高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě) 熱考話題素材

高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)熱考話題素材目

錄Contents01熱考話題1挑戰(zhàn)自我02熱考話題2個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)03熱考話題3師生關(guān)系04熱考話題4同學(xué)關(guān)系05熱考話題5溫馨家庭06熱考話題6關(guān)愛(ài)鄰里07熱考話題7社會(huì)溫情08熱考話題8關(guān)愛(ài)動(dòng)物09熱考話題9遇險(xiǎn)救援熱考話題1挑戰(zhàn)自我

[2022新高考Ⅰ]Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromseven

differentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingthe

route(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid，whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothe

sidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsent

today.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitated

andthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong？Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent！

Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathad

happened.＂Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim，＂he

explaineduncomfortably.＂Igavehimthechoicetorunornot，andlethimdecide.＂

Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewas

doingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted，Iturnedto

findhimcomingtowardsme，hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghis

feetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhimfromwalkingorrunninglikeother

children，butatschoolhisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregularkid.Healways

participatedtothebestofhisabilityinwhatevertheyweredoing.Thatwaswhynoneof

thechildrenthoughtitunusualthatDavidhaddecidedtojointhecross-countryteam.It

justtookhimlonger—that’sall.Davidhadnotmissedasinglepractice，andalthough

healwaysfinishedhisrunlongaftertheotherchildren，hedidalwaysfinish.Asaspecial

educationteacherattheschool，IwasfamiliarwiththechallengesDavidfacedandwas

proudofhisstrongdetermination.Wesatdownnexttoeachother，butDavidwouldn’tlookatme.

?IwatchedasDavidmoveduptothestartinglinewiththeotherrunners.

?人物主要人物David：從文中的描述＂smallfortenyearsold＂

＂bigtoothy

smile＂

＂hadworkedsohardforthisevent＂

＂hadabraindisease＂

＂alwaysparticipatedtothebestofhisability＂和＂hadnotmissedasingle

practice＂可知，David身患?xì)埣驳e極樂(lè)觀、意志堅(jiān)強(qiáng)。

次要人物＂I＂：從文中的描述＂makingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhe

wanted＂和＂familiarwiththechallengesDavidfaced＂

＂proudofhisstrong

determination可以看出，＂我＂是一個(gè)關(guān)愛(ài)學(xué)生的老師，也暗示了續(xù)寫(xiě)部

分應(yīng)有＂我＂與David溝通并試圖勸說(shuō)他參加比賽以及David聽(tīng)從勸說(shuō)并以

堅(jiān)強(qiáng)的意志完成比賽的情節(jié)。原文最后一段中描述的＂hisclassmatesthoughtofhimasaregular

kid＂表明，同學(xué)們對(duì)David態(tài)度友好，這也為續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段David在賽場(chǎng)上

時(shí)同學(xué)們的表現(xiàn)埋下了伏筆。情節(jié)及情感線越野賽前得知David決定不參加比賽(David情緒低落，害怕被嘲笑)→

找教練獲悉原因，回想David雖患腦疾卻認(rèn)真積極訓(xùn)練(＂我＂為他感到自

豪)→續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段提示語(yǔ)，David走向起跑線(David重拾勇氣和信心)。主題根據(jù)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)＂結(jié)局圓滿＂的原則可知，David最終應(yīng)該完成了比

賽。再結(jié)合原文中David遇到的困難——行走不穩(wěn)、害怕被嘲笑等可知，

文章最終的主題應(yīng)該體現(xiàn)David直面挑戰(zhàn)、克服恐懼、戰(zhàn)勝自己。

續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段的提示語(yǔ)可知，本段主要描述David從不愿參加越野

跑，到走向起跑線參加比賽的轉(zhuǎn)變過(guò)程。涉及的人物是＂I＂和David，主

要故事情節(jié)：＂我＂開(kāi)導(dǎo)、鼓勵(lì)David以及他對(duì)＂我＂的勸說(shuō)的反應(yīng)，側(cè)

重人物對(duì)話、動(dòng)作、表情和心理描寫(xiě)。尾句銜接第二段提示語(yǔ)：David最

終決定參加越野跑。續(xù)寫(xiě)第

二段根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段提示語(yǔ)可知，本段的故事情節(jié)應(yīng)發(fā)生在越野賽跑線路

上，涉及的主要人物是David，也可以呼應(yīng)原文，加入＂我＂、教練和學(xué)

生們的反應(yīng)。主要故事情節(jié)：David在越野賽跑過(guò)程中的具體表現(xiàn)及比賽

結(jié)果，側(cè)重人物在比賽過(guò)程中以及受到大家鼓舞后的動(dòng)作、心理描寫(xiě)。最

終升華主題，David戰(zhàn)勝了內(nèi)心的恐懼。

1.Hewasinspiredanddecidedtohaveatry.①用形容詞作狀語(yǔ)改寫(xiě)句子，使行文更連貫。Inspired，hedecidedtohaveatry.②運(yùn)用連續(xù)動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)將David決定參賽這一過(guò)程細(xì)化。Inspired，hetookadeepbreathandgatheredhiscourage，

＂Iwillhaveatry.＂2.Theycheeredhimon.①將人群具體到個(gè)人或一些人，因?yàn)椋⑽遥⒂葹殛P(guān)注David，所以他一摔倒，＂我＂應(yīng)該是第一個(gè)作出反應(yīng)的人，緊接著是他的同學(xué)們。這樣使情節(jié)發(fā)展更加自然順暢。Istartedtoshoutencouragementandhisclassmatesallappearedandcheeredhimon.②用as引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句改寫(xiě)句①，并運(yùn)用現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)改寫(xiě)cheerhim

on，使句子語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)更豐富。AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，

cheeringhimon.③為句②同學(xué)們的加油鼓勵(lì)增加具體的話語(yǔ)，使內(nèi)容更富有畫(huà)面感。AsIstartedtoshoutencouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，cheeringhimon.

＂Comeon，David.Youcandoit！

＂theyshoutedenthusiastically.3.Davidfinishedtherun.①使用具體的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)表示David完成比賽，切合當(dāng)時(shí)比賽的氛圍和場(chǎng)景。Davidcrossedthefinishline.②為句①增加對(duì)David通過(guò)終點(diǎn)線時(shí)人們的歡呼聲和喝彩聲的描寫(xiě)，使情節(jié)自然，

更具有畫(huà)面感。Davidcrossedthefinishlinewithwildcheersandapplause.

We

sat

down

next

to

each

other，

but

David

wouldn’t

look

at

me.Hiseyes

deliberatelyavoidedmine，withhislimbsunavoidablyshaking.＂It’snottherealyou，

David，＂Ipattedhimgentlyontheback(輕輕地拍了拍他的后背)andsaidquietly.

＂Youhavepreparedsomuchforit.Lookatmyeyesandtellme.Doyouwanttorun？＂I

heldmybreath(屏住呼吸)asDavidlookedup.Inspired，hetookadeepbreathand

gatheredhiscourage(深吸一口氣，鼓起勇氣)，

＂Iwillhaveatry.＂

I

watched

as

David

moved

up

to

the

starting

line

with

the

other

runners.Thestarter’s

gunsounded！Davidsparednoefforttorunasifhehadforgottenallhisweaknesses，

buthestilltrippedwithinafewkilometers.Myheartsank.AsIstartedtoshout

encouragement，hisclassmatesallappeared，cheeringhimon.＂Comeon，David.

Youcandoit?。heyshoutedenthusiastically.Touched，hepickedhimselfupand

startedagain.Finally，hecrossedthefinishlinewithwildcheersandapplause.

Excitementswallowedhim(他激動(dòng)壞了)andheembracedmetightly.Atthattime，I

knewhehadalreadyovercomethedarknessstuckinhismind(戰(zhàn)勝了他腦海中的陰霾).熱考話題2個(gè)人成長(zhǎng)

[2021浙江改編]Mydad，George，onlyhadaneighthgradeeducation.Aquiet

man，hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities.Fromage14，heworked.And

hisdad，Albert，tookthemoneymydadearnedandusedittopayfamilyexpenses.

Ididn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither：Hewasalivestocktrucker，andI

thoughtthatIwouldsurpass(超過(guò))anythinghehadaccomplishedbythetimeIwalked

acrossthestageathighschoolgraduation.

Summersinthemid-70swerespentathomeshootingbaskets，hittingabaseball，

orthrowingafootball，preparingformyfutureasaquarterbackonafootballteam.In

poorweather，Ireadaboutsportsorpracticedmytrombone(長(zhǎng)號(hào)).

ThesummerbeforemyeighthgradeIwasoneofagroupofboysthataneighboring

farmerhiredtoworkinhisfield.Heexplainedourbasictask，thetractorfiredupandwe

wereoff，ridingdownthefieldlookingforweedstospraywithchemicals.Afterashort

way，thefarmerstoppedandpointedataweedwhichwemissed.Thenwebeganagain.

Thishappenedoverandover，butwesoonlearnedtoidentifydifferentgrasseslike

cockleburs，lamb’s-quarters，foxtails，andthekingofweeds，theprettypurple

thistle.Itwastiringwork，butIlookedforwardtothepay，eventhoughIwasn’tsure

howmuchitwouldamountto.

Athome，mydadsaid，

＂Ajob’sabigsteptogrowingup.I’mgladyouwillbe

contributingtothehousehold.＂Mydad’swordsmademerealizethatmyearningsmight

notbeminetodowithasIwished.

Mylaborslastedabouttwoweeks，andthefarmersaidtheremightbemorework，

butIwasn’tinterested.IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemymoney.

WhenIbroughtmypaycheckhome—itwas$119—mydadwantedtotalktome.

?

IwassurprisedthatmydadallowedmetousethemoneyasIwished.

?

人物主要人物George(mydad)：從文中的描述“Aquietman...Fromage

14，heworked.Andhisdad，Albert，tookthemoneymydadearnedand

usedittopayfamilyexpenses”和“I’mgladyouwillbecontributingtothe

household”可以看出，父親George是一個(gè)沉默寡言、能吃苦、有家庭責(zé)任

感的人，他認(rèn)為“我”的打工所得也應(yīng)該貼補(bǔ)家用。

主要人物＂I＂：從文中的描述＂Iwouldsurpass(超過(guò))anythinghehad

accomplished＂和＂IdecideditwasnotfairthatIhadtocontributemy

money＂可以看出，＂我＂志存高遠(yuǎn)、不理解父親，并不認(rèn)可父親將

＂我＂的打工所得＂征收＂的想法，這也是文章的沖突所在。根據(jù)文中的＂hedidn’tunderstandmyworldofschoolactivities＂和＂I

didn’treallyunderstandhisworldeither＂可知，父子二人相互缺乏了解，這

為下文的發(fā)展埋下了伏筆。情節(jié)及情感線

＂我＂與父親相互不理解(＂我＂想超越他)→＂我＂到隔壁農(nóng)場(chǎng)打工

掙錢(qián)(期待能擁有這筆錢(qián))→父親想用這筆錢(qián)貼補(bǔ)家用(＂我＂感到不公，對(duì)

繼續(xù)在農(nóng)場(chǎng)打工失去興趣)→續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段提示語(yǔ)，父親讓?zhuān)⑽遥⒆约褐?/p>

薪水(感到驚喜)。主題父親本來(lái)要讓?zhuān)⑽遥汛蚬さ氖杖胗脕?lái)貼補(bǔ)家用，最后卻改變了主

意，這應(yīng)該會(huì)給＂我＂帶來(lái)觸動(dòng)，因此，文章最終的主題應(yīng)該展現(xiàn)＂我＂

的成長(zhǎng)、對(duì)父親的理解以及對(duì)家庭責(zé)任的認(rèn)可。

續(xù)寫(xiě)第一

段根據(jù)原文及續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段的提示語(yǔ)可知，本段主要描述父親與＂我＂談話的內(nèi)容、過(guò)程以及＂我＂的反應(yīng)，可以從動(dòng)作、神態(tài)描寫(xiě)體現(xiàn)＂我＂不情愿和不甘的心理狀態(tài)，以及父親在與＂我＂談話過(guò)程中對(duì)＂我＂的理解。尾句銜接第二段的提示語(yǔ)：父親讓?zhuān)⑽遥⒘翦X(qián)自用。續(xù)寫(xiě)第二

段結(jié)合原文和本段的提示語(yǔ)可知，本段應(yīng)該描寫(xiě)＂我＂聽(tīng)到父親的決定后驚訝、興奮的心理狀態(tài)；與此同時(shí)，在續(xù)寫(xiě)本段時(shí)還應(yīng)呼應(yīng)原文中的描述并凸顯主題，將＂我＂的反思和成長(zhǎng)感悟展現(xiàn)出來(lái)。

1.Iwantedtoarguewithmydad.①用具體的動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)代替want，體現(xiàn)＂我＂想留著錢(qián)的決心。Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad.②為句①增加條件狀語(yǔ)從句，使文章邏輯更嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)，前后銜接更連貫。Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmydad，

ifheannouncedthemoneywasn’t

mine.③為句②增加具體神態(tài)描寫(xiě)，凸顯＂我＂想留著錢(qián)的渴望。Withmyeyesgluedtothepaycheck，Isearchedmymindforwordstoarguewithmy

dad，ifheannouncedthemoneywasn’tmine.2.Iwasunwillingtohandinthemoney.用具體手部動(dòng)作和心理活動(dòng)描寫(xiě)改寫(xiě)優(yōu)化句子，體現(xiàn)＂我＂的不情愿。Igrippedthepaycheckmorefirmly，readytoargue.3.Ifeltashamed.①用面部表情代替feelashamed，

使表達(dá)更生動(dòng)。Iflushedwithshame.②為句①增加原因狀語(yǔ)，并運(yùn)用現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)，使感情轉(zhuǎn)變更加順暢自然。Recallingmyambitionofsurpassinghim，Iflushedwithshame.

When

I

brought

my

paycheck

home

—

it

was

$119—

my

dad

wanted

to

talk

to

me.He

toldmetowaitinthelivingroomforawhile.Isatonthesofa，

withmyeyesgluedto

thepaycheck(眼睛盯著薪水)，

searchingmymindfor(腦海里搜索著)wordstoargue

withmydadifheannouncedthemoneywasn’tmine.Justthen，thedooropenedandin

camemydad.Themomenthesatdownbesideme，Igrippedthepaycheckmorefirmly(更加牢牢地握住薪水)，readytoargue.However，hegentlyplacedhisrighthandonmyshoulder(輕輕地把他的右手放在我的肩上)andsaid，

＂Iknowyouhavegrownupalotthroughyourwork...＂Thentherewasalongpause.Hewithdrewhishand(收回他的手)andslowlycontinued，

＂Youdeservethemoneyandthemoneyisyoursnow.＂

I

was

surprised

that

my

dad

allowed

me

to

use

the

money

as

I

wished.Inamoment，

Ididn’tknowwhattosay.Withthismoney，Icouldbuyanewfootball，oranewbike.

Ilookedatmydadwithgratitude，andhesmiledawkwardly，

＂Useitwisely，son.＂

Recallingmyambitionofsurpassinghim，Iflushedwithshame(羞紅了臉).Although

lifehadn’tbeenfairtohim，hehadtriedhisbesttomakeitfairtome.Meanwhile，I

alsorealizedtherewasaburdenthatIshouldshoulderinmyfamily.熱考話題3師生關(guān)系

[2023新高考Ⅰ]WhenIwasinmiddleschool，mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmeto

enterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.Myfamilycame

fromBrazil，soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.Writingwassodifficultand

painfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingofthe

Titanicbyactingoutaplay，whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhe

did.So，whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail？His

reply：

＂BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself，Ithinkyou

haveagoodshotatthis.＂Encouragedbyhiswords，Iagreedtogiveitatry.IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith(銀匠)in

BostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18，1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethat

Britishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Nota

brilliantidea，butfunny；andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.Whatdidthehorsethink，ashespedthroughthenight？Didhegettired？Have

doubts？Didhewanttoquit？Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.I

wantedtoquit.But，likeRevere’shorse，Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmy

spelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.Icheckedoutahalf-dozenbooks

onPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher，hereadit，laughedoutloud，and

said，

＂Great.Now，writeitagain.＂Iwroteitagain，andagainandagain.WhenI

finallyfinishedit，thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin，Iwouldn’tcare.Afewweekslater，whenIalmostforgotthecontest，therecamethenews.

?

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.

?

人物主要人物＂I＂：從文中描述的＂saidnowithoutthinking＂

＂difficult

andpainfulforme＂

＂Iagreedtogiveitatry＂

＂wantedtoquit...Ikept

going...checkedmyspelling...correctmygrammar...readafewofthem＂

＂wroteitagain，andagainandagain＂可以看出，＂我＂起初缺乏自信，但隨后變得努力勤奮、信念堅(jiān)定。

次要人物mysocialstudiesteacher：

從文中描述的＂Noonelaughed

harderthanhedid＂

＂Iloveyourstories...youhaveagoodshotatthis＂

＂laughedoutloud，andsaid，‘Great.Now，writeitagain.’＂可知，

＂我＂的社會(huì)科學(xué)老師樂(lè)觀開(kāi)朗，關(guān)心、理解、支持、鼓勵(lì)學(xué)生。為續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段＂我＂來(lái)到老師辦公室表達(dá)對(duì)老師的感激之情奠定了基礎(chǔ)。情節(jié)及情感線社會(huì)科學(xué)老師要＂我＂參加寫(xiě)作比賽(＂我＂很抗拒，直接拒絕)→他

鼓勵(lì)＂我＂參加比賽(＂我＂受到鼓舞，決定試試)→＂我＂選定主題開(kāi)始

寫(xiě)作(糾結(jié)、自我懷疑，但還是繼續(xù)堅(jiān)持)→＂我＂一遍遍修改、潤(rùn)色文章

(已經(jīng)不在意能否得獎(jiǎng))主題通過(guò)＂我＂前后對(duì)待寫(xiě)作的態(tài)度的強(qiáng)烈反差，體現(xiàn)了要持之以恒地努

力，克服困難并從中獲得樂(lè)趣和成長(zhǎng)的主題；同時(shí)根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段提示語(yǔ)

可知，本文也體現(xiàn)了良師益友這一主題，贊美了老師對(duì)學(xué)生潤(rùn)物細(xì)無(wú)聲的

引導(dǎo)和鼓勵(lì)。

續(xù)寫(xiě)第一

段銜接本段首句的thenews，接下來(lái)應(yīng)該是得到獲獎(jiǎng)的消息、聽(tīng)到消息

后＂我＂的反應(yīng)；銜接第二段首句，本段還應(yīng)該講到頒獎(jiǎng)典禮上發(fā)生的事

情，尾句落腳點(diǎn)在回想老師對(duì)自己的幫助，與第二段首句完美連貫起來(lái)。

本段重點(diǎn)描寫(xiě)消息引發(fā)的一系列心理活動(dòng)和動(dòng)作。續(xù)寫(xiě)第二

段銜接本段首句，接下來(lái)應(yīng)該是老師得知＂我＂獲獎(jiǎng)后的反應(yīng)、＂我＂

對(duì)老師的回應(yīng)；尾句升華主題：個(gè)人感悟，這件事對(duì)＂我＂的深遠(yuǎn)影響。

本段重點(diǎn)描寫(xiě)＂我＂到辦公室后師生間的互動(dòng)，可通過(guò)對(duì)話、動(dòng)作、心理

描寫(xiě)等刻畫(huà)細(xì)節(jié)。

1.Ifeltexcited.①用短語(yǔ)beoverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbelief替換feelexcited，體現(xiàn)用詞的豐

富性。Iwasoverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbelief.②用so...that結(jié)構(gòu)改寫(xiě)句①，引出＂我＂聽(tīng)到消息后激動(dòng)的身體表現(xiàn)。Iwassooverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbeliefthatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.③用倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)改寫(xiě)句②，更加凸顯＂我＂得知獲獎(jiǎng)時(shí)的激動(dòng)心情。SooverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbeliefwasIthatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.2.IfeltexcitedandproudwhenIacceptedtheprize.①用現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)改寫(xiě)句子并增加副詞修飾，豐富句式結(jié)構(gòu)。Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud，Iacceptedtheprize.②為句①增加＂我＂的獲獎(jiǎng)感悟，照應(yīng)前文＂我＂寫(xiě)作時(shí)的堅(jiān)持和努力，使前后文

銜接更緊密。Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud，Iacceptedtheprize，asymbolandrecognitionof

mypastperseveranceandhardwork.3.Hecongratulatedme，andIexpressedmythankstohim.①用對(duì)話形式展現(xiàn)＂我＂與老師的互動(dòng)，使故事情節(jié)發(fā)展更加自然、順暢。＂Congratulations！Iknewyouwouldwin，＂hesaid.＂Thankyouforyour

encouragement.＂②為句①中老師對(duì)＂我＂的獲獎(jiǎng)感到開(kāi)心增加肢體動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)；并用虛擬語(yǔ)氣表達(dá)

＂我＂對(duì)老師的感激之情。＂Congratulations！Iknewyouwouldwin，＂hesaid，

huggingmetightly.＂Thank

you.Iwouldn’tbewhatIamtodaywithoutyourencouragement.＂③為句②中＂我＂對(duì)老師的感激之情增加心理細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)，使我對(duì)老師的感激躍然紙

上，更具有畫(huà)面感。＂Congratulations！Iknewyouwouldwin，＂hesaid，huggingmetightly.＂Thank

you.Iwouldn’tbewhatIamtodaywithoutyourencouragement.＂

Asenseofgratitude

welledupfromthebottomofmyheart.

A

few

weeks

later，

when

I

almost

forgot

the

contest，

there

came

the

news.Iwon

firstplace！

Sooverwhelmedwithexcitementanddisbelief(如此興奮和難以置信)wasI

thatmyheartwaspoundingquickly.Finallycamethebigday！Whenmynamewas

announced，Iwalkedontothestageagainstwildcheersandthunderousapplause(在熱烈

的歡呼聲和雷鳴般的掌聲中).Feelingextremelyexcitedandproud，Iacceptedthe

prize，asymbolandrecognitionofmypastperseveranceandhardwork.Thinkingabout

this，Ishedtearsofgratitude(流下感激的淚水)，astherewasonespecialpersonwho

meantalottome.I

went

to

my

teacher’s

office

after

the

award

presentation.＂Congratulations！I

knewyouwouldwin，＂hesaid，huggingmetightly.＂Thankyou.Iwouldn’tbewhat

Iamtodaywithoutyourencouragement.＂

Asenseofgratitudewelledupfromthebottom

ofmyheart(感激之情從我的心底涌出).Pattingmyshoulder，hesmiled，

＂Itisyour

effortsthatcountmost.＂Fromthenon，IbegantoburymyselfinEnglishwriting.With

myteacher’sinspiration，Ideterminedtokeeponchallengingmyselfandembracea

betterme.熱考話題4同學(xué)關(guān)系

[2022浙江1月改編]WhenDr.Hendersonwasassigning(指定)projectmatesforhis

psychologyclass，Isecretlyhopedthathewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleasta

classmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.Aboveall，Ihopedhewouldn’tassignmetowork

withthefiercelycompetitiveandextremelyseriousfellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothes

andapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.Asfate(命運(yùn))wouldhaveit，Dr.Henderson

verydeliberatelymatchedeveryoneinclassandannouncedthatIwouldbeworkingwith

theonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.

Iwentuptomynewteammateandintroducedmyself.HelookedatmeasthoughI

weren’tthere.IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablymakehim

failtogetanAinthecourse.Hewasn’tmeanorabusive；hejustgavemetheimpression

thathecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhediditalone.Needlesstosay，Ididn’tlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedoff，butI

triedtomakethebestofitanddidn’tsayanythingforfearthatIwouldmakethingsworse.Theprojectrequiredeachteamtodevelopahypothesis(假說(shuō))，setupanexperiment

totestthehypothesis，dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.Whatevergrade

theteamreceivedwouldbesharedbybothstudents.WhenmyteammateandImettodiscussourproject，Iwasuneasy.Herewasthis

challengingstudentwhohadareputationforsingle-mindednessandgoodgrades—the

exactoppositeofme.Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatonepoint，butstoppedshort

becauseIdidn’twanttogivehimthesatisfactionofmychickeningout.Idecidedtostick

toitnomatterwhat.Afterlongdiscussionswesomehowagreedtodoastudyonthepsychologicalwell-

beingofteenagers.Iwasn’tsurewhatitmeantexactly，butatleastwehadatopic.Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.

?

OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtothehospitalforaseriousdisease.

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人物主要人物myteammate：文中描述的＂fiercelycompetitiveand

extremelyserious＂

＂dowhateverproject...betterifhediditalone＂和＂had

areputationforsingle-mindednessandgoodgrades＂表明，myteammate成

績(jī)優(yōu)異、性情高傲、學(xué)習(xí)專(zhuān)注、好勝心強(qiáng)，且＂我＂和＂我＂的隊(duì)友關(guān)系

冷淡，似乎互相看不上對(duì)方。

主要人物＂I＂：從文中描述的＂makethebestofitanddidn’tsay

anything＂

＂single-mindednessandgoodgrades—theexactoppositeof

me＂和＂decidedtosticktoitnomatterwhat＂可以看出，＂我＂學(xué)習(xí)成績(jī)

一般、性情隨和、努力且不輕言放棄。兩個(gè)主要人物幾乎相反的性格為續(xù)寫(xiě)部分兩人合作中的摩擦埋下了伏

筆，第五段尾句＂Idecidedtosticktoitnomatterwhat＂也為續(xù)寫(xiě)部分

＂我＂在項(xiàng)目中起到積極作用奠定了基礎(chǔ)。情節(jié)及情感線

＂我＂被安排與一位自己原本想避開(kāi)的同學(xué)合作(感到自己很不

幸)→＂我＂主動(dòng)向隊(duì)友介紹自己，卻被冷漠對(duì)待(感覺(jué)自己被忽視，同時(shí)

很擔(dān)心倆人的合作)→＂我＂與隊(duì)友會(huì)面討論項(xiàng)目(面對(duì)優(yōu)秀的隊(duì)友，

＂我＂自慚形穢，想放棄但又不甘心，于是決定堅(jiān)持)→最終確定了課題(感到一絲寬慰)主題根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段提示語(yǔ)可知，＂我＂和隊(duì)友開(kāi)始逐漸進(jìn)入狀態(tài)，但隊(duì)友

卻因病住院，結(jié)合讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)＂結(jié)局圓滿＂的原則可以推測(cè)，＂我＂和隊(duì)友

在合作上應(yīng)該是從消極配合到積極參與，最終研究項(xiàng)目一定會(huì)成功。文章

最終是要體現(xiàn)戰(zhàn)勝困難、精誠(chéng)合作、隊(duì)友情深的主題。

續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段根據(jù)原文中講到的人物性格特征和續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段的提示語(yǔ)可知，本段主

要講＂我＂和隊(duì)友定期碰面推進(jìn)項(xiàng)目、相互磨合的情景，主要通過(guò)敘述和

心理描寫(xiě)展現(xiàn)搭檔在推進(jìn)項(xiàng)目中的表現(xiàn)、＂我＂對(duì)此的反應(yīng)、倆人關(guān)系的

發(fā)展情況。續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段提示語(yǔ)以及續(xù)寫(xiě)＂故事曲折，結(jié)局圓滿＂的原則可

知，本段應(yīng)該主要講述在得知隊(duì)友生病后，＂我＂的反應(yīng)、＂我＂對(duì)待項(xiàng)

目的態(tài)度、為了最終完成項(xiàng)目＂我＂做了哪些努力等。尾句可以升華主

題：＂我們＂意識(shí)到了團(tuán)隊(duì)合作的重要性。

1.Hetookchargeoftheproject.①增加副詞，凸顯隊(duì)友的專(zhuān)權(quán)。Hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally.②為句①補(bǔ)充as引導(dǎo)的原因狀語(yǔ)從句，講述隊(duì)友專(zhuān)權(quán)的原因。Ashewasafiercelycompetitivefellow，hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally.③為句②補(bǔ)充結(jié)果，并運(yùn)用現(xiàn)在分詞短語(yǔ)作狀語(yǔ)，講述隊(duì)友專(zhuān)權(quán)對(duì)＂我＂的影響，

體現(xiàn)初期合作的不順暢。Ashewasafiercelycompetitivefellow，hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally，

leaving

medoingnothingbutsimplyfollowinghisstepsandinstructions.2.Iwenttothehospital.①增加副詞，并用hurry替換句中的go，體現(xiàn)＂我＂想去探望隊(duì)友的急切心情。Immediately，Ihurriedtothehospital.②為句①增加定語(yǔ)從句，講述＂我＂在醫(yī)院了解到的情況，使故事性更強(qiáng)，情節(jié)更

完整。Immediately，Ihurriedtothehospital，

whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalized

forquiteawhile.3.Itriedhardtodotheproject.①用putallmyheartinto替換tryhard，體現(xiàn)用詞的豐富性。Iputallmyheartintodoingtheproject.②用原文中的表達(dá)細(xì)化句①中做項(xiàng)目的過(guò)程，使情節(jié)發(fā)展更加自然完整。Iputallmyheartintodoingtheanalysisandpresentingourfindings.③用with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)優(yōu)化句②，并用副詞體現(xiàn)＂我＂分析和呈現(xiàn)結(jié)果的狀態(tài)，凸顯

＂我＂的努力和認(rèn)真。Withallmyheartputintotheproject，Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresentedour

findingsreasonably.

We

started

to

meet

regularly

to

draw

up

our

plans.Ashewasafiercelycompetitive

fellow，hetookchargeoftheprojecttotally，leavingmedoingnothingbutsimply

followinghisstepsandinstructions.Thoughunwilling(盡管不情愿)，Ididmypartbut

diditinablindway.Astheprojectprogressed，Iseemedtogetthetrick，whichbuilt

upmyconfidence(增強(qiáng)了我的信心)andmademyteammateslightlyrelieved.Atthis

point，westartedtoreallyworkasateam.

One

day

I

got

word

that

he

was

admitted

to

the

hospital

for

a

serious

disease.

Immediately，Ihurriedtothehospital，whereIlearnedthathehadtobehospitalized

forquiteawhile.Seeingtheworryandweaknesswrittenonhisface(看著他臉上的憂慮

和虛弱)，IassuredhimthatIwouldcarryonwithourproject.Withallmyheartputinto

theproject(我全身心投入到這個(gè)項(xiàng)目中)，Ididtheanalysisaccuratelyandpresented

ourfindingsreasonably.Eventually，ourhardworkpaidoffandDr.Hendersonwasvery

satisfiedwithourwonderfulfindings.Fromthisproject，webothlearnedthatoneperson

cangofar，butagroupofpeoplecantravelfarther(一個(gè)人可以走很遠(yuǎn)，但一群人可以

走得更遠(yuǎn)).熱考話題5溫馨家庭

[2021新高考Ⅰ]

A

MOTHER’S

DAY

SURPRISE

Thetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywere

planningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybrought

herbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhad

watchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactly

whattodo.

Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairs

quietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.Theyputsomericeintoapot

ofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoa

plateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next，Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime，sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.

ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenext

minute，theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully，Jeff

stayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJeff

tocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shand

touchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincold

water.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear！Thepieceofbreadinthepanhad

turnedblackaswell.

Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment，theirfatherappeared.

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Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

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人物主要人物：thetwins(JennaandJeff)；次要人物：theirmotherand

father。根據(jù)原文中的描述＂theythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanning

forMother’sDay＂和＂theybroughtherbreakfastinbed＂可以看出，雙胞

胎孝順、懂得感恩。場(chǎng)景故事發(fā)生在母親節(jié)當(dāng)天早上，雙胞胎為母親做早餐，故原文故事情節(jié)

的地點(diǎn)在家里的廚房。情節(jié)及情感線雙胞胎籌劃在母親節(jié)那天給母親做早餐、制造驚喜(感到很興奮)→準(zhǔn)

備早餐時(shí)，剛開(kāi)始一切進(jìn)展順利(感到很自信)→面包糊了，粥溢出來(lái)了，

Jeff燙傷了(驚慌失措)→續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段提示語(yǔ)，雙胞胎慌亂失望時(shí)，父親出

現(xiàn)了(擔(dān)心父親責(zé)備)→續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段提示語(yǔ)，早餐做好，給母親驚喜(滿懷期

待和興奮)主題雙胞胎要在母親節(jié)早上為母親做一頓早餐，＂thesurprise＂體現(xiàn)了他

們的意圖，＂HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbe＂是他們希望看到的

結(jié)果。再根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)提示語(yǔ)可知，雙胞胎在父親的幫助下完成了驚喜早餐，

因此文章最終應(yīng)展現(xiàn)子女感恩父母，父母為子女感到驕傲和自豪，一家人

其樂(lè)融融的溫馨畫(huà)面。

續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段本段主要描述＂救星＂父親出場(chǎng)后的場(chǎng)景。根據(jù)首句提示語(yǔ)可知，接

下來(lái)應(yīng)該描述：父親看到雜亂的廚房會(huì)有什么反應(yīng)，會(huì)說(shuō)什么或做什么。

尾句銜接續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段提示語(yǔ)：在父親的幫助下，雙胞胎做好了早餐。因此

中間應(yīng)描寫(xiě)父親了解原因、幫助雙胞胎整理廚房和準(zhǔn)備早餐等，側(cè)重人物

間的互動(dòng)，強(qiáng)調(diào)動(dòng)作、心理、表情描寫(xiě)。續(xù)寫(xiě)