高考英語情景作文分析省公開課一等獎全國示范課微課金獎?wù)n件

情景作文1/64英語書面表示判卷標準年、年評分標準均為：1.以關(guān)鍵點內(nèi)容定檔次。2.以語言質(zhì)量定分數(shù)。2/64給分檔次一檔文：（18-20分）二檔文：（15-17分）三檔文：（12-14分）四檔文：（6-11分）五檔文：（1-5分）六檔文：（0分）注：情景作文字數(shù)少于60,扣１分。情景作文3/64評卷給分細節(jié)要求1.閱卷中不要經(jīng)過找單詞去找關(guān)鍵點，一定要從上下文來找關(guān)鍵點。2.閱卷重點放在用完整、準確句子去表示思想上，滿篇沒有正確句子，一樣打0分。3.全部關(guān)鍵點齊全進三檔（12分以上），要確保關(guān)鍵點和細節(jié)相互支撐。4.少一個細節(jié)進三檔上線（14分），能夠視其語言情況+1或-1分（說明該學(xué)生最高可得15分，最低可得13分）。5.少兩個細節(jié)進三檔下線（12分），能夠視其語言情況+1或-1分（說明該學(xué)生最高可得13分，最低得11分）。6.行文中圖先后次序有誤或人稱錯誤直接進四檔（6-11分）。7.文章不能以投放垃圾作為結(jié)束，要加上一個合情合理結(jié)尾，不然要在所得分數(shù)中扣-1分。8.一檔或二檔文確實定要依文章上下文連貫、緊湊，以及語言質(zhì)量來決定。9.關(guān)鍵點和細節(jié)可出現(xiàn)在一句話中。10.寫落款、題目或稱呼都忽略不計，按照正常情況給分。情景作文4/64假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三一班學(xué)生李華，為?？⒄Z園地寫一篇題為“OurSpringOuting”英文稿件。請依據(jù)以下四幅圖先后次序，敘述上周你們班從準備春游到春游結(jié)束完整過程。注意：詞數(shù)不少于60。提醒詞：游樂園amusementpark垃圾箱bin情景作文5/64假設(shè)你是紅星中學(xué)高三一班學(xué)生李華，為?？⒄Z園地寫一篇題為“OurSpringOuting”英文稿件。請依據(jù)以下四幅圖先后次序，敘述上周你們班從準備春游到春游結(jié)束完整過程。注意：詞數(shù)不少于60。提醒詞：游樂園amusementpark垃圾箱bin6/64情景作文7/64內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵點及細節(jié)1.關(guān)鍵點：討論細節(jié)：

①去游樂園

②劃船

③爬山

④決定去爬山情景作文8/64關(guān)鍵點：討論

haveaheateddiscussionaboutwhether…

discusswhether…

thereisaheateddiscussionaboutwhether…

9/64細節(jié)：

①去游樂園

gotoamusementpark

②劃船

goboating

③爬山

gomountain-climbing

④決定去爬山

decideto(gomountain-climbing)10/64Lastweekwehad

aheateddiscussionaboutwhetherweshouldgoSpringOuting

TherewasaheateddiscussionaboutwhetherweshouldgoSpringouting.11/64Lastweek,ourclasshadaspringouting,whichthewholeclassthinkwasquitemeaningful.

12/64Lastweek,therewasaheated–discussiononwheretogoforourspringouting.Somestudentswantedtogotoamusementpark,someconsideredtogoboatingandothersgavetheirideasforclimbing.Eventually,wedecidedtotakeaclimb.

13/64Lastweekourclassorganizedaspringouting.Tomakethismemorableactivitymorewonderful,wediscussedthedestinationcarefullyandfinallydecidedtogomountain-climbinginsteadofotherchoiceslikeplayinginanamusementparkandgoingboating14/64內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵點及細節(jié)2.關(guān)鍵點：爬山

細節(jié)：①攜帶吃、喝

②天氣③風(fēng)景

④進行競賽---看誰先到山頂情景作文15/64關(guān)鍵點：爬山

gomountain-climbing

climbthemountain

gohiking

goclimbingthemountain16/64細節(jié)：

①攜帶吃、喝

withfoodanddrinkontheirback

②天氣

ashinyday

afineday

aniceday

asunnyday

thewarmsunshine

17/64③風(fēng)景

flowers

trees

abeautifulscenery

abeautifulview

abeautifulsight

18/64④進行競賽---看誰先到山頂

1.competewitheachotherinclimbingthemountainfor…

beincompetitionwitheachotherfor…

holdamountainclimbingcompetition

2.reachthetopofthemountain19/64內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵點及細節(jié)3.關(guān)鍵點：撿拾垃圾（可撿拾自己也可撿拾他人）細節(jié)：①一路走，一路撿，②要有對場面描寫情景作文20/643.關(guān)鍵點：撿拾垃圾（可撿拾自己也可撿拾他人）

pickuptherubbish

collecttherubbish

gathertherubbish

21/64細節(jié)：

①一路走，一路撿，

picktherubbishas/while…walk

②要有對場面描寫

1.Wastedbottlesandusedpackageswerethrowneverywhere

2.

wewereshockedtoseelitterhereandthere,suchasbottlesandbananaspeels.

22/64內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵點及細節(jié)4.關(guān)鍵點：投放垃圾細節(jié)： 垃圾分類：可回收 和不可回收情景作文23/644.

關(guān)鍵點：投放垃圾

1.puttherubbishintothebin

2.throwtherubbishintothedustbin

3.droptherubbishintothedustbin24/64細節(jié)：垃圾分類：可回收和不可回收

1.divide/classifythemintotwogroups：recycleonesandthe

non-recycleones.

2.puttherubbishintothenearbyrecyclingbinandnon-recyclingbinrespectively(=separately)

3.throwalltherubbishintotheproperbins.

4.puttherubbishintothebindifferently.

語言變通，思維活躍25/64Lastweek,thestudentsinmyclassdecidedtogooutforaspringouting.Someofuswantedtogototheamusementpark.Somewantedtogoboatingandsomewantedtoclimbthemountain.Finallywedecidedtoclimbthemountain.Iwasashinyday.Allofuswerehappy.Butwhenwereachedthetopofthemountain.Wefoundthatrubbisheverywhere!Wepickedtherubbishandthrewthemintothedustbin.Ithink,weshouldn’tthrewtherubbisheverywhereandweshoulddoourbesttoprotecttheenvironment.Themorewedo,themorebeautifultheearthwillbe!情景作文第二幅圖少關(guān)鍵點,第四圖少細節(jié),語言表述缺乏準確性和邏輯性，影響了對所寫內(nèi)容了解。9分②26/64LastweekourClass1Senior3inRedStarHighschoolhadanunusualspringouting.Thedaybeforeweleft,ourclassmateshadaheateddiscussionaboutthedestinationoftheouting.Somestudentssuggestedtheamusementpark,whileotherspreferredboatingandmountainclimbing.Whenitcametopractice,wewerehavingagoodtimeclimbingatlast.However,atthetopofthemountain,wewereangryratherthanshockedtofindoutthatloadsofrubbishwerediscoveredeverywhere.Meanwhile,itcametoourmindthatwehadtocleanthismessup.Thus,afterrecyclingtherubbishindifferentbins,wewereallverycheerfulthatwenotonlyreturnedthebeautybacktothemountain,butalsohadawonderfulspringouting.遺漏了第二幅圖這個關(guān)鍵點，只能進四檔，但其語言很好故+1分，總分為12。情景作文①27/64Lastweek,ourclasshadaspringouting,whichthewholeclassthinkwasquitemeaningful.Whengettingpreparedfortheactivity,wehadaheateddiscussionaboutwheretogo.Opinionsdividedamongthestudents.Somestudentssuggestedwegototheamusementparktogetrelaxed,whileothersrecommendedthatwegoboating.Finally,mostofthestudentsagreedtogohiking.Onasunnyday,myclassgatheredatthefootofthemountain,andeveryonelookedsoexited.Whilehikinginthemountain,weallhadahappysmile.Butwhenreachingthetopofthemountain,wearesosurprisedtofindthatlotsofrubbishwasleftthere.Thenwedecidedtocollectthemwiththebagswebought.Everyonesparednoefforttodoagoodjob.Atlast,whenwegotdownthemountain,wethrewalltherubbishintotheproperbins.Howmeaningfulwasourspringouting!情景作文覆蓋了全部內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵點，但有個別細節(jié)缺失，全文行文流暢，內(nèi)容連貫，有少許錯誤。14分⑤28/64

Lastweek,therewasaheated–discussiononwheretogoforourspringouting.Somestudentswantedtogotoamusementpark,someconsideredtogoboatingandothersgavetheirideasforclimbing.Eventually,wedecidedtotakeaclimb.Thenextday,allofuspreparedwell.Withourenjoyment,eachofusclimbedthemountainfullofenergy.However,whenwegottothetopofthemountain,whatcoveredoureyesfirstwasthemassofrubbish.Itwasreallyapitythattherubbishdestroyedabeautifulscenery.Atlast,wemadeupourmindtopickuptherubbish.Afterawhile,witheveryone’seffort,therubbishwasclearedoffimmediatelyandweputthemintotherecycledandunrecycledbins.Inmyeyes,thisspringoutingnotonlygaveuslotsofpleasure,butalsogaveusameaningfullesson.Onlytoprotectourenvironment,canwegetabeautifulsociety.Therefore,Ihopeeveryonecanjoinustomakeourhomecleanandtidy.情景作文覆蓋了全部內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵點，語法和用詞能夠滿足任務(wù)要求，篇章較為連貫，有少許語言錯誤。16分④29/64Lastweekourclassorganizedaspringouting.Tomakethismemorableactivitymorewonderful,wediscussedthedestinationcarefullyandfinallydecidedtogomountain-climbinginsteadofotherchoiceslikeplayinginanamusementparkandgoingboating.Withhighspirits,westartedourspringoutingonafineday.Flowerspresenteduswiththeirsweetestsmilesandweweresoakedupinthewarmsunshine.However,wewereshockedwhenwereachedthetopofthemountain.Wastedbottlesandusedpackageswerethrowneverywherewhichtotallyruinedthebeautyofthenature.Feelingagreatpityforthetourists,wepickeduptherubbishandcarefullydividedthemintotwogroups：recycleonesandthenon-recycleones.Afterthat,weputtherubbishintothebindifferently.Wecallonawarenessonprotectingourenvironmentwhichisofgreatimportance.Thoughclearinguptherubbishwasatoughtask,ourheartswerefilledwithjoyandwewillrememberthisoutingforever.內(nèi)容關(guān)鍵點齊全，描述語句豐富，上下文連貫，有效地使用了語句間鏈接成份，只有個別用詞錯誤，表達了較強語言利用能力。19分情景作文③30/64

Inthelastweek,teachertellus“wewillbegotospringamusement”wewereveryhappystudentsthinkswewillgotopark.Ithasmouter,hill,river,boatandsoon.Wewereaskedonnoon.Thelastiscomeon!Tomorrow,teacherandusgonetoamusementpark,wewereplayedveryhappyweweregonetherethatwewerewenttogoto!Monter.Hill,river,boat.Inthenoon,wewerehavefood,weallkindsoffood,Weareverylikethen.Intheafternoon.Wewillgooutcomebackwewereouthadfoodgotothebin.Wewereveryhappycomeback.0分情景作文⑥31/64Possibleversion

LastThursday,wehadaclassmeetingtodiscusswheretogoforourspringouting.Wecameupwithseveralchoices,suchasgoingboating,climbingamountain,andgoingtoanamusementpark.Finallywedecidedtogomountainclimbing.

Thenextday,wesetoffearlyinthemorning,whileclimbingthemountain,weenjoyedthewarmsunshineandabeautifulview.However,whenwereachedthetop,wewereshockedtoseelitterhereandthere,suchasbottlesandbananaspeels.Thenwestartedtopickupthelitter.Afterwards,weputtherubbishintothenearbyrecyclingbinandnon-recyclingbinrespectively.Weweretiredbuthappy.32/64情景作文出現(xiàn)主要問題1.審題不仔細，遺漏關(guān)鍵點。2.缺乏細節(jié)觀念，不能使文章銜接緊密。3.人稱和時態(tài)觀念差，文章直接降檔。4.語言基本功差，漏洞百出。5.缺乏交際觀念，極難出眾地完成寫作任務(wù)。情景作文33/64

總復(fù)習(xí)看圖類作文P210(1)34/64Picture1

關(guān)鍵點：

1.pay/makeavisittoChina

2.beonavisittoChina

3.haveatriptoChina

4.goonavisitto35/64細節(jié)(難)

gototheGreatWall

gotonthetaxi

talkwithme

alongwayfrom…

getthere

climbtheGreatWall,36/64Picture2

關(guān)鍵點：

lose

mypurse37/64細節(jié)：

lookforthepurse

wonderwhere….

beworried

leaveitonthetaxi

38/64Picture3

關(guān)鍵點:

telephonethetaxicompany39/64細節(jié)(難)

1.

receivethecall

2.checkmynameandeverythinginmypurse

3.leavethepurseonthetaxi

4.comfortme

(turnitin;senditto…)

40/64Picture4

關(guān)鍵點：感激

thankyoufor…

41/64細節(jié)：

Notatall.

bemoved

betouched

feelhappy42/64IhavejustpaidavisittoChina.WhenIgotthere,whatimpressedmemostwas

notonlythebeautifulscenerybutalsothehonestpeople.IwenttotheGreatWallonedaybytaxi.HardlyhadIgotonthetaxiwhenthedriverstartedtalkingwithmeinEnglish.ItwasalongwayfromthecityofBeijingandIttookmeaboutonehourtoarrivethere.IwassoamazedatseeingitthatIcouldn’thelpstartingtoclimbit,forgettingalmosteverything.IlostmyselfinsuchawonderfulWall.43/64Intheafternoon,IwasabouttogobacktomyhotelwhenIfoundthatmypursewaslost.Iwasworriedandlookedforithereandthere,butIcouldn’tfindit.SuddenlyIrememberedIhadleftitonthetaxi.44/64Withthehelpofawarm-heartedman,Iimmediatelytelephonedthetaxicompany.Theman/clerk/staff(whoreceivedthecall)checkedmynameandeverything.Hecomfortedme,sayingthatthedriverhadturneditinandthathewouldhaveitsenttomyhotelassoonaspossible.45/64WhenIgotbackmypurse,IwassotouchedthatIthankedtheclerkverymuch.IhavehadsuchawonderfultimetherethatIwillneverforgetmyexperienceinChina.

寫文章一定要有結(jié)尾46/6408西城抽樣4月一模47/64Picture1

關(guān)鍵點：

gather/meetattheschoolgateandsetoutbybile

48/64細節(jié)：

1.Withacamera,notebooksandbottlesofwaterinourbackpacks2.場面描寫

behappy49/64Picture2

關(guān)鍵點：

searchformistakes/mistranslatedorincorrectlyspeltEnglishonstreetsigns

50/64細節(jié):

1.tookpicturesof2.tooknotesofthesigns3.場面描寫

Abusy,butdelightfulmorning51/64Picture3

關(guān)鍵點：discussandcheck/correct

52/64細節(jié)(難)

1.writethewrongsentencesontheblackboard

(presentallthemistakesinclass)

2.compupwiththecorrecttranslation

3.WiththehelpofourEnglishteacher

4.puttheincorrectsentencesintothecorrectones

53/64Picture4

關(guān)鍵點:

telltheeditorsaboutwhatwehavefound(ourfindings).

54/64細節(jié):

1.writetothenewspaper2.hopeoureffortwillbeofsomehelptotheBeijingOlympics.(回到主題)注意：要有結(jié)尾

55/64DearPeter,

Howarethingsgoing?WehavebeenbusypreparingforthecomingOlympicsrecently.

LastSundaywehadanactivity-tosearchformistranslatedorincorrectlyspeltEnglishonstreetsigns.EarlyinthemorningmyclassmatesandIgatheredattheschoolgate.Withacamera,notebooksandbottlesofwaterinourbackpacks,wesoonsetoutonourdetectivetripbybike.Nosoonerhadwereachedourdestinationthanwebegantodevoteourselvestoworking.Inthestreet,someofustookpictureswhileotherstooknotesofthesignswethoughtwerewrongorquestionable.Abusy,butdelightfulmorningsoonpassed.

56/64IntheEnglishclassnextmorning,wepresentedinclassallthemistakescollectedincluding“WellcometoBeijing”and“TakeNoticeofSafe”.WiththehelpofourEnglishteacherwehadaheateddiscussionaboutwherethemistakeslieinandfinallywecametoaconclusionthatthecorrecttranslationshouldbelike“WelcometoBeijing”and“Caution!”,etc.Thenwewrotetothenewspaperandtoldtheeditorsaboutwhatwehadfound.WehopeoureffortwillbeofsomehelptotheBeijingOlympics.

WeweretiredbuthappybecausewenotonlyimprovedourEnglishlevelbutalsomadealittlecontributiontotheOlympics.

Yours

LiHua

57/64DearPeter,

Howarethingsgoing?WehavebeenbusypreparingforthecomingOlympicsrecently.

LastSundaywehadanactivity-tosearchformistranslatedorincorrectlyspeltEnglishonstreetsigns.EarlyinthemorningmyclassmatesandIgatheredattheschoolgate.Withacamera,notebooksandbottlesofwaterinourbackpacks,wesoonsetoutonourdetectivetripbybike.Inthestreet,someofustookpictureswhileotherstooknotesofthesignswethoughtwerewrongorquestionable.Abusy,butdelightfulmorningsoonpassed.

IntheEnglishclassnextmorning,wepresentedinclassallthemistakescollectedincluding“WellcometoBeijing”and“TakeNoticeofSafe”.WiththehelpofourEnglishteacherwediscussedandfinallycampupwiththecorrecttranslation-“WelcometoBeijing”and“Caution!”,etc.Thenwewrotetothenewspaperandtoldtheeditorsaboutourfindings.WehopeoureffortwillbeofsomehelptotheBeijingOlympics.

Yours

LiHua58/64

DearPeter,

Howarethingsgoing?WehavebeenbusypreparingforthecomingOlympicsrecently.

LastSundaywehadanactivity-tosearchformistranslatedorincorrectlyspeltEnglishonstreetsigns.Earlyinthemorningmyclassmatesand

Igatheredat

theschoolgate.Withacamera,notebooksandbottlesofwaterinourbackpacks,wesoonsetoutonourdetectivetripbybike.Nosoonerhadwereachedourdestinationthanwebegantodevoteourselvestoworking.

Inthestreet,someofustookpictureswhileotherstooknotesofthesignswe

thoughtwerewrongorquestionable.Abusy,butdelightfulmorningsoonpassed.

IntheEnglishclassnextmorning,wepresentedinclassallthemistakescollectedincluding“WellcometoBeijing”and“TakeNoticeofSafe”.WiththehelpofourEnglishteacherwehadaheateddiscussionaboutwherethemistakeslieinandfinallywecametoaconclusionthatthecorrecttranslationshouldbelike“WelcometoBeijing”and“Caution!”,etc.Thenwewrotetothenewspaperandtoldtheeditorsaboutwhatwehadfound.WehopeoureffortwillbeofsomehelptotheBeijingOlympics.

Yours

LiHua

59/64形成練習(xí)unit660/64

IwashavinganEnglishclasswhentheearthquakehappened.AsIwassittingnearthedoor,Iwasabletoescape.Injustasecond,allthehousesaroundfelldowntothegroundandthefive-storiedschoolbuildingwasinruins.Feelingsoalone,helplessandfrightened,Iwastotallyindespair.Therescuegrouparrived.TheymadeeveryefforttosavethestudentsburiedintheruinsandIdidmybesttoassistthem.Thefewdaysoftherescueworkenabledmetoquicklygrowup.Isawandexperiencedwhatwastheworst-oneofthebiggestearthquakesinhumanhistoryandwhatwasthemostdear—thelovebetweenourhumanpeople.Now,withthesupportandaidofthewholenation,wearerebuildingourhometown.Ibelievethattherebuiltnew