如何根據(jù)材料續(xù)寫(xiě)故事課件高一上學(xué)期讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)入門(mén)

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)確定續(xù)寫(xiě)框架，構(gòu)思續(xù)寫(xiě)情節(jié)細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)一、動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)

人物動(dòng)作是人物內(nèi)心的外在表現(xiàn)。在讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)中，人物動(dòng)作可以展現(xiàn)人物的內(nèi)心活動(dòng)，表現(xiàn)人物的性格特征，塑造人物形象并推動(dòng)情節(jié)發(fā)展。但學(xué)生在答題過(guò)程中往往不會(huì)根據(jù)文章主題和故事發(fā)展的需要，生動(dòng)、細(xì)致地描寫(xiě)主要人物的動(dòng)作，從而造成文章情節(jié)失真，內(nèi)容平淡，人物蒼白和語(yǔ)言空洞。描寫(xiě)精準(zhǔn)化：一、用含義明確的動(dòng)詞精準(zhǔn)化即用一系列小動(dòng)作而不用大動(dòng)作，或者用含義比較明確的動(dòng)詞，而不用抽象的動(dòng)詞來(lái)描述，以使描寫(xiě)更加具體生動(dòng)。例題展示：Thelittleboysaidsorrytohismother.Thelittleboyhunghishead（耷拉著頭）

andmumbled（嘟囔著）anapologytohismother.Canyoufindthedifference二、給動(dòng)詞加修飾詞適當(dāng)?shù)男揎椩~能細(xì)致地表達(dá)出動(dòng)作的時(shí)間、幅度、速度、力度等，使人物形象更具活力，能更好地表現(xiàn)人物的鮮明個(gè)性與思想情感。動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)中最常見(jiàn)的修飾成分就是狀語(yǔ)，可使用副詞、介詞短語(yǔ)等。例題展示：

Thewolfalsonoticedthemandturneditsheadback,howlingatPaulandBecky.Atthesametime,thewolfalsonoticedthemandfiercely（兇猛地）

turneditsheadback,howlingloudlyatandBecky.今年的母親節(jié)你給媽媽送啥了？Practice1:TheboyboughtagiftforhisMum.Theboytookoutsomecoinsfromhispocketandgavethemtothecashier.Theboytookoutsomecoinsfromhispocketwiththedirtyhandsandgavethemtothecashiercarefully.動(dòng)作具體化添加修飾詞Practice2:Mumacceptedthegift.Mumsteppedforwardandreachedoutforthegift.Unbelievably,mumsteppedforwardexcitedlyandreachedoutforthegiftwithtearsineyes.動(dòng)作具體化添加修飾詞情景串聯(lián)：母親節(jié)男孩給母親買(mǎi)了禮物，母親接過(guò)禮物。Theboytookoutsomecoinsfromhispocketwiththedirtyhandsandgavethemtothecashiercarefully.Unbelievably,mumsteppedforwardexcitedlyandreachedoutforthegiftwithtearsineyes.小結(jié)：1、為改進(jìn)動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)，我們可使用動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)精準(zhǔn)化的方法，用含義比較明確的動(dòng)詞，而不用抽象的動(dòng)詞描述。2、除了精準(zhǔn)選用表示動(dòng)作的詞語(yǔ)外，還要給動(dòng)詞加上適當(dāng)?shù)男揎棾煞郑ㄒ誀钫Z(yǔ)為主，可以是單個(gè)副詞，也可是時(shí)間、地點(diǎn)、原因、讓步、方式等狀語(yǔ)）。動(dòng)作過(guò)程化記敘文中有不少動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)是一連串的動(dòng)作過(guò)程的展示。尤其在展示人物個(gè)性時(shí)，如果我們一筆帶過(guò)，就很難突出人物形象，也很難給人留下深刻的印象，而通過(guò)細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)展現(xiàn)出動(dòng)作的過(guò)程，表現(xiàn)力會(huì)大增。例題展示：Lisa

wenttocatchthebutterfly.Lisacrept(躡手躡腳)alongthepath,bentoverswiftlyandcupped（使成杯型）

herhandsaroundthebutterflygently.Theboywenttoswiminthelake.Theboysrushedtothelake，tookofftheirclothesandjumpedintothewater.續(xù)寫(xiě)常用的動(dòng)作鏈形式(1)“A，BandC”結(jié)構(gòu)這種結(jié)構(gòu)就是多個(gè)連續(xù)的動(dòng)作用在一個(gè)句子中動(dòng)作鏈跳入湖中嬉戲＝?jīng)_向湖邊＋脫掉衣服＋跳入水中。Theboysrushedtothelake，tookofftheirclothesandjumpedintothewater.1.這個(gè)歌手唱歌。動(dòng)作鏈歌手唱歌＝掃視觀眾＋深吸一口氣＋開(kāi)始演唱Thesingerglancedattheaudience，tookadeepbreathandbegantosing.2.她坐車(chē)去警察局。動(dòng)作鏈上車(chē)＝攔車(chē)＋上車(chē)＋告訴目的地。

Hestoppedthetaxi，jumpedinwiththesuitcaseandtoldthedriver，“Gotothepolicestation，please.”動(dòng)作鏈分解動(dòng)作鏈分解案例展示：Theboytookoutsomecoinsfromhispocketwiththedirtyhandsandgavethemtothecashiercarefully.Unbelievably,mumsteppedforwardexcitedlyandreachedoutforthegiftwithtearsineyes.男孩拿著禮物離開(kāi)商店，回家。完整情境展示：Theboytookoutsomecoinsfromhispocketwiththedirtyhandsandgavethemtothecashercarefully.Theboyheldthegifttightly,rushedoutthegroceryhappilyandwentstraighthomehurriedly.Unbelievably,mumsteppedforwardexcitedlyandreachedoutforthegiftwithabigsmile.小結(jié)：在描寫(xiě)動(dòng)作時(shí)，要學(xué)會(huì)細(xì)化動(dòng)作，把動(dòng)作過(guò)程分解成一連串細(xì)微的動(dòng)作，形成動(dòng)作鏈，寫(xiě)出動(dòng)作的連貫性，這樣才能使描寫(xiě)具有畫(huà)面感，使人物更立體。2.句式升級(jí)：

句子+非謂語(yǔ)結(jié)構(gòu)模式1：句子＋-ing老人靜坐動(dòng)作鏈老人靜坐＝坐在夕陽(yáng)下＋看報(bào)紙＋聽(tīng)廣播Theoldmansatunderthesunset，readingthenewspaperandlisteningtotheradio.（動(dòng)詞ing做伴隨狀語(yǔ)）模式2：句子＋havingdone沒(méi)有買(mǎi)到票。動(dòng)作鏈沒(méi)有買(mǎi)到票＝排了很久隊(duì)＋被告知票賣(mài)完了Havingqueued

for3hours，hewastold

thatthetickethadbeensoldout.（動(dòng)作早于謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)作發(fā)生，做讓步狀語(yǔ)）模式3：句子＋-ed孩子們哭了。動(dòng)作鏈哭了＝被感動(dòng)＋哭了。Deeplymovedbythestory，thechildrenbegantocry.Theboytookoutsomecoinsfromhispocketwiththedirtyhandsandgavethemtothecashercarefully.Theboyheldthegifttightly,rushedoutthegroceryhappilyandwentstraighthomehurriedly.Unbelievably,mumsteppedforwardexcitedlyandreachedoutforthegiftwithtearsineyes.母親看著手中的禮物Deeplymovedbyherson,theboy’sMumcouldn’thelpcrying.Theboy’sMumlookedatthegifttearfully,walkinguptohersonandhugginghimtightly.情境再現(xiàn)在觀眾的注視下，他感到緊張，走向跑道。動(dòng)作具體化:他站在跑道上，喉嚨發(fā)緊，手心冒汗。使用動(dòng)作鏈：他深吸一口氣，鼓起勇氣，向跑道走

去。Theeyesofthewholeaudiencefelluponhim.Standingonthet