高考作文訓練句子的蝶變

1、原來精彩的句子是這樣變來的！洛陽市第二實驗中學周華高三期末考試書面表達高三期末考試書面表達 假定你是李晨，你看到美國學生Tom在網(wǎng)上發(fā)帖，找人幫他提高漢語水平，請根據(jù)以下提示給他寫一封電子郵件。 樂意幫助； 勝任理由； 學習要求； 聯(lián)系方式（email地址：）注意：1. 詞數(shù)100左右； 2. 可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫。Dear Tom, Hi, Tom. My name is Li Chen. I am a senior high school student. I am very happy to heard you need help to learn Chinese. Becau

2、se I am very happy to help you. At the first, I believe I can help you. Because I am good at chinese and I am a chinese. So, I believe I can help you. I very much like Chinese. I can tell you something about my Chinese learning experience. I realized the importance of chinese since I was a junior sc

3、hool student. Every day after I finished my homework, I went to read a lot of books about Chinese. It is helpful for my chinese. Now my Chinese improves a lot. More and more students come to ask for my help.If you want to learn Chinese well. You must learning work hard. You can making a plan about l

4、earning Chinese and read many Chinese books. Please consider my advice. You will find learning Chinese is very interesting. Although you are a foreigner, I am sure you can learn Chinese well. If you have question, you can write email to .I am very happy to help. Your Li Chen提要：提要：1. 透析考試大綱透析考試大綱2. 高

5、考高考“書面表達書面表達”的失分原因的失分原因3. 高考高考“書面表達書面表達”的提分策略的提分策略命題思路命題思路通過提示內容要點（或話題）、寫作要求考查考生綜合運用英語完成書面交際任務的能力，即初步的英語寫作能力。具體包括英語語言知識、語篇知識以及語言的組織表達能力。命題原則命題原則話題是考生熟悉的，符合高中生認知水平的，內容既有規(guī)定性又有開放性，規(guī)定寫作手法和字數(shù)?！?“（要求考生）（要求考生）根據(jù)提示根據(jù)提示，用英語寫一篇，用英語寫一篇100120100120個個詞詞的的短文短文。提示的形式有圖畫、圖表、文字等。提示的形式有圖畫、圖表、文字等” （考試說明）“能寫出常見體裁的能寫出常見

6、體裁的應用文應用文，例如：信函和一般通知，例如：信函和一般通知等等”，“能能描述人物或事件描述人物或事件，并進行，并進行簡單的評論簡單的評論” （課程標準七級語言技能目標）“能根據(jù)用文字及圖表提供的信息寫能根據(jù)用文字及圖表提供的信息寫短文短文或或報告報告”，“能寫出能寫出語意連貫語意連貫且且結構完整結構完整的的短文短文，敘述事情敘述事情或或表表達觀點和態(tài)度達觀點和態(tài)度”（ 課程標準八級語言技能目標）字數(shù)在100120個詞左右的語意連貫的結構完整的有描述、敘述和評論的英語短文短文內容、意思內容、意思形式形式寫作手法寫作手法（即材料的組織方法）各檔次的給分范圍和要求：各檔次的給分范圍和要求：第五檔

7、（2125分）完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務。覆蓋所有內容要點應用了較多的語法結構和詞匯語法結構或詞匯方面有些許錯誤，但為盡力使用較復雜結構或較高級詞匯所致；具備較強的語言運用能力。有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使全文結構緊湊。 完全達到了預期的寫作目的。第四檔（1620分）完全完成了試題規(guī)定的任務。雖漏掉一兩個次重點，但覆蓋所有主要內容。應用的語法結構和詞匯所滿足任務的要求。語法結構或詞匯方面應用基本準確，些許錯誤主要是因嘗試較復雜語法結構或詞匯所致。應用簡單的語句間連接成分，使全文結構緊湊。 達到了預期的寫作目的。第三檔 （1115分）基本完成了試題規(guī)定的任務。雖漏掉一些內容，但覆蓋所有主要內容

8、。應用的語法結構和詞匯能滿足任務的要求。有一些語法結構或詞匯方面的錯誤，但不影響理解。應用簡單的語句間連接成分，使全文內容連貫。 整體而言，基本達到了預期的寫作目的。第四檔（610分）未適當完成試題規(guī)定的任務。漏掉或未描述清楚一些主要內容，寫了一些無關內容。語法結構單調，詞匯項目有限。有一些語法結構或詞匯方面的錯誤，影響了對寫作內容的理解。較少使用語句間的連接成分，內容缺少連貫性。 信息未能清楚地傳達給讀者。第一檔（1-5分）未完成試題規(guī)定的任務。明顯遺漏主要內容，寫了一些無關內容，原因可能是未理解試題要求。語法結構單調，詞匯項目有限。較多語法結構或詞匯方面的錯誤，影響對寫作內容的理解。缺乏語

9、句間的連接成分，內容不連貫。 信息未能傳達給讀者。0未能傳達給讀者任何信息：內容太少，無法評判；寫的內容均與所要求內容無關或縮寫內容無法看清失分原因：失分原因： 分析高考和平常測試中的低分作文不難發(fā)現(xiàn)，作文得低分的原因一般有以下幾點： 審題失誤。這主要是因為考生對要點把握不準，沒有搞清時態(tài)、文體及人稱。 語言基礎知識不扎實。（1） 單詞拼寫錯誤太多；（2） 動詞用法錯誤多，時態(tài)，語態(tài)用法混亂，主謂不一致；（3）名詞單復數(shù)及冠詞使用錯誤；（4）詞性混亂；（5）高級用法掌握不扎實導致的錯誤；（6）固定句式錯誤；（7）粗心導致的錯誤。3. 中式英語4. 語言啰嗦5. 缺乏連貫性6. 缺少高級句式，作

10、文缺乏亮點。7. 書寫潦草，有涂改，增補現(xiàn)象，書寫不規(guī)范。8. 空白卷和抄襲現(xiàn)象。提分策略 形式“活”起來 內容“實”起來 銜接“順”起來1.書寫“美”起來1、 形式“活”起來（1）同位My name is Li Chen. I am a senior high school student.【華麗蝶變】My name is Li Chen, a senior high school student.（2）并列句 My name is Li Chen. I am a senior high school student. I am very happy to heard you need he

11、lp to learn Chinese. Because I am very happy to help you. 【華麗蝶變】My name is Li Chen, a senior high school student, and I am very happy to hear you need help to learn Chinese.（3） 主從復合句At the first, I believe I can help you. Because I am good at chinese and I am a chinese. So, I believe I can help you.

12、 I very much like Chinese.【華麗蝶變】At first, I believe I can help you because I am good at Chinese.I like Chinese very much.If you want to learn Chinese well. You must learning work hard. 【華麗蝶變】If you want to learn Chinese well, you must work hard.As long as you work hard, you can learn Chinese well.（4

13、） 使用非謂語動詞Every day after I finished my homework, I went to read a lot of books about Chinese. 【華麗蝶變】Every day having finished my homework, I always went to read Chinese books as many as possible.（5） 特殊句式Although you are a foreigner, I am sure you can learn Chinese well. 【華麗蝶變】Foreigner as you are, I

14、 am sure you can learn it well. I realized the importance of chinese since I was a junior school student. 【華麗蝶變】I didnt realize the importance of Chinese until I came into the junior middle school.It was not until I came into the junior middle school that I realized the importance of Chinese.2. 內容“實

15、”起來（1）詞性多樣性【示例1】Now my Chinese improves a lot. 【華麗蝶變】Since then, my Chinese has experienced a steady increase.【示例2】 It is helpful for my chinese. 【華麗蝶變】It helps my Chinese a lot./ It is of great help for my Chinese.(2) 同義詞的使用【示例1】More and more students come to ask for my help. 【華麗蝶變】An increasing nu

16、mber of people come to ask for my help.【示例2】You will find learning Chinese is very interesting.【華麗蝶變】You will find learning Chinese is a lot of fun.(3) 短語代替單詞【示例1】You can making a plan about learning Chinese and read many Chinese books. 【華麗蝶變】You can come up with a plan about learning Chinese and re

17、ad more Chinese books.【示例2】Please consider my advice. 【華麗蝶變】Please take my advice into consideration. 3. 銜接“順”起來Dear Tom, Hi, Tom. My name is Li Chen, a senior high school student, and I am very happy to hear you need help to learn Chinese. On the one hand, I believe I can help you because I am good

18、 at Chinese . Whats more, I like Chinese very much. I can tell you something about my Chinese learning experience. On the contrary, it was not until I came into the junior middle school that I realized the importance of Chinese. Every day having finished my homework, I always went to read Chinese bo

19、oks as many as possible. It is of great help for me. Now my Chinese improves a lot. Because of this, an increasing number of people come to ask for my help. On the other hand, if you want to learn Chinese, you must work hard. You can come up with a plan about learning and read more Chinese books. Pl

20、ease take my advice into consideration. You will find learning Chinese is a lot of fun. Certainly, foreigner as you are, I am sure you can learn it well. At last, if you have question, you can write emails to . Looking forward to your early reply. Yours Li Chen表順序表順序表舉例表舉例表因果表因果表總結表總結表轉折表轉折 連接詞連接詞firstlydue toas followson the wholeon the contrarywhats morein shortthereforefurthermorethusfor instancein a wordowing tobesidesinsteadand so on4. 書寫“美”起來仔細審題仔細審題：內容、形式（文體）、詞數(shù)、其他注意事項。勾勒框架勾勒框架：分幾個段落，每段寫什么，怎么寫？（觀點、舉例、分析、結論）信息處理信息處理：用什么詞匯、句型來表達每個信息要點？詞匯豐富、句型多樣, 多用高級表達。完成初稿完成初稿：內容連