三調(diào)下水作文指導(dǎo)講義-高考英語作文復(fù)習(xí)專項(xiàng)

高三三調(diào)下水作文指導(dǎo)寫作（共兩節(jié)，滿分40分）第一節(jié)（滿分15分）假定你是校陶藝社團(tuán)(thePotteryClub)的負(fù)責(zé)人李華，社團(tuán)即將舉辦第五屆陶藝作品展，請(qǐng)你就此在校英文報(bào)網(wǎng)站上寫一則短文進(jìn)行推介。內(nèi)容包括：1.時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)；2.展覽內(nèi)容；3.號(hào)召參觀。審題：這是一篇英文版陶藝作品展推介，我們的學(xué)生好像沒有見過這種類型的寫作。其實(shí)，稍加分析就知道，它相當(dāng)于出一個(gè)英文書面通知。盡管原文中出現(xiàn)了李華，并說明了他的身份是校陶藝社團(tuán)的負(fù)責(zé)人，但其實(shí)具體寫作時(shí)是無需寫出的，最多是在英文網(wǎng)站開頭和結(jié)尾加上：Boysandgirls,...ThePotteryClub.關(guān)于內(nèi)容提示中的第二點(diǎn)，我們要寫展覽的內(nèi)容應(yīng)該是考生感覺最困難的地方，這是因?yàn)榇蠹覍?duì)陶藝作品的創(chuàng)造不一定了解甚多，要具體化描述顯得不太好進(jìn)行，故可以簡(jiǎn)單提及這些作品的特點(diǎn)：學(xué)生自己手工制作，有著獨(dú)特的魅力和創(chuàng)意。多米下水作文：Boysandgirls,Inagesturetoenrichthestudents’extracurricularactivitiesandhelpdeveloptheirhandsonabilitiesandinnovationawareness,thePotteryClubinourschoolplanstoholdapotteryartworksexhibition.Itisthefifthtimethatourclubhaslaunchedsuchacampaign.Itistotakeplaceintheschoolexhibitionhallnextweek,lastingfrom5.to6:30everyafternoon.Theexhibitsareallhandmadebythestudentsthemselves.Youwillbeamazedbytheircreativityandimagination.Youareexpectedtobepresentandcheerforthem.第二節(jié)(滿分25分)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Howpleasantthatdaywas!Thetemperaturewasfairlylow,theskywasprettyclearandthewindwasverygentle.Naturally,runningwasreallygood.Iwasrunningthefirstlegofa20mileracethroughsomehills.Birdswerewarbling(囀鳴)inthetrees.Thegentlewindwasstrokingmyface.Ifeltateaseandfullofenergy.Inspiteofthefactthattheracewasoccurringinthehills,Ithoughtitwaswonderful.InfrontofmewasJohn,astudentfromGreenHighSchool.Hewasrunningwitheaseandatfortablespeed.Therefore,Idecidedtostaywherehewas.Ididn'tthinkitnecessarytoconcentrateonsettingmyownpace,sinceJohnwassuchanicepacesetter.Iwouldrunbeforehim,immediatelyheconsumedallofhisenergy.IranafterJohnclosely.Thecourseextendednorthfor7miles,wanderedwestfor2miles,andturnedsouthagain.Theracewasgettingincreasinglychallenging.When4milesremainedtobecovered,Iwasallbutwornout.Mylungswereburningandlegsseemedbroken.Johnovertooktheboyaheadofhim.Obviously,theywerefamiliarwitheachother,becausetheyexchangedsomewords.Theirbriefexchangemademeworried.Runnersdon'tchatduringaraceunlesstheyfeelreallygoodandJohnwasrunningenergetically.Hisstepswerebouncywhilemyspringiness(輕快)wasgone.Still,IwasdesiringtogoaheadofJohn.Aslongashewastotallytired,Iwouldmakeit.Wewereapproachingahill,amilefromthefinishline.Whateverhappenedonthehilllwouldsurelydeterminewhowouldcrossitfirst.WhenIranupthehill,myattentionwaswanderingforseveralminutes.WhenIlookedup.Johnwasrunningaway,leavingmefarbehind.ItwashopelesstoovertakeJohn.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Suddenly,Johnsloweddownandsatontothegroundwithasharppain.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Areporterphotographedthistouchingsceneandposteditonline._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________審題：原文概況：在“我”進(jìn)行越野跑比賽臨近終點(diǎn)時(shí)，遇到了一個(gè)強(qiáng)勁“對(duì)手”John。正感奪冠無望時(shí)，跑著前面的“對(duì)手”John卻意外受傷，疼痛倒地。面對(duì)此情此景，“我”會(huì)這么辦？情節(jié)設(shè)計(jì)：“我”發(fā)揚(yáng)體育競(jìng)技的精神:友誼第一、比賽第二，在比賽中，當(dāng)競(jìng)爭(zhēng)對(duì)手受傷時(shí)，“我”迅速伸出援手，幫助有著不服輸?shù)木竦腏ohn繼續(xù)前行。這種互相幫助、共同克服困難的精神令人感動(dòng)，也讓人感受到了越野跑比賽的真正意義：促進(jìn)身心健康、培養(yǎng)合作精神、增強(qiáng)凝聚力等等。所以，在第二段續(xù)寫中如能寫“我們”受到群眾好評(píng)，得到評(píng)委認(rèn)可，自己的獲得感也很強(qiáng)，應(yīng)該是這次比賽的最大收獲。我的構(gòu)思：續(xù)寫第一段：“我”快速跑過去佯作關(guān)心，后來利用“對(duì)手”受傷的機(jī)會(huì)實(shí)現(xiàn)反超的邪念被體育精神壓下，真真切切地給與對(duì)方以幫助，攙扶隊(duì)友“跑”完全程。續(xù)寫第二段：記者直播短視屏傳上網(wǎng)絡(luò)后，在觀眾中激起了強(qiáng)烈反響，好評(píng)如潮，我和受傷隊(duì)友最后一起到達(dá)終點(diǎn)線時(shí)，觀眾和評(píng)委自然也深受感動(dòng)。最后自己和“對(duì)手”雙雙獲獎(jiǎng)，只不過是精神文明獎(jiǎng)。獲獎(jiǎng)后“我”和“對(duì)手”的反應(yīng)應(yīng)該是感動(dòng)和喜悅。幾點(diǎn)提醒：1.內(nèi)容創(chuàng)作應(yīng)盡可能考慮情節(jié)線(盡量接近真實(shí)生活場(chǎng)景）由于是室外越野（20英里），沿途應(yīng)設(shè)有應(yīng)急站.但在快接近終點(diǎn)的地方有否救護(hù)人員在場(chǎng)？是否用呼叫醫(yī)療救援？是否可以幫對(duì)手包扎傷口或按摩消除疼痛？參與比賽的“我們”會(huì)不會(huì)因?yàn)檫@個(gè)意外退出比賽？如果背著“隊(duì)友”跑到終點(diǎn)算不算違規(guī)？是否“我們”雙雙成為了冠軍？如果“我們”沒有獲得名次，我們有沒有獲得比獎(jiǎng)牌更重要的東西？這個(gè)東西是什么?2.內(nèi)容創(chuàng)作盡可能考慮照應(yīng)原文中的情感線作者“我”從開始越野跑開始時(shí)的心情愉快、精力充沛、步履輕松到后來的精疲力盡、氣喘噓噓、步伐沉重；從John輕松超越別的對(duì)手時(shí)“我”自感焦慮到后面“我”仍然不想放棄爭(zhēng)奪冠軍，可以看出原文中的“我”是一個(gè)很看重榮譽(yù)感的人。了解到這一人物的特點(diǎn)后，在續(xù)寫中就可以寫出自己可能因?yàn)椤皩?duì)手”受傷心中冒出的邪念，那就是利用這個(gè)機(jī)會(huì)反超。但故事這樣發(fā)展，明顯是不好的，因?yàn)樽髡叩淖銎娇隙ㄊ窍胪ㄟ^本故事的講述來教會(huì)我們?nèi)绾螢槿颂幨?。考生如注意到這種糾結(jié)的情感，就可以在后來的續(xù)寫中寫出“我”偉大的舉動(dòng)、對(duì)手對(duì)“我”的敬意。觀眾的反應(yīng)也是不可忽視的一面。3.注意刻畫人物的心理動(dòng)作、對(duì)話描寫和動(dòng)作4.注意續(xù)寫的段首句提示作用，并注意前后銜接自然5.注意語言文字和邏輯的前后一致原文情節(jié)生動(dòng)，故續(xù)寫的文章也應(yīng)有料有貌有趣才行。下水作文：SuddenlyJohnsloweddownandsatontothegroundwithasharppain.Heseemedtohavegothisanklesprained.Suddenlyanevilthoughtpoppedoutmakeuseofthechancetoovertakehim.Strange,Ifoundmyspringypacereturned.Inaminute,IapproachedJohn,whowasstillmoaning.“Needanyhelp?”Iaskedcarelessly.“Thanks,butIguessIcanmanagemyself.”herepliedwithabittersmile.Hetriedtostandupbutagaincollapsedheavily.“Ican’tbetooselfishtoleavehimhere.”Imurmured.Ipulledhimupandrestedhisarmonmyshoulder,cripplingtothefinishline.(102)Areporterphotographedthistouchingsceneandposteditonline.Itwentviral.Viewersgavethelivestreamingshortvideotensofthousandsofthumbsup.Theminutewecrossedtheline,wereceivedthunderousapplausefromthejudgesandaudience,someofwhomhaddrivenoveralongdistancejusttoseeus.BeforeJohnwashurriedtotheambulancewaitingthere,thechiefjudgeannouncedthatwewonthespecialaward:FriendshipAward.Withjoyoustearsintheeyes,Johnhuggedmeandthankedmeagainandagain.IknewIhadmadearightchoice.(86)續(xù)寫亮點(diǎn)：SuddenlyJohnsloweddownandsatontothegroundwithasharppain.運(yùn)用了and連接并列謂語動(dòng)詞。Heseemedtohavegothisa