2012年湖北高考英語作文評析及今后教學建議.ppt

2008年湖北高考英語作文 試題評析及今后教學建議,08年湖北高考英語作文試題評析 08年湖北高考英語作文試題及評價 08年湖北高考英語學科作文評卷情況 學生答題常見錯誤 今后高中英語教學之我見,高考作文試題 書面表達(滿分25分) 假設你是卜曼宜,你購買了一部某外國公司生產(chǎn)的手機.因有質(zhì)量問題,要求該公司更換.請根據(jù)下列要點,用英文寫一封電子郵件. 1.問題: 手機不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信; 該產(chǎn)品已售完,無法更換; 型號新,無配件,無法維修. 2.要求: 公司應盡快予以更換. 注意:1.詞數(shù)為100左右; 2.參考詞匯: 配件 3.電子郵件的開頭和結尾已為你寫好.(不計入你所寫詞數(shù)) 4.已給出的電子郵件的開頭和結尾不得抄入答題卡.,評分原則,本題總分為25分,按5個檔次給分. 評分時,先根據(jù)文章的內(nèi)容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次,然后以該檔的要求來衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分.由于本次寫作內(nèi)容已明確給出，因此評分檔次的確定應側重于語言的表達. 詞數(shù)少于80和多于120的,從總分中減去2分. 評分時,應注意的主要內(nèi)容為:內(nèi)容要點,應用詞匯和語法結構的數(shù)量和準確性,上下文的連貫性及語言的得體性。 拼寫與標點符號是語言準確性的一個方面，評分時,應視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮。英,美拼寫及詞匯均可接受。 如書寫較差,以至影響交際,將分數(shù)降低一個檔次.,Possible version,Dear Sir, I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan,P.R.China. Ten days after that,it didnt ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller,but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. Later I went to the repairman. He said since it was a new model in China,it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that. How can I wait that long? Therefore, I require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month. Thank you for your consideration. Sincerely yours,檔次的給分范圍和要求,第五檔(很好):(21-25分) 要點完整，表達清楚，無重大語法錯誤.完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務. -覆蓋所有內(nèi)容要點. -應用了較多的語法結構和詞匯。 -語法結構或詞匯方面有些許錯誤，但為盡力使用較復雜結構或詞匯所致;具備較強的語言運用能力. -有效地使用了語句間的連接成分,使全文結構緊湊. 完全達到了預期的寫作目的.,Range finders,The mobile phone can neither ring nor send messages. This really brings me a lot of troubles. So I contacted with your company. But the staff told me that the products had been sold out so they couldnt change a new one for me. They felt sorry for me and suggested me to have it repaired. Unfortunately,the type of the mobile phone is so new that the repairman said he couldnt solve the problem as there was no spare part for it. Hearing that,I lost my last hope. So now Im writing to you hoping that you can help me. Please change a new one for me as soon as possible.,第四檔(好)(16-20分)表達基本清楚,缺少個別要點,有些語法錯誤.完成了試題規(guī)定的任務.,-覆蓋主要內(nèi)容. -應用的語法結構或詞匯能基本滿足任務的要求. -語法結構或詞匯方面應用基本準確，些許錯誤主要是因嘗試較復雜語法結構或詞匯所致. -應用簡單的詞句間的連接成分,使全文結構緊湊。 達到了預期的寫作目的.,Range finders,The mobile phone has some problem on its quality. First,the phone which I bought from you cant ring and I cant use it to write a message,either. Second,the products have been sold out that I cant change for another one. Last but not least,the style is new and dont have spare part, so I cant have it repaired. Im so worried because Im waiting to use it. So I hope that the company can change a new one for me as soon as possible. Thats all what I want to say. Im looking forward to hearing from you soon!,第三檔(適當)(11-15分) 尚能表達,缺少多個要點，語法錯誤較多.基本完成了試題規(guī)定的任務.,- 基本覆蓋主要內(nèi)容. -應用的語法結構或詞匯能基本滿足任務的要求. -有一些語法結構或詞匯方面的錯誤，但不影響理解. -應用簡單的語句間的連接成分,使全文內(nèi)容連貫. 整體而言,基本達到了預期的寫作目的.,Range finders,I think the mobile phone has some quality problem. Such as the ring in the mobile phone can not work yet, and it can not send message recently. I know the size of the phone are new produce and no spare part can be exchanged. It can not be fix, and I also know the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought had already been slod out yet. It means that I can not change it in the normal way,but I still want to change a good one. Can you help me? I hope you to take some mesures to fix it as soon as possible. Im looking forward to hearing from you soon. Very thank you for your help.,第二檔(較差)(6-10分) 表達含糊不清,不能成篇. 未恰當完成試題規(guī)定的任務.,-漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要內(nèi)容,寫了一些無關內(nèi)容. -語法結構單調(diào)，詞匯項目有限. -有較多語法結構或詞匯方面的錯誤,影響了對寫作內(nèi)容的理解. -較少使用語句間的連接成分,內(nèi)容缺少連貫性。 信息未能清楚地傳達給讀者。,Range finders,But this mobile phone has some troubles. The mobile phone hasnt voice when calling. And it doesnt make notes to others. I think I cant use the mobile phone. So I want to have a new one. But in WuhansTele Mall, this size mobile phone have sold out. They havent one to give me. And this size is new, the company havent spare part to repair the mobile phone. So I want your company can give a good mobile phone soon. I think yur company should considerate us. I only want a good one. Thanks.,第一檔(差): (1-5分) 動了筆,僅羅列了不成句的單詞. 未完成試題規(guī)定的任務.,-明顯遺漏主要內(nèi)容，寫了一些無關內(nèi)容,原因可能是未理解試題要求. -語言支離破碎,有很多語法結構或詞匯方面的錯誤，影響對寫作內(nèi)容的理解 -缺乏語句間的連接成分，結構紊亂,內(nèi)容不連貫. 信息未能傳達給讀者. 0分 未能傳達給讀者任何信息: 內(nèi)容太少，無法評判;寫的內(nèi)容均與所要求內(nèi)容無關.,Range finders,When the mobile phone has buy over. Then I know the mobile phone cant open the music and cant write the mail. But the mobile phone is very new. So no spare part can be it make good. And this mobile phone is buy over.We cant give people a new and good one. So,please your consideration be kuick make good this mobile phone and give the mobile phone(new good) to me.,08年湖北高考英語作文試題評析,題材貼近生活,有時代氣息 日常生活中最常見的交流工具手機;現(xiàn)代科學技術的代名詞 手機出現(xiàn)故障的問題也是我們經(jīng)常遇到的事情. 高一課本Unit9 Technology這一單元的課文 “l(fā)ife on the go”,就是一篇關于手機的文章. 從題材的選材來看，非常生活化,具有時代鮮明特征. 但是也在某種程度上限制了部分學生.,要點提示得當,難度適中，考生有話可說 作為提綱式作文, 本次作文要點提示簡練,全面,既給了學生充分發(fā)揮的空間,也控制了一定范圍,從而達到既考察學生應用語言能力的目的,也從客觀上保證了學生正常水平的發(fā)揮.,能夠較全面地考察考生應用語言的能力 出題者試圖通過日常生活中的普通事件來考察考生綜合運用語言的能力. 比如 要點1 “手機不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信”, 考生可以用The mobile phone cant ring or send messages的一般句式,也可用The mobile phone can neither ring nor send messages或者The mobile phone cant ring,nor can it send messages(倒裝句句式)等高級句式.,要點2 “該產(chǎn)品已售完,無法更換”, 考生可以用The new type of it has been sold out,so they cant change a new one for me ;也可用The model has been sold out,as a consequence,its impossible for them to change me a new one或者The model has been sold out, which makes it difficult for me to have a new one或者The fact that the model has been sold out makes me unable to change it等等。,要點3 “型號新,無配件,無法維修”。 可以用Since its a new model,and therere no spare parts,I cant get it repaired 這一基本句式；也可用So new is its type without any spare parts that I cant get it repaired或者With its new type and no spare parts left,I find it hard to have it repaired或者Due to its new model with no spare parts,I have no access to its repair等等.,考生答題常見錯誤,1.單詞拼寫錯誤 考生由于基礎不扎實，或記憶不準確，或臨場心理緊張等原因造成單詞的拼寫錯誤。,2.時態(tài)混亂,語態(tài)模糊.,不少考生在答題時不注意動詞時態(tài)前后的相互照應,現(xiàn)在時態(tài),過去時態(tài),完成時態(tài)混用,3.一些詞匯尤其是動詞的不準確的應用 比如They suggest me to have it repaired（對suggest這一動詞用法錯誤）；又如I hope you to take some measures to fix it（對hope to do 的錯誤運用）；或者So I contacted with your company（對contact的錯誤用法),4.Chinglish的表達 如 “手機不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信;”有的考生譯為 “The mobile phone not ring,and send message”;又如 “該產(chǎn)品已售完,無法更換;”有的考生譯為 “The product sold over,cant change”又如 “型號新,無配件,無法維修.”有的考生譯為 “The type is new,no spare part,cant repair”,5.表達平淡 更多的考生是直譯了漢語提示,沒有嘗試用高級詞匯或者高級語法表達.比如這樣一篇作文: I think the mobile phone has some quality problem. Such as the ring in the mobile phone can not work yet, and it can not send message recently. I know the size of the phone are new produce and no spare part can be exchanged. It can not be fix, and I also know the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought had already been slod out yet. It means that I can not change it in the normal way,but I still want to change a good one. Can you help me? I hope you to take some mesures to fix it as soon as possible. Im looking forward to hearing from you soon. Very thank you for your help. 如果詞匯和語法結構不夠嚴謹出了差錯,得分就會更低.,小議對今后高中英語教學指導,夯實語法基礎，尤其是中英文語言差異明顯的語法項目。 高考英語作文是對考生在整個高中階段所學英語知識的綜合應用能力的考察.任何一門語言,離不開字,詞,句,篇,以及把它們串連在一起的基礎語法. 我們是在不知不覺中充分利用語境掌握了母語的基本規(guī)則,并在以后的學習中逐漸強化而達到運用自如的境地;而英語作為一門外語，在沒有這種自然語境的情況下，更多地應是通過日常教學達到學習,理解,掌握并運用的目的.,尤其是中英文語言對比差異明顯的語法項目如動詞被動語態(tài)的理解和運用仍是大多學生學習英語中的壁壘.比如這樣的完成句子: 1.Finally,the people in this country began to realise measures should be taken to protect the environment.(要采取措施保護環(huán)境).不少學生譯為take measures to protect the environment; 2.It made the people present at the meeting disappointed that no agreement was reached (會議沒有達成一致意見).學生根據(jù)漢語譯為the meeting didnt reach an agreement.這都是受母語干擾引起的.,再就是英語中一些動詞如seated, dressed, located, lost等,我們常用be seated （表示“坐著”）be dressed（表示“穿著）” be located（表示“坐落于”） be lost（表示“迷失”）.而這種動詞在對應的中文中幾乎是不可理喻的.,背誦美文,美句,增強英語語感 我們現(xiàn)在所學的課文中不乏好句: 1. On the third day I was struggling through stormy weather and during the next week the wind grew stronger and I found myself spending a whole day in my tent.(Senior Book1B Unit17);,2. Seconds count in an emergency,and knowing what to do can mean the difference between life and death. (Senior Book 2A Unit8); 3. A better understanding of the environment is necessary,as is the willingness to act.(Senior Book 2A Unit9); 4. By looking at a problem in as many ways as possible,creative thinkers can find solutions that would otherwise remain invisible.(Senior Book 2B Unit18);,其次，也可以在課外精選一些短小精悍的文章有步驟有計劃地讓學生背誦.比如新概念英語第二冊中就有不少原汁原味的