2020年山東卷讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)講解課件-高三英語(yǔ)一輪復(fù)習(xí)

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TheMeredithfamilylivedinasmallcommunity.Astheeconomywasindecline,somepeopleinthetownhadlosttheirjobs.Manyoftheirfamilieswerestrugglingtomakeendsmeet.Peopleweretryingtohelpeachothermeetthechallenges.Mrs.Meredithwasamostkindandthoughtfulwoman.Shespentagreatdealoftimevisitingthepoor.Sheknewtheyhadproblems,andtheyneededallkindsofhelp.Whenshehadtime,shewouldbringfoodandmedicinetothem.2020年山東卷

Onemorningshetoldherchildrenaboutafamilyshehadvisitedthedaybefore.Therewasamansickinbed,hiswife,whotookcareofhimandcouldnotgoouttowork,andtheirlittleboy.Thelittleboy-hisnamewasBernard-hadinterestedherverymuch.“Iwishyoucouldseehim,”shesaidtoherownchildren,John,Harry,andClara.“Heissuchahelptohismother.Hewantsverymuchtoearnsomemoney,butIdon‘tseewhathecando.”

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Aftertheirmotherlefttheroom,thechildrensatthinkingaboutBernard.“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney,”saidClara.“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”“SodoI,”saidHarry.“Wereallyshoulddosomethingtoassistthem.”Forsomemoments,Johnsaidnothing,but,suddenly,hesprangtohisfeetandcried,“Ihaveagreatidea!Ihaveasolutionthatwecanallhelpaccomplish(完成).”

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Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.WhenJohnhadanidea,itwassuretobeagoodone.I’lltellyouwhatwecando,”saidJohn.“YouknowthatbigboxofcomUncleJohnsentus?Well,wecanmakepopcorn(爆米花),andputitintopaperbags,andBernardcantakeitaroundtothehousesandsellit.”1.

續(xù)寫(xiě)詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左石：2.

請(qǐng)按如下格式在答題卡的相應(yīng)位置作答。WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,

shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.Witheverythingready.Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.

梳理故事情節(jié)

whoMrs.Meredith,John,Harry,Clara,Bernard,UncleJohnwhenOnemorningwhereIntheroomwhatThefamilyhelpedBernardtoearnmoney.whyBernard’sdadwassickandhismomcouldn’tgoouttowork.howThechildrenmadepopcornandBernardsoldit.寫(xiě)作注意點(diǎn)

續(xù)寫(xiě)部分與原文在文體和語(yǔ)言上保持一致時(shí)態(tài)一致前文中有動(dòng)作描寫(xiě)（如hesprangtohisfeetandcried.Theotherchildrenalsojumpedupallattention.)、對(duì)話（如“Iwishwecouldhelphimtoearnmoney.”“Hisfamilyissufferingsomuch.”)續(xù)寫(xiě)時(shí)應(yīng)考慮與前文語(yǔ)言風(fēng)格一樣。首句的解讀

第一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.表明Mrs.Meredith同意John提出的建議，因此本段應(yīng)該描寫(xiě)賣爆米花前的準(zhǔn)備工作以及他們所需要的材料。第二段首句Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness表明，Bernard開(kāi)始要賣爆米花了。此時(shí)可以從兩方面入手，其中之一是爆米花賣得很快，他很快就賺到了錢；另一方面則是爆米花賣得不順利，但在孩子們的幫助下，Bernard最終賺到了錢，他非常感激Mrs.Meredith和她的孩子們。寫(xiě)作思路

思路一：孩子們?nèi)ncleJohn家里借爆米花機(jī)器并學(xué)習(xí)怎么制作爆米花，而Mrs.Meredith出去買爆米花的紙袋，并把Bernard帶了回來(lái)。一切準(zhǔn)備就緒，Bernard開(kāi)始時(shí)很害羞，John幫助他一起賣爆米花，然后賺到了錢，Bernard高興并感謝他們。思路二：Mrs.Meredith和孩子們一起去告訴Bernard這個(gè)計(jì)劃。他們買了機(jī)器和紙袋，學(xué)會(huì)了做爆米花。一切準(zhǔn)備就緒，Bernard開(kāi)始賣爆米花，賺到了錢。寫(xiě)作思路微技能之G-N策略

運(yùn)用Given-New策略，我們根據(jù)原文文本和首句（Giveninformation)提供的信息，采用圍繞中心詞和一些相關(guān)問(wèn)題、回答問(wèn)題（Newinformation)的方法，拓展我們的思路和角度，最終形成合理的故事情節(jié)線。從續(xù)寫(xiě)第一段首句WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodidea,too.我們可以設(shè)問(wèn)：1.WhatdidMrs.Meredithdo?2.WhatdidJohn,HarryandClaradotohelpBernard?3.HowdidtheyletBernardknowtheiridea?4.HowdidBernardfeel?第一段成段

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn’sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodidea,too.SoMrs.Meredithtookoutthatbigboxofcorn.Thechildrenwereveryhappy.TheywenttoseeUncleJohntoborrowthepopcornmachineandlearnedhowtomakepopcorn.Thechildrenmadepopcorn.Mrs.Meredithwentouttobuythepaperbags.ShebroughtBernardback.Theytoldtheideatohim.Hewasexcited.第二段提問(wèn)

根據(jù)續(xù)寫(xiě)第二段首句Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.我們可以這樣設(shè)問(wèn)：1.WhenBernardsoldpopcorn,whatproblemwouldhemeet?2.Whatdidthechildrendo?3.DidBernardsellpopcornout?4.WasBernardthankfultothem?第二段成段

Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Atfirst,Bernardwasverytooshy.Johnhelpedhimtoselltheirpopcorn.Thepopcornwasverydelicious.Intheevening,theirpopcornwassoldoutandtheyearnedsomemoney.BernardthankedandhuggedJohn.Everyweek,Bernardsoldpopcornandtookmoneyhome.微技能之準(zhǔn)確的動(dòng)作神態(tài)描寫(xiě)：高興篇

上面這一段文字情節(jié)完整，但是存在著字?jǐn)?shù)不足，信息量不夠，表達(dá)干癟的缺點(diǎn)，無(wú)法準(zhǔn)確傳達(dá)故事類文章的情感因素。為此，我們可以通過(guò)情緒情感、心理活動(dòng)、具體動(dòng)作、對(duì)話獨(dú)白、場(chǎng)景描寫(xiě)以及修辭等更多方式使得文章血肉豐滿，厚實(shí)感人。微技能之準(zhǔn)確的動(dòng)作神態(tài)描寫(xiě)：高興篇

一.詞的積累動(dòng)詞cheer,delight形容詞happy,glad,pleased,cheerful,delighted,overjoyed,merry,thrilled名詞joy,happiness,excitement,pleasure副詞enjoyably,cheerfully,joyfully微技能之準(zhǔn)確的動(dòng)作神態(tài)描寫(xiě)：高興篇

二.詞塊和句的積累1.BothMarkandI

arefeelingonthetopoftheworld.2.BothMarkandI

arefloatingonair.3.Hearing/Seeing…,hejumpedupanddownwithexcitement/joy.4.Thechildrenwerethrilled/wildwithjoyatthesightof…5.Hiseyesglittered/shonewithexcitement.微技能之準(zhǔn)確的動(dòng)作神態(tài)描寫(xiě)：高興篇

二.詞塊和句的積累6.Shehummedandskippedintheforestlikeabird.7.Thesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.8.Thencameavoicefarfromwherewewere,bathingusinextremejoy.9.Afloodofjoy/pleasurewelledupinhim.10.Anextremehappinessdominatedtheirheartsimmediately.牛刀小試

一.一看到那個(gè)大盒子，孩子們高興地跳起來(lái)。1.Thechildrenjumpedupanddownwithjoy_______.(運(yùn)用時(shí)間狀語(yǔ)從)2._______，thechildrenjumpedupanddownwithjoy.(運(yùn)用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞結(jié)構(gòu))3._______，thechildrenjumpedupanddownwithjoy.（運(yùn)用介詞短語(yǔ)結(jié)構(gòu)）二.然后他們?nèi)グ菰L了UncleJohn,借了機(jī)器，學(xué)習(xí)了怎么制作美味的爆米花。1.Then,theypaidavisittoUncleJohn,_______themostdeliciouspopcorn.（運(yùn)用三連動(dòng)句式）牛刀小試

2.Then,theypaidavisittoUncleJohn,_______themostdeliciouspopcorn.（運(yùn)用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞結(jié)構(gòu)）三.Bernard如此感動(dòng)，一句話也說(shuō)不出來(lái)。1._______thathecouldhardlyspeak.（運(yùn)用so…that...句型）2._______thathecouldhardlyspeak.（運(yùn)用倒裝結(jié)構(gòu)）四.Mrs.Meredith回來(lái)了，后面跟著B(niǎo)ernard.1.WhenMrs.Meredithcameback,_______（運(yùn)用主從句）2.Mrs.Meredithcameback,and_______（運(yùn)用并列句）牛刀小試

3.Mrs.Meredithcameback,_______（運(yùn)用非謂語(yǔ)結(jié)構(gòu)）五.天空開(kāi)始出現(xiàn)閃閃的星星，高興地向他們眨眼睛。Starsappearedinthesky,_______.（運(yùn)用非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞結(jié)構(gòu)和擬人地修辭手法）六.聽(tīng)到這個(gè)好消息，他感到非常高興。Hearingthegreatidea,_______dominatedhisheartimmediately.（抽象名詞作主語(yǔ)）七.沒(méi)過(guò)多久，他們便制作出了美味的爆米花。_______theycouldmakedeliciouspopcorn.（運(yùn)用含before的句型）牛刀小試

八.Bernard帶著空籃子回來(lái)了，手里拿著一些硬幣。1.Bernardreturnedwithanemptybasket,_______（運(yùn)用并列句）2.Bernardreturnedwithanemptybasket,_______（運(yùn)用with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)）3.Bernardreturnedwithanemptybasket,_______（運(yùn)用獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)）參考范文1

WhenMrs.MeredithheardofJohn'sidea,shethoughtitwasagoodone,too.SoMrs.Meredithtookoutthatbigboxofcorn.Atthesightofit,thechildrenjumpedupanddownwithjoy.Then,theypaidavisittoUncleJohn,borrowedthepopcornmachineandlearnedhowtomakethemostdeliciouspopcorn.Verysoon,theywerebusyingpoppingthecorn,whileMrs.Meredithwentouttobuythepaperbags.Shecameback,followedbyBernard.Theysharedtheideawithhim.Hiseyesshonewithexcitement.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Atfirst,Bernardwastooshy.ButJohn,asmartandlovelyboy,helpedhimtoselltheirpopcornfromdoortodoor.Itwasitssweetsmellthatmadeitpopular.Intheevening,theirpopcornwassoldout.Starsappearedinthesky,twinklingtheireyesattheminhappiness.

Holdingmoney,somovedwasBernardthathecouldhardlyspeak,buthisbrightsmilingfacespokeforhim.BernardhuggedJohntightly.Sometimesoursmallactioncanmakeagreatdifferencetoothers.參考范文2

WhenMrs.Meredithheardoftheidea,shethoughtitwasagoodonetoo.TheyhurriedtotellBernardthegreatidea.Hearingit,anextremehappinessdominatedhisheartimmediately.ThenMrs.Meredithtogetherwithfourkidsmadetheirwaytoasupermarket,boughtapopcornmachineandsomepaperbags,andwenthome.Itwasn'tlongbeforetheycouldmakedeliciouspopcorn.Bathedinthesunshine,theyputthepaperbagsfilledwithpopcornintoabasketinexcitement.Witheverythingready,Bernardstartedoutonhisnewbusiness.Thepopcornwassosweetthatitwassoldoutinashorttime.Bernardreturnedwithanemptybasket,somecoinsinhishand.Heheldthecoinstightly,tearsrollingdownwithoutcontrol.Sincethen,everySaturdaymorning,Johnsawitthatthecornwasallpopped,thepaperbagsfilledandarrangedinthebasketwhenBernardarrived.ThankstoJohn,allthingswentwell.Evenasmallactofkindnesscanmaketheworldbetter.官方范文

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