07-1讀后續(xù)寫解題指導(dǎo)-2022屆高考英語沖刺段導(dǎo)與練(新高考)(教案)

1、07-1讀后續(xù)寫解題指導(dǎo)2022屆高考英語沖刺段導(dǎo)與練（新高考）【題型特點(diǎn)】讀后續(xù)寫提供一段350詞以內(nèi)的語言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內(nèi)容和所給段落首句進(jìn) 行續(xù)寫（150詞左右），將其開展成為一篇與給定材料邏輯銜接，情節(jié)架構(gòu)自然，而且結(jié)構(gòu)完 整的短文。該題型主耍考查考生的閱讀理解能力，由讀到寫的思維能力和語言表達(dá)運(yùn)用能力 三個方面。其采分點(diǎn)主要涉及以下內(nèi)容：與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度、內(nèi)容的豐 富性、應(yīng)用語法結(jié)構(gòu)和詞匯的豐富性和準(zhǔn)確性、上下文的連貫性?！究记榻庾x】讀后續(xù)寫的所提供的原文的語篇類型一般是以記敘文（包括敘議結(jié)合文）為主。其取材多 樣，故事性強(qiáng)，但其話題離不開三大主題：人與自然

2、、人與社會以及人與自我。所提供的原 文常常是通過兩條主線（情節(jié)線和情感線）設(shè)置較為真實(shí)的問題情境，考查考生能否運(yùn)用英語 基礎(chǔ)知識準(zhǔn)確理解文章的故事情節(jié)，并結(jié)合所給文本材料及兩個段落首句（引領(lǐng)續(xù)寫的走向）, 分析篇章結(jié)構(gòu)、情節(jié)脈絡(luò)，發(fā)揮其獨(dú)立思考能力，在正確的思想價值觀念指導(dǎo)下運(yùn)用思維方 法，展開合理的想象。運(yùn)用英語詞匯、語法等基礎(chǔ)寫作知識技能，完成一篇與給定材料有邏 輯銜接，情節(jié)和結(jié)構(gòu)完整的短文?！窘忸}指導(dǎo)】一、理解原文是基點(diǎn)準(zhǔn)確理解原文，把握原文故事梗概以便預(yù)測故事開展的走向是寫好續(xù)寫最基本的一步。 首先是理解表層信息：從體裁（記敘文）、主體人稱、主體時態(tài)和和記敘文其中的五個要素， 即人物（

3、who）、時間（when）、地點(diǎn)（where）、何事（what）、起因（why）等方面理解這些表層信息； 其次是理解深層信息：理清故事的開展脈絡(luò)：即把記敘文的另一個要素，事情開展的過程 （how）梳理清楚。接著是提煉主旨大意：在上述兩個“理解”的基礎(chǔ)上整合本篇故事梗概， 即主旨大意。二、框架情節(jié)是節(jié)點(diǎn)構(gòu)建續(xù)寫框架，構(gòu)思續(xù)寫情節(jié)是確保續(xù)寫局部在內(nèi)容上與原文高度契合的節(jié)點(diǎn)，因此 考生對此務(wù)必要給予重視。分析續(xù)寫首句，構(gòu)建續(xù)寫框架。續(xù)寫首句為考生提供了續(xù)寫的基本依據(jù)，引領(lǐng)續(xù)寫的 走向。所以考生要圍繞續(xù)寫首句，構(gòu)建續(xù)寫的框架?？忌梢苑謩e對所給的兩段的首句進(jìn)行 設(shè)問，提出3至5個問題，把這些問題的答案

4、串聯(lián)起來就可形成兩個段落的基本框架。借助文本資源，構(gòu)思續(xù)寫情節(jié)。根據(jù)記敘文的六要素和自己的想象，借助文本資源，構(gòu) 思續(xù)寫兩段故事的情節(jié)。對于記敘文體裁的續(xù)寫，其續(xù)寫的兩段情節(jié)構(gòu)思大體是：第一段情節(jié)構(gòu)思：第一句在內(nèi)容上必須銜接提示語并聯(lián)系原文最后的情節(jié)（可以是描寫 人物的情感并且做了什么：情感描寫+動作描寫）；接著要說的是：主要（次要）人物的反響（動 with occasional clanks clearly heard. I waited on the seat until Dad finished his work. After what seemed a good while, he c

5、ame back into the car, weak and tired. When he saw the new shoes, his face lit up. Youve grown up!” Dad said, excited and satisfied. Smiling at him, I knew what I should focus on, determined to study hard to live Dads expectation.【參考答案】3（情節(jié)開展以及結(jié)局的另一個版本）My mind was playing Pingpong. His old and black

6、 shoes flashed through my mind. But my gaze again fell on the brand new Penny Loafers. I was fascinated by these gleaming shoes and couldnt take my eyes off them. I was about to spend all my ten dollars on them when I recollected Dads worn-out shoes. The gleam of the loafers started to dull. I took

7、shoes of my dads size from the clearance rack and darted to the checkout counter.I ran back to the shop and put Dads new shoes on the seat in his car. The moment we got in the car Dad picked up the box. When he opened it he just stared without saying a word. A mixture of guilt and delight came from

8、the bottom of my heart. He looked first at the shoes and then at me. I thought you need a new pair of shoes more than I do. I broke the silence. Dad put his hand on my shoulder and we sat looking at each other for a moment. Nothing else was said. Dad started the car and we went home.作描寫以推動情節(jié)的開展）；出現(xiàn)問

9、題與矛盾沖突（沖突轉(zhuǎn)折）；為了解決問題主要（次要）人物 說了什么、做了什么以及心理活動；為了解決問題主耍（次要）人物還說了什么、做了什么； 但是問題沒有得到解決（沖突轉(zhuǎn)折）；銜接第二段開頭語，作為第一段的結(jié)束語。第二段情節(jié)構(gòu)思：回答第二段開頭提示語內(nèi)容（可以是動作描寫以推動情節(jié)開展）；主要 （次要）人物說了什么、做了什么（以推動情節(jié)開展）；主要（次要）人物的反響，心理、情感或動 作描寫；主要人物在何種情況下做了什么，促使問題終于得到解決（情節(jié)的轉(zhuǎn)折以凸顯主要 人物）；主要人物在問題得到解決以后還做了什么；最后一句呼應(yīng)原文開頭，或是主要人物 的感悟、或是點(diǎn)題的句子。三、文字表達(dá)是重點(diǎn)再好的續(xù)寫框

10、架和情節(jié)害的依賴豐富的句子（包括過渡句）和多彩的詞匯（包括過渡詞）來 呈現(xiàn)，因而續(xù)寫中文字表達(dá)是重中之重。讀后續(xù)寫評分的第七當(dāng)（22-25分）所規(guī)定的標(biāo)準(zhǔn)是：創(chuàng)造了豐富、合理的內(nèi)容，富有邏 輯性，續(xù)寫完整，與原文情境融洽度高；使用了多樣且恰當(dāng)?shù)脑~匯和語法結(jié)構(gòu)，表達(dá)流暢, 語言錯誤很少，且完全不影響理解；自然有效地使用了段落間、句間銜接手段，全文結(jié)構(gòu)清 晰，前后呼應(yīng)，意義連貫。結(jié)合該標(biāo)準(zhǔn)，以下主要為考生提供潤色讀后續(xù)寫初稿時常要用到 的句式：1.形容詞（短語）和分詞（短語祚狀語Unable to answer the teachers question, all the students kep

11、t silent.回答不出老師的問題，學(xué)生們都默不作聲。On my way home, I saw a middle-aged man lying by the roadside, dead drunk.在我回家的途中，我看到一個中年男子躺在路邊，爛醉如泥。Afraid of being scolded, Eric thought of playing truant.因為害怕挨罵，埃里克起了逃學(xué)的念頭。Jack paced up and down in his room, deep in thought.杰克在他的房間里來回踱步，陷入了深思。With the help of the helic

12、opter, Mary got out of the forest and saw her husband, safe and sound.在直升飛機(jī)的幫助下，瑪麗安然無恙地出了森林，見到了她的丈夫。Trapped in the dense mist, I could do nothing but burst into tears,helpless and disappointed.困在迷霧中，我什么也做不了，只能哭泣，無助又失落。Desperate and exhausted,Jane knelt down, with tears rolling down her cheeks.又絕望又疲憊

13、，Jane跪了下來，眼淚順著她的臉頰流了下來。.with/without的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)和獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)With no path to follow, Jane walked on for quite a long time.因為無路可循，簡繼續(xù)走了很長時間。The girl smiled with her long hair flowing in the breeze.女孩微笑著，長發(fā)在微風(fēng)中飄動。His wife was in deep sorrow with her eyes filled with tears.他的妻子傷心極了，眼里滿是淚水。With his plan ruined by th

14、e accident, he let out a cry of anger.意外毀了他的計劃、他憤怒地大叫了一聲。Without anybody left in the house but us, this place could use a bit of fun.除了我們之外，沒有其他人離開這個房子，這個地方可以找些樂子。A professor walked in, books in hand.有位教授走了進(jìn)來，手里面拿著一些書。A young man sat on the bench, his head buried in a book.一位年輕人坐在長凳上，埋頭看一本書。The boy

15、rushed to the old mans house, his face covered with sweat.男孩沖到老人家，滿臉是汗。The night falling, the boy was hungry and cried in the street.夜幕降臨，男孩俄了，在大街上哭了起來。.倒裝句Out of the darkness came a voice he had never heard before.黑暗中傳來一個他從來沒有聽過的聲音。So shocked was I that I was dumbfounded with my eyes wide open.我震驚得

16、睜大眼睛，目瞪口呆。A storm of applause came after silence.沉默之后，響起一陣掌聲。It was not until he had lost all his possessions did he realize that he was cheated. 直到失去所有的財產(chǎn)，他才意識到自己被騙了。Through his mind flashed the image of a heroic fighter.他的腦中閃過一位英雄戰(zhàn)士的形象。Not until the rabbit got completely out of sight did we stop c

17、hasing after it.直到那只兔子完全消失在我們的視線中，我們才不追了。Not until then did Megan pour out what had been disturbing her the whole day. 直到那時梅根才說出了困擾她一整天的事。On his rigid face there stood an expression of horror and hatred.他僵硬的臉上有一種恐懼和仇恨的表情。In front of her was another long passage and she just managed to catch sight of

18、 the rabbithurrying down it.在她的前面是另一條長長的通道，她正好看到兔子匆匆向遠(yuǎn)處跑去。Such is the key to success-a little bit more efforts and a little bit more determination will create a little bit more miracle.這就是成功的秘訣，多一點(diǎn)點(diǎn)努力，多一點(diǎn)點(diǎn)決心，你就能創(chuàng)造出更加多的奇跡。Little did I realize something unusual would happen that day.我?guī)缀鯖]有意識到那天會發(fā)生一些異常的

19、事情。Instead life is uncertain, and only when you first said hello to a friend are your joy and happiness of those times worth cherishing.相反，生活是不確定的，只有當(dāng)你第一次和朋友打招呼時，你的快樂和幸福才值得珍惜。.強(qiáng)調(diào)結(jié)構(gòu)It was not until he got home that he knew what had happened.當(dāng)他到家以后才知道發(fā)生了什么事情。It was at the crucial moment that an excell

20、ent idea occurred to me.在這個關(guān)鍵時刻，我想到了一個好主意（急中生智）。It was at that moment that they decided not to quarrel any more but learned to compromise. 就在那一刻，他們決定不再爭吵，而是學(xué)會了妥協(xié)It was Mom that made my childhood colorful. And it was also she that showed me the true meaning of giving.是媽媽讓我的童年多姿多彩。也是她向我展示了給予的真正意義。.并列句

21、Seeing the wolf back off, Paul quickly unlocked the door, and the frightened man climbed into the car in no time, shutting the door behind him heavily.看到狼后退了，保羅迅速翻開車門，受驚的人立刻爬進(jìn)車?yán)?重重地關(guān)上了身后的車門。I never got an opportunity to know that kind mans name, but I would always remember his unexpected kindness.我從

22、未有機(jī)會知道那個好心人的名字，但我永遠(yuǎn)會記得他出人意料的好意。The hospital staff was too busy to attend to me, so I called a friend to tell him about the accident.醫(yī)院工作人員太忙了，沒時間照顧我，所以我打 給朋友告訴他這次事故。.復(fù)合句His loving mother, who used to be an excellent English teacher in a middle school, now works in a big company.他的慈母，曾經(jīng)是一名優(yōu)秀的中學(xué)英語老師，現(xiàn)

23、在在一家大公司工作。When Mary heard the news, her eyes widened further and his mouth opened.當(dāng)Mary聽到這個消息，她睜大了眼睛，張大了嘴巴。My heart beat so violently that I felt almost fainted.我的心跳得如此劇烈，我感到幾乎窒息/暈倒。She is seized with sorrow at the thought that her efforts might be in vain.一想到她的努力可能會付之東流，她就悲哀難忍。It occurred to her th

24、at her mother was still ignorant of what had happened.她突然想到她媽媽到現(xiàn)在還完全不知道發(fā)生了什么事。Sighing with relief, she sensed a glimmer of hope and felt as if the cave had been comforting her and saying, “come in, you must exhausted.她如釋重負(fù)地嘆了 口氣，感覺到一絲希望，感覺好像山洞一直在撫慰她，說：“進(jìn) 來吧，你一定很累了?！?虛擬語氣She abruptly covered her wide

25、-opened mouth, feeling as if her heart would jump out.她突然捂住她張開的嘴，覺得她的心好像要跳出來了。If I shouldnt go back on time, the king would kill my friend. If I hadnt fallen from the horse and got hurt, I would have got to the destination on time.要是我不準(zhǔn)時回去，國王會殺了我的朋 友。如果我沒有從馬上摔下來并受了傷，我也 早就按時到達(dá)目的地了。Without /But for mo

26、ms encouragement, I wouldnt have be- come a successful narrator in the competition.如果沒有媽媽的鼓勵，在比賽中我不可能成為一個成功的講解員。If only I had been the 3rd runner who had got to the finish line.要是我是第3位到達(dá)終點(diǎn)線的跑步者該多好??！How Timmy wished that he hadnt been so rude to his coach.Timmy多么希望之前沒有那么粗魯?shù)膶Υ叹毎。 was rooted on the g

27、round due to being frightened, wishing that I had refused my mothers advice yesterday.我由于恐懼愣在那里，真希望我昨天拒絕媽媽的建議。The glasses dropped into the river, as if the water had swallowed them.眼鏡掉到河里，好像水已經(jīng)吞噬了它。四、書寫美觀是賺點(diǎn)書寫美觀將倍受閱卷老師的青睞，考生為此賺個3-5分應(yīng)該不在話下的。為了防止（評 分標(biāo)準(zhǔn)中的規(guī)定）“書寫較差以致影響交際的，酌情扣分”的情況發(fā)生，考生還要注意書寫 要規(guī)范?，F(xiàn)以2022江蘇

28、蘇錫常鎮(zhèn)四市高三一模寫作（二）為例試圖演繹完整的解題過 程，但是有必要提醒考生注意的是：在高考中時間不允許也不可能像這樣按部就 班的?！疽浴袄贬尫ā保?022屆江蘇蘇錫常鎮(zhèn)四市高三一模）閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫 兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇150詞左右的完整短文。Keeping up seemed so important when I was a teenager. Back in 1973, if you werent wearing Penn Loafers （樂福鞋）youd just as soon go around in your bare feet. There w

29、as only one problem that year, I had bought Oxfords-but Penny Loafers were in.“I need some money for Penny Loafers.1 told my dad one afternoon at the place where he worked as a car mechanic.Dad looked at me for a full minute before he answered, Wear those shoes one more day. Look at every pair of sh

30、oes you see at school. If you can tell me that you are worse off than the other kids, ril buy new shoes fbr you.The next day, I did what Dad said. I saw many schoolmates wore torn shoes of the likes Id never had to wear, and shoes with holes in them, but I had no intention of telling him the results

31、.When school was out, I rushed to the place where Dad worked. It was quiet. Only an occasional clank （叮當(dāng)聲）of metal could be heard as Dad worked under a car. Then dads shoes came into my sight. They were old and black, the kind mechanics and service-station attendants wore. I saw the mended soles（鞋底）

32、and the spliced laces （拼接的鞋帶）.“You do what I told you today?”“Yes, sir.”“Well, what do you want to do?” He looked as though he might know what my answer would be.“I still want the Penny Loafers?91 forced myself not to look at his shoes.Dad handed me ten dollars. I took the money and went to the stor

33、e two blocks down the street. A rack（貨架）on a far wall appeared as if it had a million pairs of black Penny Loafers resting on it. On a rack next to it was a sign that reads CLEARANCE 50% OFF”. Below the sign sat several “young” versions of Dads shoes.續(xù)寫詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150詞左右；.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。Paragraph 1:My mi

34、nd was playing PingpongParagraph 2:I ran back to the shop and put Dads new shoes on the seat in his car.【故事梗概】通過情節(jié)和情感兩條線，我們可以得出如下故事梗概：本文以新鞋子為線索展 開，講述了作者想要買一雙自己喜歡的新鞋子，向父親要錢買，父親容許讓他 看看其他同學(xué)的鞋子，如果他的的鞋子比別人的更差，就給他買新鞋。作者看 至IJ,事實(shí)是，其他同學(xué)的鞋子更差，但是卻想隱瞞實(shí)情，還是想向父親要錢買 雙新鞋子。父親給了他錢，此后，他看到父親腳上穿的鞋，是修補(bǔ)過的鞋底和 拼接起來的鞋帶。作者去了商

35、店，看到了貨架上的年輕版的爸爸鞋（故 事就此打住，接下來發(fā)生了什么以及故事的結(jié)局，需要考生續(xù)寫）?！究蚣軜?gòu)建】Q1: Whats the story about?Al: I gave up buying the fashionable black Penny Loafers, but bought new shoes for myDad. Q2: What did I want to do when seeing the black Penny Loafers on the rack?A2:1 was eager to buy the new fashionable shoes. Q3: Wh

36、ats the ending of the 1st Paragraph according to the initial given sentence of the 2nd Paragraph?A3:1 had no intention of buying new shoes for myself, but bought a new pair for my Dad.Q4: What did I do?A4:1 looked out of the car window and found Dad working under a car. Q5: What might be the ending

37、of the 2nd Paragraph?A5: Dad felt happy with me and I was determined to study hard to reward his raising me. Drafting tasks Question series:What was in my mind when I saw the new shoes on the rack?What appeared before my eyes? How did I feel?What did I think about?What did I do in the end?Where did

38、I look?What did I find and hear?What did I do in the car?When did Dad come into the car?How did he feel when seeing the new shoes?What did he say?How did he feel? (What was I thinking about?) Borrowing tasks:Paragraph 1: black Penny Loafers resting on, the rack, buy, in my mind, old, black, worn, sh

39、oes with mended soles and the spliced laces, no intention, keeping up with fashion, young version of Dads shoes.Paragraph 2: my father worked under a car, occasional clank, heard, on the seat, the new shoes.根據(jù)以上一系列的自問自答和借用的有關(guān)詞匯，結(jié)合兩段續(xù)寫給定的首句，可以構(gòu)建 成以下續(xù)寫框架：根據(jù)第一段的給定首句，可知該段主要寫作者的思想斗爭，通過視覺、聲音等描寫心 里活動，多使用動詞

40、。根據(jù)第二段給定的首句，可知第一段的尾句為：作者放棄追趕時尚, 給父親買了一雙鞋子。根據(jù)第二段給定的首句，可知作者在車?yán)锏却赣H，此時可描寫窗外 父親工作的情景。工作結(jié)束后，父親疲憊地上車。接著寫父親看到鞋子時的高興。尾句要突 出主題，要寫作者專心學(xué)習(xí)來回報父親?！厩楣?jié)構(gòu)思】Paragraph 1:我心里打起了 “乒乓”，不斷進(jìn)行思想斗爭。我的視線落在擱在架子上的這些黑色的樂福鞋上，我的腦海里涌起購買一雙新鞋的沖動。與此同時，閃現(xiàn)在我眼前的是我父親那雙又黑又舊的鞋, 鞋底是修過的，鞋帶也是拼接的。突然，我感到心痛得厲害，一個內(nèi)心的聲音不斷地告訴我， 爸爸比我更需要新鞋。我我不想趕時髦了，給爸爸

41、買了一雙年輕版的鞋子。Paragraph 2:我跑回到他工作的地方，把爸爸的新鞋放在他的車座上。我從車窗往外看。我看到父親 在車下工的場景，時不時地聽到清晰的叮當(dāng)聲。我在座位上一直等到爸爸完成他的工作。似乎過了好一 會兒，他又虛弱又疲憊地回到車?yán)铩．?dāng)他看到那雙新鞋時，臉上露出了喜色?！澳汩L大了！” 爸爸說，既興奮又滿意。我朝他笑了笑，我知道我應(yīng)該專注于什么，決心努力學(xué)習(xí)以實(shí)現(xiàn)爸 爸的期望。【參考答案】1Paragraph 1:My mind was playing Pingpong. A struggle was going on in my mind. My sight rested on the black Penny Loafers on the rack. I couldnt get my eyes off. How eager was I to buy a new pair! At that time, Dads torn shoes spread in my mind. They were old, black shoes with mended soles and