2020南京高三三模英語作文指導(dǎo)與解讀：勇士的理解

1、2020南京高三三模英語作文指導(dǎo)與解讀：勇士的理解南京三模的作文題非常接地氣，將課標(biāo)主題（人與社會）和時政結(jié)合在一起了, 不落俗套。新時代的勇士是怎樣的定義？這個話題有很多可寫的，一定要選好點。勇士在我看來有兩個要求：對自己，要求敢于擁抱未知，走出舒適區(qū)；對社會，要承擔(dān)責(zé)任，排除萬難，有亮劍精神。這就是一分為二分析話題。寫這篇文章的時候，我想到了兩個：1 .馬斯克說的：我嚼著玻璃，凝視深淵。2 .最美的逆行者題目請閱讀下面材料，并按照要求用英語寫一篇150詞左右的文章。DdaughterMmommyD: “ Mommy, are you leaving home again? ”M: “Yes

2、, honey. Mommy is going to fight a monster!”D:“A monster? Is it scarier than a big roaring tiger? Oh my!”M: “WellyesA lot scarier! It 'called Virus. Many people are working hard to defeat the monster. ”D: “ Who are they? ”D:M: " They' re the scientists who are working on new medicines t

3、o cure the ill and the construction workers who are building new hospitals for patients as fast as possible. They are the delivery people who are delivering masks to everyone in need, risking being caught by the virus monsters, too. They are all ordinary people, including volunteers, but now they ar

4、e also powerful soldiers; they are the bravest fighters and they are heroes!They are so braveut mommy, are you scared?M: “ Yes, everyone is scared. Mommy ' s too. But if no one goes to fight the monster, there will be more monsters, and the monsters will be even more aggressive, and they may def

5、eat us all. ”D: “But mommyI don ' t want you to leave me. ”M: “ Baby, mommy doesn ' t want to leave you either. Sweetie, do you know what be brave " means? To be brave is to do the right thing even if you are really scared.D: “ Mommy. I ' ll be brave, too. I want to be a doctor when

6、 I grow up, and I wglh fi the monsters together with you.”寫作內(nèi)容1 .用約30個單詞概述上述對話內(nèi)容；2 .談?wù)勀銓Α坝率俊钡睦斫猓? .寫出誰是你心目中的“勇士”，并簡要陳述理由(至少兩點)旨導(dǎo)|概要部分：Summary:事情+反饋事情： mother, explain, bravery, daughter反饋：女兒的愿望正文：談?wù)勀銓Α坝率俊钡睦斫猓阂环譃槎?，即對自己的要?挑戰(zhàn)comfort zone, overdifficulty );對社會的責(zé)任(shoulder responsibility)心目中的“勇士” ：醫(yī)生，因為

7、符合上面的勇士的定義，即：鉆研疫苗；冒著風(fēng)險救他人全文如下：A mother explains bravery to her daughter by her fighting the virus monsters like other ordinary heroes, which inspires the girl to follow suit (效仿)after growing up. (27 wds)The brave, in my eyes, should possess the following qualities. For one thing, they dare to chall

8、enge their comfort zone and embrace setbacks instead of being contentedwith the status quo.（主題句中用對比手法 instead of，這樣讓句子的內(nèi)涵度更多）A striking exampleis Elon Musk, who claimed that he was chewing the glass and staring into the abyss to fullfil his goals.（舉例法，同時用到了馬斯克的名言） For another, the brave never cower

9、but shoulder due responsibility whatever the risks.（并沒有展開，因為放在末段了）Personally, doctors deserve the honor of brave heroes. First, threatened by virus, they stick to fight in the front line to save the patients. Besides, they becomea beacon of hope in pursuit of vaccine, breathing confidence into those

10、 locked home.（造句用到了比喻 修辭，同時用in.of來簡化句子，建議同學(xué)們多用介詞短語） In a word, the brave are the counter-marching people.（最美的逆行者） We don' t know who they are but we know who they are for. （130wds）感悟沖刺階段寫作文，要在造句上下點功夫，我的經(jīng)驗是：過于復(fù)雜的復(fù)合句盡可 能少一些，因為熟練地駕馭長難句的能力是大部分中學(xué)生不具備的，建議用介詞短 語來代替，即：主干部分+介詞短語（in of短語；by doing; instead

11、 of ；rather than 復(fù)合句基本就是一個簡單的 which ,非謂語動詞也就是一個。我認(rèn)為這些足夠了， 關(guān)鍵是用詞上多錘煉一下，四種修辭：反問句；比喻句；對比句；虛擬句（otherwise,would have done）。至于倒裝句和強調(diào)句不要太俗套，譬如only in this way can we這種沒啥意思的。官方范文A mother explains to her daughter why she leaves home to fight against the virus monsters like ordinary heroes, sparking her ambit

12、ion to fight like a soldier. (27 words)Personally, heroes refer to people from all walks of life who perform their duties faithfully whatever the situations. They play an irreplaceable role in any critical moment. Dangerous and urgent scenes can bring out their best, such as courage, responsibility

13、and commitment.Heroes in my heart are my teachers. After the outbreak of the virus, they rise to the challenge of live streaming lectures and grading assignments online. Not only do they have to adapt themselves to the new teaching model but they make enormous sacrifices as well. Besides, serving as

14、 the essential role of imparting knowledge to their students, they offer immediate assistance in terms of mental relief and comfort.To conclude, those who do their own parts whole-heartedly deserve our credit and admiration. (125 words)提示：建議大家多記幾句馬斯克的名言，因為這個人不同于其他名人，最近的火箭發(fā) 射又成功了，他作為典型的敢于拼搏、創(chuàng)新，還有對人類命

15、運的使命感等優(yōu)秀品質(zhì)， 可以作為很好的例子：1. 'If something is important enough, even if the odds are against you, you should stilldo it.如果一件事情對你很重要，即使成功的概率很小，你也應(yīng)該去做2. '(Physics is) a good framework for thinking. . Boil things down to their fundamental truths and reason up from there.物理是思想的框架。追索到事情的本質(zhì)，再從那里思考下去3.

16、 'The first step is to establish that something is possible; then probability willoccur.只有首先看到事情的可能性，才會有發(fā)生的機會4. 'It's OK to have your eggs in one basket as long as you control what happens to thatbasket.'只要你能左右一顆樹的未來，那么你是可以在那棵樹上吊死的5. 'Persistence is very important. You should not

17、 give up unless you are forced to giveup.堅持很重要，永遠(yuǎn)不要放棄，除非不得已6. 'You want to have a future where you're expecting things to be better, not one where you're expecting things to be worse.'每個人都幻想將來會更好，而不是更糟7. 'It is a mistake to hire huge numbers of people to get a complicated job don

18、e. Numbers will never compensate for talent in getting the right answer (two people who don't knowsomething are no better than one), will tend to slow down progress, and will make the taskincredibly expensive.雇傭許多人去做一件復(fù)雜的事，往往是錯誤的。數(shù)量永遠(yuǎn)不如質(zhì)量(三個臭皮匠不一定比一個諸葛亮強)，人多降低效率，增加成本。9. 'If you go back a few

19、 hundred years, what we take for granted today would seem likemagic being able to talk to people over long distances, to transmit images, flying,accessing vast amounts of data like an oracle. These are all things that would have beenconsidered magic a few hundred years ago.'其實我們現(xiàn)在擁有的一切，在幾百年前都是不可

20、思議的魔術(shù)奇跡10. 'My biggest mistake is probably weighing too much on someone's talent and not someone's personality. I think it matters whether someone has a good heart.'我犯下的最大錯誤是過度看中人的才能而不是人品。我認(rèn)為擁有一顆善良的心至關(guān)重要。11. 'When I was in college, I wanted to be involved in things that would cha

21、nge the world. Now I am. 我在大學(xué)的時候，一直想?yún)⑴c做能夠改變世界的事情。而現(xiàn)在我就在做這樣的事情12. 'I think it's very important to have a feedback loop, where you're constantly thinking about what you've done and how you could be doing it better. I think that's the single best piece of advice: constantly think ab

22、out how you could be doing things better and questioning yourself.' 我認(rèn)為循環(huán)反饋很重要，這樣你可以及時知道自己做得怎么樣，是否可以做得更好。最 好的忠告是：重復(fù)問自己，我是否可以做得更好 ？13. 'I wouldn't say I have a lack of fear. In fact, I'd like my fear emotion to be less because it's very distracting and fries my nervous system.'我不敢說自己從未擔(dān)心害怕過。實際上我希望少一點擔(dān)心害怕，因為它讓我分心，使我焦慮14. 'Life is too short for long-term grudges.'生命太短暫，它無法承受無休止的恩恩怨怨15. 'Don't be afraid of new arenas.'不要害怕新的競技場16. 'I think it is possible for ordinary people to choose to be extraord