新教材高一英語(yǔ)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)市青年教師優(yōu)質(zhì)課比賽課件

1、市青年教師優(yōu)質(zhì)課比賽新教材讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)市青年教師優(yōu)質(zhì)課比賽新教材讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)一、題型解讀 根據(jù)所給的一段約350詞的語(yǔ)言材料和段落的開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)進(jìn)行約150詞的續(xù)寫(xiě)，將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文。 提供的短文，多以記敘文故事類(lèi)文章或者夾敘夾議類(lèi)文章為主，故事情節(jié)有曲折、有起伏，但故事線(xiàn)索的邏輯性比較強(qiáng)。 就目前浙江卷的已考過(guò)的讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)來(lái)看，都屬于“problem-solving”的思路。一、題型解讀二、評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)1. 與所給短文及段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)的銜接程度；2. 內(nèi)容的邏輯性和豐富性；3. 上下文的連貫性；4. 文中語(yǔ)法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的準(zhǔn)確性、豐富性。二、評(píng)分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)1. 讀懂原文理清五個(gè)W和一

2、個(gè)H：人物who、地點(diǎn)where、時(shí)間when、事件what、原因why及怎樣發(fā)展how。2. 構(gòu)思情節(jié)，謀篇布局(1) 按原文中事件的發(fā)生，構(gòu)思好合理的“下一步”情節(jié)，需符合邏輯。三、解題步驟1. 讀懂原文三、解題步驟(2) 利用續(xù)寫(xiě)部分給出的兩個(gè)段落的首句進(jìn)行布 局謀篇。(3) 這兩句話(huà)起關(guān)鍵作用，時(shí)間的先后、情節(jié)的 發(fā)展都要以這兩句話(huà)為內(nèi)在邏輯關(guān)系。(4) 情節(jié)的安排，必須按照敘述的順序，繼續(xù)緊 密結(jié)合原材料中五W的邏輯順序發(fā)展。(5) 兩個(gè)段落要銜接緊密，相互關(guān)聯(lián)，不能獨(dú)立 存在。(2) 利用續(xù)寫(xiě)部分給出的兩個(gè)段落的首句進(jìn)行布3. 優(yōu)化語(yǔ)言 語(yǔ)言能力的充分體現(xiàn)，詞匯句法的準(zhǔn)確與復(fù)雜程度

3、，細(xì)節(jié)描寫(xiě)的生動(dòng)性等都將讓故事更加立體、飽滿(mǎn)。3. 優(yōu)化語(yǔ)言四、真題范例 閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫(xiě)兩段，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的短文。續(xù)寫(xiě)的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。 (2020年6月浙江卷)It was summer, and my dad wanted to treat me to a vacation like never before. He decided to take me on a trip to the Wild West. We took a plane to Albuquerque, a big city in the state of New Mexico. W

4、e reached Albuquerque in the late afternoon. Uncle Paul, my dads friend, picked us up from the airport and drove us up to his farm in Pecos.四、真題范例 His wife Tina cooked us a delicious dinner and we got to know his sons Ryan and Kyle. My dad and I spent the night in the guestroom of the farm house lis

5、tening to the frogs and water rolling down the river nearby. Very early in the morning, Uncle Paul woke us up to have breakfast. “The day starts at dawn on my farm,” he said. After breakfast, I went to help Aunt Tina feed the chickens, while my dad went with Uncle Paul to take the sheep out to graze

6、(吃草). I was impressed to see my dad and Uncle Paul riding horses. They looked really cool. His wife Tina cooked us a In the afternoon, I asked Uncle Paul if I could take a horse ride, and he said yes, as long as my dad went with me. I wasnt going to take a horse ride by myself anyway. So, my dad and

7、 I put on our new cowboy hats, got on our horses, and headed slowly towards the mountains. “Dont be late for supper,” Uncle Paul cried, “and keep to the track so that you dont get lost!” “OK!” my dad cried back. After a while Uncle Paul and his farm house were out of sight. It was so peaceful and qu

8、iet and the colors of the brown rocks, the deep green pine trees, and the late afternoon sun mixed to create a magic scene. It looked like a beautiful woven (編織的) blanket spread out upon the ground just for us. In the afternoon, I asked Paragraph 1：Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my

9、horse. Paragraph 2：We had no idea where we were and it got dark. Paragraph 1：1. 審題與讀懂原文。解題示范原文體裁Narration ( )Exposition ( )Argumentation ( )原文大意In _, my dad took me on a trip to _, visiting his friend Uncle Pauls _. We enjoyed the peaceful farm life and began a _.horse rideSummerthe Wild Westfarm1.

10、審題與讀懂原文。解題示范Narration ( 原文六要 素Who：_ _When：_Where：_ _ What：_ _ _ Why：_ How: _讀懂續(xù)寫(xiě)段落首句圈出有用的詞或可用于發(fā)展思路的詞Dad and I visited Uncle Pauls farm, and we enjoyed the farm life and began a horse ride; I, Dad, Uncle Paul, Uncle Pauls wife, Tinasummer; in the afternoonthe Wild West; Albuquerque, a big city in the

11、 state of New Mexico; the farm in Pecos/Who：_ 讀懂續(xù)寫(xiě)圈出有用的詞或可用于發(fā)2. 構(gòu)思情節(jié)，謀篇布局。根據(jù)第一步中所圈出可發(fā)展情節(jié)的詞，并設(shè)計(jì)情節(jié)。2. 構(gòu)思情節(jié)，謀篇布局。填入與段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)中畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞有關(guān)的、你能想到的詞從四個(gè)方面設(shè)計(jì)情節(jié)，展開(kāi)思路Reason：Dialogue：Result：Feeling：Paragraph 1：Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in front of my horse. 答案不唯一，由學(xué)生討論，言之有理即可填入與段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)中畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞有關(guān)的、你能想到的詞從四個(gè)方面設(shè)計(jì)情Parag

12、raph 2：We had no idea where we were and it got dark. 填入與段落開(kāi)頭語(yǔ)中畫(huà)線(xiàn)詞有關(guān)的、你能想到的詞從四個(gè)方面設(shè)計(jì)情節(jié)，展開(kāi)思路Reason：Dialogue：Result：Feeling：答案不唯一，由學(xué)生討論，言之有理即可Paragraph 2：We had no idea whe3. 潤(rùn)色語(yǔ)言：善用連接詞、合理描述細(xì)節(jié)、使用各種句子結(jié)構(gòu)：獨(dú)立結(jié)構(gòu)、分詞做狀語(yǔ)、從句等。3. 潤(rùn)色語(yǔ)言：善用連接詞、合理描述細(xì)節(jié)、使用各種句子結(jié)構(gòu)：參考范文Paragraph 1： Suddenly a little rabbit jumped out in f

13、ront of my horse. This unexpected appearance frightened my horse, which made it run wildly. I tried my best to control it, but in vain. Frightened as I was, I tried to keep my balance to prevent myself from falling off. Fortunately, minutes later, the horse stopped before a river, out of breath, and

14、 so did I. At that moment, my dad also came up. Seeing I was OK, he was quite relieved. But it was clear that we got lost.參考范文Paragraph 2： We had no idea where we were and it got dark. We didnt know where the farm house was. What we could do was to go back along the previous track slowly. But it was really difficult for us in such a dark situation. Just as we were at the point of d