讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)-情人節(jié)的特別禮物：傳遞對(duì)奶奶的愛(ài) 講義-2025屆江西省萍鄉(xiāng)高三第一次調(diào)研考試英語(yǔ)試題

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)WhenValentine’sDaywasaroundthecorner,GrandmacamedownwithaterriblecoldasshewastravellingfromColoradotomyfamily’shouseinCalifornia.Shewastooweaktogooutatall,whichwassadanddisappointing.GrandmaandGrandpahadbeenplanningtotakemylittlesisterIndiandmetothezooforValentine’sDay.Grandma,asananimallover,hadbeenespeciallylookingforwardtoit.OnValentine’sDay,IndibeggedGrandmatogotothezoowithus.ButGrandmajokinglyexplainedthatifshewentthere,shemightspreadhercoldtoothervisitors,oreventotheanimals,makingthemallstartsneezing.Iimaginedthesightthatanelephantkeptsneezing.Meanwhile,Ipretendedmyarmwasatrunkandblurtedoutafunnytrumpetingsoundthatendedwithagiganticsneeze.“Goodone,brother,”Indilaughed.“Thatelephantwouldneedahugeboxoftissues.”Grandmawasamused.Butsheinsistedthatsheshouldstayathomeandrestup.Shewishedusapleasantvisitandremindedustosendherregardstothemonkeys.Well,wedidgoandwedidhaveagreattime,butIkeptwishingGrandmacouldhavebeentherewithus.Whenwereachedthemonkeymountain,Grandpasuggestedtakingapicturewiththemonkeysandtoldustoholdstillandsay“cheese”.“Cheese,”Isaid.ButIndisaid,“HappyValentine’sDay,Grandma!”“Youweresupposedtosaycheese,”saidGrandpa.Indishrugged,“Itjustcameout.”“I’mgladitdid,”Isaid.“Becauseyou’rejustgivenmeafantasticidea.Whatifwetakepicturesofdifferentanimals,andthenturnthemintoaspecialValentinegiftforGrandma?”IndiandGrandpaagreedandwekepttakingpicturesforGrandma.Paragraph1:Whenwegothome,wesetaboutmakingthegift._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:ThenwetookthegiftupstairstoGrandma’sroom._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________文章大意情人節(jié)前夕，奶奶從科羅拉多州來(lái)加州途中患重感冒，無(wú)法按計(jì)劃帶“我”和妹妹去動(dòng)物園。情人節(jié)當(dāng)天，我們還是去了動(dòng)物園，玩得很開(kāi)心，但“我”一直希望奶奶也在。在猴山拍照時(shí)，妹妹喊出“情人節(jié)快樂(lè)，奶奶！”，這讓“我”想到以動(dòng)物照片為奶奶制作情人節(jié)禮物。故事山分析開(kāi)端：奶奶因感冒無(wú)法帶“我”和妹妹去動(dòng)物園過(guò)情人節(jié)。發(fā)展：我們?nèi)チ藙?dòng)物園，在猴山拍照時(shí)妹妹的話啟發(fā)“我”制作禮物。高潮：回家后制作禮物以及給奶奶送禮物的過(guò)程。結(jié)局：奶奶收到禮物后的反應(yīng)，體現(xiàn)親情的溫暖和禮物的意義。伏筆及在續(xù)寫(xiě)中的回應(yīng)伏筆：“Grandma,asananimallover,hadbeenespeciallylookingforwardtoit.”表明奶奶熱愛(ài)動(dòng)物。回應(yīng)：續(xù)寫(xiě)中以動(dòng)物照片制作禮物，滿足奶奶對(duì)動(dòng)物的喜愛(ài)，給她帶來(lái)驚喜。伏筆：“Iimaginedthesightthatanelephantkeptsneezing.”體現(xiàn)“我”豐富的想象力?；貞?yīng)：在制作禮物時(shí)，可能會(huì)發(fā)揮想象力對(duì)照片進(jìn)行創(chuàng)意加工，如添加有趣的文字描述動(dòng)物打噴嚏的樣子。伏筆：“ButIndisaid,‘HappyValentine’sDay,Grandma!’”妹妹對(duì)奶奶的情感表達(dá)?；貞?yīng)：制作的禮物圍繞情人節(jié)祝福展開(kāi)，強(qiáng)化妹妹對(duì)奶奶的愛(ài)，也讓奶奶感受到這份溫暖。伏筆：“‘Whatifwetakepicturesofdifferentanimals,andthenturnthemintoaspecialValentinegiftforGrandma?’IndiandGrandpaagreed.”表明要制作禮物。回應(yīng)：續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段詳細(xì)描述制作禮物的過(guò)程，如挑選照片、裝飾等。伏筆：“Well,wedidgoandwedidhaveagreattime,butIkeptwishingGrandmacouldhavebeentherewithus.”體現(xiàn)對(duì)奶奶的思念?；貞?yīng)：制作禮物是彌補(bǔ)奶奶未能同去的遺憾，奶奶收到禮物后，能感受到我們的思念，進(jìn)一步加深親情。續(xù)寫(xiě)要點(diǎn)第一段：詳細(xì)描述回家后制作禮物的過(guò)程。先挑選出最有趣、最有代表性的動(dòng)物照片，然后用彩色筆在照片周圍畫(huà)上愛(ài)心、花朵等裝飾，還可以在每張照片下寫(xiě)上有趣的文字，如動(dòng)物的“內(nèi)心獨(dú)白”，表達(dá)對(duì)奶奶的祝福。第二段：描述送禮物給奶奶的場(chǎng)景。我們走進(jìn)奶奶房間，將禮物遞給她，奶奶打開(kāi)禮物時(shí)的表情從驚訝到感動(dòng)，她可能會(huì)逐張翻看照片，眼中泛著淚花，對(duì)我們的禮物贊不絕口，最后我們一起擁抱，感受親情的溫暖。情感線從去動(dòng)物園時(shí)對(duì)奶奶的思念，到?jīng)Q定制作禮物時(shí)的期待，制作過(guò)程中的用心和喜悅，送禮物時(shí)的緊張與興奮，以及奶奶收到禮物后的感動(dòng)，情感層層遞進(jìn)，突出親情的美好。故事線奶奶因感冒無(wú)法陪我們?nèi)?dòng)物園。我們?cè)趧?dòng)物園游玩，妹妹的話啟發(fā)制作禮物?；丶液筇暨x照片，裝飾并撰寫(xiě)文字制作禮物。帶著禮物上樓，走進(jìn)奶奶房間。奶奶打開(kāi)禮物，表現(xiàn)出驚訝與感動(dòng)。一家人擁抱，感受親情溫暖。主旨升華句Loveisnotboundbycircumstancesbutcanbeexpressedincreativeways,justlikethegiftwemadeforGrandma.Asimpleactofkindnessandthoughtfulnesscanbringimmeasurablejoyandwarmth,especiallytothosewelove.Thepoweroffamilyloveliesinthesmallgesturesthatshowwecare,likethisspecialValentine'sgiftforGrandma.Eveninthefaceofdisappointment,lovefindsawaytoshinethrough,asourgifttoGrandmademonstrated.ThisValentine'sDay,welearnedthatthemostpreciousgiftsarenotboughtbutcraftedwithloveandsharedwithfamily.寫(xiě)作示范示范一Whenwegothome,wesetaboutmakingthegift.First,wecarefullyselectedthebestpicturesfromourzoovisit.Theoneofthelionroaringwasamust-include,andthephotoofthecutepandasmunchingonbamboowasperfecttoo.Then,IndiandItookoutourcoloredpensandstarteddecoratingtheedgesofthepictureswithheartsandflowers.Iwrotefunnycaptionsundere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