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1、暑假作業(yè)檢測暑假作業(yè)檢測作文講評作文講評存在問題存在問題1.格式錯誤格式錯誤:1.概括概括 2.正文正文2. 時態(tài)混亂。時態(tài)混亂。1）概括部分與原文時態(tài)保持一致。）概括部分與原文時態(tài)保持一致。 2）發(fā)表觀點(diǎn)時用現(xiàn)在時。）發(fā)表觀點(diǎn)時用現(xiàn)在時。3. 概括要點(diǎn)不全或不準(zhǔn)。概括要點(diǎn)不全或不準(zhǔn)。4. 捐助對受惠學(xué)生的影響表述不到位。捐助對受惠學(xué)生的影響表述不到位。5.不能準(zhǔn)確說明自己為什么想捐助某個群體的理由。不能準(zhǔn)確說明自己為什么想捐助某個群體的理由。Para. 1 Summary1. 找關(guān)鍵詞找關(guān)鍵詞(1) work hard as live a simple life(2) save a lot

2、of moneydonate her savings(3) be amazed/the subject of many interviews and articles get pleasure2. 連詞成句連詞成句 (不能用原文句子）不能用原文句子）3. 連句成段連句成段Oseola Mc Carty, an ordinary worker living a simple life donated her life savings to the students in need, which amazed the world and pleased herself.Para. 2 Commen

3、ts1. deserve admiration/respect2. show respect for her3. meaningful behavior4. a helpful/slefless/ generous/respectable person5. a gesture of kindness6. set a good example to us1. 1. 值得尊敬值得尊敬2. 2. 對她表示尊敬對她表示尊敬3. 3. 行為很有意義行為很有意義4. 4. 一個樂于助人一個樂于助人/ /無私無私/ /慷慨慷慨/ /值得尊敬的人值得尊敬的人5. 5. 善良的表示善良的表示6. 6. 給我們樹

4、立了一個給我們樹立了一個好榜樣好榜樣連詞成句 連句成段1. Though she was not rich, she still donated much of her money to the university. She is so selfless that we should learn from her.2. What she did sets a good example to us. Its so generous of her to donate so much money to the poor children even though she was not rich.

5、There is no doubt that every one of us should show respect for her.Para. 3 Effects/Influences1. have a great effect/influence on . make a great difference to .2. help them out of financial problems3. allow/enable them to concentrate their energy on their studies4. inspire/motivate them to work harde

6、r and reward others for their help5. feel grateful and pass on love to others6. give those in need a helping hand offer help to those in need 1. 1. 對對.有很大的影響有很大的影響2. 2. 幫他們擺脫了經(jīng)濟(jì)問題幫他們擺脫了經(jīng)濟(jì)問題3. 3. 使他們能集中精力學(xué)習(xí)使他們能集中精力學(xué)習(xí)4. 4. 激勵他們更加努力學(xué)習(xí)，激勵他們更加努力學(xué)習(xí)， 回報(bào)他人回報(bào)他人5. 5. 懷抱感恩之心，傳遞懷抱感恩之心，傳遞 愛心愛心6. 6. 向有需要的人伸出援助向有需

7、要的人伸出援助 之手之手連詞成句 連句成段 What she has done makes a great difference to their life. Not only have they got rid of financial problems, which allows them to concentrate their energy on their study, but they will also feel grateful and give others a helping hand if possible.Para. 4 Your choiceChoices: 1. l

8、ack financial sources2. cant afford expensive medical treatment/tuitition fees3. lack the ability to support themselves4. have less chance of being employed5. face/be faced with discriminationReasons:Reasons:1. 1. 缺乏經(jīng)濟(jì)來源缺乏經(jīng)濟(jì)來源2. 2. 承擔(dān)不起昂貴的承擔(dān)不起昂貴的醫(yī)療醫(yī)療/ /學(xué)費(fèi)學(xué)費(fèi)3. 3. 沒能力養(yǎng)活自己沒能力養(yǎng)活自己4. 4. 工作機(jī)會少工作機(jī)會少5. 5. 受

9、到歧視受到歧視Para. 4 Your choiceChoices: 1. allow/enable them to receive a better education2. make contributions to societyReasons:Reasons:1. 1. 讓他們能接受良讓他們能接受良好的教育好的教育2. 2. 為社會做貢獻(xiàn)為社會做貢獻(xiàn)連詞成句 連句成段If I had the chance to make a donation, I would choose the disabled. For lack of financial resources, they cant afford expensive medical treatment. Worse still, they are faced with discrimination from others. Im convinced that only by helpi