安徽省巢湖市春暉中學(xué)2020屆高考英語 考前沖刺精品講義外教旁批寫作外教旁批寫作 (18)

安徽省巢湖市春暉中學(xué)2020屆高考英語考前沖刺精品講義外教旁批寫作（十九）李華在校學(xué)習(xí)成績很好。他做完作業(yè)后喜歡看電視。他的父親不允許他看電視，怕李華會(huì)因看電視而影響功課。李華卻不這么認(rèn)為。學(xué)生習(xí)作外教批改Li Hua is one of the top students in his school.He likes watching TV，but his father disagrees1 disapproves for fear that it would2 will make his study3 studies suffer.However，Li Hua holds a different view.He insists that watching TV shouldnt be banned completely.He thinks4 believes that he wont get addicted to it.If one5 he can cope_with balance his study studies in_harmony with entertainment in_a_proper_way6 ，his study grades wont be affected at all.It is also his belief that TV can even benefit him a lot.It_can_not_only7 Not only can it keep him informed about the8 national and international current affairs，but it can also provide profound knowledge，thus broadening his horizons.What Li Hua believes is that TV itself is not a bad thing as long as people who watch it dont abandon themselves to it.Therefore，he intends to have_a_word9 talk with his father to convey his ideas.,旁批1disagree不能用來描述某人的行為，應(yīng)該用disapprove(不贊成)。2這是真實(shí)條件句，因此要用will而不是would。3他在學(xué)習(xí)不止一門學(xué)科，因此這里應(yīng)該用studies而不是study。4在本句中，think暗示他不肯定，believe更恰當(dāng)，可以表示他肯定自己不會(huì)沉溺于看電視。5one是一個(gè)非常正式的詞，現(xiàn)在不常用。如果用one，整個(gè)句子其他部分應(yīng)與其保持一致。由于句子的其余部分都使用了he，那么整個(gè)句子應(yīng)該與he保持一致。6這里只要說cope(妥善地處理)就足夠了。如果他妥善處理(copes)，那么就一定是以恰當(dāng)?shù)姆绞?the proper way)去做。7改過之后的詞序更好，以免與cannot混淆。8用the多余。9這是一個(gè)很好的短語，但是用在這里不太合適，因?yàn)楹纹绞峭磔叀Ｈ绻赣H和兒子說話用have a word是可以的，但反之就不禮貌。這里可以改寫成He intends to talk with his father.。這是一篇非常優(yōu)秀的作文。作者完全回答了題目的要求，并且使用了許多對(duì)這個(gè)程度的學(xué)生來說較為復(fù)雜的句型結(jié)構(gòu)和極好的詞匯，如profound，broaden horizons，abandon，intend，harmony，banned，insist等。只是你應(yīng)該在使用一個(gè)單詞之前確定自己理解它的確切含義。高分作文秘訣之十二：使用正確的標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)。例如：Instead of (不要說：)I believe with my hard work my dream to become a biologist will come true.Use (要說：)I believe，with my hard work，my dream to become a biologist will come true.Instead of (不要說：)Although I am good at maths.I like English very much.Use (要說：)Although I am good at maths，I like English very much.Instead of (不要說：)He is a goodlooking tall muscular man.Use (要說：)He is a goodlooking，tall，muscular man.你所在的城市每年在元宵節(jié)夜晚都會(huì)舉辦一場大約30分鐘的焰火晚會(huì)，耗資達(dá)150萬元，市民對(duì)此議論紛紛。下表是某報(bào)對(duì)市民進(jìn)行調(diào)查的結(jié)果：不同的觀點(diǎn)原因32%贊成1.推動(dòng)消費(fèi)，促進(jìn)經(jīng)濟(jì)發(fā)展2.增加節(jié)日氣氛，給市民帶來娛樂68%不贊成1.城市建設(shè)不完善，需要資金投入2.造成空氣污染，對(duì)環(huán)境有害請(qǐng)結(jié)合表格內(nèi)容以“Is it wise to celebrate the Lantern Festival with fireworks？”為 題寫一篇120詞左右的英語短文。_參考范文：Is it wise to celebrate the Lantern Festival with fireworks?In my city，there is an annual firework display on the night of the Lantern Festival.The citizens have different opinions about it.According to a recent survey,32% of the citizens approve of setting off fireworks to celebrate the festival.They say the production of fireworks helps increase consumption and promotes economic growth.And the display offers relaxation and excitement to the citizens，which improves the festival atmosphere.However，other 68% disagree.For one thing，its a waste of money.The firework display lasts only 30 minutes，yet it costs about 1.5 million yuan，which c