讀后續(xù)寫微講座八（關(guān)注構(gòu)思）-2023年新高考英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫能力提升微講座名校模擬演練

讀后續(xù)寫微講座八：關(guān)注構(gòu)思Ⅰ外刊輸入——悟語(yǔ)言之道WildlifeTeachesLessonItwasMarch9,thedayaftermy17thbirthday,whenImetPigeononmywaybacktomyneighbourhood.Beingthesameasmostotherafternoons,nothingwasunusual.MyfriendsandIwalkeddownthestreet,makingplansfordinner.Allofasudden,myattentionwascaughtbywhathappenedacrossthestreet.Abushadrunoverapigeon(鴿子),leavingthepoorcreaturestrugglingtotakeoff.Sheremindedmeofatoddlerwhocouldonlymoveunsteadily,usingherwingsasarmstoclimbtowardtheedgeoftheroad,butshemadenoprogress.Itwas,withoutdoubt,oneofthemostpainfulscenesI'veeverwitnessed.Onawhim(心血來(lái)潮),Irushedovertopickherup.Themomentmyfingerscameintocontactwithherwarm,softbody,somethingimmediatelystruckmeandfloodedmyheartlikeanelectriccurrent—thefeelingoflifeandnature.Observingthepigeoninmyhands,Ifeltherheartbeat,Isensedherbreath,andIreceivedherwarmth.Sinceshecouldn'tfly,Iwasawarethatitwouldhavebeenirresponsibletoleaveherthere.Afteramomentofhesitation,Iwrappedherinmyshirtandbroughtherback.InamedherPigeonanddecidedtogiveherahealthcheck.Herfeetcouldn'tstretchandsupportherbodyweighteffectively.WhenIgentlypulledherclaws(爪子),Ireceivednoresponse.Herfeetmusthavebeenbadlyhurtbythebus,andtheonlythingIintendedtodoforherwastoprovideherwithafortableenvironment.AssoonasshewasputinsideaboxI'dfound,Pigeonwasalarmedandstruggledtowardthedarkestcornerandcurledup(蜷縮)init.Itriedtotouchheragain,butwasrejectedbyherscreamingandtheflapping(拍打)ofherwings.Mymindwasfilledwithquestionsatthebeginning.Howonearthcouldsuchaquietanimalbetransformedintosomethingsounfriendlyandattachedtodarkness?ThenIcametorealizethatitwasmyfault.Afterall,pigeonsarewildlife.Natureistheirhome,theskyiswhattheylongfor,andfreedomistheirfaith.HowcanI,ahumanbeing,beassignificantasthosethingswithinjustafewhours?Toher,Iamjustanotherthreat.Manyofusoftenthinkinaself-centredway,andonlywhenwethinkaboutothers,includingotherspecies,canweliveinharmonywithnature.Italsotakestimetorecover,bothphysicallyandmentally,andIhopethatPigeongetswellsoon.1.重點(diǎn)詞匯再現(xiàn)(1)neighbourhoodn． 街區(qū)(2)unusualadj. 不尋常的(3)creaturen. 生物(4)remindvt. 使想起(5)makenoprogress 沒(méi)有進(jìn)步(6)immediatelyadv. 立刻(7)observev. 觀察(8)awareadj. 知道；發(fā)覺(jué)(9)effectivelyadv. 有效地(10)intendv. 打算(11)alarmedadj. 驚恐的(12)onearth 究竟；到底(13)threatn. 威脅(14)speciesn. 物種(15)harmonyn. 和諧；融洽(16)recoverv. 恢復(fù)2．重點(diǎn)句型再現(xiàn)：only倒裝句型Onlywhenwethinkaboutothers,includingotherspecies,canweliveinharmonywithnature.只有當(dāng)我們想到他人，包括其他物種時(shí)，我們才能與自然和諧相處。Ⅱ迷你語(yǔ)料庫(kù)(MiniCorpus)序號(hào)佳句呈現(xiàn)賞析1Theairisthinandwehavetorestseveraltimesontheshorthikefromcamp.描寫行進(jìn)過(guò)程中的困難。2Toourleft,snow-coveredmountainsdisappearintocloudsthatseemalmostcloseenoughtotouch.自然場(chǎng)景描寫——雪山高聳入云。3Ontheplaininfrontofus,wecanjustmakeoutaherdofgracefulanimals.自然場(chǎng)景描寫——平原上成群的動(dòng)物。4Watching①themmoveslowlyacrossthegreengrass，I'mstruck②bytheirbeauty.自然場(chǎng)景描寫＋心理描寫——?jiǎng)游飩兂扇航Y(jié)隊(duì)地穿過(guò)綠色的草地，打動(dòng)人心。①v.-ing形式watching作狀語(yǔ)；②struck的原形為strike，表示“打動(dòng)”。5Theyarebeinghunted,illegally,fortheirvaluablefur.描寫動(dòng)物的悲慘處境?！癮rebeinghunted”為現(xiàn)在進(jìn)行時(shí)的被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)。6ToZhaxi,thelandissacredandprotectingthewildlifeisawayoflife.描寫人對(duì)大自然和野生動(dòng)植物的關(guān)愛(ài)之情。7“We'renottryingtosavetheanimals，”hesays.“Actually,we'retryingtosaveourselves.”描寫保護(hù)野生動(dòng)植物的重要性——保護(hù)野生動(dòng)植物就是保護(hù)人類自己。8Inordertosave①thisspeciesfromextinction,theChinesegovernmentplaced②itundernationalprotection.描寫政府對(duì)保護(hù)野生動(dòng)植物的重視。①inordertodo作目的狀語(yǔ)；②place為熟詞生義，意為“放，置于”。9Zhaxiandothervolunteerswatchedovertheantelopesdayandnighttokeepthemsafefromattacks.描寫保護(hù)野生動(dòng)植物付出的努力?！皐atchover”意為“保護(hù)；照管”；“tokeepthemsafefromattacks”作目的狀語(yǔ)。10Themeasureswereeffective.描寫措施有效。續(xù)表序號(hào)佳句呈現(xiàn)賞析11Thegovernment,however,doesnotintendtostoptheprotectionprogrammes,sincethethreatstotheTibetanantelopehavenotyetdisappeared.描寫對(duì)野生動(dòng)植物的關(guān)注。“intend”意為“意圖，打算”；since意為“因?yàn)椤?，引?dǎo)原因狀語(yǔ)從句。12Muchisbeingdonetoprotectwildlife,butifwereallywanttosavetheplanet,wemustchangeourwayoflife.描寫保護(hù)野生動(dòng)植物的重要性及方法。much作主語(yǔ)時(shí)，謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞用第三人稱單數(shù)形式。13Onlywhenwelearntoexistinharmonywithnaturecanwestopbeingathreattowildlifeandtoourplanet.描寫保護(hù)野生動(dòng)植物的重要性及方法。only＋when引導(dǎo)的時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從句放句首，主句用部分倒裝?！癳xistinharmony”意為“和諧共存”。14Whenitestowildlifeprotection①，allspecies—thegood,thebad,andtheugly—shouldbetreatedequally②.表示所有的野生動(dòng)植物都應(yīng)該被平等對(duì)待。①“whenitesto”意為“當(dāng)涉及……”；②“betreatedequally”意為“被平等對(duì)待”。15Theworldneedsallkinds—withoutvariety,ourplanetcannotsurvive.描寫動(dòng)植物多樣化的重要性。16Inthiswayalotofanimalhomesarebeingdestroyed！描寫動(dòng)植物棲息地遭到了破壞。17Isitrighttomakeanimalshomelesssothathumanscanhavemorepaper？反問(wèn)句，用來(lái)表示贊同停止對(duì)動(dòng)植物棲息地的破壞。18Itishardwork,buttheyoungpeopleworkingattheshelterthinkitisworthit.描寫幫助動(dòng)物雖然辛苦但是值得。19Andifyouwanttohelpout,goandvolunteeryourtimeandlove.號(hào)召大家樂(lè)于奉獻(xiàn)。Ⅲ讀后續(xù)寫入門篇：關(guān)注構(gòu)思讀后續(xù)寫要求“語(yǔ)言要模仿；內(nèi)容要?jiǎng)?chuàng)造”。所以針對(duì)這個(gè)題型，解題需要分為兩個(gè)步驟，第一是讀：讀懂要素和主題、讀通情節(jié)和感情發(fā)展并讀精、讀深；第二步就是續(xù)寫：首先要關(guān)注銜接，其次就要關(guān)注構(gòu)思。現(xiàn)有考查的續(xù)寫文本為記敘文。基于文本特點(diǎn)，續(xù)寫內(nèi)容的豐富性取決于情節(jié)的發(fā)展。因此，要基于前文的閱讀，進(jìn)行合理的預(yù)測(cè)，進(jìn)而發(fā)展為續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容。但是，不管情節(jié)如何一波三折，從開(kāi)頭到結(jié)尾，情節(jié)的發(fā)展一定要緊緊圍繞主題進(jìn)行。情節(jié)必須為主題服務(wù)，與主題無(wú)關(guān)的情節(jié)就屬多余。所以，可以按照每段三個(gè)層次，構(gòu)思每一段的情節(jié)。第一段基于段首句，延續(xù)文章的發(fā)展預(yù)測(cè)可能的故事情節(jié)根據(jù)第二段段首句，預(yù)測(cè)第一段的結(jié)束第二段基于段首句，延續(xù)文章的發(fā)展故事的結(jié)局升華：呼應(yīng)主題——受到教訓(xùn)，得到啟發(fā)，獲得靈感【典題精析】閱讀下面的材料，完成以下任務(wù)。ChitoSheddenwasasimplefishermanandtourguidefromSiquirres,LimonProvince,CostaRica.Hehadabroadrangeofinterestingfactsaboutnature,whichhelpedhisbusinessquiteabit.Theyearwas1989andChitowaswalkingalongthebanksoftheReventazónRiverwhenhehappeneduponsomethingverystrange.Therewasadyingmalecrocodile(鱷魚(yú)).Whenhesteppeduptocarefullyexaminetheskinnyreptile(爬行動(dòng)物),herealizedithadbeenshotthroughtheheadandthenlefteyes.Heknew,dangerousasitwas,hecouldn'tleavethepooranimalthere,aloneandhelpless.Chitoactedquickly,callingforthehelpofseveralbravefriendstoloadtheheavyreptileintohisboat.Heknewifhecouldhealit,hewouldthensenditbackintothewild.Henamedthehugereptile“Pocho”，whichmeansstrengthandbegantocareforhiminhisownbackyard.ThekindandhelpfulfishermanstartedtohealPochowithmedicine,food,andmoreimportantly,lotsofcareandattention.Chitofedthecrocodileasteadydietofchickenandfish.Heboughtmedicinetopreventinfection(感染)andevensleptbyhissideatnight.Affectionwasoneofthemostimportantfactors.Chitogavehimkissesandhugs.Hetalkedtohimandpettedhim.“Thecrocodileneededmylovetoregainthewilltolive，”hesaid.Intime,Pochoimprovedenoughtoreturntonormalhealth.Itwastimeforhimtoreturntohisownriverinthewild.Chitoandhisfriendsloadedthecrocodilebackintohisboatandsethimfreeinanearbyriver.ThetwopartedwaysandChitoreturnedhomealone.注意：續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Chitoawokethenextmorning,andwalkedoutside.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________AcloserrelationshipwasformedbetweenPochoandChito._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1．通讀全文，本文文體為：Narration記敘文Argument議論文Exposition說(shuō)明文2．一審——獲要素時(shí)態(tài)一般過(guò)去時(shí)六要素When1989WhereSiquirres,LimonProvince,CostaRica;alongthe__banks__of__the__Reventazón__River;__inhis__own__backyardWhoChitoShedden—afishermanandtour__guideandhisfriend;adying__male__crocodilenamedPochoWhatChitofounda__dying__male__crocodile．ThekindandhelpfulfishermanstartedtohealPochowithmedicine,__food__and__lots__of__care__and__attention．Chitoandhisfriendsloadedthecrocodilebackintohisboatandset__him__freeinanearbyriver.WhyHeknew,dangerousasitwas,he__couldn't__leave__the__poor__animal__there,__alone__and__helpless.HowAcloserrelationshipwasformedbetweenPochoandChito.3.二定——主題主題：Ifpeopletreatwildanimalswith__care__and__attention,__animalswilldothesame.4．三推測(cè)——關(guān)注銜接，尤其是段首句定基調(diào)(1)續(xù)寫內(nèi)容和原文的銜接原文前兩段：ChitoSheddenwasasimplefishermanandtourguidefromSiquirres,LimonProvince,CostaRica.Hehadabroadrangeofinterestingfactsaboutnature,whichhelpedhisbusinessquiteabit.Theyearwas1989andChitowaswalkingalongthebanksoftheReventazónRiverwhenhehappeneduponsomethingverystrange.Therewasadyingmalecrocodile(鱷魚(yú)).Whenhesteppeduptocarefullyexaminetheskinnyreptile(爬行動(dòng)物),herealizedithadbeenshotthroughtheheadandthenlefteyes.可知，續(xù)寫的內(nèi)容應(yīng)該集中于Chito和鱷魚(yú)之間的互動(dòng)。(2)續(xù)寫第一段和段首句的銜接首先標(biāo)出第一段段首句的關(guān)鍵詞。Chitoawokethe__next__morning,__andwalkedoutside．說(shuō)明這是Chito把Pocho放回野外之后，在外面發(fā)生的事情。(3)續(xù)寫第一段段末和第二段段首句的銜接首先標(biāo)出第二段段首句的關(guān)鍵詞。Acloserrelationshipwasformedbetween__Pocho__and__Chito．根據(jù)“closer”可知，Chito和Pocho的關(guān)系更親密了。這提示了下文，即Chito和Pocho有更多的親密互動(dòng)。(4)續(xù)寫第二段和段首句的銜接根據(jù)第二段段首句可知，Chito和Pocho重新團(tuán)聚。而且這種團(tuán)聚源于Pocho對(duì)Chito的愛(ài)。5．四構(gòu)思——每段三分天下按照每段三個(gè)層次，構(gòu)思每一段的情節(jié)。第一段Chito看到了Pocho回來(lái)了Pocho愿意和Chito生活在一起一人一鱷的生活很融洽第二段描寫一人一鱷的融洽生活一人一鱷都從這種相處中受益升華：人類如果關(guān)愛(ài)野生動(dòng)物，野生動(dòng)物也會(huì)關(guān)愛(ài)人類名校模擬演練：1,（2022·遼寧大連·高二期末）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。TheDifferenceaTeacherCanMakeSteve,atwelveyearoldboywithalcoholicparents,wasabouttobelostforeverbytheU.S.educationsystem.Remarkably,hecouldread,yet,hewasfailing.Hehadbeenfailingsincefirstgrade.ThoughStevelookedbiggerthanhisage,yethewentunnoticed…untilMissWhite.MissWhitewasasmiling,young,beautifullady!Stevelikedhisnewteacher;yet,stillhefailed.Heneverdidhishomework.Wheneverhewaspunishedforfailingtoturninhishomework,hefeltjustterrible!Still,hedidnotstudy.Lastweek,theentireseventhgradewastestedforbasicskills.Stevehurriedthroughhistests,andcontinuedtodreamofotherthings.Hisheartwasnotinschool,butinthewoods,whereheoftenstayedaloneafterschool.Hewasalwaysalonebecausenoonecared.Oddly,Stevenevermissedadayofschool.Oneday,MissWhite’simpatientvoicebrokeintohisdaydreams.“Steve!”Shocked,heturnedtolookather.“Payattention!”MissWhitebegantogooverthetestresultsfortheseventhgrade.“Youalldidprettywell,”shetoldtheclass,“exceptforoneboy,anditbreaksmyhearttotellyouthis,but...”Shehesitated,pinningStevetohisseatwithasharpstare.“Thesmartestboyintheseventhgradeisfailingmyclass!”ShejuststaredatSteve,astheclassturnedaroundforagoodlook.Stevedroppedhiseyesandcarefullyexaminedhisfingertips.“Justtryit!ONEWEEK!”Hewasunmoved.“You’resmartenough!You’llseeachange!”Nothingchangedhim.“Giveyourselfachance!Don’tgiveuponyourlife!”Nothing.“Steve!Please!Icareaboutyou!”注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Wow!Suddenly,Stevegotit:someonecaredabouthim!________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________ThefollowingMonday,MissWhitegaveanothertest.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2,（2022·山東聊城·高二期末）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。There’saspecialboyinmyson’sclass.Everyonethinksheisabadkid.I’veheardthathetalksloudly,disrupts（擾亂）theclasswithburstsofnegativements,anddoesn’tparticipateingroups.Healsostandsoutasthetallest.Otherparentstellhismotherthey’rescaredofhim.Yethehasneverbeenphysicallyaggressive.Sometimesheevenshowskindnesstoothersinneedofhelp.I’llcallhimJoe.Mostparentsandkidsdon’tknowJoehasAspergersyndrome.Peoplewiththediseasemustlearnaboutsociallyproperbehavior.It’sveryhardforJoetocontrolhissocialbehavior.Hehasworkedhardsincesecondgrade.However,hehasfewfriendswhosupporthimwithpositivements.Joeisinthehighestlevelmathandreadingclasses.Hewantedtojoinanactivityclubinschool,butparentvolunteersrefusedhim.Theydidn’tacknowledgethathehadbeenworkinghardtofitintotheschool’ssocialnetworks.IwishthoseparentshadseenJoewalkinghomefromschoolonecoldwinterdayinJanuaryandhowhehadofferedhishelpwarmly.Drivingby,Isawhimrunandkneeldownbyalittlegirllyingontheground.Joebrushedthehairfromhereyesandsmiled.Shesmiledbackthroughtears,havingslippedandfallenontheice.Joetookoffhiscoatandspreaditout,andthenhehelpedhermovetositonit.Healsogatheredherbelongingsandputthemonhiscoat.Hewipedthesnowfromherkneesandhands,movingherarmstocheckforinjury.ThenJoehelpedherup,tookherhandandwalkedherhome.Hecarriedherpackandthenrang.herdoorbell.Whenhersisterrushedherinside,thelittlegirlsmiledbackatJoe.Thenhesetherpackdownbythedoorandwalkedhomehappily.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。IstoppedbyJoe’shouselater.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Hismotherexpressedgratitudetomeassheshowedmetothedoor.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________【答案】1,Onepossibleversion:Wow!Suddenly,Stevegotit:someonecaredabouthim!Hecouldn’tbelievehisears.HelookedupatMissWhiteinwonder.Fromhereagereyes,hecouldfeelthewarmthandtherealcare.Onthewaybackhome,thosewordsconstantlyechoedinhismind.Whenhegothome,forthefirsttimeinhislife,hedidn’tstormoutoftheroomforthewoods.Heseatedhimselfbeforethedeskandplacedhisschoolbooksonit.Determined,heturnedthefirstpageopen.ThefollowingMonday,MissWhitegaveanothertest.Spreadingthepapercarefullyonhisdesk,Stevehurriedthroughthetestandwasthefirsttohandinhispaper.Obviouslypuzzled,MissWhitebegantolookitover.Inshock,sheglancedupatSteve,thendown,thenup.Suddenly,herfacebrokeintoabrightsmile.“Thesmartestboyhadjustpassedhisfirsttest!”sheannounced,proudandexcited!Atherwords,Stevecrackedabigsmile,withhiseyessparklingwithjoyandgratitude.Heknewthatwasallbecauseofateacherwhocaredabouthim【導(dǎo)語(yǔ)】本文講述12歲的Steve，父母都是酒鬼，他的成績(jī)一直不及格。在一次七年級(jí)測(cè)試中，White老師說(shuō)他是最聰明的男孩但是成績(jī)卻不及格。隨后White老師對(duì)他進(jìn)行鼓勵(lì)和關(guān)心，讓他感受到了溫暖和真切的關(guān)懷，于是用功學(xué)習(xí)，終于在下一次考試中及格了?！驹斀狻?.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“哇！突然，史蒂夫明白了：有人關(guān)心他！”可知，第一段描述Steve在感受到White老師深切的關(guān)懷后的一系列心理變化和他在回家后的行為，他開(kāi)始認(rèn)真寫作業(yè)了。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“接下來(lái)的星期一，懷特小姐做了另一次測(cè)試?！笨芍诙蚊枋鯯teve測(cè)試的過(guò)程和結(jié)果，他通過(guò)了他的第一次考試。2.續(xù)寫線索：Steve的心理變化——Steve回家——Steve寫作業(yè)——Steve做測(cè)驗(yàn)——Steve第一次及格——Steve的喜悅和感激3.詞匯激活行為類①.回家：gethome/returnhome/gobackhome②.沖出：stormout/rushout③.交卷：handinpaper/submitpaper情緒類①.困惑：puzzled/confused②.震驚地：Inshock/astonishingly【點(diǎn)睛】[高分句型1].Stevehurriedthroughthetestandwasthefirsttohandinhispaper.（運(yùn)用了不定式作后置定語(yǔ)）[高分句型2].Heknewthatwasallbecauseofateacherwhocaredabouthim.（運(yùn)用了who引導(dǎo)的限定性定語(yǔ)從句）2,Onepossibleversion:IstoppedbyJoe’