專題08讀后續(xù)寫描寫練習教師版

課前檢測Inhighschool.Dadgotmetoplayfootballinthefirstplace.IenjoyedthrowingtheballaroundwithmyfriendsbutIdidn'tthinkIhadwhatittooktoplayonateam.“I’mnofootballplayer,”Itoldmydad.“You’llneverknowwhatyou’recapableofunlessyougiveitatry,Adam,’’hetoldme.So,Idid.Itwouldgivemeamuchneededsenseofbelongingandsomeconfidence.IrememberhowproudhewaswhenIwonsomeawardsandthehughegavemeafterIreceivedmycongratulationletter.TherewasrarelyagamewhereDadwasn’tonthesidelines,cheeringmeon.Fouryearsofhardpreseasonfootballcampscamedowntomylastgame.Iurgedmydadtobringourvideocamera.Iwavedatmyparentsbeforetheopeningkickoffandputonmygameface.MypadsbrokeasImadecontactwiththeoffensiveplayers.Igrabbedattheclothesoftheirrunningbackanddraggedhimtothefield.Aloudcheercamefromthesidelines.TherewasDadwiththecamera,cheeringlikecrazy.Bytheendofthegame,Ihadstoppedsevenplayersandasacking（擒殺）—mybestperformanceever,aperfectendtomycareer.Iranintomydad’sarms.Iwassweatyandsmelly,buthehuggedmeanyway.Icouldn'twaittowatchthetape—experienceeverymomentagain.Assoonaswegotinthehouse,Itookthetapeoutofthecameraandputitintheplayer.Mydad,mom,sisterandIsatdowninthelivingroominfrontofthebigscreenTV.IpressedPlay.Thevideostarted.Thetwoteams,linedupbeforethegame,thentherunningbacktakingthehandoff.runninguptotheline,mereachingout,andthen...theskyandclouds!Icouldhearmydadscreaming"Waytogo,Adam!"asimagesoftheskyshookupanddownonscreen.分析材料，找出材料中運用的描寫，并說出各自對應的作用。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：語言描寫1.“I’mnofootballplayer,”Itoldmydad.表現(xiàn)主人公的不自信。2.“You’llneverknowwhatyou’recapableofunlessyougiveitatry,Adam,’’hetoldme.體現(xiàn)爸爸對于“我”的鼓勵，為下文“我”嘗試并取得對自己的信心進行鋪墊。環(huán)境描寫1.Aloudcheercamefromthesidelines.反映出爸爸當時激動的心情，側(cè)面表現(xiàn)“我”的表現(xiàn)非常棒。動作描寫1.Igrabbedattheclothesoftheirrunningbackanddraggedhimtothefield.體現(xiàn)“我”非常優(yōu)秀的表現(xiàn)，鋪墊爸爸后面站起來為“我”歡呼而忘記錄像這個情節(jié)。2.Iranintomydad’sarms.表現(xiàn)父子之間非常親近的關系，以及“我”贏了比賽之后的那種激動。3.Hehuggedmeanyway.同第2句作用除了上述材料所分析的描寫，其它還有哪些描寫呢？它們的作用分別是什么？________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：情緒描寫：揭示人物的內(nèi)心世界，表現(xiàn)人物的思想感情；塑造人物形象刻畫人物性格。發(fā)表感悟：升華主題、深化文章中心。課中講解Inhighschool.Dadgotmetoplayfootballinthefirstplace.IenjoyedthrowingtheballaroundwithmyfriendsbutIdidn'tthinkIhadwhatittooktoplayonateam.“I’mnofootballplayer,”Itoldmydad.“You’llneverknowwhatyou’recapableofunlessyougiveitatry,Adam,’’hetoldme.So,Idid.Itwouldgivemeamuchneededsenseofbelongingandsomeconfidence.IrememberhowproudhewaswhenIwonsomeawardsandthehughegavemeafterIreceivedmycongratulationletter.TherewasrarelyagamewhereDadwasn’tonthesidelines,cheeringmeon.Fouryearsofhardpreseasonfootballcampscamedowntomylastgame.Iurgedmydadtobringourvideocamera.Iwavedatmyparentsbeforetheopeningkickoffandputonmygameface.MypadsbrokeasImadecontactwiththeoffensiveplayers.Igrabbedattheclothesoftheirrunningbackanddraggedhimtothefield.Aloudcheercamefromthesidelines.TherewasDadwiththecamera,cheeringlikecrazy.Bytheendofthegame,Ihadstoppedsevenplayersandasacking（擒殺）—mybestperformanceever,aperfectendtomycareer.Iranintomydad’sarms.Iwassweatyandsmelly,buthehuggedmeanyway.Icouldn'twaittowatchthetape—experienceeverymomentagain.Assoonaswegotinthehouse,Itookthetapeoutofthecameraandputitintheplayer.Mydad,mom,sisterandIsatdowninthelivingroominfrontofthebigscreenTV.IpressedPlay.Thevideostarted.Thetwoteams,linedupbeforethegame,thentherunningbacktakingthehandoff.runninguptotheline,mereachingout,andthen...theskyandclouds!Icouldhearmydadscreaming"Waytogo,Adam!"asimagesoftheskyshookupanddownonscreen.閱讀材料，并梳理材料的主要情節(jié)。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1.我喜歡踢足球但是無意于成為足球運動員，但是爸爸鼓勵我參加了足球集訓營去踢足球并獲得了很多獎。2.兒子讓爸爸錄下四年足球集訓營的最后一場比賽。3.爸爸在欣賞比賽時候性喜若狂以至于扔下錄像機根本沒有錄像。4.當全家準備坐在一起觀看錄像。根據(jù)段首語、給出的情節(jié)以及提示的描寫形式、詞匯、句式完成相關的續(xù)寫內(nèi)容。Paragraph1Ileanedforwardtoseethenextbigplay.Paragraph2ThetapeendedandDadwasquiet.情節(jié)一：鏡頭一直對著天空和白云，但是能夠聽到我爸爸的歡呼聲。提示：動作描寫、環(huán)境描寫詞匯：動詞keeprooted/flashthrough/wave/jump/drop 副詞continuously/crazily/heavily/silently 形容詞thrilled句式：動作：主句，ing短語;with+sth./sb.+ing,主句；獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：Ileanedforwardtoseethenextbigplay.Strangelytheskyandcloudskeptrootedonthescreen,butthenoiseonthefieldandthecheeringshoutsfrommyDadcontinuouslyoccupiedmyears.Withthetapegoing,apictureflashedthroughmymindmymind.Wavingcrazilyhishandsandjumpingwithjoy,sothrilledwashethathemusthavedroppedthevideocameratotheground.Thevoiceonthescreenrangedfrom“Goodjob,Adam!”to“eon,getup!”andfinally“Yahoo!”ashegavemeabighug.Watchingtheskyandcloudsasthebackdrop,Ijustsilentlylistened.情節(jié)二：家人陷入沉默，我感到非常得失望。提示：環(huán)境描寫詞匯：名詞silence/depression 動詞spread/envelope________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：ThetapeendedandDadwasquiet.Thesilencespreadoverthewholeroom.Ahugesurgeofdepressionenvelopedme.情節(jié)三：爸爸跟我道歉，我原諒了爸爸。提示：語言描寫、動作描寫詞匯：動詞beetchedwith/fuel/smile 副詞suddenly/firmly/hard 形容詞precious/inplete/everhaunting句式：動作：主句，ing短語;with+sth./sb.+ing,主句；獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：Suddenly,“I’msorry,”Dadsaid,whosefacewasetchedwithendlessguilty.“Ifailedtorecordyouthewholegame.”“No.”Ifirmlyanswered,“itwasyourcheersthatfueledmycourageinthatfiercefootballgame.Forme,it’sthemostpreciouspartofthevideo.”Hearingmywords,hesmiledharderthaneverbefore.Duringtheinpletetape,Ifoundtheeverhauntingmelodyofthefootballgameandmyentirelife.過關檢測“Willyouewithus,Susan?”criedseveralgirlstoaschoolmate.“Wearegoingtothewoods;doe,too.”“Ishouldliketogowithyouverymuch,”repliedSusan,withasigh,“butIcan’tfinishthetaskgrandmothersetmetodo.”“Howtiresomeitmustbetostayathometoworkonaholiday!”saidRose,oneofthegirls,shakingherhead.“Susan’sgrandmotheristoostrict.”Susanheardtheremark,and,asshebentherhead,shewipedawayatear,andthoughtofthepleasantafternoonthegirlswouldspendgatheringwildflowersinthewoods.Soonshesaidtoherself,“Whatharmcantherebeinmovingthemarkgrandmotherputinthestocking?Thewoodsmustbeverybeautifultoday,andhowIshouldliketobeinthem!”“Grandmother,”saidshe,afewminutesafterwards,“I’mreadynow.”“What,sosoon,Susan?”Hergrandmothertooktheworkandlookedatitveryclosely.“True,Susan,”saidshe,layinggreatstressoneachword,“true,Icounttwentyturnsfromthemark;and,asyouhavenevercheatedme,youmaygoandamuseyourselfasyouliketherestoftheday.”Susan’scheekswerered,andshedidnotsay“Thankyou.”Assheleftthecottage,shewalkedslowlyaway,notsingingasusual.“Why,hereisSusan!”thegirlscried,whenshejoinedtheirpany;“butwhatisthematter?Whyhaveyouleftyourdear,oldgrandmother?”theyasked.“Thereisnothingthematter.”AsSusanrepeatedthesewords,shefeltthatshewastryingtocheatherself.Shehadactedalie.Atthesametime,sherememberedhergrandmother’swords,“Youhavenevercheatedme.”“Yes,Ihavecheatedher,”saidshetoherself.“Ifsheknewall,shewouldnevertrustmeagain.”閱讀材料，并梳理材料的主要情節(jié)。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1.同伴邀請?zhí)K珊去開滿山花的山野里玩耍，但是蘇珊不能去，因為她沒有完成奶奶交代的任務。2.蘇珊更改了記號欺騙了奶奶。3.奶奶允許蘇珊出去玩，但是蘇珊卻感到很愧疚。根據(jù)段首語推斷出了可能的情節(jié)，請運用提示的描寫形式、詞匯、句式完成相關的續(xù)寫內(nèi)容。Paragraph1:Whenthelittlepartyhadreachedanopenspaceinthewoods,Paragraph2:“Now,Susan,”saidRose,“Putonthecrownofflowers,foryouaretobeourqueen.”情節(jié)一：其他女孩開心地玩耍，而蘇珊卻不開心。她的伙伴們都在到處跑著，自我娛樂，課蘇珊卻獨自坐在草坪上，希望此刻她能在家中，奶奶訴說自己的過錯。提示：動作描寫、情緒描寫詞匯：動詞runabout/chase/pick/withone’sheaddrooping句式：動作：主句，ing短語;with+sth./sb.+ing,主句；獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu) 情緒：so+情緒adj.+部分倒裝+that從句;with+情緒n.;Toone’s+情緒n.，主句;what+情緒v.+sb.+is/was+that從句________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：Whenthelittlepartyhadreachedanopenedspaceinthewoods,herpanionsranabout,chasingbutterfliesandpickingflowers.Atthesametime,however,Susansatonthegrasswithherheaddrooping,wishingshewereathomethismomenttellingherfaulttohergrandmother.Struckbythescene,however,Susanwasseizedwithahugesurgeofguilty,sittingonthegrassalonewithherheaddrooping.Atthesametime,howeagershewastogohometoconfessherfaulttohergrandmother.情節(jié)二：她們?yōu)樘K珊做了個花冠。提示：語言描寫詞匯：名詞acrownofflowers 動詞cryout________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：AfterawhileRosecriedout,“Letusmakeacrownofflowers,andputitontheheadofthebestgirlhere.”Soonthecrownwasfinished.AllthegirlsagreedSusanwasthebestgirlbothinschoolandathome,sotheydecidedshewastowearit.情節(jié)三：蘇珊拒絕戴花冠。她把花冠扔到了地上，說：“不要給我花冠，我不配！我欺騙了我的奶奶?！碑斔f這些的時候，淚水滑過了她的臉頰。提示：語言描寫、動作描寫詞匯：動詞takeoff/throw/deserve/cheat/flowdown 形容詞astonished句式：動作：主句，ing短語;with+sth./sb.+ing,主句；獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：“Now,Susan,”saidRose,“Putonthecrownofflowers,foryouaretobeourqueen.”Asthesewordswerespoken,thecrownwasplacedonherhead.Inamomentshetookitoff,andthrewitontheground,saying,“Nocrownforme;Idonotdeserveit.”Thegirlslookedatherwithinanastonishment“Ihavecheatedmygrandmother,”saidshe,tearsflowingdownhercheeks.情節(jié)四：蘇珊返回家中去向奶奶道歉，奶奶原諒了蘇珊。提示：語言描寫、動作描寫詞匯：動詞apologize/realizeone’sfault句式：動作：主句，ing短語;with+sth./sb.+ing,主句；獨立主格結(jié)構(gòu)________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：QuicklySusanlefttheothergirls,wentbackhomeandapologizedtohergrandmother.“Susan,”saidhergrandmother,“Iamsohappyyouhaverealizedyourfault,andyouarestillmyownlittlegirl!”

課后練習補救練習Ifthere’sonethingIcan’tstandpeoplesaying,it’s,“I’mnotgoodatanything.Idon’thaveanytalent.”Ijustdon’tbearthatatall.Tome,everyonehasatleastonetalent,andwhileitsomethingtakesyoualifetimetofind,itdoesexist.TherewasatimewhenIdidn’tbelievethat.Whatchangedmymindwasaseeminglysmalleventthattookplacein1953.AtthattimeIwasahighschoolstudent.IwasafunnylookingskinnyboynamedEugeneOrowitzwhoweightedbarely100pounds.Iwasagoodstudent,butasfarasIwasconcerned,injustabouteveryotherdepartmentIwasaloser.Iwantedtofitin,tobesomeoneanddosomethingwell.ButIhadn’tfoundanythingIwasgoodat.Onesunnyafternoon,ourgymclasswentouttotheschool’srunningtrack.Theteachertaughtusallvarioustrackandfieldevents.Iwasaloserinallofthem.Thencamethejavelin(標槍).Suddenlysomethinginsidemebegansaying,“Tryit!Tryit!”Ihadtowaitmyturn,though,becauseseveralotherswantedabreaktoo.Shyandscared,Iwatchedthem,tryingnottolooktooeager.Finally,wheneverythinghadhadachancetothrow…thebestthrowgoingabout30yards…h(huán)easked.Embarrassed,Ilookeddown,butmanagedtonodmyhead.“well,eonthen,”hesaidimpatiently,andhandedmethejavelin.BehindmeIcouldhearsomeofmyclassmateslaughing.AsIgraspedthejavelininmyhand,Iwasseizedwithastrangefeeling…anewfoundexcitement.Forsomecrazyreason,IwasrelaxedoverwhatIwasabouttodo,eventhoughI’dneverdoneitbefore.Iraisedthejavelinovermyhead,tooksixquickstepsandletthethinggo.Thesamevoicethathadurgedmeintothrowingit,nowtoldmeitwasagoodthrow.分析材料，找出材料中運用的描寫，并說出各自對應的作用。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：心理情緒描寫1.Iwasaloserinallofthem.表現(xiàn)主人公失敗的不自信。2.Suddenlysomethinginsidemebegansaying,“Tryit!Tryit!”發(fā)現(xiàn)自己對于標槍的興趣與熱情，慢慢找回自己的自信。3.Shyandscared,Iwatchedthem,tryingnottolooktooeager.反映出“我”骨子里的那種內(nèi)向，正是由于極度不自信導致的。環(huán)境描寫1.BehindmeIcouldhearsomeofmyclassmateslaughing.反映出“我”當時內(nèi)心感到很窘迫，不過與后面同學們的聲音的對比，說明“我”取得了很好的成績。動作描寫1.Iraisedthejavelinovermyhead,tooksixquickstepsandletthethinggo.與前面的“我”不知道該怎么操作對比，說明“我”對于這項運動獨特的天賦，照應上面的“興奮”。閱讀材料，并梳理材料的主要情節(jié)。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：1.我過去覺得自己不擅長任何事情直到一件小事改變了我的想法。2.一次體育課上，我發(fā)現(xiàn)自己對仍標槍充滿興奮不已。3.我克制住自己的興奮之情等待著，這期間最好的成績是30碼。4.老師要我去試一下，而同學們都笑了。鞏固練習Ifthere’sonethingIcan’tstandpeoplesaying,it’s,“I’mnotgoodatanything.Idon’thaveanytalent.”Ijustdon’tbearthatatall.Tome,everyonehasatleastonetalent,andwhileitsomethingtakesyoualifetimetofind,itdoesexist.TherewasatimewhenIdidn’tbelievethat.Whatchangedmymindwasaseeminglysmalleventthattookplacein1953.AtthattimeIwasahighschoolstudent.IwasafunnylookingskinnyboynamedEugeneOrowitzwhoweightedbarely100pounds.Iwasagoodstudent,butasfarasIwasconcerned,injustabouteveryotherdepartmentIwasaloser.Iwantedtofitin,tobesomeoneanddosomethingwell.ButIhadn’tfoundanythingIwasgoodat.Onesunnyafternoon,ourgymclasswentouttotheschool’srunningtrack.Theteachertaughtusallvarioustrackandfieldevents.Iwasaloserinallofthem.Thencamethejavelin（標槍）.Suddenlysomethinginsidemebegansaying,“Tryit!Tryit!”Ihadtowaitmyturn,though,becauseseveralotherswantedabreaktoo.Shyandscared,Iwatchedthem,tryingnottolooktooeager.Finally,wheneverythinghadhadachancetothrow…thebestthrowgoingabout30yards…h(huán)easked.Embarrassed,Ilookeddown,butmanagedtonodmyhead.“well,eonthen,”hesaidimpatiently,andhandedmethejavelin.BehindmeIcouldhearsomeofmyclassmateslaughing.AsIgraspedthejavelininmyhand,Iwasseizedwithastrangefeeling…anewfoundexcitement.Forsomecrazyreason,IwasrelaxedoverwhatIwasabouttodo,eventhoughI’dneverdoneitbefore.Iraisedthejavelinovermyhead,tooksixquickstepsandletthethinggo.Thesamevoicethathadurgedmeintothrowingit,nowtoldmeitwasagoodthrow.Paragraph1:Iwatchedasthespear(矛，槍)tookoff.Myheartbeatfaster,Paragraph2:ThatnightItookthejavelinhomewithme.分析材料以及段首語，推斷相應的可能的續(xù)寫情節(jié)。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：（僅供參考）1.我將標槍扔出30碼之外的距離，同學們都感到很驚訝。2.老師讓我留下這桿標槍。3.我重拾勇氣，刻苦練習，最終在仍標槍領域取得成功，找到了自己的天賦。根據(jù)上面推斷的續(xù)寫情節(jié)以及規(guī)定的描寫，完成續(xù)寫。1.我將標槍扔出30碼之外的距離，同學們都感到很驚訝。（動作描寫、情緒描寫）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：Iwatchedasthespeartookoff.Myheartbeatfaster,asIsawitcontinuedtofly,30yardsout,then40anditwasstillgoing.Myheartbeatfaster,andwithitflyingcontinually,itdroppedfarbeyond30yards.Suddenly,someoneexclaimed,“50yards.It’s50yards.”Soastonishedweremyclassmatesthattheyallbegantoclaptheirhands.Hearingthemcheeringforme,IfeltasifIhadbeendreaming.2.老師讓我留下這桿標槍。（語言描寫、情緒描寫）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：Still,Itookthejavelinbacktothegymteacher.“EugeneOrowitz,”withawidesmilespreadonhisface,hesaid,“Iwantyoutokeepthejavelin,hopingitwillremindyouthatyouareverytalent/gifted.3.我重拾勇氣，刻苦練習，最終在扔標槍領域取得成功，找到了自己的天賦。（動作描寫、發(fā)表感悟）________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案：EverytimeIsawit,Ican’thelprememberingthewordsmygymteachersaidtome.Sincethen,Ipracticeddiligentandmadeittotheschoolteam.Inthesameyear,Ithrewthejavelin211feet,thebestthrowbyanyhighschoolboyinthecountry.Haditnotbeenforthesmallevent,Iwouldn’thavefoundandthenfulfilledmypotential.Eventoday,Iamconstantlyremindedoftheexperience,whereIwastaughtthelessonthateveryonehasatalentandyouareabletofinditandmadeuseofit.拔高練習Onceuponatime,therewasabeautifultownandacoupleofloverswhowouldoftenstayonthetopofthemountainbythesea,enjoyingthesunriseandappreciatingthesunset.Everyonewhoknewthemcouldn'thelpenvyingthemfortheirhappylove.Oneday,themanwasseriouslyinjuredandlyinginhospitalformanydayswithoutanyconsciousness.Thewomanguardedhimbythebedinthedaytime,callinghisnamenonstopatnight.ShewouldgotothechurchandpraytoGoduntilhertearsranout.Amonthpassedandthemanwasstillsleeping.Finally,Godwassomovedbyherpersistencethathedecidedtodoheraspecialfavor.Godsaid,“Icanhelpyourloverrecoverontheconditionthatyoushouldpromisetobeabutterflyforthreeyears.Doyouagreetothisdeal?”shesaidexcitedlyandfirmly,“Yes,Ido!NeverwillIregretdoingthat.”Thenextday,thewomantransformedintoabutterfly,flyinghurriedlytothehospital.Itturnedoutthatthemancametohisconsciousnessandwokeup,talkingwithadoctor.Shecouldnothearwhattheyweretalkingaboutbecauseshecouldn'tflyintothehouse.Whatshecoulddowastowatchherbelovedthroughthewindowshelplessly.Anotherspringcameandthebutterflywasinahurrytoflybacktoseetheman,onlytofindthattherewasaprettyladystanding