2021年1月首考英語閱卷課件（48張PPT）

1、2021年英語首考閱卷有感應(yīng)用文李華作歡迎辭。不是一封信或e-mail. 學(xué)生對學(xué)生。要注意稱呼。活動安排。要合理。祝愿。Best wishes 在這里是否不妥？評分時關(guān)注的是內(nèi)容要點、應(yīng)用詞匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性。 字?jǐn)?shù)。少于60字或超過100字，扣2分。 格式錯誤，扣1分。 應(yīng)用文要有效、恰當(dāng)?shù)貍鬟_(dá)意義。慎用生僻字；不矯情；不做作；不堆砌詞匯。 要有作者與讀者的互動。 標(biāo)點符號的使用要注意。 書寫較差，則降一個檔次。樣卷14分Good morning, ladies and gentlemen! I feel greatly honored to be here and expres

2、s my warmest welcome to all of you coming from New Zealand.After the welcome meeting, well show you around the school so that you can be more familiar with it. Then you will attend a Chinese class, where you can savour a dip of the beauty of Chinese. At noon, you can enjoy some traditional Chinese d

3、elicacies. The following hours you will experience paper-cutting, exploring the magic of Chinese art.May your visit in our school full of joy!要點齊全，語言自然流暢，完全達(dá)到交際目的。語言有個別錯誤。樣卷11分On behalf of our school, I am here to express our cordial welcome for you arrival. There are several tailor-made activities

4、arranged by our school for you first day trip.Firstly, our school bus will take you to the world-famous Zhejiang Museum, where youll gain a deep insight into Chinese culture and history. Then youll be sent to the West Lake, a must-seen tourist which enjoys worldwide reputation for its breath-taking

5、scenery and heart-touched stories.Wish you can enjoy your stay in China. Thanks for listening.樣卷9分Dear friends,I m Li Hua, on behalf of my school. Here, Im showing my warmest welcome to you to come to my school.Now, Im telling you some information about the activities in the flowing days. To begin w

6、ith, we will have a speech competition about ”Why we learn English” in the afternoon. Whats more, a sports meeting will be held tomorrow. And your participation is welcomed. Last, we will show you around the pretty school where we live and study.I hope you would love our school. Wish you a nice visi

7、t.覆蓋了所有主要內(nèi)容，語言簡單，但不影響意義傳達(dá)。次重點添加不夠合理，語言不妥帖。樣卷8分Im Li Hua. I am here to convey my earnest welcome for our visit and brief you on those elaborate activities on behalf of our school.As scheduled, a flea market featuring Chinese traditional idems will be held tomorrow, where you can buy small idems at a

8、low prise as well as get a glimpse of splendid culture. It also never fails to practice your Chinese during the market. Besides, highly recommanded is the performance organized by students from two schools, including ranging from guzheng to organ performance.Best wishes for our friendship and enjoy

9、yourself.基本達(dá)到了預(yù)期的寫作目的，沒有遺漏主要要點，但稱呼不妥，主要活動的安排銜接不太好，有幾處表達(dá)和拼寫錯誤。樣卷5分Dear students, I am sincerely welcome your come here. We will hold some activities. Here are some plan. First, we will attend an interesting club. There have many food and games. You are must have a happy time. Then we have eat some ca

10、ke. I think it is delicious for me. Finally, we have a party in the evening. Everyone can join. Meanwhile, you can make some good friends. Finally, I wish you have a good time.未適當(dāng)完成試題規(guī)定的任務(wù)，句式單調(diào)，詞匯表達(dá)有限，語法錯誤較多，影響對寫作內(nèi)容的理解，有些許無關(guān)的內(nèi)容。培訓(xùn)卷12分Hello students from Newzeland,On behalf of the whole students, its

11、 my great honor standing here to extend our warmest welcome to all of you.Aimed at making your trip unforgettable and enjoyable, a variety of activities are arranged by our school, ranging from extending interesting classes to feel the charm of Chinese characters to visiting our local City Library w

12、hich contains lots of precious masterpieces. By participating in these activities, not only will you deepen your understanding of Chinese culture, but fuel your desire to learn more about it.Wish you a rich and fulfilling stay here.開頭兩個錯 Newzeland whole students 離譜，其他都還好培訓(xùn)卷13分Ladies and gentlemen, I

13、ts my honor to stand here representing the Student Union to extend welcome to you. Now I am offering some information of the activity arrangements.Firstly, we will show you around our school, learning our school history and culture. And then you will watch a Chinese opera, which will undoubtedly giv

14、e you a taste of the charm of Chinese culture. Then you will visit the Tai Lake museum, where you can experience ancient fishermens life.I do hope these activities will leave you a fabulous memory.代表學(xué)生會不是代表學(xué)生。培訓(xùn)卷13分 Good morning! Welcome to our school! Im Li Hua, the president of our school student

15、union. Im glad to meet all of you and tell activities arrangement! First, I will lead you to the Science Hall at 9 oclock. There you can see laboratories of our school. Then at 10 oclock, you can go to visit Teaching Hall and know about students daily classes. After lunch you can walk around the who

16、le school and exchange your ideas with our school students. Have a good time! Hope that our school wont let you down!語言較為自然，較符合此類文體要求，有些許語言錯誤，但意義傳達(dá)不受影響。培訓(xùn)卷12分 Im Li Hua, its my privilege to stand here, representing our school, conveying my cordial welcome to you. A lecture, aiming to introduce Chine

17、se history, will be conducted at the beginning of your visit. In the following days, colorful courses will serve as platforms where you can attain in-depth comprehension of Chinese school life. Its earnestly hoped that we could feast your eyes with fruitful activities and establish intimate friendsh

18、ip. Hoping you can enjoy your visit here! Thanks for listening!要求的內(nèi)容都已包含，意義傳達(dá)清晰，但文風(fēng)與該題文體要求不符。培訓(xùn)卷12分Dear friends,I am Li Hua, its my privilege to extend my heartfelt welcome on behalf of our school. Weve prepared various activities. Some arrangements are as follows.At first, there is a talent show in

19、 the afternoon. We are sure that it will help you to experience the charm of Chinese culture. Whats more, a paper-cutting activities is also waiting you ahead. You can have a try and creat your own works, which will lead to a deeper insight into Chinese traditional culture.Welcome again and wish you

20、 a pleasant stay in China. Thanks.培訓(xùn)卷11分Good morning dear teachers and fellow students, Im Li Hua. Please allow me, on behalf of our school, to extend our warm welcome to you. To welcome you, we have prepared a cultural exhibition, which displays artifacts combining traditional Chinese painting skil

21、ls with New Zealand calture. It will surly bring amazement to all of you. Having done it, you will have a debate competition with our school students. Through it, you can make friends with us quickly. Im anticipating your fantastic performance. Finally, wish you have a good time and harvest a lot du

22、ring your stay. Thank you.內(nèi)容完整，表述清楚，語言有些許錯誤。培訓(xùn)卷13-2分Dear fellow students,Im Li Hua, president of the Students Union. Im here to welcome you with open arms as well as offer an explicit introduction of your visit in our school the next following days.A lecture themed “Explore the Beauty of Chinese Lan

23、guage” is to be given my Mr. Wang in the school hall, which is bound to stimulate your enthusiasm for Chinese and cast a deep insight into it. Also, you are highly anticipated to take part in our “Science and Cultural Festival” where everyone shows high spirit and great passion. Its a golden platfor

24、m for you to make like-minded friends and develop an inclusive attitude towards different cultures.Sincere welcome again and wish you an unforgettable experience in our school.批到的好作文 13分Ladies and Gentlemen, I feel it a great honor to convey my heartfelt welcome to our visitors from Newzeland.To imm

25、erse you in the charm of Chinese culture, various activities are delicately organized, including Chinese brush painting exhibitions, the traditional paper-cutting competition and a fancy dress party, which will definitely gain you a deep insight into Chinese culture. Moreover, an interesting perform

26、ance about Hamlet will surely break down the barriers.I sincerely hope that these activities can promote mutual understanding and wish you a fruitful and meaningful campus life!讀后續(xù)寫 字?jǐn)?shù)。少于130字，扣2分。字?jǐn)?shù)再怎么多都不扣分。 下劃線。有一個詞沒有下劃線，不扣分。有2個下劃線沒劃，扣1分。 格式。要接著首句寫，一段就是一段，不要再分段。 要注意故事的發(fā)展邏輯，不要跑題。 段落之間要有適當(dāng)?shù)你暯印?如果說應(yīng)用文

27、講究的是合理性，那么續(xù)寫講究文學(xué)性。 書寫較差，則降一個檔次。前情回顧：1. Pumpkin carving family traditiona visit to a local farmcarry pumpkins back home2. this year winner? I ? my 14-year-old brother? forgot to weigh before taking out their insideswe/ in the kitchen mom/ film the annual eventI forced my head inside the pumpkin3. How

28、 I forced my head into the pumpkin4. I couldnt get my head outPara 1: I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer.How did I feel? What did I think?How did Jason and other family members react to my incident?What happened five or six minutes later?How do you continue to make it coh

29、erent to Para.2?How did I feel? What did I think?suffocated/ panicked/ dismay/ regretful/ frightened/ felt blood racing through my veins/ breathlessMy fondness and excitement to the pumpkin were gone in a split second.A flood of terror welled up in me.Panic seized me. I felt so scared that my throat

30、 tightened, and my knees felt weak.My heart was beating painfully and banging against my ribs.A ripple of sadness welled up inside me.Nervousness nibbling at me, I felt like sitting on pins and needles, with fierce frown on my face.Swallowed by extreme anxiety and terror, I was on the verge of colla

31、pse and reduced to tears with red-rimmed eyes.Knees wobbling and palms sweating, I was scared to death and my heart raced wildly like a galloping horse before my dad finally broke the pumpkin to rescue me.Gripped by suffocating terror, I went to great lengths to pull it off my head yet in vain.2. Ho

32、w did Jason and other family members react to my incident?giggled/ burst into laughter/ thrilled 3. What happened five or six minutes later?attempted to pull out/ struggled to/ calm down/ widen the hole with a knife/ cut open/ use a hammer?/ ask police for help/ called 911?/ sent me to hospital?/ I

33、fell to the ground cracked open?Hardly had I been on the verge of tears when an idea dawned on me.No sooner had I escaped from the pumpkin than I burst out crying.No sooner had I freed my head than I dashed to my room, leaving my mom and dad appreciating the video.With joint effort, I managed to mov

34、e my head out.4. How do you continue to make it coherent to Para.2?What happened next was totally out of my expectation.Never had I expected that accident would turn into an intriguing event, and the interesting experience would be carved in my deepest memory as a permanent reminder of simple pleasu

35、re.Para 2. The video was posted online the Monday before Halloween.How did people / viewers react to the post?How did I feel?Who was the winner?What message does the passage convey?How did people / viewers react to the post?got viral/ gained/ received millions of likes and shares/ gain popularityWha

36、t was totally out of my belief was that someone modelled after me, putting his head in a small pumpkin and uploading the video.2. How did I feel?ashamed/ angry/ find a hole to hide in/ embarrassed/ a mixture feeling of embarrassment and joyA mixture feeling of embarrassment and anger crept into my h

37、eart.3. Who was the winner?No one cared.4. What message does the passage convey?Never put myself at risk.The best Halloween ever experienced.If there is an emergency, face it straight forward and never be panicked.第五檔 （21-25分）與所給短文融洽度高，銜接合理。（coherence）內(nèi)容豐富，應(yīng)用了5個及以上的劃線詞。語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯豐富、準(zhǔn)確，可能有些許錯誤，但不影響意義表達(dá)，

38、有效使用了語句間的連接成分，使續(xù)寫短文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。23分樣卷Para 1. I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Despite my unwillingness to admit it, I had made the most shameful and stupid mistake ever. I had no choice but to beg Jason to help me. He tried to pull it desperately, which only turned out in vain

39、. Finally, he decided to use a knife to break the pumpkin. Though he tried very cautiously and I didnt get hurt actually. I felt unbearable fear crossed my mind, beads of sweat popping out on my forehead. Much to my dismay, my dad and mom whispered, giggled, chuckled and finally burst into laughter.

40、 After what seemed like a century. Jason managed to break the pumpkin. It was not until then that I found a camera just in front of me. Worse still, my dad announced that the video would be shared online.Para 2. That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. Reading the comments of audien

41、ce around the world. I felt extraordinarily awkward and I was eager to melt into the ground. The number of “l(fā)ikes” increasing rapidly, I eventually couldnt resist the temptation to watch it myself. So funny was that video that I couldnt help laughing! With the video gaining more and more popularity.

42、 I felt a mixture of embarrassment and satisfaction striking into my heart. Just at that moment, Jason tapped on my shoulder and admitted that I was the winner this year, followed by the applause of my whole family. “I wont save you another time!” he laughed. Interesting as it was. I would never try

43、 this stupid thing anymore!情節(jié)、情感、語言、邏輯都得到很好的照顧，難得。與前文銜接緊密，感觀和情感過渡自然。出南瓜前都是聽覺、心理描寫、或者是間接信息或主觀推斷，考慮周到。語言雖然有少許不地道，但流暢通順，無低級錯誤。描寫細(xì)膩生動。23分培訓(xùn)卷Para 1. I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. At last I had to admitted the fact that I couldnt make it to get my head out and turned to J

44、ason for help. Jason was in fits of giggles at first, but as my breath became shorter, he instantly realized the gravity of the situation. He made a series of attempts, pulling the pumpkin with all his might, but in vain. I could clearly feel blood racing through the vein of my head. “Help!” I cried

45、 out. Finally, it was dad who came to my rescue. Cautiously, he dug a hole in the pumpkin to let fresh air in, which relieved me a lot. Regaining my calmness, I asked dad to widen the hole using a knife and moved my head again. Eventually, I made it! However, I didnt know my mom videoed the whole ev

46、ent, which was so embarrassing to me.Para 2. That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. Everyone would burst out laughing when he or she caught a glimpse of this video. I found myself so embarrassed that I hid in the house for a whole week! After this unforgettable experience, never w

47、ould I put my head into the pumpkin once again. Needless to say, my younger brother, Jason, was the winner this year. Our family held a small award ceremony. Glowing with pride, Jason approached me. Instead of showing off the prize, he said, “l(fā)ets enjoy the prize together, brother.” heart brimming w

48、ith ineffable warmth, I finally cracked a radiant smile.情節(jié)總體合理，描寫較為細(xì)膩。語言總體面貌好。23分培訓(xùn)卷Para 1. I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Then a mixture of sounds swam into my ears. My sisters giggle, moms screaming, Jasons spluttering explanation, all were like hissing fires aroun

49、d me. On the verge of madness, I found my choked voice tremulous and a whimper escaped my throat. “Stay still”, comforted mom, stroking my shuddering back gently. “Well cut the pumpkin”. I sensed a knife gingerly pricked into the hole and slithered along the surface, making a crack exposed. With an

50、ear-shattering bang, the pumpkin was torn apart. Gasping for crisp are greedily with my newly-freed nose, I spun around, only to see something more thrilling in store for me dad recorded everything!Para 2. That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. Shares and likes surged dramatically

51、, and soon everyone nearby was impressed by my “heroic” deed. Even I myself got amused by the stupid but childlike act. Time flew fast and the Halloween approached. As the sun dipped below the horizon and night descended, the eery atmosphere began to curdle and haunt in the neighborhood. I was chatt

52、ing merrily with Jason when someone knocked, “Trick or treat!” I opened the door, stunned to see a kid bearing a huge delicately-carved pumpkin outside his head! I beamed and burst into chuckles.一個很好的點：對文化的注意和應(yīng)用。21分培訓(xùn)卷Para 1. I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. The extrem

53、e tension and anxiety made me breathless. I struggled to pull hard again, but in vain. Thankfully, my dad rushed to help me out while mom and Jason supported the pumpkin. Dad persuaded me to calm down and stay still. Then he used a knife carefully cutting the hole. Several minutes later, the hole wa

54、s eventually big enough for me to get my head out. No sooner had I escaped from the pumpkin than I burst out crying. My fondness and excitement to the pumpkin were gone in a split second. However, mom and Jason laughed wildly, so did my dad. When I was back on my feet, realizing my foolish action, I

55、 laughed, too. All this was recorded by the camera.Para 2. That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. Surprisingly, the funny video caught many peoples attention. They left a number of interesting comments such as “narrow escape”, which made my family laugh. What was totally out of my

56、 belief was that someone modelled after me, putting his head in a small pumpkin and uploading the video. It seemed that more and more people were willing to try out of curiosity. Finally, it proved that it was the most unique Halloween in my life. The emergency unexpectedly turned into a funny thing

57、, with a lot of strangers joint help and imitation, for it was really a frightening and dangerous.情節(jié)較為合理，自然、完整；語言較通順，但存在個別錯誤，有一些詞語使用不當(dāng)，如joint, help等。21分培訓(xùn)卷Para 1. I was stuck for five or six minutes though it felt much longer. Instead of helping me out, Jason was laughing uncontrolably. A few second

58、s later, his laughter faded and I could hear him struggling. Curiosity drove me straighten up with the pumpkin. Through the holes I cut on the pumpkin, I saw Jasons head stuck in his pumpkin too! It was obvious that mom had helped my younger brother and sister forced Jasons head into the pumpkin. It

59、 felt like a decade before dad came and rescued us. I thought everything was over until mom showed us the video she had filmed.Para 2. That video was posted online the Monday before Halloween. To our surprise, it was liked by thousands of viewers. The video was shared and people even posted their ow

60、n videos; with all of their heads stuck in pumpkins. It seemed that our “pumpkin hat” had made a hit! I will never forget the day I managed to let my nose enter the pumpkin and failed to pull it out! I will never forget our family tradition, too!雖然有極個別意義傳達(dá)受影響之處，但語言總體自然流暢，意義清晰。情節(jié)設(shè)計獨出心裁且能自圓其說。18分樣卷Par