2012年湖北高考英語(yǔ)作文評(píng)析及今后教學(xué)建議.ppt

2008年湖北高考英語(yǔ)作文 試題評(píng)析及今后教學(xué)建議,08年湖北高考英語(yǔ)作文試題評(píng)析 08年湖北高考英語(yǔ)作文試題及評(píng)價(jià) 08年湖北高考英語(yǔ)學(xué)科作文評(píng)卷情況 學(xué)生答題常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤 今后高中英語(yǔ)教學(xué)之我見(jiàn),高考作文試題 書(shū)面表達(dá)(滿分25分) 假設(shè)你是卜曼宜,你購(gòu)買(mǎi)了一部某外國(guó)公司生產(chǎn)的手機(jī).因有質(zhì)量問(wèn)題,要求該公司更換.請(qǐng)根據(jù)下列要點(diǎn),用英文寫(xiě)一封電子郵件. 1.問(wèn)題: 手機(jī)不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信; 該產(chǎn)品已售完,無(wú)法更換; 型號(hào)新,無(wú)配件,無(wú)法維修. 2.要求: 公司應(yīng)盡快予以更換. 注意:1.詞數(shù)為100左右; 2.參考詞匯: 配件 3.電子郵件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾已為你寫(xiě)好.(不計(jì)入你所寫(xiě)詞數(shù)) 4.已給出的電子郵件的開(kāi)頭和結(jié)尾不得抄入答題卡.,評(píng)分原則,本題總分為25分,按5個(gè)檔次給分. 評(píng)分時(shí),先根據(jù)文章的內(nèi)容和語(yǔ)言初步確定其所屬檔次,然后以該檔的要求來(lái)衡量，確定或調(diào)整檔次，最后給分.由于本次寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容已明確給出，因此評(píng)分檔次的確定應(yīng)側(cè)重于語(yǔ)言的表達(dá). 詞數(shù)少于80和多于120的,從總分中減去2分. 評(píng)分時(shí),應(yīng)注意的主要內(nèi)容為:內(nèi)容要點(diǎn),應(yīng)用詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)的數(shù)量和準(zhǔn)確性,上下文的連貫性及語(yǔ)言的得體性。 拼寫(xiě)與標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)是語(yǔ)言準(zhǔn)確性的一個(gè)方面，評(píng)分時(shí),應(yīng)視其對(duì)交際的影響程度予以考慮。英,美拼寫(xiě)及詞匯均可接受。 如書(shū)寫(xiě)較差,以至影響交際,將分?jǐn)?shù)降低一個(gè)檔次.,Possible version,Dear Sir, I am writing to you for the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought on 20th Apr.2008 at Tele Mall in Wuhan,P.R.China. Ten days after that,it didnt ring and send short messages. Then I took it to the seller,but was told that the model had been sold out and I had to wait at least three months for a new one. Later I went to the repairman. He said since it was a new model in China,it was impossible to fix it without the right spare parts. I was so desperate on hearing that. How can I wait that long? Therefore, I require that you send me a new one of the same model within a month. Thank you for your consideration. Sincerely yours,檔次的給分范圍和要求,第五檔(很好):(21-25分) 要點(diǎn)完整，表達(dá)清楚，無(wú)重大語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤.完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù). -覆蓋所有內(nèi)容要點(diǎn). -應(yīng)用了較多的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯。 -語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面有些許錯(cuò)誤，但為盡力使用較復(fù)雜結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯所致;具備較強(qiáng)的語(yǔ)言運(yùn)用能力. -有效地使用了語(yǔ)句間的連接成分,使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊. 完全達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫(xiě)作目的.,Range finders,The mobile phone can neither ring nor send messages. This really brings me a lot of troubles. So I contacted with your company. But the staff told me that the products had been sold out so they couldnt change a new one for me. They felt sorry for me and suggested me to have it repaired. Unfortunately,the type of the mobile phone is so new that the repairman said he couldnt solve the problem as there was no spare part for it. Hearing that,I lost my last hope. So now Im writing to you hoping that you can help me. Please change a new one for me as soon as possible.,第四檔(好)(16-20分)表達(dá)基本清楚,缺少個(gè)別要點(diǎn),有些語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤.完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù).,-覆蓋主要內(nèi)容. -應(yīng)用的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯能基本滿足任務(wù)的要求. -語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面應(yīng)用基本準(zhǔn)確，些許錯(cuò)誤主要是因嘗試較復(fù)雜語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯所致. -應(yīng)用簡(jiǎn)單的詞句間的連接成分,使全文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。 達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫(xiě)作目的.,Range finders,The mobile phone has some problem on its quality. First,the phone which I bought from you cant ring and I cant use it to write a message,either. Second,the products have been sold out that I cant change for another one. Last but not least,the style is new and dont have spare part, so I cant have it repaired. Im so worried because Im waiting to use it. So I hope that the company can change a new one for me as soon as possible. Thats all what I want to say. Im looking forward to hearing from you soon!,第三檔(適當(dāng))(11-15分) 尚能表達(dá),缺少多個(gè)要點(diǎn)，語(yǔ)法錯(cuò)誤較多.基本完成了試題規(guī)定的任務(wù).,- 基本覆蓋主要內(nèi)容. -應(yīng)用的語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯能基本滿足任務(wù)的要求. -有一些語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤，但不影響理解. -應(yīng)用簡(jiǎn)單的語(yǔ)句間的連接成分,使全文內(nèi)容連貫. 整體而言,基本達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫(xiě)作目的.,Range finders,I think the mobile phone has some quality problem. Such as the ring in the mobile phone can not work yet, and it can not send message recently. I know the size of the phone are new produce and no spare part can be exchanged. It can not be fix, and I also know the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought had already been slod out yet. It means that I can not change it in the normal way,but I still want to change a good one. Can you help me? I hope you to take some mesures to fix it as soon as possible. Im looking forward to hearing from you soon. Very thank you for your help.,第二檔(較差)(6-10分) 表達(dá)含糊不清,不能成篇. 未恰當(dāng)完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù).,-漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要內(nèi)容,寫(xiě)了一些無(wú)關(guān)內(nèi)容. -語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)單調(diào)，詞匯項(xiàng)目有限. -有較多語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤,影響了對(duì)寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容的理解. -較少使用語(yǔ)句間的連接成分,內(nèi)容缺少連貫性。 信息未能清楚地傳達(dá)給讀者。,Range finders,But this mobile phone has some troubles. The mobile phone hasnt voice when calling. And it doesnt make notes to others. I think I cant use the mobile phone. So I want to have a new one. But in WuhansTele Mall, this size mobile phone have sold out. They havent one to give me. And this size is new, the company havent spare part to repair the mobile phone. So I want your company can give a good mobile phone soon. I think yur company should considerate us. I only want a good one. Thanks.,第一檔(差): (1-5分) 動(dòng)了筆,僅羅列了不成句的單詞. 未完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù).,-明顯遺漏主要內(nèi)容，寫(xiě)了一些無(wú)關(guān)內(nèi)容,原因可能是未理解試題要求. -語(yǔ)言支離破碎,有很多語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)或詞匯方面的錯(cuò)誤，影響對(duì)寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容的理解 -缺乏語(yǔ)句間的連接成分，結(jié)構(gòu)紊亂,內(nèi)容不連貫. 信息未能傳達(dá)給讀者. 0分 未能傳達(dá)給讀者任何信息: 內(nèi)容太少，無(wú)法評(píng)判;寫(xiě)的內(nèi)容均與所要求內(nèi)容無(wú)關(guān).,Range finders,When the mobile phone has buy over. Then I know the mobile phone cant open the music and cant write the mail. But the mobile phone is very new. So no spare part can be it make good. And this mobile phone is buy over.We cant give people a new and good one. So,please your consideration be kuick make good this mobile phone and give the mobile phone(new good) to me.,08年湖北高考英語(yǔ)作文試題評(píng)析,題材貼近生活,有時(shí)代氣息 日常生活中最常見(jiàn)的交流工具手機(jī);現(xiàn)代科學(xué)技術(shù)的代名詞 手機(jī)出現(xiàn)故障的問(wèn)題也是我們經(jīng)常遇到的事情. 高一課本Unit9 Technology這一單元的課文 “l(fā)ife on the go”,就是一篇關(guān)于手機(jī)的文章. 從題材的選材來(lái)看，非常生活化,具有時(shí)代鮮明特征. 但是也在某種程度上限制了部分學(xué)生.,要點(diǎn)提示得當(dāng),難度適中，考生有話可說(shuō) 作為提綱式作文, 本次作文要點(diǎn)提示簡(jiǎn)練,全面,既給了學(xué)生充分發(fā)揮的空間,也控制了一定范圍,從而達(dá)到既考察學(xué)生應(yīng)用語(yǔ)言能力的目的,也從客觀上保證了學(xué)生正常水平的發(fā)揮.,能夠較全面地考察考生應(yīng)用語(yǔ)言的能力 出題者試圖通過(guò)日常生活中的普通事件來(lái)考察考生綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力. 比如 要點(diǎn)1 “手機(jī)不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信”, 考生可以用The mobile phone cant ring or send messages的一般句式,也可用The mobile phone can neither ring nor send messages或者The mobile phone cant ring,nor can it send messages(倒裝句句式)等高級(jí)句式.,要點(diǎn)2 “該產(chǎn)品已售完,無(wú)法更換”, 考生可以用The new type of it has been sold out,so they cant change a new one for me ;也可用The model has been sold out,as a consequence,its impossible for them to change me a new one或者The model has been sold out, which makes it difficult for me to have a new one或者The fact that the model has been sold out makes me unable to change it等等。,要點(diǎn)3 “型號(hào)新,無(wú)配件,無(wú)法維修”。 可以用Since its a new model,and therere no spare parts,I cant get it repaired 這一基本句式；也可用So new is its type without any spare parts that I cant get it repaired或者With its new type and no spare parts left,I find it hard to have it repaired或者Due to its new model with no spare parts,I have no access to its repair等等.,考生答題常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤,1.單詞拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤 考生由于基礎(chǔ)不扎實(shí)，或記憶不準(zhǔn)確，或臨場(chǎng)心理緊張等原因造成單詞的拼寫(xiě)錯(cuò)誤。,2.時(shí)態(tài)混亂,語(yǔ)態(tài)模糊.,不少考生在答題時(shí)不注意動(dòng)詞時(shí)態(tài)前后的相互照應(yīng),現(xiàn)在時(shí)態(tài),過(guò)去時(shí)態(tài),完成時(shí)態(tài)混用,3.一些詞匯尤其是動(dòng)詞的不準(zhǔn)確的應(yīng)用 比如They suggest me to have it repaired（對(duì)suggest這一動(dòng)詞用法錯(cuò)誤）；又如I hope you to take some measures to fix it（對(duì)hope to do 的錯(cuò)誤運(yùn)用）；或者So I contacted with your company（對(duì)contact的錯(cuò)誤用法),4.Chinglish的表達(dá) 如 “手機(jī)不響鈴,不能發(fā)短信;”有的考生譯為 “The mobile phone not ring,and send message”;又如 “該產(chǎn)品已售完,無(wú)法更換;”有的考生譯為 “The product sold over,cant change”又如 “型號(hào)新,無(wú)配件,無(wú)法維修.”有的考生譯為 “The type is new,no spare part,cant repair”,5.表達(dá)平淡 更多的考生是直譯了漢語(yǔ)提示,沒(méi)有嘗試用高級(jí)詞匯或者高級(jí)語(yǔ)法表達(dá).比如這樣一篇作文: I think the mobile phone has some quality problem. Such as the ring in the mobile phone can not work yet, and it can not send message recently. I know the size of the phone are new produce and no spare part can be exchanged. It can not be fix, and I also know the mobile phone of Dephone-S250 I bought had already been slod out yet. It means that I can not change it in the normal way,but I still want to change a good one. Can you help me? I hope you to take some mesures to fix it as soon as possible. Im looking forward to hearing from you soon. Very thank you for your help. 如果詞匯和語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)不夠嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)出了差錯(cuò),得分就會(huì)更低.,小議對(duì)今后高中英語(yǔ)教學(xué)指導(dǎo),夯實(shí)語(yǔ)法基礎(chǔ)，尤其是中英文語(yǔ)言差異明顯的語(yǔ)法項(xiàng)目。 高考英語(yǔ)作文是對(duì)考生在整個(gè)高中階段所學(xué)英語(yǔ)知識(shí)的綜合應(yīng)用能力的考察.任何一門(mén)語(yǔ)言,離不開(kāi)字,詞,句,篇,以及把它們串連在一起的基礎(chǔ)語(yǔ)法. 我們是在不知不覺(jué)中充分利用語(yǔ)境掌握了母語(yǔ)的基本規(guī)則,并在以后的學(xué)習(xí)中逐漸強(qiáng)化而達(dá)到運(yùn)用自如的境地;而英語(yǔ)作為一門(mén)外語(yǔ)，在沒(méi)有這種自然語(yǔ)境的情況下，更多地應(yīng)是通過(guò)日常教學(xué)達(dá)到學(xué)習(xí),理解,掌握并運(yùn)用的目的.,尤其是中英文語(yǔ)言對(duì)比差異明顯的語(yǔ)法項(xiàng)目如動(dòng)詞被動(dòng)語(yǔ)態(tài)的理解和運(yùn)用仍是大多學(xué)生學(xué)習(xí)英語(yǔ)中的壁壘.比如這樣的完成句子: 1.Finally,the people in this country began to realise measures should be taken to protect the environment.(要采取措施保護(hù)環(huán)境).不少學(xué)生譯為take measures to protect the environment; 2.It made the people present at the meeting disappointed that no agreement was reached (會(huì)議沒(méi)有達(dá)成一致意見(jiàn)).學(xué)生根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)譯為the meeting didnt reach an agreement.這都是受母語(yǔ)干擾引起的.,再就是英語(yǔ)中一些動(dòng)詞如seated, dressed, located, lost等,我們常用be seated （表示“坐著”）be dressed（表示“穿著）” be located（表示“坐落于”） be lost（表示“迷失”）.而這種動(dòng)詞在對(duì)應(yīng)的中文中幾乎是不可理喻的.,背誦美文,美句,增強(qiáng)英語(yǔ)語(yǔ)感 我們現(xiàn)在所學(xué)的課文中不乏好句: 1. On the third day I was struggling through stormy weather and during the next week the wind grew stronger and I found myself spending a whole day in my tent.(Senior Book1B Unit17);,2. Seconds count in an emergency,and knowing what to do can mean the difference between life and death. (Senior Book 2A Unit8); 3. A better understanding of the environment is necessary,as is the willingness to act.(Senior Book 2A Unit9); 4. By looking at a problem in as many ways as possible,creative thinkers can find solutions that would otherwise remain invisible.(Senior Book 2B Unit18);,其次，也可以在課外精選一些短小精悍的文章有步驟有計(jì)劃地讓學(xué)生背誦.比如新概念英語(yǔ)第二冊(cè)中就有不少原汁原味的