讀后續(xù)寫動作鏈AMothersSurprise課件高三英語一輪復習

讀后續(xù)寫AMOTHER'SDAYSURPRISE1.topredictwhatwouldhappennextaccordingtotheplotdevelopmentandtheanalysisoftheplot;2.toenrichtheoutlineofthecontinuousstoryandresolutionpartofthepassage;3.topolishyoursentencesaboutactiondescription.Bytheendofthisperiod,youwillbeabletoexpresstheideasproperlyandvividly.LearningobjectivesDifficultPoints1讀后續(xù)寫“三步走”1.

閱讀（3-5mins）

2.構(gòu)思（3-5mins）

3.行文（10-15mins）負正ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhenthey

broughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.……ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJeftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear！Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.conflict續(xù)寫：Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.在父親的幫助下，早餐順利做好了！母親非常驚喜！Howtocontinueastory?①段首句決定故事走向②找到可呼應的細節(jié)?2讀后續(xù)寫評分標準評分檔次第一項第二項第三項第四項第五檔(21-25分)與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接合理。內(nèi)容豐富所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準確，可能有些許錯誤，但完全不影響意義的表達。有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。。第四檔(16-20分)與所給短文融洽度較高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接較合理。內(nèi)容比較豐富所使用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯較為豐富準確，可能有些許錯誤，但完全不影響意義的表達。有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。內(nèi)容構(gòu)思語言表達Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.……Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.……Butthestovewasamess

now.JennatoldJeftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.……Ohdear！Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.Para1父親要發(fā)火父親了解情況后，沒有發(fā)火父親和他們一起做早餐父親的幫助下，早餐順利做好了！他們非常開心Para2母親非常驚喜?、谡业娇珊魬募毠?jié)Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.ThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother'sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhenthey

broughtherbreakfastinbed.……原文細節(jié)3ButJeff'shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Para1父親要發(fā)火父親了解情況后，沒有發(fā)火父親和他們一起做早餐父親的幫助下，早餐順利做好了！他們非常開心Para2雙胞胎祝母親節(jié)日快樂母親非常驚喜！母親注意到了Jeff的手母親萬分感動?、谡业娇珊魬募毠?jié)動作描寫動作描寫動作描寫動作描寫Hekneltdown,pattedthemontheirshouldersandsaid,“Timeisonourside.Let’sdoittogether.”Havingpreparedeverything,theybegantomakethebreakfasttogether.withthehelpoftheirfather,thebreakfastwasready,givingoffapleasantscent.Para1父親了解情況后，沒有發(fā)火(蹲下來，拍著肩膀，說……）父親和他們一起做早餐（準備好一切，做早餐）父親的幫助下，早餐順利做好了(父親幫助，早餐做好了，散發(fā)香味）③行文遣詞造句:動作描寫sbdid…，did…anddid…(動作鏈條:A,BandC）Havingdone…,sbdid…（動作鏈：AandB)非謂語+

謂語+doing(表伴隨)①

拿出肉

瞄準狼

扔出去Hepulledoutthemeat,aimedatthewolfandthrewitstraighttotheanimal.②攔下車

上車

告訴司機目的地____________________________________________________________③

抱住兒子

走向前

蹲下來

一把抱??！___________________________________________________________動作鏈條A,B,CandDShewalkedforward,kneltdownandgatheredhersonintoherarms.Shestoppedataxi,gotintoitandtoldthedriverherdestination.①排了三個小時的隊伍，他被告知票賣完了。Havingqueuedfor3hours,hewastoldthattheticketshadbeensoldout.②

手機已經(jīng)充好了電，他被告知不允許帶手機進俱樂部。____________________________________________________________動作鏈條havingdone…，sbdid…Havinghisphonecharged,hewastoldthatitwasn’tallowedintheclub.①他站在路邊，仰望天空，感受著這份珍貴的寧靜。Standingbesidetheroad,helookeduptothesky,feelingthepreciouspeaceinhisheart.②

被老師的話所鼓舞，Lucy舉起了手，小聲說“我來”。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________③

傍晚來臨，Lucy坐在桌前，思考如何打發(fā)時間。___________________________________________________________動作面：

非謂語+謂語+doingEncouragedbytheteacher’swords,Lucyraisedherhand,whispering,“Iwanttohaveatry.”Withtheeveningapproaching,Lucysatbesidethedesk,wonderinghowtokillthetime.Havingreceivedthegift,shewassohappythatshewasatalosswhattodo.HavingnoticedJeff’shand,sheunderstoodthewholethingatonce,feelingasenseofwarmthfloodingintoherheart.SheLookedatthegift,tookadeepbreathandutteredsoftly“You’vegrownup,honey!”Para2母親非常驚喜！(收到禮物，高興地不知所措）母親注意到了Jeff的手（注意到Jeff的手，母親明白了一切，溫暖涌上心頭）母親萬分感動?。戳丝丛绮?，深吸一口氣，說到“寶貝長大了！”）③動作描寫小練筆sbdid…，did…anddid…(動作鏈條:A,BandC）Havingdone…,sbdid…（動作鏈：AandB)非謂語+

謂語+doing(表伴隨)Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Judgingfromhisexpression,Itwasevidentthathewasabouttoexplodeafterseeingthemess.Buttotheirrelief,havinglearnedtheirplan,hekneltdown,pattedthemontheirshouldersandsaid.“Timeisonourside.Let'sdoittogether.”Withouttheslightesthesitation,theystartedtheirbattleonceagain.Beforelong,withthehelpoftheirfather,thebreakfastwasready,givingoffpleasantsmell.Tiredthoughtheywere,theirheartswerefilledwithnothingelsebutjoyandpride.Paragraph2:

Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup“HappyMother'sDay!