讀后續(xù)寫語(yǔ)篇練習(xí)(小男孩幫助孤獨(dú)老人走出陰霾)2024屆高三英語(yǔ)寫作專項(xiàng)

高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫語(yǔ)篇練習(xí)1——小男孩幫助孤獨(dú)老人走出陰霾題目分析讀后續(xù)寫題目再現(xiàn)范文呈現(xiàn)努力方向2Part1題目再現(xiàn)3續(xù)寫原文Alittleboysellingmagazinesforschoolwalkeduptoahousethatpeoplehardlyvisited.Thehousewasveryoldandtheownerhardlyevercameout.Whenhedidcomeouthewouldnotsayhellotoneighborsorpassersbybutsimplyjustglare(瞪眼看)atthem.Theboyknockedonthedoorandwaited,sweatingfromfearoftheoldman.Theboy'sparentstoldhimtostayawayfromthehouse.Alotoftheotherneighborhoodchildrenweretoldthesamefromtheirparents.Ashewasreadytowalkaway,thedoorslowlyopened."Whatdoyouwant?"theoldmansaid.Thelittleboywasveryafraidbuthehadaquota(份額)tomeetforschoolwithsellingthemagazines.4續(xù)寫原文"Uh,sir,IuhamsellingthesemagazinesanduhIwaswonderingifyouwouldliketobuyone."Theoldmanjuststaredattheboy.Theboycouldseeinsidetheoldman'shouseandsawthathehaddogfigurines(小狗雕像)onthewall."Doyoucollectdogs?"thelittleboyasked."Yes,Ihavemanycollectionsinmyhouse.Theyaremyfamilyhere.TheyareallIhave."Theboythenfeltsorryfortheman,asitseemedthathewasaverylonelysoul."Well,Idohaveamagazinehereforcollectors.Itisperfectforyou.Ialsohaveoneaboutdogssinceyoulikedogssomuch."Theoldmanwasreadytoclosethedoorontheboyandsaid,"Noboy,Idon'tneedanymagazinesofanykind,nowgoodbye."Thelittleboywassadthathewasnotgoingtomakehisquotawiththesale.Hewasalsosadfortheoldmanbeingsoaloneinthebighousethatheowned.Theboywenthomeandthenhadanidea.Hehadalittledogfigurinethathegotsomeyearsagofromanaunt.Thefigurinedidnotmeannearlyasmuchtohimsincehehadareallivedogandalargefamily.5段首句Paragraph1:Theboyheadedbackdowntotheoldman'shousewiththefigurine.Paragraph2:Fromthatdayonsomethingchangedinsidetheoldman.6Part2題目分析7已知短文內(nèi)容這是一篇記敘文。文章講述的是小男孩和一個(gè)孤獨(dú)的收藏老人的故事。在小男孩的感化下，老人走出了自己的家門，漸漸地養(yǎng)成了對(duì)每個(gè)人微笑的習(xí)慣，并積極、熱情地向孩子們展示他收藏的珍貴藏品。8點(diǎn)1：位于續(xù)寫第一段段首，流暢銜接前面的記敘文和第一段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)2：位于續(xù)寫第一段段尾，流暢銜接第二段段首句；點(diǎn)3：位于續(xù)寫第二段段首，續(xù)寫銜接第二段段首語(yǔ)；點(diǎn)4：文章結(jié)尾升華，給予讀者正能量，揭示和強(qiáng)調(diào)主題。情節(jié)構(gòu)建的重點(diǎn)9續(xù)寫建議第一段：第一段給出的首句是Theboyheadedbackdowntotheoldman'shousewiththefigurine.這一句是故事發(fā)展的轉(zhuǎn)折點(diǎn)?？梢詮摹八智昧饲瞄T，老人打開(kāi)了門?！比胧?jǐn)U展開(kāi)去，接下來(lái)故事應(yīng)該這樣發(fā)展:“孩子，我告訴過(guò)你不要看雜志。”“不，先生。但我想送你一件禮物?！蹦泻训裣襁f給他，那人的臉亮了起來(lái)。“這是給你的?！崩先撕荏@訝?！獰o(wú)論從何角度拓展，需注意該段最后一句“從來(lái)沒(méi)有人給過(guò)他這樣的禮物，并對(duì)他表示友好。”與續(xù)寫第二段首句呼應(yīng)。第二段：第二段所給首句Fromthatdayonsomethingchangedinsidetheoldman.這一句呼應(yīng)前文，緊接著可以從“他迫不及待地想見(jiàn)到他的妹妹，分享這個(gè)好消息。”入手續(xù)寫。接下來(lái)故事情節(jié)應(yīng)該是這樣發(fā)展：他開(kāi)始走出屋子去見(jiàn)人。他和那個(gè)男孩成了朋友。男孩甚至帶著他的狗來(lái)看望他。漸漸地，他養(yǎng)成了對(duì)每個(gè)人微笑的習(xí)慣，并積極、熱情地向孩子們展示他收藏的珍貴藏品。10Part3范文呈現(xiàn)11范文呈現(xiàn)Theboyheadedbackdowntotheoldman'shousewiththefigurine.Afraidashefelt,hestillknockedonthedoor,waitingbreathlessly.Finally,itopenedandoutcametheoldman.Seeingtheboyholdingawell-wrappeddogfigurine,helookedveryastonishedbutstillglaredathimwithoutaword.Determinedtobreaktheice,theboygavetheoldmanthegiftwithacardattached,expressinghiscare.Theoldmanwassomovedbyalltheboydidthat

wordsfailedtoconveyhisemotions.“Thankyousomuch!”hesaidtotheboygentlyandkindly.(91words)12范文呈現(xiàn)Fromthatdayonsomethingchangedinsidetheoldman.Theneighborhoodalwaysfoundtheoldmanhangingoutandsmilingateveryone.Heshowedhispreciouscollectionstochildrenactivelyandwarmly.Heusedtocollectfigurinesinmemoryofareallivedogwhichhadkeptcompanywithhimforalongtimebeforeitdied.Butnow,hewasn’tdrownedinthesorrowsandlonelinessany