高中英語讀后續(xù)寫專題課件

讀后續(xù)寫讀后續(xù)寫1經(jīng)典續(xù)寫案例紅樓夢曹雪芹高鶚爭論點：契合度高低文學(xué)家：情節(jié)發(fā)展是否和原八十回一致語言學(xué)家：用詞用句是否和原八十回一致融洽度經(jīng)典續(xù)寫案例紅樓夢曹雪芹高鶚爭論點：契合度高低文學(xué)家：2原敘事文本續(xù)寫高效度結(jié)尾讀猜原敘事文本續(xù)寫高效度結(jié)尾讀猜3兩個要弄明白的問題：原文有什么用？續(xù)寫要寫什么？原文理解續(xù)寫文模仿素材兩個要弄明白的問題：原文有什么用？續(xù)寫要寫什么？原文理解續(xù)寫4素材情節(jié)基調(diào)核心矛盾故事框架語言設(shè)定潛伏信息素材情節(jié)基調(diào)核心矛盾故事框架語言設(shè)定潛伏信息5樣題情節(jié)和語言特點分析情節(jié)基調(diào)的鋪設(shè)：“向心性”核心矛盾的預(yù)設(shè)：“發(fā)散性”故事框架的搭建：“順延性”隱含語言的定位：“一致性”樣題情節(jié)和語言特點分析情節(jié)基調(diào)的鋪設(shè)：“向心性”6情節(jié)基調(diào)“AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday”。funny:“趣”Afunnythingcauseamusement,laughter,etc.

(有趣的，可笑的)向心性情節(jié)基調(diào)“Afunnythinghappenedto7MoneyorOtherthings核心矛盾“情節(jié)核”theyoungmanoranothermanThiefNotthief矛盾身份

矛盾中心

關(guān)鍵人物發(fā)散性核心矛盾“情節(jié)核”theyoungmanThiefNo8

箱子里所屬人Youngman身份可能情節(jié)發(fā)展1Moneytheyoungmanthief碰巧抓住搶劫犯（即結(jié)尾1）2notthief碰巧把剛從銀行取錢趕路的人當劫犯，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯消息3anothermanthief碰巧碰到一個剛偷了其他人錢的小偷，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯并找回銀行失錢的消息，最后在Arthur幫助下抓到另一個小偷4notthief路遇一個路人幫人搬運裝滿錢的行李箱，而Arthur錯把路人當劫犯，最后澄清消除誤會5Otherthingstheyoungmanthief錯把普通小偷當劫犯，最后幫助抓到該小偷6notthief錯把路人當劫犯（即結(jié)尾2）7anothermanthief碰巧碰到一個剛偷了其他人東西的小偷，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯并找回銀行失錢的消息，最后在Arthur幫助下抓到另一個小偷8notthief路遇一個路人幫人搬運普通行李箱，而Arthur錯把路人當劫犯，最后澄清消除誤會

箱子里所屬人Youngman身份可能情節(jié)發(fā)展1Money9故事發(fā)展時間：onArthur’swayhome地點：alongtheParkAvenueneartheFirstnationalBank背景：alongloudnoiseofanalarmfromthebankayoungmanArthurRunafterStop,stop!…?TothePS順延性故事發(fā)展時間：onArthur’swayhomea10故事框架Paragraph1:Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”_______________________________________________Paragraph2:ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur..._______________________________________________順延故事發(fā)展創(chuàng)意故事結(jié)尾順延

逆轉(zhuǎn)故事框架Paragraph1:順延故事發(fā)展創(chuàng)意故事結(jié)尾順延11語言定位記敘類故事文文體敘事文本敘事人稱敘事時態(tài)敘事方式第一、二、三人稱旁白/對白口語/書面語選詞用詞句式選擇一致性…語言定位記敘類故事文文體敘事人稱敘事方式第一、二、三人稱旁白12語言定位記敘類故事文敘事人稱：比如，he,she,it,Afunnything,theyoungman,ParkAvenue,Arthur等敘事時態(tài)：

用過去式或者與過去式相關(guān)的時態(tài)（直接引語除外）比如wasontheway,walked,wassurprised,startedtorun等敘事方式：Notroubleatall,whathappenedGotothepolicestation,Stopstop,Helphelp。“第三人”的身份講述（第三人稱作為主語）（直接引語除外）轉(zhuǎn)述過去某個時刻所發(fā)生的事旁白+對白（間接引語+直接引語）[主次分明]語言定位記敘類故事文敘事人稱：敘事時態(tài)：敘事方式：“第三人”13語言定位記敘類故事文敘事文本定位：一組數(shù)據(jù)：結(jié)尾1（153）

advorprep(behind,suddenly,until,obviously,already,later),verb(might,realize,continue,jump,racelikethewind,learn,open,expected,describe,caught),nounornounphrase(alargesumofmoney,information)結(jié)尾2（158）behind,directlyoutsidebehave,realize,drive,follow,describe,voice,innocent,embarrassed,faster語言平實易懂的小故事小詞、常用詞以及常見短語12個新詞(組)18個新詞(組)funnyamusing，intriguing，divertingVS.語言定位記敘類故事文敘事文本定位：語言平實易懂的小故事小詞、14語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：行為動作：“主語+謂語動詞+賓語”

材料Everyonehadadifferentanswer

結(jié)尾Thepolicecaughttherobber事物狀態(tài)：“主語+系動詞+表語”

材料Arthurwassurprised,ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore

結(jié)尾Themanshoutingbehindisthebankthief,Themanwasinnocent“清楚明晰地講故事”強調(diào)故事人物的行為和思想變化語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：“清楚明晰地講故事”強調(diào)故事人15語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：一組數(shù)據(jù)：材料：12個含and的并列句式，結(jié)尾1(153字):6個并列句式；結(jié)尾2(158字):7個并列句式主從復(fù)合句(以時間狀語從句為主)材料：whenhewasonthewayto…,Ashewalkedalong…,Afterplacingitonthe…,JustasArthurpickedup…結(jié)尾：Ashewasrunning…,Themomenthegoto…,JustasArthurwasdescribing…時間提示詞如atthemoment,then,later等。主從復(fù)合句少，并列復(fù)合句多故事一環(huán)承接一環(huán)的時間發(fā)展和動作的延續(xù)語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：主從復(fù)合句少，并列復(fù)合句多故事16讀后續(xù)寫策略情節(jié)基調(diào)核心矛盾框架完整順延逆轉(zhuǎn)語言文體遣詞用句情節(jié)走向合情合理的創(chuàng)意不著痕跡情節(jié)內(nèi)容框架結(jié)構(gòu)語篇段落讀后續(xù)寫策略情節(jié)基調(diào)核心矛盾框架完整順延逆轉(zhuǎn)語言文體遣詞用句171、挖掘情節(jié)基調(diào)，廓清核心矛盾，創(chuàng)造合情合理的創(chuàng)意故事外延。2、理清敘事角度，把握順延逆轉(zhuǎn)，構(gòu)建張弛有度的完整情節(jié)框架。3、定位語言文體，模仿遣詞用句，續(xù)寫不著痕跡的語用敘事文本。讀后續(xù)寫策略1、挖掘情節(jié)基調(diào)，廓清核心矛盾，創(chuàng)造合情合理的創(chuàng)意故事外延。18“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合單元課文內(nèi)容M1U3TravelJournal–JourneydowntheMekongM2U4WildlifeProtection–HowDaisyLearnedtoHelpWildlifeM3U2HealthyEating–ComeandEatHereM3U5Canada“TheTrueNorth”–ATriponthe“TrueNorth”M4U4BodyLanguage–Communication,NoProblem?M5U3LifeintheFuture–FirstImpressionsM5U4MakingtheNews–MyFirstWorkAssignment

“Unforgettable”,SaysNewJournalistM7U2Robot–SatisfactionGuaranteed虛擬故事“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合單元課文內(nèi)容M1U3Travel19“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合1. M3U2Comeandeathere2. M7U2SatisfactionGuaranteed思維+語言虛構(gòu)+趣味“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合1. M3U2Comean20“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合ComeandeathereWP+hisemptyrestaurantVisittoYH’s+gottheproblemDoresearchNewsignanddiscountCompetitionwasonWhatifwithnoresearchornofindings?WhatifWPjustcopyYH’sidea?一個可能需要增加的閱讀環(huán)節(jié)信息梳理FriendlycooperationHostilecompetitionPeacefulcoexistence+思辨發(fā)散“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合Comeandeathere21alarmed,disturbing,trust“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合SatisfactionGuaranteed信息整理+思辨發(fā)散ClaireTonyGladysaccompanied,protected,helpenvyAsenseoffailureWhencomparedwithCurtainsopened+ApartyChangeheropinionAsweetvictoryAsenseoflossWhatif…?CurtainsclosedStillvictory?Loss?Tony’sReport?alarmed,disturbing,trust“讀后22兩篇文本（節(jié)選）WangPengsatinhisemptyrestaurantfeelingveryfrustrated.Ithadbeenaverystrangemorning.Usuallyhegotupearlyandpreparedhismenuofbarbecuedmuttonkebabs,roastpork,stir-fliedvegetablesandfriedrice.Thenbylunchtimetheywouldallbesold.Bynowhisrestaurantoughttobefullofpeople.Butnottoday!Whywasthat?Whatcouldhavehappened?Clairedidn’twanttherobotinherhouse,especiallyasherhusbandwouldbeabsentforthreeweeks,butLarrypersuadeherorallowhertobeharmed.Itwouldbeabonus.However,whenshefirstsawtherobot,shefeltalarmed.HisnamewasTonyandheseemedmorelikeahumanthanamachine.Hewastallandhandsomewithsmoothhairandadeepvoicealthoughhisfacialexpressionneverchanged.兩篇文本（節(jié)選）WangPengsatinhise23兩個語篇的文本比較：SatisfactionGuaranteedComeandeathere旁白+對白（旁白為主）書面語+口語簡單句式，小詞常規(guī)詞行為變化全旁白的形式全書面語形式復(fù)合句式，較高級詞匯情緒（心理）表達敘事人稱：第三人稱；

敘事時態(tài)：過去式敘事順序：以時間發(fā)展

結(jié)尾方式：出人意料兩個語篇的文本比較：SatisfactionGuarant24SatisfactionGuaranteedComeandeathereAweeklater,WangPeng’srestaurantwasagainquitefullandhefelthappier.HesmiledashewelcomethecustomerswarmlyatthedoorbutthesmilelefthisfacewhenhesawYongHuiwalkingin.Shedidn’tlookhappybutglareathim.“MayIaskwhatyouweredoinginmyrestauranttheotherday?IthoughtyouwerejustanewcustomerandnowIknowthatyouonlycametospyonmeandmymenu.”sheshouted.Thenightofthepartyarrive.Theclockstruckeight.TheguestswouldbearrivingsoonandClairetoldTonytogointoanotherroom.Atthatmoment,Tonyfoldedhisarmsaroundher,bendinghisfaceclosetoherandinspiringherwithconfidence.Thenthefrontdoorbellrang.Tonyfreedheranddisappearedfromsight.UntilthendidClairegetself-preparedanddaretofacethesurroundingoftheguests.Thewomen,alongwithanewbutseeminglyquiteelegantface,wereimpressedbyClaire,thehouseandthedeliciouscuisine.SatisfactionGuaranteedComean25一個困惑的問題？高考評分標準重融洽度的同時，會多么關(guān)注語言的文采？一個困惑的問題？高考評分標準重融洽度的同時，26 Thanks！Enjoyourjob,Enjoyourlife! Thanks！Enjoyourjob,Enjoy27讀后續(xù)寫讀后續(xù)寫28一、讀(howtoread)1.淺層信息理解

when：__________________；where:______________________；who：__________________;what:_______________________；ChristmasLivingroomMom&“I”Aboutpresents2.深層信息理解（1）故事主要發(fā)展情節(jié)(2)文章風(fēng)格人稱：______________________;時態(tài)：_______________________;何種細節(jié)描寫為主：心理□；動作□；語言□；表情□；環(huán)境□；外貌□

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寫作主題:______________________________________________;Behaviors（行為）Feelings（情感）Para1Para2Para3Para4&5check;read;feel;guess;examine;tellexcitedlookover;scatter;sigh;warn;pileup;spillout…disappointedwait;rushinto;fly;attemptto;open;losteagerlyhand;lookat;spent;examine；recognize;writeconfused第一和第三人稱過去式√√AboutMom’slove;Givingisbetterthanreceiving一、讀(howtoread)1.淺層信息理解Chris29二、由讀到寫(howtodesign)1.Classify10keywordsintodifferentgroups（所給提示關(guān)鍵詞分類）

Characters（人物）：____________;Behaviors（行為）：_______________;Feelings（情感）：_______________;Others：_________________________;girl;Momgiving;open;handeagerly;disappointedpresent;Christmas;family2.Predictthedevelopmentofthestory（故事情節(jié)預(yù)測）Lastparagraphs:

Butithadnotbeenmine.Itwasmymom’s.Anewlabelhadbeenputonit,withmynamewritteninmymother’shandwriting.“Mom,Ican’t…”Paragraph1:Iwasstoppedbymother’seager,joyfullook._____________________.Paragraph2:IhavealwaysrememberedthatChristmasfondly.__________________.續(xù)寫故事情節(jié)展開編輯模板第一回合第二回合第三回合人物A人物B穿插人物A人物B穿插人物A/B心理□動作□語言□表情□心理□動作□語言□表情□無需□環(huán)境□外貌□主題□心理□動作□語言□表情□心理□動作□語言□表情□無需□環(huán)境□外貌□主題□心理□動作□語言□表情□√√√√√√√二、由讀到寫(howtodesign)1.Classi30三、寫(thepresentation)字跡工整：________________________________________________________;篇幅充實：________________________________________________________;語言豐富：________________________________________________________;內(nèi)容得體：________________________________________________________;所有字母筆畫分開，f/g/t/i/y做到無勾或短勾；大小、間距適當空白橫線剩余一行；或者每一段落續(xù)寫至少7句話無基本語法錯誤；有鏈接詞；有形容詞和副詞；有從句和非謂字跡潦草！10分！符合原文邏輯；情節(jié)向前發(fā)展；體現(xiàn)作者寫作目的三、寫(thepresentation)字跡工整：____31四、作業(yè)布置和課外閱讀2.翻譯下面句子。

Amotherisapersonwho,seeingthereareonlyfourpiecesofpieforfivepeople,promptlyannouncessheneverdidcareforpie.——TennevaJordan

看到餐桌上有五個人，卻只有四塊餡餅，立即宣布自己從不喜歡餡餅——這樣的人就是母親。

——特尼瓦?喬丹1.參照本節(jié)課導(dǎo)學(xué)案步驟，尤其按照第三部分（howtowrite）的要求，完成所布置的讀后續(xù)寫。四、作業(yè)布置和課外閱讀2.翻譯下面句子?？吹讲妥郎?2續(xù)寫導(dǎo)練（五）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。Iwastouchedthroughexperiences,memories,books,stories,animals,angels,andmostofallotherpeople.Peoplehavemovedmeandmolded（對……影響重大）mewithmomentsofloveandexamplesofkindness.OnetimeonthedaybeforeChristmasmanyyearsagowhenIwasaminimumwagemill（工廠）worker,Ifoundmyselfwithverylittlemoneyandverylittletimetobuymysmallchildrenafewsimpletoys.IknewthattheywouldhavetobecheaponesandIhopedmychildrenwouldlikethem.Ihatednothavingenoughtogivethemmore.Ihatedbeingpoor.AndIhatedfeelingbadatChristmasratherthanhappy.Ipulledintoastoreparkinglotandcountedmymoneyagain.Itwasn’tmuchbutmaybeIcouldgetsomethingsmallwithit.AsIwasgettingoutofthecarInoticedtheSalvationArmy（救世軍）bellringerattheentrance.IfeltbadagainbecauseIdidn’tfeelIcouldspareanythingtogivehim.Istartedwalkingtowardstheentrancewhentwocarspulledintoemptyparkingspotsinfrontofme.Thefirstwasashiny,newCadillacandIfeltatwingeofjealousywhenIsawit.“Hownice,”Ithought,“Woulditbetohaveenoughmoneytobuyacarlikethat.”Thesecondcar,though,wasanancientsedan（轎車）morebeat-upandrustythantheoneIwasdriving.Amanhopped（沖）outoftheCadillacandhurriedintothestorerightpastthebellringerwithoutasecondglance.Outoftheoldsedancameayoungmotherwiththreesmallchildrenintow（緊隨著）.Herclotheslookedaswornoutashercar,yetshestoppedinfrontofthebellringer,smiled,openedherpurse,anddroppedabillinhisredkettle（錢罐）.續(xù)寫導(dǎo)練（五）33讀后續(xù)寫的基本步驟一、短文信息定位通過閱讀定位所給短文的核心信息，明確故事的任務(wù)，環(huán)境和情節(jié)，并概括文章大意。二、劃線詞分類為了方便設(shè)計情節(jié)時涵蓋劃線詞匯，可以結(jié)合具體材料對劃線詞按照人物，地點、動作情節(jié)和事物（具體和抽象）等分類。三、設(shè)計第一段的內(nèi)容設(shè)計在于搭建本段與前文、后文的橋梁。第二部分注意整篇文章的首位呼應(yīng)。四、初稿五、修改讀后續(xù)寫的基本步驟一、短文信息定位二、劃線詞分類為了方便設(shè)計34一、短文信息定位通過閱讀定位所給短文的核心信息，明確故事的任務(wù)，環(huán)境和情節(jié)，并概括文章大意。character:time:place:plots(details)thedaybeforeChristmas,manyyearsagoastoreparkinglottheauthor,bellringer,amanowningaCadilac,ayoungmotherowninganoldcar.1.Theauthorwaspoorandfeelingbad.2.themanandthemotherrespondedquitedifferentlytothebellringer.3......一、短文信息定位character:thedaybefo35Sumupthemainideaofthepassage

1.Manyyearsago,Theauthorwasaworkwithasmallwage.Hefeltbadbecause......2.Whenhepulledintoastoreparkinglot,hefeltbadagainbecause...3.Whenhewalkenintotheentrance,hefoundamanowninga......,whileayoungmother....However,they.....Sumupthemainideaofthepa36二、劃線詞分類kindsunderlinedwordscharactersbellringerchildrenthingschristmascarpursekettleactionshatedpulledintodropped為了方便設(shè)計情節(jié)時涵蓋劃線詞匯，可以結(jié)合具體材料對劃線詞按照人物，地點、動作情節(jié)和事物（具體和抽象）等分類。二、劃線詞分類kindsunderlinedwordsch37三、設(shè)計第一段的內(nèi)容設(shè)計在于搭建本段與前文、后文的橋梁;第二部分注意與整篇文章的首位呼應(yīng)。part1:part2:Theauthor'sattitudetothemanandthemotherHisopinionsonrichnessnolongerfeelingbadandfollowingthemother'sexampleanddroppedabilltothebellringer.Buyingthingsforhischidrenandexpectingamerrychristmas.三、設(shè)計Theauthor'sattitudetot38四、初稿part1:itisbettertoberichintheinside;Itiswrongtojudgeapersonbyhisappearanceorwords;Ihadrespectforthepoormotherandwantedlearnfromher....part2:Itookouta10-poundbilland......Icouldhardlywaittoseemychildren....四、初稿part1:part2:39五、修改Paragraph1:Istoodthereforaminuteinastonishment.“Maybe,”Ithoughttomyself,“it’sbettertoberichontheinsideinsteadoftheoutside.”Thatrichmanshouldhavedonesomethingtohelpthepoor,buthedidn’t.Sometimesitwasreallywrongtojudgeapersonbyhisorherappearance.Ireallyhadrespectforthepoormotherfromthebottomofmyheart.Shesetagoodexampleforherchildrentofollow.五、修改Paragraph1:40Paragraph2:Inthatsecondawarmthtouchedme,myjealousyandhatred（憎恨）leftme,andalltheloveandjoythatareChristmasfilledme.Ifishedabilloutofmyownpurse,droppeditintheSalvationArmykettle,andwishedthebellringeramerryChristmas.Ifoundafewfunthingstogivemykidsanddrovehomewithmyheartsinging.IknewitwasgoingtobeawonderfulChristmas.Icouldhardlywaittoseemychildrenenjoyingthepresentsboughtforthem,includingaspecialgift—loveforthoseinneed.Paragraph2:41讀后續(xù)寫讀后續(xù)寫42經(jīng)典續(xù)寫案例紅樓夢曹雪芹高鶚爭論點：契合度高低文學(xué)家：情節(jié)發(fā)展是否和原八十回一致語言學(xué)家：用詞用句是否和原八十回一致融洽度經(jīng)典續(xù)寫案例紅樓夢曹雪芹高鶚爭論點：契合度高低文學(xué)家：43原敘事文本續(xù)寫高效度結(jié)尾讀猜原敘事文本續(xù)寫高效度結(jié)尾讀猜44兩個要弄明白的問題：原文有什么用？續(xù)寫要寫什么？原文理解續(xù)寫文模仿素材兩個要弄明白的問題：原文有什么用？續(xù)寫要寫什么？原文理解續(xù)寫45素材情節(jié)基調(diào)核心矛盾故事框架語言設(shè)定潛伏信息素材情節(jié)基調(diào)核心矛盾故事框架語言設(shè)定潛伏信息46樣題情節(jié)和語言特點分析情節(jié)基調(diào)的鋪設(shè)：“向心性”核心矛盾的預(yù)設(shè)：“發(fā)散性”故事框架的搭建：“順延性”隱含語言的定位：“一致性”樣題情節(jié)和語言特點分析情節(jié)基調(diào)的鋪設(shè)：“向心性”47情節(jié)基調(diào)“AfunnythinghappenedtoArthurwhenhewasonthewaytoworkoneday”。funny:“趣”Afunnythingcauseamusement,laughter,etc.

(有趣的，可笑的)向心性情節(jié)基調(diào)“Afunnythinghappenedto48MoneyorOtherthings核心矛盾“情節(jié)核”theyoungmanoranothermanThiefNotthief矛盾身份

矛盾中心

關(guān)鍵人物發(fā)散性核心矛盾“情節(jié)核”theyoungmanThiefNo49

箱子里所屬人Youngman身份可能情節(jié)發(fā)展1Moneytheyoungmanthief碰巧抓住搶劫犯（即結(jié)尾1）2notthief碰巧把剛從銀行取錢趕路的人當劫犯，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯消息3anothermanthief碰巧碰到一個剛偷了其他人錢的小偷，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯并找回銀行失錢的消息，最后在Arthur幫助下抓到另一個小偷4notthief路遇一個路人幫人搬運裝滿錢的行李箱，而Arthur錯把路人當劫犯，最后澄清消除誤會5Otherthingstheyoungmanthief錯把普通小偷當劫犯，最后幫助抓到該小偷6notthief錯把路人當劫犯（即結(jié)尾2）7anothermanthief碰巧碰到一個剛偷了其他人東西的小偷，最后到警局傳來抓到劫犯并找回銀行失錢的消息，最后在Arthur幫助下抓到另一個小偷8notthief路遇一個路人幫人搬運普通行李箱，而Arthur錯把路人當劫犯，最后澄清消除誤會

箱子里所屬人Youngman身份可能情節(jié)發(fā)展1Money50故事發(fā)展時間：onArthur’swayhome地點：alongtheParkAvenueneartheFirstnationalBank背景：alongloudnoiseofanalarmfromthebankayoungmanArthurRunafterStop,stop!…?TothePS順延性故事發(fā)展時間：onArthur’swayhomea51故事框架Paragraph1:Ashewasrunning,Arthurheardtheyoungmanshoutingbehind,“Stop,stop!”_______________________________________________Paragraph2:ThetaxistoppedinfrontofthePoliceStationandArthur..._______________________________________________順延故事發(fā)展創(chuàng)意故事結(jié)尾順延

逆轉(zhuǎn)故事框架Paragraph1:順延故事發(fā)展創(chuàng)意故事結(jié)尾順延52語言定位記敘類故事文文體敘事文本敘事人稱敘事時態(tài)敘事方式第一、二、三人稱旁白/對白口語/書面語選詞用詞句式選擇一致性…語言定位記敘類故事文文體敘事人稱敘事方式第一、二、三人稱旁白53語言定位記敘類故事文敘事人稱：比如，he,she,it,Afunnything,theyoungman,ParkAvenue,Arthur等敘事時態(tài)：

用過去式或者與過去式相關(guān)的時態(tài)（直接引語除外）比如wasontheway,walked,wassurprised,startedtorun等敘事方式：Notroubleatall,whathappenedGotothepolicestation,Stopstop,Helphelp。“第三人”的身份講述（第三人稱作為主語）（直接引語除外）轉(zhuǎn)述過去某個時刻所發(fā)生的事旁白+對白（間接引語+直接引語）[主次分明]語言定位記敘類故事文敘事人稱：敘事時態(tài)：敘事方式：“第三人”54語言定位記敘類故事文敘事文本定位：一組數(shù)據(jù)：結(jié)尾1（153）

advorprep(behind,suddenly,until,obviously,already,later),verb(might,realize,continue,jump,racelikethewind,learn,open,expected,describe,caught),nounornounphrase(alargesumofmoney,information)結(jié)尾2（158）behind,directlyoutsidebehave,realize,drive,follow,describe,voice,innocent,embarrassed,faster語言平實易懂的小故事小詞、常用詞以及常見短語12個新詞(組)18個新詞(組)funnyamusing，intriguing，divertingVS.語言定位記敘類故事文敘事文本定位：語言平實易懂的小故事小詞、55語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：行為動作：“主語+謂語動詞+賓語”

材料Everyonehadadifferentanswer

結(jié)尾Thepolicecaughttherobber事物狀態(tài)：“主語+系動詞+表語”

材料Arthurwassurprised,ParkAvenuehadbeenquietamomentbefore

結(jié)尾Themanshoutingbehindisthebankthief,Themanwasinnocent“清楚明晰地講故事”強調(diào)故事人物的行為和思想變化語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：“清楚明晰地講故事”強調(diào)故事人56語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：一組數(shù)據(jù)：材料：12個含and的并列句式，結(jié)尾1(153字):6個并列句式；結(jié)尾2(158字):7個并列句式主從復(fù)合句(以時間狀語從句為主)材料：whenhewasonthewayto…,Ashewalkedalong…,Afterplacingitonthe…,JustasArthurpickedup…結(jié)尾：Ashewasrunning…,Themomenthegoto…,JustasArthurwasdescribing…時間提示詞如atthemoment,then,later等。主從復(fù)合句少，并列復(fù)合句多故事一環(huán)承接一環(huán)的時間發(fā)展和動作的延續(xù)語言定位記敘類故事文句式選用：主從復(fù)合句少，并列復(fù)合句多故事57讀后續(xù)寫策略情節(jié)基調(diào)核心矛盾框架完整順延逆轉(zhuǎn)語言文體遣詞用句情節(jié)走向合情合理的創(chuàng)意不著痕跡情節(jié)內(nèi)容框架結(jié)構(gòu)語篇段落讀后續(xù)寫策略情節(jié)基調(diào)核心矛盾框架完整順延逆轉(zhuǎn)語言文體遣詞用句581、挖掘情節(jié)基調(diào)，廓清核心矛盾，創(chuàng)造合情合理的創(chuàng)意故事外延。2、理清敘事角度，把握順延逆轉(zhuǎn)，構(gòu)建張弛有度的完整情節(jié)框架。3、定位語言文體，模仿遣詞用句，續(xù)寫不著痕跡的語用敘事文本。讀后續(xù)寫策略1、挖掘情節(jié)基調(diào)，廓清核心矛盾，創(chuàng)造合情合理的創(chuàng)意故事外延。59“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合單元課文內(nèi)容M1U3TravelJournal–JourneydowntheMekongM2U4WildlifeProtection–HowDaisyLearnedtoHelpWildlifeM3U2HealthyEating–ComeandEatHereM3U5Canada“TheTrueNorth”–ATriponthe“TrueNorth”M4U4BodyLanguage–Communication,NoProblem?M5U3LifeintheFuture–FirstImpressionsM5U4MakingtheNews–MyFirstWorkAssignment

“Unforgettable”,SaysNewJournalistM7U2Robot–SatisfactionGuaranteed虛擬故事“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合單元課文內(nèi)容M1U3Travel60“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合1. M3U2Comeandeathere2. M7U2SatisfactionGuaranteed思維+語言虛構(gòu)+趣味“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合1. M3U2Comean61“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合ComeandeathereWP+hisemptyrestaurantVisittoYH’s+gottheproblemDoresearchNewsignanddiscountCompetitionwasonWhatifwithnoresearchornofindings?WhatifWPjustcopyYH’sidea?一個可能需要增加的閱讀環(huán)節(jié)信息梳理FriendlycooperationHostilecompetitionPeacefulcoexistence+思辨發(fā)散“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合Comeandeathere62alarmed,disturbing,trust“讀后續(xù)寫”與閱讀課的契合SatisfactionGuaranteed信息整理+思辨發(fā)散ClaireTonyGladysaccompanied,protected,helpenvyAsenseoffailureWhencomparedwithCurtainsopened+ApartyChangeheropinionAsweetvictoryAsenseoflossWhatif…?CurtainsclosedStillvictory?Loss?Tony’sReport?alarmed,disturbing,trust“讀后63兩篇文本（節(jié)選）WangPengsatinhisemptyrestaurantfeelingveryfrustrated.Ithadbeenaverystrangemorning.Usuallyhegotupearlyandpreparedhismenuofbarbecuedmuttonkebabs,roastpork,stir-fliedvegetablesandfriedrice.Thenbylunchtimetheywouldallbesold.Bynowhisrestaurantoughttobefullofpeople.Butnottoday!Whywasthat?Whatcouldhavehappened?Clairedidn’twanttherobotinherhouse,especiallyasherhusbandwouldbeabsentforthreeweeks,butLarrypersuadeherorallowhertobeharmed.Itwouldbeabonus.However,whenshefirstsawtherobot,shefeltalarmed.HisnamewasTonyandheseemedmorelikeahumanthanamachine.Hewastallandhandsomewithsmoothhairandadeepvoicealthoughhisfacialexpressionneverchanged.兩篇文本（節(jié)選）WangPengsatinhise64兩個語篇的文本比較：SatisfactionGuaranteedComeandeathere旁白+對白（旁白為主）書面語+口語簡單句式，小詞常規(guī)詞行為變化全旁白的形式全書面語形式復(fù)合句式，較高級詞匯情緒（心理）表達敘事人稱：第三人稱；

敘事時態(tài)：過去式敘事順序：以時間發(fā)展

結(jié)尾方式：出人意料兩個語篇的文本比較：SatisfactionGuarant65SatisfactionGuaranteedComeandeathereAweeklater,WangPeng’srestaurantwasagainquitefullandhefelthappier.HesmiledashewelcomethecustomerswarmlyatthedoorbutthesmilelefthisfacewhenhesawYongHuiwalkingin.Shedidn’tlookhappybutglareathim.“MayIaskwhatyouweredoinginmyrestauranttheotherday?IthoughtyouwerejustanewcustomerandnowIknowthatyouonlycametospyonmeandmymenu.”sheshouted.Thenightofthepartyarrive.Theclockstruckeight.TheguestswouldbearrivingsoonandClairetoldTonytogointoanotherroom.Atthatmoment,Tonyfoldedhisarmsaroundher,bendinghisfaceclosetoherandinspiringherwithconfidence.Thenthefrontdoorbellrang.Tonyfreedheranddisappearedfromsight.UntilthendidClairegetself-preparedanddaretofacethesurroundingoftheguests.Thewomen,alongwithanewbutseeminglyquiteelegantface,wereimpressedbyClaire,thehouseandthedeliciouscuisine.SatisfactionGuaranteedComean66一個困惑的問題？高考評分標準重融洽度的同時，會多么關(guān)注語言的文采？一個困惑的問題？高考評分標準重融洽度的同時，67 Thanks！Enjoyourjob,Enjoyourlife! Thanks！Enjoyourjob,Enjoy68讀后續(xù)寫讀后續(xù)寫69一、讀(howtoread)1.淺層信息理解

when：__________________；where:______________________；who：__________________;what:_______________________；ChristmasLivingroomMom&“I”Aboutpresents2.深層信息理解（1）故事主要發(fā)展情節(jié)(2)文章風(fēng)格人稱：______________________;時態(tài)：_______________________;何種細節(jié)描寫為主：心理□；動作□；語言□；表情□；環(huán)境□；外貌□

(3)

寫作主題:______________________________________________;Behaviors（行為）Feelings（情感）Para1Para2Para3Para4&5check;read;feel;guess;examine;tellexcitedlookover;scatter;sigh;warn;pileup;spillout…disappointedwait;rushinto;fly;attemptto;open;losteagerlyhand;lookat;spent;examine；recognize;writeconfused第一和第三人稱過去式√√AboutMom’slove;Givingisbetterthanreceiving一、讀(howtoread)1.淺層信息理解Chris70二、由讀到寫(howtodesign)1.Classify10keywordsintodifferentgroups（所給提示關(guān)鍵詞分類）

Characters（人物）：____________;Behaviors（行為）：_______________;Feelings（情感）：_______________;Others：_________________________;girl;Momgiving;open;handeagerly;disappointedpresent;Christmas;family2.Predictthedevelopmentofthestory（故事情節(jié)預(yù)測）Lastparagraphs:

Butithadnotbeenmine.Itwasmymom’s.Anewlabelhadbeenputonit,withmynamewritteninmymother’shandwriting.“Mom,Ican’t…”Paragraph1:Iwasstoppedbymother’seager,joyfullook._____________________.Paragraph2:IhavealwaysrememberedthatChristmasfondly.__________________.續(xù)寫故事情節(jié)展開編輯模板第一回合第二回合第三回合人物A人物B穿插人物A人物B穿插人物A/B心理□動作□語言□表情□心理□動作□語言□表情□無需□環(huán)境□外貌□主題□心理□動作□語言□表情□心理□動作□語言□表情□無需□環(huán)境□外貌□主題□心理□動作□語言□表情□√√√√√√√二、由讀到寫(howtodesign)1.Classi71三、寫(thepresentation)字跡工整：________________________________________________________;篇幅充實：________________________________________________________;語言豐富：________________________________________________________;內(nèi)容得體：________________________________________________________;所有字母筆畫分開，f/g/t/i/y做到無勾或短勾；大小、間距適當空白橫線剩余一行；或者每一段落續(xù)寫至少7句話無基本語法錯誤；有鏈接詞；有形容詞和副詞；有從句和非謂字跡潦草！10分！符合原文邏輯；情節(jié)向前發(fā)展；體現(xiàn)作者寫作目的三、寫(thepresentation)字跡工整：____72四、作業(yè)布置和課外閱讀2.翻譯下面句子。

Amotherisapersonwho,seeingthereareonlyfourpiecesofpieforfivepeople,promptlyannouncessheneverdidcareforpie.——TennevaJordan

看到餐桌上有五個人，卻只有四塊餡餅，立即宣布自己從不喜歡餡餅——這樣的人就是母親。

——特尼瓦?喬丹1.參照本節(jié)課導(dǎo)學(xué)案步驟，尤其按照第三部分（howtowrite）的要求，完成所布置的讀后續(xù)寫。四、作業(yè)布置和課外閱讀2.翻譯下面句子?？吹讲妥郎?3續(xù)寫導(dǎo)練（五）閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。Iwastouchedthroughexperiences,memories,books,stories,animals,angels,andmostofallotherpeople.Peoplehavemovedmeandmolded（對……影響重大）mewithmomentsofloveandexamplesofkindness.OnetimeonthedaybeforeChristmasmanyyearsagowhenIwasaminimumwagemill（工廠）worker,Ifoundmyselfwithverylittlemoneyandverylittletimetobuymysmallchildrenafewsimpletoys.IknewthattheywouldhavetobecheaponesandIhopedmychildrenwouldlikethem.Ihatednothavingenoughtogivethemmore.Ihatedbeingpoor.AndIhatedfeelingbadatChristmasratherthanhappy.Ipulledintoastoreparkinglotandcountedmymoneyagain.Itwasn’tmuchbutmaybeIcouldgetsomethingsmallwithit.AsIwasgettingoutofthecarInoticedtheSalvationArmy（救世軍）bellringerattheentrance.IfeltbadagainbecauseIdidn’tfeelIcouldspareanythingtogivehim.Istartedwalkingtowardstheentrancewhentwocarspulledintoemptyparkingspotsinfrontofme.Thefirstwasashiny,newCadillacandIfeltatwingeofjealousywhenIsawit.“Hownice,”Ithought,“Woulditbetohaveenoughmoneytobuyacarlikethat.”Thesecondcar,though,wasanancientsedan（轎車）morebeat-upandrustythantheoneIwasdriving.Amanhopped（沖）outoftheCadillacandhurriedintothestorerightpastthebellringerwithoutasecondglance.Outoftheoldsedancameayoungmotherwiththreesmallchildrenintow（緊隨著）.Herclotheslookedaswornoutashercar,yetshestoppedinfront