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1、人物作文仿寫技巧練習(xí)作文仿寫 1l請以請以“The First Chinese to Space”為題，根為題，根據(jù)下面的提示寫一篇介紹我國執(zhí)行首次載人航據(jù)下面的提示寫一篇介紹我國執(zhí)行首次載人航天飛行任務(wù)的航天英雄楊利偉的短文。天飛行任務(wù)的航天英雄楊利偉的短文。l姓名姓名 楊利偉楊利偉 年齡年齡38 出生地出生地 遼寧省遼寧省l主要經(jīng)歷主要經(jīng)歷 中國遨游太空第一人中國遨游太空第一人 .被選為宇航員被選為宇航員之前，曾是我軍一名非常優(yōu)秀的飛行員之前，曾是我軍一名非常優(yōu)秀的飛行員.于于2003年年10月月15日上午日上午9：00乘坐乘坐“神舟神舟”五號飛船五號飛船飛向太空，并于次日晨飛向太空，并于

2、次日晨6時許安全返回地面。在時許安全返回地面。在空中停留的空中停留的21小時小時23分鐘的時間里，他隨飛船分鐘的時間里，他隨飛船繞行地球繞行地球14周，其間，他拍攝的一些照片。返周，其間，他拍攝的一些照片。返回后對他的各項醫(yī)療檢查表明，他的身體狀況回后對他的各項醫(yī)療檢查表明，他的身體狀況良好。人們將永遠(yuǎn)銘記這位英雄，因為是他實良好。人們將永遠(yuǎn)銘記這位英雄，因為是他實現(xiàn)了我們幾千年的夢想?，F(xiàn)了我們幾千年的夢想。a. 用過去分詞翻譯下列句子用過去分詞翻譯下列句子l1) 出生于一個小村莊，出生于一個小村莊， 她夢想著上一個她夢想著上一個理想的大學(xué)。理想的大學(xué)。l2) 22歲時，她畢業(yè)于山東大學(xué)。歲時

3、，她畢業(yè)于山東大學(xué)。l3）受到導(dǎo)師的鼓勵，）受到導(dǎo)師的鼓勵， 她決定專心致志的她決定專心致志的研究她所感興趣的。研究她所感興趣的。l4）她為教育事業(yè)作出了巨大的貢獻(xiàn)，）她為教育事業(yè)作出了巨大的貢獻(xiàn)， 被被認(rèn)為是我們學(xué)校最優(yōu)秀的教師。認(rèn)為是我們學(xué)校最優(yōu)秀的教師。b. 用現(xiàn)在分詞或完成式表達(dá)經(jīng)歷用現(xiàn)在分詞或完成式表達(dá)經(jīng)歷l 1）畢業(yè)以后，）畢業(yè)以后， 她去了一個小學(xué)教書。她去了一個小學(xué)教書。l2）她為教育事業(yè)作出了巨大的貢獻(xiàn)，）她為教育事業(yè)作出了巨大的貢獻(xiàn)， 被被認(rèn)為是我們學(xué)校最優(yōu)秀的教師。認(rèn)為是我們學(xué)校最優(yōu)秀的教師。l3）在研究農(nóng)業(yè)的時候，）在研究農(nóng)業(yè)的時候， 袁隆平也關(guān)注農(nóng)袁隆平也關(guān)注農(nóng)民的是

4、生活。民的是生活。c. 介詞和介詞短語的使用介詞和介詞短語的使用l 1） 由于導(dǎo)師的鼓勵，由于導(dǎo)師的鼓勵， 她決定專心致志她決定專心致志的研究她所感興趣的。的研究她所感興趣的。l2）通過她的努力，）通過她的努力， 她完成了大學(xué)的學(xué)業(yè)。她完成了大學(xué)的學(xué)業(yè)。l3） 作為中國最偉大的科學(xué)家之一，作為中國最偉大的科學(xué)家之一， 袁隆袁隆平一直過著很簡樸的生活。平一直過著很簡樸的生活。l4）和其她女孩子一樣，我也喜歡漂亮的）和其她女孩子一樣，我也喜歡漂亮的衣服。衣服。l5）在大學(xué)期間，她對文學(xué)感興趣。）在大學(xué)期間，她對文學(xué)感興趣。d. whose / where/ when 引導(dǎo)的定語從句l1） 他出生于

5、一個小鎮(zhèn)，他出生于一個小鎮(zhèn)， 在那兒他度過了在那兒他度過了他快樂的童年。他快樂的童年。l2）袁隆平的成就得到了世界的公認(rèn)，為）袁隆平的成就得到了世界的公認(rèn)，為世界的糧食問題作出了巨大的貢獻(xiàn)。世界的糧食問題作出了巨大的貢獻(xiàn)。 l3）他于）他于2008年畢業(yè)于北大，年畢業(yè)于北大， 那年，那年， 第第29屆奧運(yùn)會在北京舉辦。屆奧運(yùn)會在北京舉辦。e. 其它技巧：其它技巧：l用同位語代替定語從句用同位語代替定語從句l時間狀語的靈活運(yùn)用和置于句首，時間狀語的靈活運(yùn)用和置于句首，l長短句的交叉使用，長短句的交叉使用，l連接詞的使用連接詞的使用The first Chinese to travel to sp

6、acel易錯單詞易錯單詞 safely / safety choose chose - chosen - choice excellent examination fly - flew flown physically healthy / physical health realize our Chinese dream of thousands years. = make our dream come true掌握下列句型，不要再錯掌握下列句型，不要再錯l1. Before being chosen as an astronaut, he was an excellent pilot. (a

7、fter doing)l2. He used to be a pilot. he was used to being a pilot. the pen was used to write.3. He was the first/ last/ only/ second Chinese to travel to space. he was the first Chinese who traveled to space.時刻的表達(dá)時刻的表達(dá)lAt 9 a.m on October 15th, he flew into space aboard the ShenZhou 5 and landed sa

8、fely to the earth at 6 the next morning.lOn October 15th, he flew into space aboard the ShenZhou 5 at 6 in the morning and returned safe to the earth at 6 a.m the next day.在期間在期間lDuring the 21 hours and 23 minutes when he stayed in space, he orbited the earth 14 times , taking a great many photos. l

9、He stayed in space for 21 hours and 23 minutes, during which time he orbited the earth 14 times and took a great many photos. lHe stayed in space for 21 hours and 23 minutes and orbited the earth 14 times. In the meantime, he took a great many photos邏輯主語一致邏輯主語一致lHaving returned to the earth, he had

10、his body examined, which showed that he was completely healthy.lAfter returning to the earth, he had his body examined, which showed that he was completely healthylAfter he returned to the earth , the physical examination showed that his body was in good condition.強(qiáng)調(diào)句型的使用強(qiáng)調(diào)句型的使用( 主要強(qiáng)調(diào)狀語）主要強(qiáng)調(diào)狀語）lIt w

11、as at 9 a.m on October 15th that he flew into space aboard the ShenZhou 5.lIt was not until he flew into space that our Chinese dream came true.lIt was because he realized our dream that we Chinese will remember him forever.lIt was in this villlage that I was born.lIt is he that/who realized our dre

12、am.lIt is him that/who we Chinese will keep in mind forever.l Yang Liwei, who was born in Liaolin Province in 1971, is the first person who travelled to space in China. He used to be an excellent pilot before he became an astronaut. It was at 9 a.m on the 15th October, 2003 that he began his first f

13、light to space. Having orbited the earth for 14 hours in space, Yang got back to the earth with safety at 6 am on 16th. During the 21 hours and 23 minutes he spent in space, he took some valuable photos. The physical examination showed that he was physically healthy after he returned to the earth. O

14、n account of his accomplishment for the Chinese s dream of thousands of years, Yang will be remembered by us Chinese.l Yang Liwei, who was born in Liaolin Province in 1971, is the first person who travelled to space in China. He used to be an excellent pilot before he became an astronaut. It was at

15、9 a.m on the 15th October, 2003 that he began his first flight to space. Having orbited the earth for 14 hours in space, Yang got back to the earth with safety at 6 am on 16th. During the 21 hours and 23 minutes he spent in space, he took some valuable photos. The physical examination showed that he

16、 was physically healthy after he returned to the earth. On account of his accomplishment for the Chinese s dream of thousands of years, Yang will be remembered by us Chinese.(郭敏怡）郭敏怡）l Born in Liaolin Province, Yang Liwei , the first man who traveled to space in Chinese, was a 38-year-old man. Befor

17、e being elected as an astronaut, he was a great pilot in our army. At 9 a.m, 15th October , 2003, he flew into the universe by the Shenzhou 5 Spaceship and returned to the earth safe at 6 a.m the next day. He and his spaceship orbited the earth 14 rounds, which lasted 21 hours and 23 minutes. In the

18、 meanwhile, he took some photos, which contributed to the study of space. Having returned to the earth, he had medical examinations , which showed that his body was in good condition. With this achievement, people will remember this hero forever owing to the fact that it is he that accomplishes our

19、dream of thousands of years.l Born in Liaolin Province, Yang Liwei , the first man who traveled to space in Chinese, was a 38-year-old man. Before being elected as an astronaut, he was a great pilot in our army. At 9 a.m, 15th October , 2003, he flew into the universe by the Shenzhou 5 Spaceship and

20、 returned to the earth safe at 6 a.m the next day. He and his spaceship orbited the earth 14 rounds, which lasted 21 hours and 23 minutes. In the meanwhile, he took some photos, which contributed to the study of space. Having returned to the earth, he had medical examinations , which showed that his body was in good condition. With this achievement, people will remember this hero forever owing to the fact that it is he that a