatinfrontofhim.

Minutespassedbuthedidn'traisehishead.

ThenveryhesitantlyIputmyformandbookletinfrontofhim.Hewasbusyfillingup

entriesinhisregister.Afterafewminuteshetookmyformandfromhiscabinethetookouta

verythickfile,fromwhichhestartedfillinginmydetails,Isattherewonderingwhywehad

computerizedbankingifwewerestillfillinginformsandregister.

Afterwaitingforafewmoreminutes,inwhichIshowedallsignsofbeingimpatient,Iasked

himifmyworkwasdone.ThemomentIsaidthewords,Ifeltasifabombhadfallenonhim.He

shouted,"Nothingisdone,itwilltake

JustthenIsawhismorningcupofteawhichhadbeenlyingthereforthelasttenminutes,

untouched.Theteahadtunedalmostcoldwhilehewasdoinghiswork.SuddenlyIfeltwhatthis

man,whohadbeenworkingatthiscounterforthelastGod-knows-how-manyyears,mustbe

feelingwhencustomerslikemecomewhoarealwaysinahurrytogettheirworkdone.Wedonot

evenfeeltheneedtoIhankthemfbrbeingthere,Hemustbefeelingsoanxiousthat44herecomes

anotherpersonwhowillpushmefbrdoinghisworkfirst.”

注意：

1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.至少使用5個(gè)短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；

3.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；

4.續(xù)寫(xiě)完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。

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Thinkingofthis,Itoldhim,''Sir,youpleasehareyourtea,Iamnotinahurry.^^

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Whathesaidreallytouchedmyheart.

2.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)

的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。

WhenIspentthelastsummerwithmyGrandmolherinWarwick,N.Y.,shesentmedownto

thegrocerystorewithalongshoppinglist.Staringatalltheitemsonthelist,IwonderedhowI

couldfindanythingonthepackedshelvesaroundme.Butsheinsisted.

Iwalkeduptothecounter.BehinditwasaladylikenooneI'deverseen.Thickglasses

restedonthetipofhernose,grayhairwaspiledonherhead.

“Excuseme,“Isaid.Shelookedup.

“You'rethatClementskid,"shesaid."I'mMissBee.Comecloserandletmegetalookat

you.^^Shepushedherglassesuphernose."Iwanttobeabletodescribeyoutothepolicemanif

somethinggoesmissingfromthestore.”

'Tmnotathief!”Iwasshocked.Iwastooyoungtobeathief!

“Maybenot,butIcantellyou'vegotpotential.,,Shewentbacktoreadinghernewspaper.

“Ineedtogetthese.^^Isaid,holdingupmylist.

“So?Gogetthem."Sheignoredmyneedofafhvor,“There'snoonehereexceptyouandme

andI'mnotyourservant,soIsuggestyoustartlookingforthethingsonthat

Thestorewasapuzzletoaseven-year-old,anditseemedtoholdallthegoodsintheworld.I

complainedaboutthistaskGrandmahadsetmetodowhiletryingtofindalltheitemsonmylist.

Ittookmeoneandhalfanhourtodoit,andthemeanladybehindthecounterdidn'tevenbother

tolookatmeonce.

IvisitedMissBeeacoupleoftimesaweekthatsummer.Sometimesshesoldmeanold

newspaperinsteadofonethatwasthelatest.Sometimessheoverchargedmeanddidn'tseem

embarrassedwhenIpointeditout.Goingtothestorewasmorelikegoingintobattle,butI

survived.Bysummer'sendtheshoppingtripthathadoncetakenmeanhourwasdonein15

minutes.ThemorningIwastoreturntoBrooklyn,Istoppedintogetasoda.

Para.1:

“Allright,MissPotential,whatdidyoulearnthissummer?"shesaid.

Para.2:

Onedayafterallthoseyearsmyseven-year-olddaughtercametomewithhomework

troubles.

3.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)

的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。

AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday.Ashewalked

alongParkAvenueneartheFirstNationalBank,heheardthesoundofsomeonetryingtostarta

car.Hetriedagainandagainbutcouldn'tgetthecarmoving.Arthurturnedandlookedinsideat

thefaceofayoungmanwholookedworried.Arthurstoppedandasked,uItlookslikeyou'vegot

aproblem,Arthursaid.

I'mafraidso.I'minabighurryandIcan'tstartmycar.”

“IstheresomethingIcandotohelp?”Arthurasked.Theyoungmanlookedatthetwo

suitcasesinthebackseatandthensaid,“Thanks.Ifyou'resureitwouldn'tbetoomuchtrouble,

youcouldhelpmegetthesesuitcasesintoataxi.”

“Notroubleatall.Fdbegladtohelp.^^

Theyoungmangotoutandtookoneofthesuitcasesfromthebackseat.Afterplacingiton

theground,heturnedtogettheotherone.JustasArthurpickedupthefirstsuitcaseandstarted

walking,heheardthelongloudnoiseofanalarm.

Itwasfromthebank.Therehadbeenarobbery!

ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore.Nowtheairwasfilledwiththesoundofthe

alarmandtheshoutsofpeoplerunningfromalldirections.Carsstoppedandthepassengersjoined

thecrowdinfrontofthebank.Peopleaskedeachother,"Whathappened?^^Buteveryonehada

differentanswer.

Arthur,stillcarryingthesuitcase,turnedtolookatthebankandwalkedrightintotheyoung

womaninfrontofhim.

Shelookedatthesuitcaseandthenathim.Arthurwassurprised."Whyisshelookingatme

likethat?”Hethought.t4Thesuitcase!ShethinksI'mthebankthief!M

Arthurlookedaroundatthecrowdofpeople.Hebecamefrightened,andwithoutanother

thought,hestartedtorun.

Para1:

Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,"Stop,stop!”

Para2:

ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur...

4?閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)

的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。

SaraSavickremembersonespecialEasterwhenshewasnineyearsold.Herparentsgaveher

ababyducklinginayellowbasket.

“MomsaidlaterthatsheboughtthelittleduckbecauseshefeltsorryfbritJrecalledSara.

ThepeopleatthepetstorecoloredthefeatherspinkforEaster.SaranamedtheduckPinky.

Sara'smotherreallydidn'tthinkthebabyduckwouldsurviveverylong.Buttohersurprise,

Pinkygrewandgotstrongerandstronger.Soon,thelittleducklingwasahealthy,hungryduck

withwhitefeathers.

“WefedPinkyoatmeal,cookedanduncooked,andsmallpiecesofvegetables,saidSara.

PinkylivedinsidethehousewithSaraandherfamily.ShespeciallyfanciedtakingbathswithSara.

EveryonetreatedPinkyasafamilymember.

Butjustwheneverythingappearedtobeperfect,thenightofthe“talk”came.Sara'sMom

andDadsatherdown,explainingthatthebestthingforPinkywastoliveanormalducklife,with

otherducks.Itwasnotnaturalforduckstoliveindoorswithafamily,herfathertoldher.He

addedPinkyneededtoswiminpondsanddoallthesamethingsthatducksinthewilddo.

Sarastartedtocry,knowingwhatwasgoingtohappen.Sara'sparentsdecidedtotakePinky

toapark,whichwastwomilesaway.Therewasapondwithalotofotherducks.Pinkywould

havethechancetoliveanaturallifeandSaracouldstillvisither.

Thebigdaycame,SaraandherparentsputPinkyinaboxanddrovetothepark.Sarasaid

thatPinkydidnotlookhappy;maybePinkywasconvincedthatshewasahuman,notaduck.

注意：

所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段,每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；

Paragraph1

EveryonewassadwhentheyleftPinkyatthepond,evenSara'sfather.

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Thenextmorning,whenlookingoutofthekitchenwindow,Saracouldn'tbelievehereyes!

5.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)

的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。

LastyearatChristmastime,mywife,threechildrenandIwereonourwayfromParisto

Nice.Somehoweverythingwentwrong.Ourhotelswere“touristtraps“andourrentedcarbroke

down.OnChristmasEve,whenwecheckedintoadirtyhotelinNice,therewasnoChristmas

spiritinourhearts.

Itwasrainingandcoldwhenwewentouttoeat.Wefoundasmallrestaurantpoorly

decoratedfortheholiday.Onlyfivetablesintherestaurantweretaken.ThereweretwoGerman

couples,twoFrenchfamilies,andanAmericansailor,byhimself.Theywereeatinginstony

silenceexceptthesailor.Hewaswritingaletter,andahalf-smilelightedhisface.Inthecornera

pianoplayerwaslistlessly（無(wú)精打采地）playingChristmasmusic.

AllofuswereinterruptedbyanoldFrenchflowerwomanthroughthefrontdoor.Shehada

wornovercoatandheroldshoeswerewet.Carryingherbasketofflowers,shewentfromone

tabletoanother.Nooneboughtany.Exhaustedandfrustrated,shesatdownatatable.

Thesailorfinishedhismealandgotuptoleave.Puttingonhiscoat,hewalkedovertothe

flowerwoman'stable.

“MerryChristmas,9,hesaid,smilingandpickingoutahandfulofflowers.C€Howmuchare

they?”“Twofrancs,sir.”

Thesailorputatwentyfrancnoteinthewoman'shand.

“Idon'thavechange,sir,"shesaid."【'11getsomefromthewaiter.^^

“No,ma'am,"saidthesailor,leaningoverandkissingtheancientcheek."Thisismy

Christmaspresentforyou.”

注意：1.所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好；

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Thenthesailorheadedforourtablewiththeflowersinhishand.

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Thepianoplayercamealiveandpleasantmusicfilledthewholeroom.

答案與解析

1.【參考答案】

Para.1:

Thinkingofthis,Itoldhim,“Sir,youpleasehaveyourtea,Iamnotinahurry."This

gentleman,whohadworkedinthebankforsomanyyears,suddenlylookedupatmeandforthe

firstlimewehadeyecontact——hehadnevermadeeyecontactearlier.Isawadifferentperson

there.Hegavemeararesmileandsaid,“Itisaneverydayaffairwithme;youarenotinahurry

butsomebodyelsewillcomewhowillbeinahurry.”

Para.2:

Whathesaidreallytouchedmyheart.IfeltthatallthistimeIthoughtofhimasarobot,

someonewhowasthereformyconvenience,buttodayIsuddenlyfeltastrangebondwithhim.I

promisedtobemorefriendlywithpeoplewhohelpmewithmyworkandbethankfulthattheyare

thereforme.Inourlife,weneedtoputourselvesinotherpeople'sshoestoimaginetheirthoughts.

Inthisway,wecanunderstandothersbetter.

【解析】

通過(guò)閱讀所給文章可知，作者在去銀行取錢(qián)的時(shí)候，遇到銀行一位上了年紀(jì)的白胡子

紳士。作者等了幾分鐘感覺(jué)不耐煩，然后看到了他早上喝的那杯茶，已經(jīng)放了十分鐘了，一

動(dòng)也不動(dòng)。于是換位思考了對(duì)方的感受。

續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，第一段開(kāi)頭是：想到這里，我對(duì)他說(shuō):“先生，請(qǐng)您用茶吧，我不趕

時(shí)間。所以后文應(yīng)該是講述聽(tīng)到作者的話后，這位在銀行工作了這么多年的先生突然抬

頭看著我，我們第一次有了眼神交流——他之前從未有過(guò)這樣的交流。第二段開(kāi)頭是：他的

話真的觸動(dòng)了我的心。接著應(yīng)當(dāng)寫(xiě)作者的感悟，突然感到與他之間有一種奇怪的紐帶。我承

諾對(duì)幫助自己工作的人更加友好，并感謝他們一直支持自己。在我們的生活中，我們需要設(shè)

身處地為別人著想，想象他們的想法。

續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)要求使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)增加了寫(xiě)作難度,我們要熟悉所

給劃線詞語(yǔ)，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r(shí)候加以運(yùn)用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫(xiě)短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫(xiě)完

成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。按要求完成寫(xiě)作任務(wù)。

【范文點(diǎn)評(píng)】

本文描寫(xiě)詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級(jí)詞匯和高級(jí)句子。$n：lookupat,eyecontact,helpwith

等高級(jí)詞匯；定語(yǔ)從句Thisgentleman,whohadworkedinthebankforsomanyyears,suddenly

lookedupatmeandforthefirsttimewehadeyecontact——hehadnevermadeeyecontactearlier.；

主語(yǔ)從句Whathesaidreallytouchedmyheart.等高級(jí)句式。

2.【參考答案】

“AHright,MissPotential,whatdidyoulearnthissummer?”shesaid."Thatyou'remean!^^

FinallyIsaidit,thinkingthatIdidn'thavetodealwithheragain.Tomyamazement,MissBee

laughed.knowwhatyouthinkofme,“shecontinued"Well,Idon'tcare!Eachofusisputon

thisearthforareason.IbelievemyjobistoteacheverychildImeetsomelifelessonstohelp

them.^^EmbarrassedasIfelt,Iwasn'tcapableofappreciatingthelessonssheclaimedshehad

givenmeatsuchayoungage,andIonlywishedthatIhadnevermether.Aftercheckingout,1

left.

Onedayafterallthoseyearsmyseven-year-olddaughtercametomewithhomework

troubles.6<Ifstoohard,^^shecomplained."Couldyoufinishmymathproblemsfbrme?”“IfIdoit

foryouhowwillyoueverlearntodoityourself?"Iresponded.Suddenly,Iwasbackatthe

grocerystorewhereIhadlearnedthehardwaytodealwithmyownbusiness.HadIeverbeen

overchargedsince?Asmydaughterwentbacktoherhomework,Iwondered:HadMissBeereally

taughtmesomethingallthoseyearsago?Sureenough,shedidn'tactasaservantbutsheinspired

potentialinaseven-year-old.

【解析】

短文敘述了作者七歲時(shí)，祖母列出了采購(gòu)的清單，讓作者獨(dú)自去購(gòu)買采購(gòu)清單上的物品，

而商店的女店主對(duì)待作者一點(diǎn)也不友好，她甚至懷疑作者是小偷，不幫助作者選購(gòu)商品，讓

作者獨(dú)自去采購(gòu)，而那個(gè)夏天作者多次去那里購(gòu)物，而這位女店主，不是多收她錢(qián)，就是賣

給作者過(guò)期的報(bào)紙，在這里購(gòu)物如同戰(zhàn)爭(zhēng)一樣，不過(guò)作者都能成功的應(yīng)付。一天早上，作者

又去了這家商店……續(xù)寫(xiě)由此開(kāi)始。

第一段續(xù)寫(xiě)以"AHright,MissPotential,whatdidyoulearnthissummer?”shesaid.開(kāi)始，這

時(shí)要著重續(xù)寫(xiě)，女店主與作者的對(duì)話，女店主說(shuō)了什么，作者是怎么想的。第二段續(xù)寫(xiě)以

Onedayafterallthoseyearsmyseven-year-olddaughtercametomewithhomeworktroubles.JF

使，本段承接第一段續(xù)寫(xiě)，這段要著重續(xù)寫(xiě)作者與女兒之間的對(duì)話，女兒說(shuō)了什么，作者突

然間思緒回到了當(dāng)年去雜貨店買東西的時(shí)候，作者意識(shí)到了當(dāng)年女店主MissBee激發(fā)了自

己的潛能。續(xù)寫(xiě)的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。

【范文點(diǎn)評(píng)】

文章思路清晰，語(yǔ)言規(guī)范，段落整齊，語(yǔ)篇連貫，層次清晰。使用了較為高級(jí)的句式：

as引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句和wish的虛擬語(yǔ)氣EmbarrassedasIfelt,Iwasn'tcapableof

appreciatingthelessonssheclaimedshehadgivenmeatsuchayoungage,andIonlywishedthat

Ihadnevermether.Aftercheckingout,Ileft,where弓|導(dǎo)的定語(yǔ)從句Suddenly,Iwasbackatthe

grocerystorewhereIhadlearnedthehardwaytodealwithmyownbusiness.高級(jí)句式的應(yīng)用提

升了寫(xiě)作的檔次，整個(gè)短文顯示出了作者高水平的英語(yǔ)表達(dá)能力。

3.【參考答案】

Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”"Givemy

suitcasebacktome!”Hearingthis,Arthurimmediatelyrealizedthattheyoungmanwasthebank

thief.Sohecontinuedrunninguntilhestoppedataxi.Thenhequicklygotintoitandsatinthe

backseat.Outofbreath,Arthursaidtothetaxidriver,€tPleasegotothePoliceStationassoonas

possible.Ihavearobberytoreporttothepoliceman.^^Themomentthetaxidrivergottherequest,

hedrovestraighttothepolicestationwithouthesitation.

ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthurranintoit,shouting,"Thereisa

bankrobberyandIknowwhothebankthiefis.”O(jiān)nhearingArthur'sstory,thepolicemandecided

toheadforthebanktoinvestigatethecase.However,Justatthatmoment,theyoungmancameto

thepolicestationinahurry.Outofbreath,Hetoldthewholestory.Asamatteroffact,hewasnot

thebankthiefandwhatinthesuitcasewereonlysomeclothes.HowembarrassedArthurwas

whenhelearnedthetruth!

【解析】

本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)。通過(guò)閱讀所給文章可知，作者在街上遇到一個(gè)司機(jī)發(fā)動(dòng)車子

有困難，作者想要上前提供幫助，幫助司機(jī)拿箱子，然而正好碰到銀行警報(bào)響起，有人在搶

劫銀行。作者拿著箱子的時(shí)候被一個(gè)女人盯著，因此作者認(rèn)為別人誤以為自己是搶劫犯，情

急之下，作者帶著司機(jī)的箱子就開(kāi)始跑起來(lái)。

續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為2段，第一段的開(kāi)頭是當(dāng)他正在跑著,他聽(tīng)見(jiàn)身后的年輕人大喊:停下來(lái)，

停下來(lái)……，所以這里寫(xiě)作者帶著箱子跑之后的場(chǎng)景，作者又誤以為司機(jī)才是搶劫犯，然后

帶著箱子去警察局報(bào)警。

第二段開(kāi)頭是出租車停在了警局門(mén)口，作者……，所以這里要描寫(xiě)作者去警局以后發(fā)生

了什么事情，作者報(bào)了案，但是就在那個(gè)時(shí)候，司機(jī)也趕到了，原來(lái)只是個(gè)誤會(huì)，警察檢查

了箱子，箱子里只是衣服。因此，作者知道真相后，感到很尷尬。

【范文點(diǎn)評(píng)】

本文的續(xù)寫(xiě)比較有趣，故事情節(jié)比較吸引讀者，使用了高級(jí)詞匯和句子。如：immediately,

outofbreath,robbery,withouthesitation,embarrassed等高級(jí)詞匯，非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞Hearingthis,

Arthurimmediatelyrealizedthattheyoungmanwasthebankthief.時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句Themoment

thetaxidrivergottherequest,hedrovestraighttothepolicestationwithouthesitation.賓語(yǔ)從句

hereisabankrobberyandIknowwhothebankthiefis.等高級(jí)句式。

4.【參考答案】

EveryonewassadwhentheyleftPinkyatthepond,evenSara'sfather.Buthetriedto

convinceSarathatPinkywasfine.Walkingtowardsthecar,Saralookedoverhershoulderand

sawPinkystandingalone.Theotherduckswereswimmingaroundincircles,lookingatPinky.To

Sara,itseemedthattheyweretryingtoidentifythestrangeanimal.Theydidn'trecognizePinky

asaduck.WorriedaboutPinky,SaradreamedofPinkybeingbulliedbyotherducksthewhole

night.

Thenextmorning,whenlookingoutofthekitchenwindow,Saracouldn'tbelievehereyes!

TherewasPinky,happilywalkingaroundonthegrass.Thrilledatwhatshesaw,shekeptasking

herself"Howdidshemakeit?"Afterall,itwastwomilesawayandhemanagedtowalkback

throughthecitystreet.Incredible!ButherparentsdrovePinkybacktothepondagainregardless

ofherrequest.Thefollowingmorning,therewasPinkyagainonthegrass!SeeingPinkyagain,

herfather,wavinghisarmsaboutwildly,movedhislipswithoutsayinganything.Meanwhile,

Sarah,oveijoyed,huggedPinkytightly,tearsstreamingdownhercheeks.

【解析】本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)。SaraSavick九歲時(shí)的復(fù)活節(jié)，父母送給她一只小鴨子

Pinky,在他們的精心照顧下Pinky漸漸長(zhǎng)大，有一天父母告訴Sara,Pinky必須回到野外和

其他鴨子過(guò)一樣的生活，他們決定把Pinky帶到附近公園的一個(gè)池塘，那一天到來(lái)了。

續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，第一段開(kāi)