如何解決沖突 - 2024-2025學(xué)年高一英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)基礎(chǔ)技巧與練習(xí)

高一英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)基礎(chǔ)技巧與整體演練

技巧04如何解決沖突

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基礎(chǔ)技巧解讀

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)首先力爭(zhēng)讀懂原文，找出記敘文的幾要素，找到故事情節(jié)中到底有什么沖突或

問(wèn)題。然后讀懂需要續(xù)寫(xiě)的兩段的首句，根據(jù)首句推測(cè)故事發(fā)展的走向和兩段的大致內(nèi)容。

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)的文章屬于敘事類文體，大部分故事都是圍繞conflict（沖突）和solution（問(wèn)題解

決）來(lái)運(yùn)轉(zhuǎn)的，因此矛盾沖突在敘事類讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)語(yǔ)篇中尤為重要。矛盾沖突的解決能推動(dòng)故

事情節(jié)的發(fā)展。矛盾沖突分預(yù)設(shè)與解決技巧，可以幫助學(xué)生在基于篇章主題意義下更好地發(fā)

散思維，做到有話可說(shuō)，有事可寫(xiě)。同時(shí)，在學(xué)生創(chuàng)設(shè)矛盾沖突進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)的過(guò)程中，可以

聯(lián)系上文已有的故事沖突，提高故事的完整性和連貫性。學(xué)生掌握了矛盾沖突的基本寫(xiě)作技

巧，有利于在續(xù)寫(xiě)的故事創(chuàng)作中打開(kāi)思路，提高語(yǔ)言的綜合運(yùn)用能力。

故事沖突的預(yù)設(shè)與解決的7個(gè)技巧

技巧1：面對(duì)問(wèn)題，人物產(chǎn)生的消極或積極情緒

【技巧舉例】

（2021年6月，浙江高考，Para.l）paydayarrivedatlast.Iwasdelightedtofinallyget

thepaymentafterIworkedhardfortwoweeks.Onthewayhomefullofexcitement,Ithought

abouthowtomakeuseofthe"huge"sumofmoney.6tIneededanewfootballinthefuture.I

whisperedtomyself.Approachingmyhouse,Inoticedmydadandmomstandingbesidetheold

truckofmyfamily,lookingsad.Itseemedasifsomethingwronghadhappened......

【分析】續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段中的“Onthewayhomefullofexcitement”表明了故事主人公心情非常

好，但是當(dāng)面對(duì)新的問(wèn)題"mydadandmomstandingbesidetheoldtruckofmyfamily,looking

sad”時(shí)，故事主人公內(nèi)心開(kāi)始出現(xiàn)沖突與疑問(wèn)，這就反映在“somethingwrong”上面。兩種心

態(tài)的沖突描寫(xiě)前后銜接自然、且恰到好處。

【用語(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】

“感到一陣...”：feelaflushof...二feelawaveof...=feelafeeling/senseof...[joy（高興）,

excitement（興奮）,pride（驕傲）,anger（憤怒）,rage（狂怒）,panic（驚慌）,alarm（驚慌）,terror（恐懼）,

horror（恐懼）,fear（恐懼），unease（不安），sorrow（悲傷）,sadness（悲傷）,grief（悲傷）,

embarrassment（尷尬）,disappointment（失望）,shame（羞愧）,guilt（愧疚）]。

例如：Shefeltawaveofpanic,butforcedherselftoleavetheroomcalmly.

她感到一陣驚慌，但是強(qiáng)迫自己鎮(zhèn)靜地離開(kāi)了房間。

技巧2：面對(duì)復(fù)雜的情境，人物產(chǎn)生急迫/復(fù)雜的心理

【技巧舉例】

(2021年1月，浙江高考，Para.2)ThevideowaspostedonlinetheMondaybefore

Halloween.Ilookedjustlikeapumpkinheadinit.Embarrassedandalittleannoyed,Ifledtomy

room,butMomstoppedme."Youhaven'treadthecommentsyet."Iscrolleddownthescreenand

marveledatthestoriestheviewerssharedaboutHalloween.

【分析】續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段首句提示語(yǔ)提供了一個(gè)新的情境，即“Thevideowaspostedonline”，

這讓故事主人公內(nèi)心沖突加劇(Embarrassedandalittleannoyed),但當(dāng)聽(tīng)力母親的話之后，

主人公開(kāi)始閱讀網(wǎng)上的評(píng)論，這又將主人公引向另一情境，結(jié)果主人公內(nèi)心又起了變化

(marveled)。情境的不斷變換，加劇了故事主人公內(nèi)心的矛盾沖突的不斷變換。

【用語(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】

(1)心里想：think/saytooneself

(2)害怕；恐'慌：withfear/panic/terror;tremble;shiver;shake;quake;tremblewithfear;be

seizedwithpanic;screamwithpanic/terror;freeze/shakewithterror

(3)生氣；‘憤怒：withrage;bered-cheekedwithrage;tremble/shakewithrage;feellikecrying

withrage;bespeechlesswithrage;beboilingwithrage

(4)興奮；激動(dòng)：withexcitement;yellwithexcitement;jumpupanddownwithexcitement;

screamwithexcitement;gowildwithexcitement

(5)悲傷；流淚：Tearsblurredone'seyes.淚水模糊了她的雙眼。/One'seyesgotmisty.一個(gè)

人的眼睛都模糊了。/One'seyesmisted/dimmedwithtears.淚眼模糊。/tearsrolldownone'seyes

/cheeks/face淚水落下

技巧3：面對(duì)他人的行為或行動(dòng)，人物展開(kāi)了新的動(dòng)作/行為

【技巧舉例】

(2021年，新高考I卷，Para.2twinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmother

up.Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasvery

surprised.Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.

Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn'texpect.Thechildrensaid

loudly,“HappyMother'sDay!”Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.

【分析】續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段中，當(dāng)雙胞胎叫醒母親(woketheirmotherup)后，母親的動(dòng)作首先有

“saw"和"wasverysurprised”,之后在雙胞胎發(fā)出節(jié)日問(wèn)候“HappyMother'sDay”時(shí),母親的

動(dòng)作有“hugged”和“kissed”。這種“動(dòng)作主動(dòng)應(yīng)對(duì)”模式在休息的故事情節(jié)沖突拓展過(guò)程中是

比較重要的，因?yàn)閯?dòng)作上的變化往往承載了人物對(duì)情節(jié)中的矛盾沖突的回應(yīng)模式及態(tài)度。

【用語(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】

(1)常用詞語(yǔ)：openone'smouth;widenone'seyes;risetoone'sfeet;jumptoone'sfeet;shoutat

thetopofone'slung;reachout(伸出手)

(2)常用句式：如：Havingpassedtheexam,hewassohappythathewasatalosswhattodo.通

過(guò)考試后，他非常高興，不知所措。

Sheopenedthegiftwithherhandsshakingslightly.她用輕微顫抖的手打開(kāi)了禮物。

技巧4：人物沉浸在某一情境中，于是出現(xiàn)了新問(wèn)題

【技巧舉例】

(2018年6月，浙江高考,Para.lSuddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.My

horseturnedtothelefttoavoidthelittlerabbitasIheldontightlyandtriednottofall.Thenmy

dadturnedaroundandshouted,46Holdon!^^Allofasuddenthehorsebegantonm.Mydadtriedto

keepupbehindus.Forafewminutesmyhorsesloweddowntoatrotandthenstoppedbesidea

river.Ilookedaroundandrealizedthatwewerewayoffthetrack.

【分析】續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段首句承接源語(yǔ)篇提供了一個(gè)新的情境，即“rabbitjumpedout"，從而引發(fā)

了馬與人的一系列的避險(xiǎn)動(dòng)作，并且馬由于受驚而奔跑起來(lái)，最終將主人公帶入了另一個(gè)困

境，即“wewerewayoffthetrack”。

【用語(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】

(1)不幸的是(unfortunately)

Butbadluckforsb,…但是某人真不走運(yùn)

Shetriedherbest,butinvain.她盡力了,但沒(méi)有成功。

(2)某人做了某事，不知道下一步該做什么。

Sbdidsth,wonderingwhattodonext.

Sbdidsth,notknowingwhattodonext.

技巧5：情況好轉(zhuǎn)或情境向好，人物突然有了一個(gè)想法

【技巧舉例】

(2020年7月，浙江高考,Para.2)A^thatverymoment,thehelicopterarrived.Myheartleaped

withjoyasIknewwewerelikelytobesaved.Elliusedpeppersprayagaintobuyusenoughtime.

Butthistimethebearbecamemorealert.Heregardeduswiththemercilessnecessityofhunger,

sowethrowallthefoodwehave.Hethenturnedawayandstarteddevouring.Aswewere

climbingtheropeladder,Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeand

sound.

【分析】續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段首句預(yù)設(shè)了一個(gè)新的情境“thehelicopterarrived"，于是故事主人公的心

情好轉(zhuǎn)(Myheartleapedwithjoy),并且當(dāng)再次遇到熊的攻擊時(shí)，主人公就又有了新的想法

(wethrowallthefoodwehave),這將故事的沖突與發(fā)展帶到另一個(gè)情境中；此外，當(dāng)獲救

后，主人公又開(kāi)始感謝(Elliprayedlikethousandtimestoshowthankfulnessofbeingsafeand

sound)o可見(jiàn)，用新的想法接續(xù)“情況好轉(zhuǎn)”可以充分展現(xiàn)人物對(duì)整個(gè)事件的回應(yīng)過(guò)程中的特

寫(xiě)鏡頭。

【用語(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】

“某人突然想到...”:Itsuddenlyoccurredtosbthat...=Ithitsbthat...二Itstrucksbthat...=It

dawnedonsbthat...

技巧6：面對(duì)他人的鼓勵(lì)/激勵(lì)/幫助等，人物找到了解決辦法

【技巧舉例】

(2017年6月，浙江高考,Para.2)Afewminuteslater,theother加。cyclistsarrived.They

foundthedangeroussituation,wherethreemencircledthewolf.Mac'sfidendsalsojumpedoff

theirbicyclesandjoinedthefightwiththewolf.Moreandmorecarsstopped.Somedriverstook

outthesticksfromthecars,andsometookouttheknives,eventhegunstowardsthewolf.Inthe

meanwhile,thewolfmightfeelthepeople'sthreatsaround,soitbegantostepbackslowly.Soon,

itranawayofftheroadanddisappearedinthedistance.

【分析】續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段首句提示給出了來(lái)幫忙的人(theothertwocyclistsarrived),之后又

不斷有人力口入(Mac'sfriendsalsojumpedofftheirbicycles/Moreandmorecarsstopped),故事

中的人物有了一系列與狼對(duì)抗的動(dòng)作，如"circledthewolf"lookoutthesticksfromthe

cars,,autookouttheknives”等，這些將故事中人狼對(duì)峙的沖突進(jìn)一步推向高潮。

【用語(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】

(1)鼓起勇氣(做某事):take/gather/one9scourage(todosth)

(2)毫不猶豫/選擇：withoutasecondthought/withoutdelay/withouthesitation/havingnochoice

技巧7：獲得新的成長(zhǎng)，人物開(kāi)始總結(jié)、點(diǎn)題并呼應(yīng)前文

【技巧舉例】

(2022年1月，浙江卷，Para.2)OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalfora

seriousdisease.IfeltsosorrytohearthatandIthoughtIshouldvisithiminanycase.Hewasa

littlesurprisedtoseemewhenIsteppedintohiswardwithsomeflowersandfruits.Iofferedtodo

therestworkofourprojectandheinvitedmetosharemyideastoperfectit.Webegantoworkas

afineteamandfinallyfinishedourprojectontime.OurhardworkpaidoffandDr.Henderson's

wasverysatisfiedwithourwonderfulfindings.Fromthisproject,wealsolearnedthesignificance

ofteammates.Justasthesayinggoes,onepersoncangofar,butagroupofpersonscontravel

farther.

【分析】續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段中主人公最后發(fā)現(xiàn)能與隊(duì)友和諧相處并最終完成了項(xiàng)目(Webeganto

workasafineteamandfinallyfinishedourprojectontime),這弓I發(fā)了主人公的反響，并且主

人公的這種體驗(yàn)不斷地深入(從"wealsolearnedthesignificanceofteammates"至groupof

personscantravelfarther,,)?充分展現(xiàn)了主人公內(nèi)心的矛盾沖突從不斷激化到出現(xiàn)轉(zhuǎn)機(jī)、再

到一步步迎刃而解的過(guò)程。

【用語(yǔ)儲(chǔ)備】

(1)直到……才意識(shí)到……

倒裝句：Notuntil...didsbrealize/noticethat...

強(qiáng)調(diào)句：Itwasonly...thatsbrealizedthat...

(2)表達(dá)經(jīng)歷與教訓(xùn)

WhatavaluablelessonIhavelearnedfrom...!我從...中得到了寶貴的教訓(xùn)。

Whatanunforgettableexperience!多么難忘的經(jīng)歷??！

(3)結(jié)尾點(diǎn)題

Godhelpsthosewhohelpthemselves.天助自助者。

Everyoneisthearchitectofhisownfate.每個(gè)人都是自己命運(yùn)的建筑師。

Lifeisfulloflaughterandtears.Onlybyacceptingbothcanweenjoylife.生命就是充滿歡

笑和淚水的。只有同時(shí)接受兩者，我們才能享受生活。

Neverunderestimatethepowerofyouraction.永遠(yuǎn)不要低估你的行為的力量。

整體書(shū)寫(xiě)演練

1.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

RandomActsofKindness

IwasdrivingalongClarendonStreetinSouthMelbourneonmywaytoCastlemainetovisit

myparents.AsIstoppedatatrafficlight,Inoticedamanlyingonabenchseatonthefootpath

besidetheroad.Itwasearlyeveningandhisroughappearanceandthefactthathewasholdinga

bottlewrappedinnewspaperconfirmedmyimmediatesuspicions-hewasadrunk.

AssoonasIsawhim,Ifeltastrongfeelingofsympathyforhim.Butlikesomanyother

people,Ihadotherplacestobeandotherthingstodo.AsIwatched,Isawtwopolicemen

approachandinstantlyIfeltrelieved.Afterall,itwastheirresponsibilitytocleanupthestreets

andmakesuremenlikehimgotachancetobesomewheresafeforthenight.AsIsatwaitingfor

thetrafficlightstoturngreen,Icouldn'tbelievewhatIsaw.Thetwopolicewalkedaroundand

whentheyreachedtheman,bothofwhomturnedtheirheadstheotherway,asifnottosee,and

walkedrightpast.Suddenly,afirmbeliefstreamedthroughmymind,a4Lifeisneversobusythat

thereisnotimetoserve.^^

RightthenIlookedupandthetrafficlightsturnedgreen-andIhadadecisiontomake.I

knewthatifIdroveoff,Iwouldhavenopeace,soIturnedleft,drovearoundtheblock,parked

thecarandwalkedbacktotheman.AsIapproachedhim,Ifeltcompletelyunconfidenttodeal

withthesituationandevenalittlefoolish.WhatwasIgoingtosay?WhatwasIgoingtodo?At

theveryleastIcoulddrivehimhome——ifhehadahome.Ifoundhimsleepingsoundlyandat

first,hedidn'trespondtomeatall,soIreachedoutandgentlyshookhimawake.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Hewokeup,staringatmeangrily.

Muchtomyrelief,themanagreedtogetintomycar.

2.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫(xiě)，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。

Atfirst,MichaelSurrelldidn'tseetheblacksmokeorflamesshootingfromthewindowsof

hisneighbors9home.Heandhiswifehadjustparkedaroundthecomerfromtheirownhousein

Allentown,Pennsylvania,whentheygotacallfromoneofhisdaughters,tcThehousenextdooris

onfire!”Hewenttoinvestigate.Thafswhenhesawtwowomenandagirlhysterical（歇斯底里

的）ontheirporch.

“Thebaby'sinthere!"oneofthewomencried.Thoughthefiredepartmenthadbeencalled,

Surrell,then64,instinctivelyraninside.Thebabywas8-year-oldTiaraRoberts,thewoman's

granddaughterandaplaymateofSurrell'sthreeyoungestkids,then8,10,and12.Theothertwo

ontheporchwereTiara'sauntandcousin.

Enteringtheburninghousewaslike“runningintoabucketofblackpaint“Surrellsays.The

thicksmokecausedhimtostumbleblindlyaround,burnedhiseyes,andmadeitimpossibleto

breathe.Theconditionswouldhavebeenhazardousforanyone,butforSurrell,whohaschronic

obstructivepulmonarydisease（慢性阻塞性肺疾?。?，theywerelife-threatening.Hewasthelast

personwhoshouldhaverunintoaburningbuildinghehaslungdisease.Butthatdidn'tstop

him.

Afterafewminutesinthesmokefilledhouse,heretreatedoutsidetocatchhisbreath.

“WhereisTiara?”heaskeddesperately.t6Thesecondfloor."herauntshoutedback.

Surrellknewhecouldn'tholdhisbreathforlong.Soheutteredalittleprayer,t4Well,Lord,

thisisit.Yougottahelpme,becauseI'mnotcomingoutwithoutthatlittlegirl.^^Takingadeep

breath,hewentinasecondtime.

Thedarknesswasoverwhelming.Yetbecausethehousehadasimilarlayouttohis,hefound

thestairsandmadeittothesecondfloor.Heturnedtotherightandwasmetbyintenseheat.He

wasalreadyoutofbreath.

“Babygirl,whereareyou?”Histhroatandlungsburnedasifhe'dbreathedinfireinsteadof

thesmokeandsoot（煙灰）intheair.Allhecouldhearwasthecracklingandpoppingofburning

wood.Thenaweakbutdistinctvoiceemerged.Stillunabletosee,Surrellfelltohiskneesonthe

hotwoodfloor.Hecrawledtowardthesound,feelingaroundforanysignofthegirl.Anominous

thoughtcrossedhismind:I'mprobablygonnadieuphere.

注意：

1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.續(xù)寫(xiě)部分分為兩段，每段的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)已為你寫(xiě)好。

Finallyhetouchedsomething.

Avoicetoldhim,i(Youhavetobreatheforher.

3.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Neesha,an8-year-oldgoldenretriever,isaluckydog.Afterspendingafortnightonherown

withoutfoodorrealshelter,thetoughdogwasaccidentallyspottedbyacouple,whoinspiteof

thecoldweather,werehikingtherangeandcameacrossher.

Twoweeksearlier,Neesha'sownershadtakenherandtheirotherdog,aGermanshepherd

namedHarley,forsomeoutdoorexercise.Frightenedbyadeer,bothdogsramaway.Harleyfound

hiswaybacktotheparkinglotthenextday,butNeeshadidnot.

Thefamilymadeathoroughsearch.Theyleftalaundrybasketofunwashedclothingnearthe

spotwherethey'dlastseenNeeshainthehopethatshe'dheadstraighttowardsthefamiliarsmell

marker.TheyeventurnedtotheInternetforhelpinfindingNeesha-buttherewasstillnosignof

her.

“Wepostedourexperienceonsocialmedia.Thenaweekendlater,wewerestilllookingfor

her.Wewerestartingtogiveuphope,^^saidthepefsownerErinaO'SheaGoetelentoldTheIrish

Times.

Eventually,thefamilybegantoacceptthatNeeshamightnotbecominghome."Wejust

thoughtsheis8,andifsbeentwoweeks.Therewasnowayshecouldsurvive.64

DoctorsCiaraNolanandJeanFrancoisBonnetmusttrulybecrazyhikers.Theybravedthe

elementsonthefreezingdaywhenthecoupledecidedtoreachoneofWicklow'speaks.Asthey

nearedthetop,Nolanwasshockedtoseeadogshakinginthesnow.

“Shewasfrightened,freezingcold.Shedidn'thaveenoughenergytobarkorstand,5,Bonnet

saidinaninterview.tcWetriedtogethertowalk,butshecouldn'tstand.Sowecoveredherwith

ourspareclothesandgavehersomefood.^^

注意：

1.續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

BonnetliftedNeeshaontohisbackforthelongpathdownthemountain.

Neesha'sownerscouldhardlybelieveitwhentheylearnedtheirdoghadbeenfoundalive.

4.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Myfamily'shousewasclosetoaroad.Andonthefarendoftheroadstoodabigtree.My

parents,togetherwithme,oftencrossedtheroadtothebigtreetohavefunwithourneighbors.

ButIwasn'tallowedtocrosstheroadtogotherebymyselfformysafety.

Oneday,forsomereason,thebigtreewouldbecutdown.Itwasjustbeforedinnertime.A

largecrowdofneighborsgatheredatthefarendoftheroadtowatchthefallingofthistree.I

watchedfrommyhouseasthetree,tiedwithropes,waslowereddown.Soon,thehugetreefell

safelytothegroundwithabigsound.Butthekidsandgrown-upsdidn'tleave.Theymoved

closertostayaroundthiswonderfuloldtree.

Likethem,Iwantedtotouchthetreewithmyhandsandsaygood-bye.ButIwasonlyfive

yearsoldandwasn'tallowedtocrossthebusyroadalone.ButasIbecamesadderwhenwatching

thetreenearlydisappear,Ithoughttomyself,"What'stheworstthingthatcouldhappen?^^Ididn't

seeanycarscoming,soIranacrosstheroadtosaygood-byetothefallentree.

Afterstandingaroundandtalkingwithsomeoftheneighbors,IrealizedthatIhadstayed

theretoolong.tcIamlatefordinner,andI'mintrouble.'」toldmyself.Withouteventhinking,and

withoutseeingiftherewereanycarscoming,Idashedoutbetweentwoparkedcarsandraced

towardtheothersideoftheroad.

Ididn'tseeacarrushingforwardfromtheotherendoftheroad.Andthedriverdidn'texpect

rdcrosstheroadatthatmoment.Whenspottingme,hetriedtostophiscar,whosetiresproduced

loudandunpleasantnoises.Butitwastoolate.

注意：

1.寫(xiě)作詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；

2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。

Paragraph1:

Beforeknowingwhathadhappened,Iwasstruckdown.

Paragraph2:

Atthehospital,itwasdiscoveredthatluckilyIwasnotseriouslyinjured.

5.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。

Ifshardtotalktodadssometimes.Therolesweoftenexpectourfatherstoplay-protector,

provider~~canmakethemdifficulttounderstand.Thafshowitwaswithmydad.Hecameto

Canadaattheageoftenandsettledinanimmigrantcommunity.Hewasnevermuchofatalker.

Herarelydrank.Hedidn'ttellstoriesabouthimselfatthedinnertableorwhenwewentforwalks

inthepark.Hewasaprivatepersonandseemedtowanttostaythatway.

ItseemedimpossibletoaskhimquestionsabouthisearlylifebeforeIwasbom-hisearly

hopesanddreams,hislovesandheartbreaks,letalonesharemyownfeelingswithhim.Ididn't

wanttothreatentheintegrity（完整）ofhishardshell.Ihadgottenusedtoit,anditmademefeel

secure.

Butwhenmyrelationshipwithmywifeandcareertookahitayearago,thingshadtochange.

Iwasfacingseriousproblemsaboutmyownnature,andIwantedtoknowwhetherhehadfaced

themtoo,andIdesperatelyneededtoknowhowhehadfoundhisway,becauseIfeltlikeIhad

lostmine.

Inaseveremomentofdesperation,itoccurredtomethatsendinganemailmightbethekey.

Anemailcanbecraftedslowlyandcarefully.He'dbeupinhisoffice-acomfortableplacefilled

withbookshelves,dustyCD-ROMsandpilesofoldnewspapers.Tdbeatmydeskinanapartment

20minutesaway.SoIcouldspeakatacomfortabledistanceandgivehimroomtoadjust.

SoIwrotetohim.Itoldhimaboutmyregretsandfears,andIaskedhimtoanswer,ifhefelt

likeit,andtosharesomethingabouthimself,somethingthatwouldgivememuch-needed

perspectiveonmylife,especiallyonrelationshipandcareer.

Twoweekslater,hisresponseshowedupinmyemailbox.

Iclosedtheemailandstartedtocry.

參考答案

1.【參考范文】

Hewokeup,staringatmeangrily.Thesmellofalcoholonhisbreathwasoverwhelmingand

Isteppedback.Ican'trememberexactlywhatIsaidtohim-probablysomethingnobetterthan,

“Mate,areyouOK?”Stilllyingonthebenchseat,themanwentquiet,lookedupandfixedhis

eyesonmine.Thenhiseyesfilledwithtearsandhesaidtome,"Godsentyou,didn'the?"Alittle

surprised,theonlyreplyIcouldthinkofwas,"Well...yes,heaskedmetotakeyouhome^^.

Muchtomyrelief,themanagreedtogetintomycar.Whiledrivinghimhome,heweptand

pouredoutthesorrowsofhisheart.Sufferingmultipletragedies,heturnedtotheonlysourceof

comfortheknew:thebottle.Ipatientlycomfortedhim,tellinghimthateveryonewouldencounter

variouskindsofdifficulties.Ifwefacedthempositively,allthedifficultieswoulddisappear.At

hisdoor,hethankedmesincerelyandpromisednottodrinkagain.Fromthesteadylookinhis

eyes,Ilearntalesson:Iflifebecomeshard,softenitwithrandomactsofkindness.

【寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了作者在路上注意到一個(gè)男人躺在路邊人行道上

的長(zhǎng)椅上，從他的樣子作者判斷出他是一個(gè)酒鬼，作者以為警察會(huì)幫助確保他在安全的地方

過(guò)夜，但是警察繞過(guò)去了，沒(méi)理那個(gè)男人，作者后來(lái)去把車停好，走回那個(gè)男人身邊，伸手

輕輕地?fù)u醒了他。

1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“他醒了，生氣地盯著我?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼?xiě)那個(gè)男人看見(jiàn)作者后的

反應(yīng)。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“使我松了一口氣的是，那個(gè)人同意上我的車。”可知，第二段可描寫(xiě)那

個(gè)人向作者傾訴自己的困難，作者開(kāi)導(dǎo)他。

2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：詢問(wèn)——男人的反應(yīng)一男人傾訴一安慰開(kāi)導(dǎo)一感激

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①盯著看：fixone'seyeson/stareat

②傾吐悲傷：pouroutthesorrows/revealthesorrows

③安慰：comfortsb./consolesb.

情緒類

①驚訝：surprised/astonished

②真誠(chéng)地：sincerely/genuinely

【典型句式】

[高分句型1]Ican'trememberexactlywhatIsaidtohim-probablysomethingnobetterthan,

“Mate,areyouOK?”（由what引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句）

[高分句型2]Ipatientlycomfortedhim,tellinghimthateveiyonewouldencountervariouskinds

ofdifficulties.（由that引導(dǎo)的賓語(yǔ)從句）

2.【參考范文】

Finallyhetouchedsomething.Ashoe,thenanankle.Hefinallycametoher.HepulledTiara

towardhimgentlybutquickly.Shehadalreadypassedoutandwasn'tbreathing.Hetookherinto

hisarmsandmanagedtostandup.Hefelttheheatoftheflamesonhischeeks.Turningaround,he

foughtthroughthesmokeandranblindlyintotheblackness.Thenextthingheknew,hewasat

thefrontdoor,thenoutside.SurrellputTiaradownontheporch.

Avoicetoldhim,“Youhavetobreatheforher.^^HestartedCPR-thefirsttimehe'dever

donesoeventhoughheknewalittleaboutit.Thewomenstoodbehindhim,prayinganxiously.

Soonasoot-filledcoughcamefromTiara'sthroat.Surrellgavefivemorebreaths.Shecoughed

again.Hereyelidsmovedabit.Hegaveonefinalbreath.Sheopenedhereyesandtookabreath

onherown.Theireyesmet.Surrellhuggedhertightandsaid,“Uncle'sgotyou.^^Though

exhausted,hesmiledwithrelief.

【寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了MichaelSurrell接到女兒打來(lái)的電話，知道隔

壁著火了，他聽(tīng)見(jiàn)了房子里女人的呼救，說(shuō)有個(gè)叫Tiara的女孩困在里面，雖然呼叫了消防

部門，他還是本能地沖進(jìn)房子救人，他患有慢性阻塞性肺病，濃煙對(duì)他來(lái)說(shuō)是致命的，他來(lái)

到房子的二樓，搜索那個(gè)女孩的蹤跡，他有不祥的念頭，就是自己可能會(huì)死在那里。

1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“最后他碰到了什么東西?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫(xiě)MichaelSurrell找到了

Tiarao

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“一個(gè)聲音告訴他:“你必須為她做人工呼吸?！薄笨芍?，第二段可描寫(xiě)

MichaelSurrell如何為Tiara進(jìn)行急救。

2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：發(fā)現(xiàn)Tiara—帶Tiara到前門——急救——感受

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①抱起某人：takesb.intoone'sarms/scoopsb.upinone'sarms

②開(kāi)始心肺復(fù)蘇術(shù)：startCPR/beginCPR

③喘口氣：takeabreath/catchone'sbreath

情緒類

①擔(dān)心：anxiously/worriedly

②筋疲力盡：exhausted/dog-tired

【典型句式】

[高分句型1]HestartedCPR-thefirsttimehe'deverdonesoeventhoughheknewalittleabout

it.（由thefirsttime引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句和though引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句）

[高分句型2]Thoughexhausted,hesmiledwithrelief.（由though引導(dǎo)的讓步狀語(yǔ)從句和省略

句）

3.【參考范文】

BonnetliftedNeeshaontohisbackforthelongpathdownthemountain.Afterthedogand

themanfellseveraltimes,BonnetthoughtofagoodwaytoholdNeesha.Hewrappedherina

scarf.Assoonastheyreachedlevelground,thecoupletookthedogtoananimalrescueshelter.

Thedoglostagreatdealofweightandwasveryweak,butsurprisinglyexceptforafewcutsand

scrapes,thetoughdogwasingoodcondition.Thecouplecontactedherownerviatheinformation

ontheInternet.

Neesha'sownerscouldhardlybelieveitwhentheylearnedtheirdoghadbeenfoundalive.

“Wehadthoughtwewouldhavelostherforeverandwereverysad.Butnow,wearesorelieved

andhappy,“Erinasaid."'Thousandsofwordscan'texpressourgratitudetothemfortheirgreat

effortstobringNeeshabackhome."Theyaresonice.Neeshaisreallyaluckydog,“saidthe

excitedwoman.Arandomactoflovemaymaketheworldawarmerplace.

【寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了8歲的金毛Neesha是一只幸運(yùn)的狗。一天，

Neesha跟著主人去戶外鍛煉，因被一只鹿驚嚇跑丟了。在沒(méi)有食物也沒(méi)有真正的棲身之所

的情況下，Neesha獨(dú)自生活了兩周，在奄奄一息的時(shí)候，被兩位爬山的醫(yī)生發(fā)現(xiàn)。

1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：

①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Bonnet把Neesha背在背上，沿著長(zhǎng)長(zhǎng)的山路往山下走去。”可知，第

一段可描寫(xiě)兩位醫(yī)生如何把Neesha帶下山以及他們?nèi)绾伟仓肗eesha。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“當(dāng)Neesha的主人得知他們的狗還活著時(shí)，他們簡(jiǎn)直不敢相信。”可知，

第二段可描寫(xiě)Neesha的主人在獲悉Neesha獲救之后的感受以及對(duì)醫(yī)生夫婦的感激之情。

2.續(xù)寫(xiě)線索：用圍巾裹——到收容所——聯(lián)系主人——主人感激

3.詞匯激活

行為類

①裹：wrap/bind

②聯(lián)系：contact/getintouchwith

③表達(dá)：express/show/convey

情緒類

①高興：happy/delighted

②激動(dòng)：excited/thrilled

【典型句式】

[高分句型1]Assoonastheyreachedlevelground,thecoupletookthedogtoananimalrescue

shelter.（由Assoonas引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句）

[高分句型2]Wehadthoughtwewouldhavelostherforeverandwereverysad.（由that弓I導(dǎo)的

賓語(yǔ)從句，省略了that）

4.【參考范文】

Beforeknowingwhathadhappened,Iwasstruckdown.AtthemomentIwasknockeddown,

Iletoutaninstinctivescream.Myneighborsheardmescreaming,andpeopleranaroundme.My

parentscame,too,veryworriedaboutme,buttheydidn'tdaremoveme.Whenthedrivergotout

ofthecar,hekeptapologizingtome.Ilayweakonthegroundandjustwantedtorest,soIsaid

nothing.Someonecalledthepoliceandanambulancecameandrushedmetothehospital.

Atthehospital,itwasdiscoveredthatluckilyIwasnotseriouslyinjured.Duringthedays

whenIwasinhospital,myparentsstayedwithmeeveryday.Mykindergartenclassmatesoften

cametoplaygameswithme.Thedriverwhoknockedmedownsentmeanapologycard,flowers

andmyfavoritesnack.Thedriversaid,'Tmreallysorry.Ididn'tmeantodoit.Pleaseforgive

me.^^Itoldthedriveritwasmyfault,too.Ididn'tseewhatwasgoingonintheroadandranout.

ThafswhyIgotThedriverthankedmeforforgivinghim.

【寫(xiě)作指導(dǎo)】本文以人物為線索展開(kāi)，講述了作者五歲時(shí)，家里附近的一棵大樹(shù)被砍倒，作

者想和大樹(shù)告別，在和一些鄰居交談后，作者意識(shí)到自己在那里待得太久了，吃晚飯快遲到

了，想都沒(méi)想，也沒(méi)看有沒(méi)有車開(kāi)過(guò)來(lái)，就從兩輛停著的車中間沖了出來(lái)，朝路的另一邊跑

去，結(jié)果被撞倒的故事。

1.段落續(xù)寫(xiě)：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我還不知道發(fā)生了什么事，就被撞倒了?！笨芍谝欢?/p>

可描寫(xiě)作者被撞倒后周圍人是如何做的。

②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“在醫(yī)院里，人們發(fā)現(xiàn)我很幸運(yùn)地傷得不重?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫(xiě)作