2025年高考英語應(yīng)用文寫作與讀后續(xù)寫講義練習(xí)18.讀后續(xù)寫素材2(心理描寫)

2025年高考英語應(yīng)用文寫作與讀后續(xù)寫講義練習(xí)18.讀后續(xù)寫素材2(心理描寫)讀后續(xù)寫素材(心理描寫)【素材1】Tom’smindwasmadeupnow.Hewasgloomyanddesperate.Hewasanabandoned,friendlessboy,hesaid;nobodylovedhim;whentheyfoundoutwhattheyhaddrivenhimto,perhapstheywouldbesorry,tearswouldbeshedandheartswouldbebroken.Althoughhehadnofriendtocomplainto,hehadtriedtodorightthingsandgetalongwithothers.湯姆現(xiàn)在下定了決心。他陰郁而絕望。他說,他是一個被遺棄的、沒有朋友的男孩;沒有人愛他;當(dāng)他們發(fā)現(xiàn)自己把他逼到這個地步時,也許他們會后悔,會流淚,會心碎。雖然他沒有朋友可以抱怨,但他一直努力做正確的事情,與他人相處?！舅夭?】Surprised,Ididn’tknowwhattosay,andIjustshookmyheadandwentintomyroom.Ithoughthardandrealizedthatnobodywasgoingtogivemeaspotonthatteam.Iwouldhavetoearnit.Havingdecidedtoworktowardmygoalofmakingtheteam,Ibikedtothegymnearmyschooleverydayafterschoolandtrainedfortwohours.我很驚訝,不知道說什么好,我只是搖了搖頭,走進了我的房間。我苦思冥想,意識到?jīng)]有人會給我在那支隊伍中的位置。我必須自己去爭取。我決定朝著進入球隊的目標(biāo)努力,每天放學(xué)后我騎自行車去學(xué)校附近的健身房,訓(xùn)練兩個小時。【素材3】Herepeatedtheprocessinthehopethatmorefishwouldbecaught.Itwasn’tlongbeforethebucketwascrowdedwithfishaliveandkicking.Asenseofaccomplishmentcreptuponhim.他重復(fù)了這個過程,希望能捕到更多的魚。沒過多久,桶里就塞滿了活蹦亂跳的魚。一種成就感悄悄涌上他的心頭。【素材4】Icouldn’tbelieveallthisjustcamefromtheordinary-lookingboywiththesmallfigureandcasualT-shirt.Ievenfeltashamedtolearnthatheranawebsitetohelpchildrenwithhearingproblems,becauseIstupidlythoughtthathehadnooutstandingqualitiesandthatdisabledpeoplecouldn’tbeintelligent.我不敢相信這一切竟然來自一個長相普通、身材矮小、穿著休閑T恤的男孩。當(dāng)我知道他辦了一個幫助聽力障礙兒童的網(wǎng)站時,我甚至感到羞愧,因為我愚蠢地認(rèn)為他沒有什么突出的品質(zhì),殘疾人不可能聰明。【素材5】Seeingtheboyregainconsciousness,thosearoundbrokeintocheers.Exhausted,Isighedwithrelief.IthoughthadIacceptedthateasyposition,Iwouldhavebeennothingbutabystander.I’mhappyIdidn’ttaketheeasywayout.看到男孩恢復(fù)了知覺,周圍的人都歡呼起來。我筋疲力盡,松了口氣。我想,如果我接受了那個輕松的位置,我就會成為一個旁觀者。我很高興我沒有走捷徑?！舅夭?】Livingwiththegreenplanthadofferedmecomfort.Nowthatthetreewasstruggling,Ifeltincreasinglyfearful.Igrewmoreandmorefrustratedanduneasy.Hearingmywords,Hannahsoftlyremindedmeofthewrongconnectionbetweentheplantwithmyownsurvival.Withherpatience,IrealizedIhadwronglyconnectedmycareoftheplant—somethingoverwhichIhadatleastsomecontrol—withmyownsurvival—somethingoverwhichIhadnocontrol.和綠色的植物生活在一起給了我安慰。現(xiàn)在樹在掙扎,我感到越來越害怕。我變得越來越沮喪和不安。聽了我的話,漢娜溫柔地提醒我,這種植物與我的生存之間存在著錯誤的聯(lián)系。在她的耐心下,我意識到我錯誤地把我對植物的照顧——我至少還能控制的事情——和我自己的生存——我無法控制的事情——聯(lián)系在一起?！舅夭?】Withtearsofgratituderollingdownhischeeks,Petersaidthankfully,“You’vesavedmetoday.Icouldn’tthankyouenough.”Itwasverymovingtoseehowmuchstrangerscouldcareforeachother.Hesmiledwithgratitudeasheacceptedtheflowersgivenbyasmallboy.Toucheddeeply,thecrowdclappedviolently.Later,knowingwhathadhappened,hismothershedtearsofjoyandgratitude.感激的淚水順著他的臉頰滾落,彼得感激地說:“你今天救了我。我怎么感謝你也不為過。”看到陌生人如此關(guān)心彼此,真是令人感動。他感激地微笑著接受了一個小男孩送給他的花。群眾深受感動,熱烈鼓掌。后來,他的母親知道發(fā)生了什么事,流下了喜悅和感激的眼淚?！舅夭?】Anairofsorrowandlonelinesssettledoverher.Feelingleftout,Janewasgettingdesperatewithloneliness.Sherodehomefromschoolslowly,numbwithsorrow.Thenshelockedherselfinherroom,abandoningherselftogreatsadness.Shefeltsosadthatshefoundherselfcryingunconsciously,unabletoholdbackhertears.Sheweptquietly,feelingitwasthesaddestmomentforheryounglife.一種悲傷和孤獨的氣氛籠罩著她。簡感到被冷落了,寂寞得絕望起來。她慢慢地從學(xué)校騎車回家,悲傷得麻木了。然后她把自己鎖在房間里,沉浸在極度的悲傷中。她感到很傷心,不由自主地哭了起來,無法抑制自己的眼淚。她靜靜地哭了起來,覺得這是她年輕的生命中最悲傷的時刻。【素材9】Iwenttoheroffice,askingshylywhetherIcouldattendthewritingcompetition.Shereplied,“Ofcourse!Ihavefaithinyou.”Seeinghershiningsmile,acurrentofhappinesssweptthroughme.Atfirst,Ihadnoideawhattowrite,butsuddenlyanideaflashedintomymind.WhynotsharemystorywithMrsWhite—MyBeautifulSnowWhite?我去了她的辦公室,害羞地問她我能不能參加寫作比賽。她回答說:“當(dāng)然!我對你有信心。”看到她燦爛的笑容,一股幸福的暖流涌上心頭。起初,我不知道該寫什么,但突然一個想法在我腦海中閃現(xiàn)。為什么不把我的故事告訴我美麗的白雪公主夫人呢?【素材10】Mykneesstartedshaking,yetmybodyfroze.ItfeltasthoughmysoulleftmybodyandIhadnocontroloverit.Anxiously,Ilookedthroughtheannouncementpostedonthewallofthelockerroom;myheartwasbeatingharderandharderasIslowlysawallmyfriends’namesonthatlistbutcouldnotfindmine.Ijustcouldn’tacceptthatallmyfriendswereontheteambutIwasnot.我的膝蓋開始顫抖,但我的身體卻僵住了。感覺好像我的靈魂離開了我的身體,我無法控制它。我焦急地看了看貼在更衣室墻上的公告;當(dāng)我慢慢地看到所有朋友的名字都在名單上,卻找不到我的名字時,我的心跳得越來越厲害。我只是無法接受我所有的朋友都在隊里,而我卻不在?！痉椒ㄟ\用】1．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Tosomepeople,thesizzleandclatterofrestaurantkitchensmightbelikeanorchestra;tome,suchsoundsbehindtheswingingdoorsjustmeantchaos.HoweverunpleasantIfelttheplaceswere,Idecidedtoapplyforapart-timejobatapopularrestaurant.Thereasonwassimple:Ineededmoney.IwantedtojoinacampingtriptotheBlueMountainswithmyfriends,butthatwouldcostabout150dollars.“Youhavetopayforentertainmentbyyourself,”myparentssaid.SoIapplied,andMr.Smith,thebossoftherestaurant,allowedmetohaveatry.Myjobwassupereasyandboring:thenewlyprepareddisheswouldbeputatthecounterbetweenthekitchenanddiningroom,anditwasmydutytodeliverthemtotherightcustomers.ThefirstfewdaysweretiringbutOK.However,setbackssoonfollowedasIstruggledtokeeppaceduringaparticularlybusylunchrush.Iawkwardlyspilledatrayofdrinks,makingloudnoisesandthefloormessy.Iwasembarrassedandbegantofeelnervous.Oneevening,Imixedupordersforalargeparty,causingchaosandfrustration.Ifeltdesperate.Iscrewedeverythingup.ThenIheardMr.Smithcallme,andIwentintohisofficewithmyheadlow.Tomysurprise,hedidn’tblameme.Instead,hemademeacupofcoffee.“Relax,youngman,”hesaid.“Trytosmile.Thingsalwaysgowrongifyoucan’treallyenjoywhatyou’redoing.Feelthefuninthejob,andyou’llbeOK!”Ithoughthewasright.ThenextdaywhenIwasworking,Iglimpsedintothekitchenandwasamazed:inthenarrowandcrowdedspaceeveryonewasbusy—thechefsswirling(翻動)pans,themanageryellingcustomers’requirements,otherscomingandgoingwithdishestodeliver—buteverythingwentsmoothlywithoutanylumpingorbumping.Thiswasincredible!注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Myattitudestowardstherestaurantjobbegantochange._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Onthelastdayofmycontract,IwentintoMr.Smith’sofficeagainwhenIfinishedmyjob._________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。ItwasinthemiddleofSanFrancisco’sGoldenGateParkthatAmandaBarrowscarefullyplacedawoodennightstand(床頭柜)ontheground.Sheattachedabigsignreading,“Takeapoem,leaveapoem.”O(jiān)utofcuriosity,anendlessstreamoftouristsgatheredtotakeacloserlook.“It’scompletelyunexpected,”saidBarrows,aparkranger(管理員)bydayandapoetbynight.“I’mreallytakenabackbytheoutpouringofsupport.Andevenifpoetryisn’treallyyourthing,youmightfindenjoymentinreadingsomethingwithahumorousbent.”Sincechildhood,Barrowshasbeenfondofpoetryandisabletorecitemanyfamouspoems.Later,duetovariousreasons,shedidnotspecializeinthisfield,butsheremainssteadfastinherloveforpoetry.Itisadmirablethatsheinsistsoncreatingherownworksandiswillingtomakefriendsthroughpoetry.Barrowshasalwaysconsideredherselfawriter,sosheenrolledinaclasscalledPoetryforthePeople.Thefinalprojectoftheclassistofindawayto“bringpoetryintothecommunity”.Infact,Barrowsexpectstostartaclubaboutpoetrybecausesheknowsthatlotsofkidslovepoetry.AtfirstBarrowsstruggledtolandonanidea.Eventually,sherealizedthatshecouldcombineherloveforparksandherloveforpoetry.AcoworkergaveBarrowsaweatherednightstand.Shethoughtitwouldbetheperfecttoolforherproject.ThepoetrynightstandremindedherofLittleFreeLibraries.Thatprojectfeaturesbookstandsstationedacrossthecity.Peoplecanleaveandtakebooksfromlittlelibraries.Sheonlyhadasinglenightstandtoworkwith,soBarrowsdecidedthatshewouldleaveitinaparkforfourdaysbeforemovingittoanewlocation.SanFrancisco’sRecreationandParkDepartmentmanagesabout220parks,andBarrow’sgoalistobringthepoetrynightstandtoallofthem.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Onthefirstday,Barrowsmadethoroughpreparationsandarrangements.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Barrowswassurprisedbythepositivefeedbackandengagement.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Hudsonhadbeenlookingforwardtothistripforweeks.Thiswasmorethantheusualexcitementaboutend-of-yeartrips.Itwastheeighthgradeclasstrip!Anditwasthebestfieldtripthatmiddleschoolhadtooffer.TheygottogotoSixFlagsGreatAmerica,hometomorerollercoastersandgamesthananyplacenorthofFlorida.Theygottowanderaroundtheparkbythemselves,freetodoastheypleasedforanentireschoolday.Andnow,finally,theywereatSixFlagsGreatAmerica.Hudson,withhisbestfriend,Davion,andotherclassmateswerewaitinginlinefortheTwistedTwister.Fromtheverybeginning,theTwistedTwisterliveduptoitsname.Theblackcoastertrackscorkscrewed(螺旋式轉(zhuǎn)動)almostimmediately.Then,theridersintheyellowcarsweregivenamomenttocatchtheirbreathastheywerecarriedslowlytothetopofahill.Butthereliefdidn’tlastlong.Assoonastherollercoastercarswereoverthepeak,thetracktwistedagain.Andagainandagainandagain.“I’veheardthatitturnssomuchthat,bythetimeyougettotheend,you’vegone1,080degreesaround.That’slikefourfullcircles!”Davionsaidwithasmile.“It’samazing!There’sazero-Grollandatwelve-storydrop!”hecontinued,excitedlysharinginformationaboutthecoaster.Hudsondidnotagree.HepersonallyfeltthattheTwistedTwisterwasterrifyinglyhuge,andabsolutelythescariestrollercoasterhehadeverseen.ButHudsonwasn’tabouttomentionhisfeartohisfriend.Thiswastheeighthgradetrip!Atthismoment,thegroupinfrontofthemgotoff.Hudsoncouldhearthemscreaming,buthecouldn’ttellifthescreamswerebecauseofdelightorfear.Now,itwastheirturn!Theircarpulledupandthebarriersglided(滑過)smoothlyup.Otherclassmatesrushedin.Hudson,ontheotherhand,felthislegslockup.Andheknew,suddenly,thathecouldnotdoit.Hewastooafraid.注意：1.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右;2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。AsHudsonstoodfrozen,Davionnoticedhisfriend’shesitation.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Withdetermination,Hudsonsteppedforward,readytofacethecoaster!____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4．閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Theskiesweredark.Astrongwindwasblowinghard,cuttingmyfacelikeasharpknife.Rainfellinbigdropsandthunderandlightningflashedacrosstheskies.IshookwithcoldandfearasIwalkedthroughthestreamsofmuddywater.Somepeoplewererushingby,completelywetintheheavyrain.Alongtheway,Isawsomeschoolchildrenholdingtheirheavyschoolbagstightlyandrushinghome.Ialsosawthatsomeroadrepairworkhadbeenabandoned(遺棄)byworkers.Obviouslytheworkershadleftinahurrybecauseofthestorm.Therewerefewsignsanditwashardtoseewhatwasontheroad.Therewerepiecesofwoodandmetalanditlookedlikeaholehadbeendugandhastilycoveredwithplanks(木板).ImovedonbutsuddenlystoppedasIheardsomesounds.Itsoundedlikechildrencrying.Iquicklyturnedbackandwentbacktotheplacefromwherethesoundscame.Iwasterrified!Tomysadness,Ifoundthattwosmallchildrenhadfallenintothegaping(裂開的)holeontheroad.Theplankshadmovedawaywiththeforceoftherushingwater.Icouldbarelyseethechildrenasitwasdarkallaroundme.ItoldthemthatIwasgoingtogethelpandran.Iwasnotsureofwhattodoorwheretogobutdecidedtogotothenearesthouseforhelp.Iknewthemanwell,MrLee,wholivedthereandgotalongwellwithhisneighbors.注意：1．續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為100左右；2．請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。IcalledMrLeeandtoldhimabouttheproblem._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Thechildren’sparentswereshockedtohearofwhathadhappened._______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________參考答案1．Onepossibleversion:Myattitudestowardstherestaurantjobbegantochange.IsmiledtoeveryoneImet,andtheyreturnedmewithwarmersmiles,whichmademerelaxedandevenmoreconcentratedonmyjob.Followingthesmileswerenaturalconversations,jokesandlaughter,andanairofharmonywascreatedwhereIworked.Istillmadesomemistakeslikeforgettingthechangeorwrongdeliveries,buttheywereeasilycorrectedwithalittlekindreminding.Ieventriedhelpingoutinthekitchenpreparingthefood.“Youcanbeagoodchef!”Theyencouragedme.Whynot?Whoknew!Onthelastdayofmycontract,IwentintoMr.Smith’sofficeagainwhenIfinishedmyjob.Ithankedhimforgivingmethejobopportunity,especiallyforforgivingmewhenIcausedchaos.Mygratitudewassincere,fortheexperiencenotjustgreatlypromotedmyunderstandingofrestaurantjobs,butwasbeneficialtoanythingelseIwoulddo.Inreturn,Mr.Smiththankedmeformyjobperformance,andpaidmethesalarythatIneededformycamptrip.Myfatherwasright:Ihadtoearnitbymyself,becausewhatIgainedwasalotmore.【寫作分析】本文以時間為線索展開，主要講述了作者為了賺取去露營的費用，決定在一家受歡迎的餐廳申請兼職工作。盡管他對餐廳廚房的混亂聲音感到不適，但經(jīng)濟需求促使他申請了這個職位。他的工作是將廚房做好的菜送到顧客那里，雖然簡單但很快他就感到了壓力，尤其是在高峰時段。他犯了一些錯誤，如打翻飲料和搞混訂單，這讓他感到絕望和尷尬。然而，餐廳老板Smith先生并沒有責(zé)怪他，而是鼓勵他放松并享受工作，認(rèn)為這樣會改善他的表現(xiàn)。受到啟發(fā)后，作者嘗試以積極的態(tài)度看待工作，驚訝地發(fā)現(xiàn)廚房中的混亂其實是有序的。【要點解析】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我對餐館工作的態(tài)度開始改變”可知，第一段可描寫作者開始積極地對待自己的工作，認(rèn)真地干活，以及作者雖然還是會犯錯，但是會及時糾正，心情輕松很多。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“在我合同的最后一天，我下班后又去了Smith先生的辦公室”可知，第二段可描寫作者真誠地感謝Smith先生，并領(lǐng)取自己的薪水，以及作者從這個經(jīng)歷中得到的感悟。2.續(xù)寫線索：工作態(tài)度轉(zhuǎn)變——積極工作——心情變化——去Smith先生的辦公室——感謝Smith先生——感悟3.詞匯激活行為類①遇到：meet/encounter②專注于：concentrateon/focuson③創(chuàng)造：create/generate④促進：promote/facilitate/advance⑤收獲：gain/attain/achieve情緒類①放松的：relaxed/relieved②感激：gratitude/gratefulness[高分句型1]IsmiledtoeveryoneImet,andtheyreturnedmewithwarmersmiles,whichmademerelaxedandevenmoreconcentratedonmyjob.(關(guān)系代詞引導(dǎo)限制性定語從句并被省略、which引導(dǎo)非限制性定語從句)[高分句型2]Followingthesmileswerenaturalconversations,jokesandlaughter,andanairofharmonywascreatedwhereIworked.(分詞置于句首引起全部倒裝、where引導(dǎo)地點狀語從句)[高分句型3]Myfatherwasright:Ihadtoearnitbymyself,becausewhatIgainedwasalotmore.(because引導(dǎo)原因狀語從句、what引導(dǎo)主語從句)2．Onthefirstday,Barrowsmadethoroughpreparationsandarrangements.shefilledthedraweratthetopwithfreshpaperandpensandaddedaboxatthebottomforpoems.Togettheballrolling,sheaskedherclosefriendstoaddtheirfavouritepoemstothedrawerforpeopletotakeaway.Sincetheprojectstarted,peoplehaveaddedawiderangeofwriting.Barrowssharesmostofthesubmissionsonsocialmedia.Someareclearlycomposedbykids,whileothersaremorerefined,whichexpressespeople’sloveforpoetry.Barrowswassurprisedbythepositivefeedbackandengagement.“Ilovetoseedifferentpeople’shandwritingandsharetheirpersonalwords,”Barrowssaid.Theinstructorsofpoetryforthepeoplesaidthenightstandfulfilledthemainpurposeoftheproject.Shebelievesthattheold-fashionednightstandstandsoutinacitythatisfilledwithnewtechnology.Barrowshopesotherswillbuildofftheprojectandcontributetheirowncreativity.“Itreallyisacommunityproject,”Barrowssaid.“Itbelongstoallofus.”【寫作分析】本文以詩歌為線索。AmandaBarrows在舊金山金門公園放置了一個木制床頭柜，鼓勵人們“拿一首詩，留一首詩”。她白天是公園管理員，晚上是詩人，對詩歌充滿熱情。她通過參加“人民詩歌”課程，計劃將詩歌帶入社區(qū)，并希望建立一個詩歌俱樂部。Barrows利用一個舊床頭柜作為項目工具，靈感來源于遍布城市的小型免費圖書館。她的目標(biāo)是將詩歌床頭柜帶到舊金山管理的220個公園中的每一個。【要點解析】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“Onthefirstday,Barrowsmadethoroughpreparationsandarrangements.”可知，第一段可描寫B(tài)arrows為這個項目所做的準(zhǔn)備工作和安排。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“Barrows對積極的反饋和參與度感到驚訝?！笨芍?，第二段可描寫社區(qū)對這個項目所表現(xiàn)出來的積極反饋，這些反饋肯定會讓Barrows感到無比開心和驚訝，并且有信心做得更好。2.續(xù)寫線索：準(zhǔn)備——安排——啟動——反饋——驚訝——展望3.詞匯激活行為類①準(zhǔn)備工作：makepreparations/makearrangements②啟動：gettheballrolling/initiate③相信：believe/beconvinced④貢獻：contribute/offerup情緒類①驚訝：surprised/amazed②熱愛：love/passion③最喜歡的：favourite/beloved[高分句型1]Someareclearlycomposedbykids,whileothersaremorerefined,whichexpressespeople’sloveforpoetry.（運用了while引導(dǎo)的并列句，which引導(dǎo)的非限制性定語從句）[高分句型2]Togettheballrolling,sheaskedherclosefriendstoaddtheirfavouritepoemstothedrawerforpeopletotakeaway.（運用了不定式Toget作目的狀語和toadd作賓語補足語）[高分句型3]Shebelievesthattheold-fashionednightstandstandsoutinacitythatisfilledwithnewtechnology.（運用了第一個that引導(dǎo)的賓語從句，第二個that引導(dǎo)的定語從句）3．AsHudsonstoodfrozen,Davionnoticedhisfriend’shesitation.ThebrightsmileonDavion’sfaceslowlyfadedasherealizedthatHudsonwasn’tasexcitedashewas.“Hudson,areyouokay?”Davionasked,concernevidentinhisvoice.Hudsonnoddedslowly,buthiseyesremainedfixedonthetwistingtracksoftheTwistedTwister.“I...I’mjustalittlenervous,”headmittedquietly.DavionputareassuringhandonHudson’sshoulder.“It’sokaytobescared,Hudson.Butremember,we’reheretohavefun.Andifyoudon’twanttoride,that’sokaytoo.Wecanalwaysgodosomethingelse.”Hudsonlookedupathisfriend,gratefulforhisunderstanding.Butdeepdown,heknewhedidn’twanttomissoutonthisexperience.Withdetermination,Hudsonsteppedforward,readytofacethecoaster!Hetookadeepbreathandclimbedintothecar,feelingthefamiliarsenseofdreadwashoverhim.Butthistime,hewasready.Heclosedhiseyesandgrippedthehandlebarstightlyasthecarslowlycreptupthefirsthill.Then,justasthecarreachedthepeak,Hudsonopenedhiseyesandletoutaloudscream.Thefeelingofweightlessnessasthecoasterplungeddownthehillwasexhilarating,andHudsonfoundhimselflaughingoutloudasthecoastertwistedandturned.Bythetimetherideended,Hudsonwasgrinningfromeartoear.Hehadconqueredhisfear,andheknewthatthiswasoneexperiencehewouldneverforget.【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，講述了哈德森和朋友去游樂園玩耍，朋友建議去玩過山車，哈德森有些緊張。最后他克服恐懼，坐上了過山車，也體會到了其中的樂趣?！疽c解析】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“哈德森僵立在那里，戴維恩注意到他朋友的猶豫”可知，第一段可描寫哈德森感到緊張的心理活動以及朋友安慰哈德森。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“帶著決心，哈德森走上前去，準(zhǔn)備面對過山車！”可知，第二段可描寫哈德森坐過山車時的感受以及之后的感悟。2.續(xù)寫線索：哈德森緊張——朋友關(guān)心——朋友安慰——哈德森下定決心——哈德森體會樂趣——哈德森感悟3.詞匯激活行為類①克服：conquer/overcome②消失：fade/disappear③意識到：realize/beawareof情緒類①緊張：nervous/stressed②感謝：grateful/thankful[高分句型1]ThebrightsmileonDavion’sfaceslowlyfadedasherealizedthatHudsonwasn’tasexcitedashewas.(運用了as引導(dǎo)原因狀語從句)[高分句型2]Hehadconqueredhisfear,andheknewthatthiswasoneexperiencehewouldneverforget.(運用了that引導(dǎo)賓語從句)4．IcalledMrLeeandtoldhimabouttheproblem.Hereadilysaidthathewouldgetatorchandsomerope.Healsocalledhisgoodfriendstocomealongwithhim.Afewotherneighborsalsoquicklyjoinedtherescuepartyandtogetherwenttotheroad.Theymanagedtogetthechildrenoutofthewateryholesafely.Thechildrenwerescaredsillyandtheyshiveredalloverwithcold,daringnottomakeamovement.Thechildren’sparentswereshockedtohearofwhathadhappened.Theywereverygratefultotheneighborswhohadhelpedtorescuethechildrenandthankedthemprofusely.AfloodofhappinesswelledupinmebecauseIhadbeenpartofthisactofneighborliness.Itwasawonderfulmoment,oneIwillneverforget.Theneighborshadbeengreat.Theyhadhelpedpeopleinneedwithouthesitation.Iwenthomewithagoodfeelingandbathingmeinmuchthrill.【寫作分析】本文以人物為線索展開，作者有一天回家時電閃雷鳴，傾盆大雨，走到了一處被遺棄的修路工程，發(fā)現(xiàn)地上有一個大洞，被木板蓋住了，兩個小孩掉進了洞里，于是作者去尋找鄰居李先生來幫忙救出被困孩子，李先生叫上了鄰居組成了救援隊伍，將孩子們安全救出，孩子們的父母知道了這件事十分震驚，并向幫助者表示了感謝，作者為有如此和睦友好的鄰居感到幸福?！疽c解析】1.段落續(xù)寫：①由第一段首句內(nèi)容“我打電話給李先生，告訴他這個問題。”可知，第一段可描寫作者請求李先生幫忙，李先生叫上鄰居組成救援隊，救出被困孩子。②由第二段首句內(nèi)容“孩子們的父母聽到所發(fā)生的事情感到震驚。”可知，第二段可描寫孩子們的父母感激救援人員及作者的感受和感想。2.續(xù)寫線索：找李先生幫忙——李先生組織救援隊——救出孩子——父母震驚——父母表示感謝——作者的感受及感想3.詞匯激活行為類①去，前往：go/head/advance②成功做：managetodo/succeedin情緒類①害怕的，嚇著的：scared/frightened②感激的：grateful/thankful/appreciative[高分句型1].Thechildrenwerescaredsillyandtheyshiveredalloverwithcold,daringnottomakeamovement.（由現(xiàn)在分詞作狀語）[高分句型2].Theywereverygratefultotheneighborswhohadhelpedtorescuethechildrenandthankedthemprofusely.（由關(guān)系代詞who引導(dǎo)限制性定語從句）讀后續(xù)寫素材(動作描寫)【素材1】TheEagles’captainknockedtheballtothegroundwithhishand,andthenkickeditandscored.Therefereeblewthewhistle;thematchwasoverandtheEagleshadwon.老鷹隊的隊長用手把球撞倒在地,然后踢了一腳,得分了。裁判吹響了哨子,比賽結(jié)束了,老鷹隊贏了?！舅夭?】Hearingthefamiliarvoice,Marystoppedherpace.Sheturnedaround,andstaggeredforwardafewsteps.Shefounditwasherelderbrother.Soexcited,shejumpedupandthrewherarmsaroundtheman’sneck.Sheburiedherfaceinhisshoulderandsobbedforafewmoments.Thenshesaidinaloudandexcitedvoice.聽到熟悉的聲音,瑪麗停下了腳步。她轉(zhuǎn)過身來,搖搖晃晃地向前走了幾步。她發(fā)現(xiàn)那是她哥哥。她非常興奮,跳起來,雙臂摟住了那個男人的脖子。她把臉埋在他的肩膀上,抽泣了一會兒。然后她激動地大聲說?！舅夭?】Jackenjoyedwatchinghisluredanceinthewater.Holdinghisbreath,hewaswaitingforabitepatiently.Allofasudden,hefeltthepolemoving.Hequicklydraggedthepolewithallhismight.Themomenthesawthebigfish,hewaswildwithjoy.杰克喜歡看他的魚餌在水里跳舞。他屏住呼吸,耐心地等著(魚)咬鉤。突然,他感到桿子在動。他迅速地用盡全力拖著桿子。他一看到那條大魚,就欣喜若狂?！舅夭?】Withmyfaceburningandmyheadlowered,Icouldhearnothingbutmyheartbeatingfaster.Suddenly,athunderousoutburstofapplausewokemeup.Feelingalumpinthethroat,Iclappedmyhandsasloudlyaspossible,determinednevertojudgeabookbyitscover.我的臉發(fā)燙,低著頭,什么也聽不見,只聽見我的心跳加快了。突然,一陣?yán)坐Q般的掌聲把我吵醒了。感覺喉嚨哽住了,我盡可能大聲地拍手,決心永遠不要以貌取人?！舅夭?】Sureenough,withacloserlook,Ifoundtheboywavinghishandsdesperately.Iquicklydivedintothewater,swimmingtowardstheboyatfullspeed.BythetimeIreachedhim,hehadsunktothebottomofthepool,whichfilledmyheartwithfrightandconcern.Ipickedtheboyupandheadedtothepoolside,keepinghisheadabovethewater.果然,仔細一看,我發(fā)現(xiàn)那個男孩絕望地揮舞著雙手。我迅速跳入水中,全速向那個男孩游去。當(dāng)我到達他身邊時,他已經(jīng)沉到池底了,這讓我的內(nèi)心充滿了恐懼和擔(dān)憂。我抱起男孩,朝池邊游去,讓他的頭露出水面。【素材6】Onemorning,Maggieknockedatthewindowofthecar.Josewounddownthewindowandapologizedtotheladystandingbyhiscar.Hesaidhewoulddriveawaysoontomakeroomforothercustomers.Tearsineyes,Maggieaskedhimwhetherhestillrememberedher.Josewaspuzzledatfirstbutsoonrecognizedher.Embarrassed,hetoldMaggieabouthissituation.一天早上,瑪吉敲了敲車窗。約瑟搖下車窗,向站在他車旁的女士道歉。他說他很快就會開車離開,為其他顧客騰出地方?，敿鴾I問他是否還記得她。約瑟一開始很困惑,但很快就認(rèn)出了她。他很尷尬,把自己的處境告訴了瑪吉?！舅夭?】SoIrancloselybehindhim.Thecourseheadednorthforfivemiles,wanderedwestforamile,andthenturnedsouthagain.Theracewasgettingtougher.Withthreemilestogo,itwasbeginningtoberealhardwork.Mylungswereonfire,andlegsfeltlikestone.所以我緊跟在他后面跑。航線向北走了五英里,向西走了一英里,然后又向南轉(zhuǎn)彎。比賽越來越激烈了。還有三英里,這開始成為一項真正的艱苦工作。我的肺像著火一樣,腿像石頭一樣?！舅夭?】Areportertookapictureofthismovingsceneandposteditonline.Itinstantlyreceivedthousandsofsharesandlikes.Peopleexpressedtheirrespectandadmirationformycourageandselflessnesstogiveupwhatcouldbeaneasyvictory.Oneviewerevencommented,“Nowadayspeopletendtofocustoomuchon‘winorlose’.It’sagreatcomforttoseethattruesportsmanshipstillexists.”一位記者拍下了這一動人的場景,并發(fā)布到了網(wǎng)上。它立即獲得了成千上萬的分享和點贊。人們表達了他們對我的勇氣和無私的尊重和欽佩,因為我放棄了本來很容易取得的勝利。一位觀眾甚至評論道:“現(xiàn)在人們往往過于關(guān)