2025年高考英語應用文寫作與讀后續(xù)寫講義練習16.讀后續(xù)寫作基本技法

2025年高考英語應用文寫作與讀后續(xù)寫講義練習讀后續(xù)寫作基本技法(2021·新高考Ⅰ卷)AMOTHER’SDAYSURPRISEThetwinswerefilledwithexcitementastheythoughtofthesurprisetheywereplanningforMother’sDay.HowpleasedandproudMotherwouldbewhentheybroughtherbreakfastinbed.TheyplannedtomakeFrenchtoastandchickenporridge.Theyhadwatchedtheirmotherinthekitchen.Therewasnothingtoit.JennaandJeffknewexactlywhattodo.Thebigdaycameatlast.Thealarmrangat6a.m.Thepairwentdownthestairsquietlytothekitchen.Theydecidedtoboiltheporridgefirst.TheyputsomericeintoapotofwaterandleftittoboilwhiletheymadetheFrenchtoast.Jeffbroketwoeggsintoaplateandaddedinsomemilk.Jennafoundthebreadandputtwoslicesintotheeggmixture.Next,Jeffturnedonthesecondstoveburnertoheatupthefryingpan.EverythingwasgoingsmoothlyuntilJeffstartedfryingthebread.Thepanwastoohotandthebreadturnedblackwithinseconds.Jennathrewtheburntpieceintothesinkandputintheothersliceofbread.Thistime,sheturneddownthefiresoitcookednicely.ThenJeffnoticedsteamshootingoutofthepotandthelidstartingtoshake.Thenextminute,theporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.Jennapanicked.Thankfully,Jeffstayedcalmandturnedoffthegasquickly.Butthestovewasamessnow.JennatoldJefftocleanitupsotheycouldcontinuetocooktherestoftheporridge.ButJeff’shandtouchedthehotburnerandhegaveacryofpain.Jennamadehimputhishandincoldwater.Thenshecaughtthesmellofburning.Ohdear!Thepieceofbreadinthepanhadturnedblackaswell.注意:續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150個左右。Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.

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Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.

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Step1:厘清主題把握走向要素描述主題whenMother’sDay本文以母親節(jié)為線索展開,講述了雙胞胎Jenna和Jeff為了獻給母親一份美味的早餐,自己動手做起早餐來,但不幸的是,他們接連失敗,后來在父親的幫助下獲得成功,他們把早餐獻給親愛的母親,母親非常感動的故事。whereAthomewhoThetwins—JeffandJennawhatThepairpreparedbreakfastfortheirmother.whyTheywantedtogivetheirmotherasurprise.Step2:尋找主線深挖要點文段線索文脈線索前文情感線excited→disappointed故事線First,theyboiledtheporridge.→Next,theymadetheFrenchtoast.→Asliceofbreadturnedblack.→Thentheyfoundtheporridgeboiledoverandputoutthefire.→Theotherpieceofbreadturnedblack,too.續(xù)寫要點1.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.2.TheirmotherwassurprisedtofindthebreakfastcookedbyJeffandJenna.Step3:精研首句起承轉(zhuǎn)合根據(jù)所給續(xù)文段落首句產(chǎn)生問題鏈接,形成續(xù)寫思路,采用G-N(Given-New)和Q-A(Question-Answer)策略,做好起承轉(zhuǎn)合,創(chuàng)造新的情節(jié)。Paragraph1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Q1:WhatwasFather’sfirstinstinctwhenfacedwiththemess?Q2:Howdidthetwinsexplaintheirplantotheirfather?Q3:WhatdidFatherdotohelpthetwinstomakedeliciousFrenchtoastandchickenporridge?Paragraph2:Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Q1:WhatwasMother’sfirstinstinctwhenthetwinswokeherup?Q2:WouldthetwinsgiveMotherabigsurprise?HowdidtheyexpresstheirbestwishestoMother?Q3:HowdidMotherfeel?Howcanyoudesigntheendingmoreappealingandmeaningful?續(xù)寫第一段梗概Theirfatherhelpedthemadjustthefireandtheypreparedbreakfastsuccessfully.Howhappytheywere!續(xù)寫第二段梗概Thetwins’motherwassurprisedtoseethedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher.Shewasdeeplymovedbyherchildren.Step4:吃透語言風格一致為了使所寫的內(nèi)容和語言和原文保持連貫性和一致性,讀后續(xù)寫需要通過在理解原文的基礎(chǔ)上,巧妙利用“拉平效應”,創(chuàng)造性地模仿和使用語言,即繼承原文語言表達方面的顯著特征,包括寫作手法及語言表達技巧,從而一方面保證寫作的效率和流暢度,另一方面保證寫作在各個語言層次和表達風格上和原文保持一致。通過分析語篇,可以從五個方面理解原文的語言應用技巧:1.場景描寫(Surroundings)場景描寫指的是描寫人、物、事發(fā)生的時間、地點、自然環(huán)境及社會場景等。場景描寫可以充當背景信息,提供人、物、事發(fā)生的具體設(shè)定。其次,場景描寫可以表達角色的感情、情緒,可以隨著情節(jié)的發(fā)展有所變化,甚至可以提示、推動情節(jié)的發(fā)展,增強語篇的代入感。2.動作描寫(Actions)動作描寫指的是描寫人物在具體情況下的行為舉止,是情節(jié)發(fā)展的具體體現(xiàn)。恰到好處的動作描寫不僅可以塑造生動形象的人物,還可以反映人物的情感態(tài)度及心理變化,并最終反映人物的性格特點及思想品質(zhì)。3.心理描寫(Feelings)心理描寫指的是描寫人物在具體情況下的看法、感受、情感及心理活動,并由此反映人物的性格特點及思想品質(zhì)。心理描寫除了對心理的直接描寫,還可以結(jié)合動作描寫及場景描寫,共同構(gòu)成有意義、緊湊的語篇。4.有效對話(EffectiveDialogues)有效對話是記敘語篇中塑造人物的一個重要手段。對話的有效性首先體現(xiàn)在符合人物設(shè)定,這樣不僅能夠有效地推動情節(jié)的發(fā)展,更能夠增加記敘的生動性。此外,對話語言也要符合記敘語篇的語言特點,即生活化、簡化及去書面化。5.修辭(Figuresofspeech)修辭是增加語言生動性的最佳手段。它可以引起共鳴,使抽象的情境具體化。常見的可以應用的修辭有比喻、擬人、夸張和排比等?？紙鰸M分作文1:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.①Father’sappearingwaslikeasaviortothetwochildren.②Undertheguidanceoftheirfather,theytookpositiveactionandstartedalloveragain.Theymadethebreadandthenwentoncookingporridge.Fatherhelpedthemadjustthefire,③whichwasthekeytosuccess.Itwasallrightthistime.Deliciousbreakfastwasready.④Howhappytheywere!Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.⑤Whentheirmothersawthedeliciousandperfectbreakfastinfrontofher,shewasverysurprised.⑥Itwasnotonlythegift,buttheloveofthechildrenforherthatmovedherverymuch.Thetwochildrencouldfinishcookingabreakfast,whichshedidn’texpect.Thechildrensaidloudly,⑦“HappyMother’sDay!”⑧Motherhuggedthemtightlyandkissedthemagainandagain.評卷老師點評:①過渡自然流暢。②時態(tài)、語境和前文相互照應。③使用高分句式。④使用高分句式。⑤使用高分句式。⑥使用并列結(jié)構(gòu)。⑦使用直接引語,生動真實。⑧動作及情感表達真實細膩。考場滿分作文2:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Facedwiththemessthetwinshadmadeofthekitchen,Fatherfeltannoyedbuttriedtocontainhimself.Jennaranuptohim,whispering“We...WejustwanttomakebreakfastforMomasMother’sDaygift.”Afterhelearnedwhatallwasabout,hisannoyancegavewaytoreliefanddelight.Immediately,hejoinedthemandtheystartedalloveragain.SoontheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.Thekitchenfilledwiththescentofbreakfastandsweetnessofafamily.Lookingatthework,thethreeexchangedanunderstandingsmile.Aftersignalingthemtokeepitasecret,Fatherslippedintothebedroom,pretendingtoknownothingaboutit.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Stillalittlesleepy,Motherfailedtofigureoutwhattheywereupto.“HappyMother’sDay!”Thetwinscongratulated.“Wemadebreakfastforyouasyoudothatforus.Mom,weloveyou!”Thoughstillinherpajamas,Mothertookabiteofthetoastandsippedthehotporridge.Lostinthedeliciousbreakfastandpurelovefromhertwins,shesobbed,withdelightfultearsstreamingdownherface.Lovingly,shepressedtwogentlekissesontheirforeheads,proudlyenjoyingtheirbestwishes.Theirfatherwasstandinginthedoorway,recordingthistouchingscene.ThewholeroomwasbathedinahappyMother’sDayatmosphere.評卷老師點評:文章用詞精準(whisper,understanding,signal,pretend,lostin,streamdown,proudly等),句式高級(非謂語動詞、獨立主格和介詞with的復合結(jié)構(gòu)等),通過動作、對話和心理活動等描寫,生動、形象地呈現(xiàn)了雙胞胎孩子在母親節(jié)為媽媽做早餐,獻上一份特別的節(jié)日禮物和驚喜?？紙鰸M分作文3:Asthetwinslookedaroundthemindisappointment,theirfatherappeared.Seeingthemess,Fatherfrozewithshock,asifrootedontheground.Fromtheblackbreadandthespilledporridge,hesuddenlyfiguredouttheirsecret.Asmileofunderstandingflashedacrosshisface.Herealizedtheirintention.HejoinedtheminpreparingtheMother’sDaysurpriseimmediately.Theystartedalloveragain.Everythingwentsmoothly.Thechickenandriceweredancingharmoniouslyintheboilingwaterpotandbreadsliceswereshowingoffitsmosttremendousgoldencolor.SoontheFrenchtoastandchickenporridgewereready.Thekitchenfilledwiththescentofbreakfastandsweetnessofafamily.Despitetheoilstainsonthetwins’aprons,nothingseemedimperfect,andallwasinplaceexceptthemostimportantone.Thetwinscarriedthebreakfastupstairsandwoketheirmotherup.Stillalittlesleepy,Motherfailedtofigureoutwhattheywereupto,butthecheerful“HappyMother’sDay”fromthetwosweetiesbroughtherbacktoreality.Thebreakfastwithlovemadebyhertwinsreallystruckherheartstrings.Motherkissedthemandgavethemeachabearhug,saying“Ohdear,thankyoumysweeties.Whatabigsurprise!”Thenextmoment,shewokeupFather,eagertosharetheblessingandtheinvitingbreakfastseasonedwithlove.Father,whohadbeenawake,cooperativelyrubbedhiseyesandtookabigbite,winkingatthetwinssecretly.Afterall,thesurprisedidmakeasweetsurprise!評卷老師點評:文章通過動作、對話和心理活動等描寫,生動、形象地呈現(xiàn)了雙胞胎孩子在母親節(jié)為媽媽做早餐,獻上一份特別的節(jié)日禮物和驚喜。在故事情節(jié)推進的過程中,運用語篇分析的主位推進理論、呼應和修辭等手法來揭示語篇的感恩、互愛的主題,讓人豁然明白“我們平時認為媽媽無條件的愛和支持是理所當然,沒什么大不了的。等到自己回報母愛時,卻發(fā)現(xiàn)并不輕松”,反映內(nèi)心觸動和成長歷程?！痉椒ㄟ\用】1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Iwasanaveragestudentinmyearlyelementaryyears.IcamehomewithasteadyflowofB’s,C’sandtheoccasionalF’sinsecondlanguagesubjects.IwastoldthatIwasn’tapplyingmyselfand,aseveryreportcardIeverbroughthomeclearlystated,Italkedtoomuch.Ididn’twritewhenIwassupposedtowrite.Italkedtootherswhiletheteacherwasgivinginstructions.ThatIcouldrecitewhatshehadsaidtotheclasswhileIwastalkingwasnothelpfulbecauseIhadanegativeeffectonmyclassmates’learning.SoIregularlybroughthomedisappointingreportcards.Myparentsandmyteachersdidn’tknowwhattodowithme.Punishmentsdidn’tseemtowork.Rewardsdidn’tseemtoeither.And,frankly,Idon’tthinkIknewwhatIcoulddoto“applymyself”.AndIcertainlydidn’tknowhowtonotenjoytalkingwithmyclassmates!WhatIknewwasthatItalkedtoomuch.Untilgrade5.Thatautumn,wehadasuddenchangeinteachersasourelderlyteachertookamedicalleave.Inhisplace,ayoungsubstitute(代課老師)arrived—MrsRoyal.Shelookedlikeshewasfreshlyoutofuniversityandseemedtooyoungtobecastintheroleofbeingresponsibleforaclassoftween,butthereshewas,chargedwithalivelygroup,andme.Idon’tremembermanydetailsofthatyearexcepttheafternoonwhenIgotmyfirstreportcardfromher.Shehandedoutthereportcardsrightaftertheafternoonbreakandinvitedustolookthemover.Thensheletusknowthatwecouldalltalkquietlyamongstourselveswhileshecalledeachstudentuponeatatime,inalphabeticalorder(按字母順序),todiscussourreportcardswithher.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右：2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Ilookedovermyreportcard,expectingtheusualresult.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thenitwasmyturntotalkwithher.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Tenmilesawaystoodahousewithshinyredwalls,agreengardenandanappletree.Ayounggirl’sfacewouldbeseenreflectingfromoneofthelargeglassywindows.HernameisMaggie.Hereyesweresparklingandonherfacetherewasasmilewhichcouldlightamillioncandles.Sheseemedtobelongingforachancetoplaylikeayoungchild,butshehadnostrengthinherlegsbecausesheandherfamilymetwithanaccident,inwhichshelostbothherlegs.Butherspiritwasstrong.Shewouldbeinspiredbyseeingbirdsfly.Theflyingeaglewouldmakeherwanttofly.Shewaslonely.Shelongedforatruefriendwhowouldtalktoherandteachhertoflyoratleasttellherstoriesaboutsoaringintothebluesky.Oneevening,Maggieslowlyrolledherwheelchairtothegiantwindowandlookedouttothemanyhousesthatlayacrosstheroad.Suddenlysheheardsomeonesingingandthencouldseeanoldmaninapilotsuitsinginginglory.Thebeautifulsoundandthemelodymadethelittlegirlhappy.Suddenlyhestoppedandgazeduptowardher.“Whatareyoustaringat?”hesaidangrily.“YouthinkI’macircusclown?(馬戲團小丑)”“No,Sir.Iwasjustlisteningtoyou.Yousingverywell,”shesaid.“Idon’tneedyourpraises.Idon’tneedanyone!”heshouted.Hestartedtowalktohishouseandshutthedoor.Tearsrolleddownfromherapple-redcheeksasthemanshoutedather.Shewaslonely.Nextmorning,Maggiepushedherwheelchairacrossthegardentothestoneroadaslittlechildrenplayedhide-and-seekaroundher.Suddenlyoutofnowherealoadingtruckcamerumblingacrosstowardher.Terrified,shetriedtomoveawayfromitspathbutthewheelsofherchairwerestuck.“Ohmy,”shethoughtasthetruckcameinherdirectionfast,withthedriverunawareoftheobstructioninfrontofhim.Shescreamedloudlybutinasplitsecondshewaspulledoutofherwheelchairbysomeoneandfellontheground.Sheclosedhereyesandshiveredasthetruckpassedherwhistling.Assheopenedhereyes,shecouldseeamanstandingbesideher.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在相應位置作答。Shegazeduptohimandimmediatelyrecognizedhimasthemanshesawsinginglastnight.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________MaggiegottoknowhisnamewasKenandthathewasaretiredpilot.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Mamawasweavingamat(織墊子)withwild-grassstalks(莖稈)whenshecalledtoAchenyo,“Willyoudomeafavorandfetchmesomewaterforthepaints,Achenyo?”Inthecornerwerepotsofcoloringmattershe’dusetopaintthefinishedmats.“Ofcourse,Mama!”Achenyopickedupaclaypotassheslippedoutside.Shedidn’tlikemat-weaving,althoughitwasatraditionforamothertopassontheskillstoherdaughter.Achenyowouldratherbeplayingoutdoorswithherfriends.Outside,AchenyocalledtoAjuma,whosehousewasacrossfromhers.Bothgirls,withclaypotsbalancedontheirheads,madetheirwaytotheNigerRiver.Whentheyarrivedatthewater’sedge,whattheyfoundwasshocking.Theriverwasgone!Initsplacewasablanketofdarkgreenleavesdottedbycoloredflowers.“Ohno!”Achenyocried.“Theriverisgone!There’snowaterfordrinking,cooking,orbathing!Mamawon’thavewatertomixthepaintsforhermats.Lastyear,therainyseasonbroughtaninvasionofwaterhyacinths(水葫蘆).Theplantscoveredtheriverandleftnoroomtoputinapottofetchwater.Therewasnoroomtobatheorswim.Fishermencouldn’tcasttheirnetsforfish.Andnowthewaterhyacinthswereback“Howcouldsuchaprettyplantcausesuchharm?”AchenyowonderedTheadultsjumpedintothewateramongthebroad,greenleaves,Theybeganthrowingthemontotheriverbank.AchenyoandAjumajoinedthem.Whenthey’dclearedenoughplants,thegirlsfilledtheirpotswithwater.ApileofwaterhyacinthslayontheriverbankWhatapitytowastesuchprettyflowers,Achenyothought.ShepickedsomeforMama,andthenthegirlsheadedhome.Eachday,theyfoundtherivercoveredbywaterhyacinthsasifnoonehadclearedthewaterfrontthedaybefore.Oneday,asAchenyomovedanarmfulofdriedwaterhyacinthsoutofherway,shehadanidea.Carryingtheplantsunderherarm,sheranhome.“Mama,willyouteachmetoweave?注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Mamawastoogladtopassonthemat-weavingskillstoherdaughter.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________MamaandAchenyothentaughttheirneighbors.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Mykitchenwasamess.Cloudsofflourdustedthecounters,thefloor,andtheapronsofthewomengatheredthere.Peelsfrom40poundsofappleswerepiledinthecorner.Mixingbowlsstickywithcinnamonandsugartippedmessilyinthesink.Thewrappersfrom12pounds’worthofbutterspilledfromthetrash.But,wow,itdidsmellsweet.SixofushadgatheredthatSaturdaymorningtomakeapplepies.Oncecolleagues,nowsimplyfriends,wesharedanintensecuriosityaboutallsortsofthings,andwelovedtochat.Todayourcuriosityandchatterweredirectedtopie-making.WhileIwasnotopchef,IknewhowtousearollingpinandI’dhadyearsofpracticeservingupstrawberrycakes,coconutcream,andsourcherrypiestomyfamily.Pie-makingisalotofwork.Whoevercoinedthephrase“easyaspie”musthavemeantconsuming,notcreating.Wespenthourspeeling,coring,slicing,measuring,andlearningtohandledelicatedough(面團).“It’sstickingtotherollingpin,”oneofthemsaid,hervoicefullofdepression.“Ohno,it’scracking!”cameanothercry.Iassuredthemthepatchedcrust(皮)wouldsimplyserveasareminderthatthesepieswerehome-made.Outside,anOctobersnowstormstruckheavily.Inside,though,itwasallsteamywindows,softmusicandhappylaughteraswefinallyputourpiesintotheoven.Whenplanning“PieDay”,wedecidedthatwewouldeachmaketwopies:Oneforourfamiliesandonetodonatetosomeoneelse.Byearlyafternoon,12pieshadbeenplacedonthecounter,theirperfectlyimperfectcrustsshininggoldenly.Werushedtopreparefordelivery,packingthepiesmessilyinboxesandbags.Wemarcheddownthedriveway.Thesnowhadmelted(融化);theroadswereclear.Itwastimetodeliver.Then,disasterstruck.Oneofthepainstakinglycraftedpiesmeltedthroughthebagitwaspackedinandfellontothedriveway.Screamsofhorrorfollowed.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Onefriendranbackintothekitchenandreturnedwithforks.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thebestpartwasstilltocome:Handingoutpieswasevenbetterthaneatingpies.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案1．Ilookedovermyreportcard,expectingtheusualresult.Buttomysurprise,herfeedbackwasdifferent.Insteadoffocusingonthenegatives,shepointedouttheimprovementsIhadmade.Sheacknowledgedmyefforts,howeversmall,andencouragedmetokeepworkingonmyweaknesses.Idouble-checkedandmadesureitwasdefinitelymyreportcard.Eventhoughwehadbeengivenpermissiontotalkamongstourselves,IhadverylittletosaytofriendsasIwaitedanxiouslyforhertocallmyname.Thenitwasmyturntotalkwithher.Shebeganwithawarmsmile,“Youhaveanyquestionsforme?”Irememberlookingdownatmyreportcardandsaying,“Idon’tgetA’s,besides,nowhereonheredoesitsayItalktoomuch.”Shesaid,“Ifiguredyoualreadyknewyoutalkedtoomuch,soIthoughtIcouldtellyousomethingdifferent.Asforthegrades,youearnedtheA’s.”Fromthatdayon,IknewIwascapableof“straightA’s”andcouldhavequalitiesotherthanthatofastudentwhotalkedtoomuchinclass.【寫作分析】本文以學生的學習經(jīng)歷和改變?yōu)榫€索展開，講述了“我”在小學早期是一個成績中等且愛在課堂上講話的學生。由于這種不良習慣，“我”不僅影響了自己的學習，還對同學產(chǎn)生了負面影響，導致常常帶回家令人失望的成績單。盡管父母和老師嘗試了各種方法，但都沒有顯著效果。直到五年級時，班里來了一位年輕的代課老師MrsRoyal，她以不同的教學方式處理成績單，讓“我”對自己的學習問題有了新的認識和期待。【要點解析】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我看了看我的成績單，期待著和往常一樣的結(jié)果?！笨芍?，第一段可描寫作者得到的成績單和往常不同。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“然后輪到我和她說話了。”可知，第二段可描寫作者和MrsRoyal交流的具體內(nèi)容。2.續(xù)寫線索：成績單反饋不同——肯定進步——開始談話——給于肯定——感動。3.詞匯激活行為類①指出：pointout/identify②鼓勵：encourage/inspire③認為：figure/think情緒類①驚訝：surprise/astonishment②焦急地：anxiously/nervously[高分句型1]Eventhoughwehadbeengivenpermissiontotalkamongstourselves,IhadverylittletosaytofriendsasIwaitedanxiouslyforhertocallmyname.(運用了eventhough引導的讓步狀語從句和as引導的時間狀語從句)[高分句型2]Idon’tgetA’s,besides,nowhereonheredoesitsayItalktoomuch.(運用了nowhere位于句首的倒裝句以及省略that的賓語從句)2．Shegazeduptohimandimmediatelyrecognizedhimasthemanshesawsinginglastnight."Thankyouforsavingme,"shesaidingratitude,"andI'msorryifIbotheredyoulastnightwithmylistening."Themanlookedather,asoftnessinhiseyes."Ididn’tmeantobesoharsh."hesaid,hisvoicefilledwithremorse.ThesoftnessopenedMaggie’sheart.Shepouredoutherstoryoftheaccident,herlongingforafriend,andherobsessionwithflying.Kenlistenedintently,hisheartgoingouttotheyounggirl."AndIdon’tseemtobetheonlyonewholovesflying."saidthegirl,eyeingtheman’suniform.MaggiegottoknowhisnamewasKenandthathewasaretiredpilot.Asthesunbegantoset,MaggielearnedsomuchaboutKenthatsherealizedthatshehadfoundatruefriendinKen.Forthefirsttimeinalongtime,shefeltgenuinehappiness.Thenextday,KencamebacktovisitMaggiewithasmallgift,abookaboutflying.Maggie’sfacelitupassheflippedthroughthepages,imaginingherselfsoaringthroughtheclouds.Manyafternoonssawtheminthegarden,laughingandenjoyingeachother’scompany.Theirfriendshipgrewstrongerwitheachpassingday.【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了一個名叫麥琪的年輕女孩，因為一次事故失去了雙腿。盡管身體受到限制，麥琪的精神依然堅強。她渴望找到一個真正的朋友，能和她交談、教她飛翔，或者至少給她講述關(guān)于藍天的故事。一天，麥琪在窗前聽到一個老人唱歌，她很開心地欣賞著。但老人卻生氣地責備她，并走回自己的房子。麥琪感到非常孤獨。第二天，當一輛貨車朝她駛來時，她被一個人拉出輪椅并躺在地上，幸免于難。她睜開眼睛看到的人正是昨晚唱歌的那個男人。他們互相交流，麥琪向他傾訴了她的故事。她發(fā)現(xiàn)這個男人名叫肯，是一位退休飛行員。他們成為了真正的朋友，每天在花園里笑著相處。他們的友誼與日俱增?！疽c解析】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“她抬頭望著他，立刻認出他就是昨晚唱歌的那個人?！笨芍谝欢慰擅鑼扄滅鞅磉_感謝以及向肯講述她的故事。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“麥琪知道他的名字叫肯，是一名退休飛行員。”可知，第二段可描寫麥琪了解肯的很多事情以及他們成為了好朋友。。2.續(xù)寫線索：麥琪抬頭望著他并且認出他——麥琪表達感謝——麥琪講述自己的故事——了解肯的事情——他們成為好朋友——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類①打擾：bothered/disturbed②.渴望：longfor/yearnfor③.意識到：realized/beawareof情緒類①.感謝：thank/showingherappreciation/showhergratitude/begrateful②.專心地：intently/attentively[高分句型1].AndIdon’tseemtobetheonlyonewholovesflying.（運用了關(guān)系代詞who引導的定語從句。）[高分句型2].Maggie’sfacelitupassheflippedthroughthepages,imaginingherselfsoaringthroughtheclouds.（運用現(xiàn)在分詞imagining作狀語。）3．Mamawastoogladtopassonthemat-weavingskillstoherdaughter.Butshewasdoubtfulaboutthewaterhyacinthstalks.Achenyoinsistedthatthewaterhyacinthstalkswouldbestrongenoughtobemadeintoschoolbagstocarrybooks,andbasketstotakevegetablestothemarket.So,MamabegantoteachAchenyohowtoseparatethestalksfromtheleaves,howtobendthewovenropeintoaroundshapeandhowtotietheropestogether.Achenyolearnedveryquicklyandsoonshecouldweavebagsandbasketsallbyherself.MamaandAchenyothentaughttheirneighbors.Theywerealleagertomaketheirowncraftsusingthosewaterhyacinthstalks,whichnowseemednotsoannoying.Theymadeschoolbagsfortheirchildren,andbaskets,trays,andchairmatsfordailyuse.Bytheendoftherainyseason,thevillagerswereeagertogototherivereverymorningtoharvestwaterhyacinths.Theynolongerthoughtoftheplantasaninvader,butaprovider.Achenyowasproudthatshemadeadifferencetohercommunity.【寫作分析】本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。本文以人物為線索展開。媽媽在織墊子時叫阿琴約幫她取些水來拌顏料。阿琴約不喜歡織墊子，但還是愉快地答應了。她和朋友阿朱瑪去尼日爾河取水，卻發(fā)現(xiàn)河水不見了，取而代之的是一片布滿彩色花朵的綠色葉子。原來，去年雨季水葫蘆入侵，覆蓋了整條河，導致無法取水、沐浴或捕魚。成人和孩子們開始清理水葫蘆。阿琴約覺得這些花扔掉可惜，便撿了一些給媽媽。每天清理的水葫蘆第二天又會重新覆蓋河面，這讓阿琴約想到一個主意。她拿著干枯的水葫蘆跑回家問媽媽：“你能教我織東西嗎？”【要點解析】1.段落續(xù)寫①由第一段句首內(nèi)容“媽媽很高興把編織墊子的技藝傳給女兒。”可知，第一段可以描寫媽媽教阿琴約的過程。②由第二段句首內(nèi)容“然后，媽媽和阿琴約教他們的鄰居?！笨芍诙慰梢悦鑼憢寢尯桶⑶偌s教他們的鄰居的過程和因此帶來的變化。2.續(xù)寫線索：傳藝給女兒——學會編織——二人教鄰居——變化——感到驕傲3.詞匯激活行為類①堅持：insist/persist②開始：begin/start③教導：teach/instruct情緒類①懷疑的：doubtful/skeptical②煩人的：annoying/tiresome【高分句型1】Achenyoinsistedthatthewaterhyacinthstalkswouldbestrongenoughtobemadeintoschoolbagstocarrybooks,andbasketstotakevegetablestothemarket.(運用了that引導的賓語從句)【高分句型2】Theywerealleagertomaketheirowncraftsusingthosewaterhyacinthstalks,whichnowseemednotsoannoying.(運用了which引導的定語從句)【高分句型3】Achenyowasproudthatshemadeadifferencetohercommunity.(運用了that引導的賓語從句)4．第一段：Onefriendranbackintothekitchenandreturnedwithforks.Welookedforeverylastbitofthefallenpie,laughingandcryingatthesametime.Itwasamomentofpurejoyandconnection,aswerealizedthateveninthefaceofdisaster,thereisalwayssomethingtobegratefulfor.Theincidentonlymadeourpiesmoreprecious,remindingusofthehardworkandlovethatwenti