高考書(shū)面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)共優(yōu)質(zhì)公開(kāi)課課件

高考書(shū)面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)高考書(shū)面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)1年份形式話(huà)題2019讀寫(xiě)概要式（文字材料）中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)服裝2018年讀寫(xiě)概要式（文字材料）利用排名進(jìn)行消費(fèi)2017年讀寫(xiě)概要式（柱狀圖+文字）我國(guó)電影票房收入2016年讀寫(xiě)概要式（文字材料）網(wǎng)絡(luò)投票2015年讀寫(xiě)概要式（曲線(xiàn)圖+文字）交通2014年讀寫(xiě)概要式（文字材料）漢語(yǔ)詞典收錄英文詞匯年份形式話(huà)題2一、書(shū)面表達(dá)常見(jiàn)的失分點(diǎn)二、針對(duì)失分點(diǎn)的改進(jìn)策略一、書(shū)面表達(dá)常見(jiàn)的失分點(diǎn)31.審題不嚴(yán)高考時(shí)間緊，有些考生急于答題，卻很容易忙中出亂。審題不清，扣不住主題。僅憑短文的開(kāi)頭內(nèi)容就匆忙提煉文章的概要，往往以偏概全。1.審題不嚴(yán)高考時(shí)間緊，有些考生急于答題，卻很容易忙中出亂。42.總結(jié)文章能力欠缺任務(wù)型讀寫(xiě)要求學(xué)生用30個(gè)詞歸納總結(jié)文章。常見(jiàn)問(wèn)題如下：（1）概括內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)不完整（2）使用太多細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容而不是用概括的語(yǔ)言（3）過(guò)多引用原文詞句（4）詞數(shù)過(guò)多（5）用第一人稱(chēng)而不是第三人稱(chēng)轉(zhuǎn)述（6）時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤2.總結(jié)文章能力欠缺5

LastSundayIwentfishing.Buttwohourslater,Ididn’tcatchanyfish.Igotveryangryandbegantopackupmystuff,preparingtogobackhome.Justthen,Isawanoldmansittingnearme.Tomysurprise,hisbasketwasfulloffish,soIwentovertohim,wantingtoknowwhy.“Excuseme,buthowlonghaveyousathere?”Iasked.“Aboutfourhours,”heanswered.“Fourhours?”Icouldn’tbelievemyears.“Yes.It’sveryimportanttobepatient,”theoldmansaid.“Don’tconsiderfishingatiringsport.Justenjoyit.”Suddenly,Iunderstoodwhathesaid.Imustlearntobepatient.ThenIsatthereandwaitedforfishpatiently.Atlast,Icaughtit.Inthefollowingsixhours,Icaughtover10fish.Igraduallyrealizedthatthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.

請(qǐng)用30個(gè)字概括短文

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學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤1:

ThepassagetellsusthatlastSundayamanwentfishingbuthedidn’tcatchanyfishintwohours.Atthistimehesawanoldmansittingnearhim.Thewriteraskedthemanhowtocatchfishes.Theoldmansaidthatyoushouldbepatient.

學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤1:

7學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤2:

Thestorymainlytellsusthatthewriterwasfishinganddidn’tcatchanyfish.Whenhepreparedtogobackhome,hefoundanoldmansittingthereandhisbasketwasfulloffish.Intheend,hecaughtmanyfish.高考書(shū)面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)共優(yōu)質(zhì)公開(kāi)課課件8學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤3:

Thestorymainlytellsusthatthewriterwasfishingbutmadenoachievementsandpreparedtogobackhome.Whileanoldmanwhosebasketwasfulloffishtoldhimthatfishingisveryimportanttobepatient.Theauthorlearnedtobepatient.Atlast,theauthorcaughtfishandrealizedthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.

學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤3:9學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤4:

Thewritertellsusthathewentfishingbutdidn’tcatchanyfishafterwaiting2hours.Thenanoldmansittingnearmetoldmehissecretoffishingwaspatience.Finallythewritersucceeded.

學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤4:10學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤5:

Thepassagemainlytellsusthatthewriterdidn’tcatchanyfishbecauseofhisimpatience.Hebecomeshappywhenheunderstandsthepatienceisthekeytosuccess.

學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤5:11ThearticletellsusthatafightbetweenabusdriverandanangrypassengercausedthebustoplungeintoYangtzeRiveronFriday,whichleft15peopledead,saidChongqingpolice.ij上面別忘記加一點(diǎn)，t別忘記加一橫，f,p,j占四線(xiàn)三格It’sveryimportanttobepatient,”theoldmansaid.ThatHejiankuihascreatedtheworld’sfirstWelcometoourschool.第三檔：10~15分學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤5:nopatienceandgotangryTheyenjoyfreeeducationinit.Ourschoolisjustlikeagarden.圖表描述要看極值：最大值、最小值、不變值。⑥Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.Basedontheblack-boxrecordingdevicefromthebusandotherevidence,afemalepassengersurnamedLiu,48,missedherstopandaskedthedriversurnamedRan,43,tostopimmediately.議論文或說(shuō)明文概括的方法Justenjoyit.連寫(xiě)不要連成兩個(gè)字母都分不清了記敘文概括的方法---串聯(lián)要素法LastSundayIwentfishing.一、書(shū)面表達(dá)常見(jiàn)的失分點(diǎn)3.邏輯不順不少考生在寫(xiě)作時(shí)，雖然文章達(dá)到規(guī)定的字?jǐn)?shù)，卻毫無(wú)邏輯可言。這使得短文前后不連貫，層次不清晰，邏輯性不強(qiáng)，沒(méi)有語(yǔ)篇意識(shí)。誤：Someridersofe-bikesandbicyclesagainstrulessothataccidentsistakenplaceeasily.正：Someridersofe-bikesandbicyclesgoagainstrulessothataccidentstakeplaceeasily.Thearticletellsusthatafi124.表達(dá)不地道，英語(yǔ)思維缺乏很多考生寫(xiě)作時(shí)，因?yàn)橐资軡h語(yǔ)習(xí)慣的影響和英語(yǔ)思維的缺乏，所寫(xiě)的句子不符合英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣的中式英語(yǔ)。這樣的句子讀起來(lái)令人費(fèi)解，看起來(lái)也會(huì)顯得不倫不類(lèi)。誤：Myheightis180centimetersandmybodyishealthy.誤：Welcomeyoucometoourschooltovisit.誤：Becausethetrafficiscrowded,soweshouldwalktoschool.正：I’m180centimeterstallandI’mhealthy.正：You’rewelcometovisitourschool.正：

Becausethetrafficiscrowded,weshouldwalktoschool.4.表達(dá)不地道，英語(yǔ)思維缺乏很多考生寫(xiě)作時(shí)，因?yàn)橐资軡h語(yǔ)習(xí)慣135.句式結(jié)構(gòu)單一有的考生的書(shū)面表達(dá)從頭到尾幾乎全是簡(jiǎn)單句，不會(huì)靈活交叉使用長(zhǎng)句和短句、簡(jiǎn)單句和復(fù)雜句，句式單一，讀起來(lái)乏味。

Welcometoourschool.Thisschoolisverysmall.Ithasnearly30teachersandabout500students.Itusedtobeverypoor.Ithaschangedalotsince1980.Nowitistakingonanewlook.Theschoolherewasverysmall.Nowithasbeenrebuilt.Thenewlybuiltteachingbuildinghas6storeys.Itisthemostbeautifulbuildingintheschool.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.5.句式結(jié)構(gòu)單一有的考生的書(shū)面表達(dá)從頭到尾幾乎全是簡(jiǎn)單句，146.低級(jí)錯(cuò)誤頻現(xiàn)Therewerehundredofstudentscouldn’tgotoschoolbecausetheywerepoor.Inadditionto,wemustreadtherulesandregulations.

Herememberedhiswallethadlostinthebus.Theyareclassrooms，library,

andteachingbuilding.Thereasonisbecausehedoesn’tknowwhattodonext.一些考生由于英語(yǔ)基本功薄弱和語(yǔ)法知識(shí)掌握不牢，在寫(xiě)作時(shí)會(huì)出現(xiàn)各種各樣的錯(cuò)誤。常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤有時(shí)態(tài)，語(yǔ)態(tài)，主謂一致，短語(yǔ)搭配，單詞拼寫(xiě)，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)等等。6.低級(jí)錯(cuò)誤頻現(xiàn)Therewerehundredof15Worse!7.卷面差強(qiáng)人意有的考生卷面不整潔，亂涂亂畫(huà)，而且字跡潦草，第一眼就給閱卷老師留下了不好的印象。

Worse!7.卷面差強(qiáng)人意有的考生卷面不整潔，亂涂亂畫(huà)，16二、針對(duì)失分點(diǎn)的改進(jìn)策略高考書(shū)面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)共優(yōu)質(zhì)公開(kāi)課課件17NMET書(shū)面表達(dá)評(píng)分原則第五檔：20~25分第四檔：15~20分第三檔：10~15分第二檔：5~10分第一檔：0~5分NMET書(shū)面表達(dá)評(píng)分原則第五檔：20~25分181.審題清2.概括絕3.結(jié)構(gòu)整4.表達(dá)準(zhǔn)5.句式活6.邏輯順7.卷面潔英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作應(yīng)注意七大點(diǎn)二、針對(duì)失分點(diǎn)的改進(jìn)策略1.審題清英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作應(yīng)注意七大點(diǎn)二、針對(duì)失分點(diǎn)的改進(jìn)策略191.審題清審題是書(shū)面表達(dá)的第一步，也是關(guān)鍵一步。對(duì)讀寫(xiě)作文來(lái)說(shuō)，審題尤為重要?？忌谡嬲_(kāi)始寫(xiě)作之前，必須舍得花相當(dāng)一部分時(shí)間做寫(xiě)前準(zhǔn)備工作。只有審準(zhǔn)了題目，弄清了題目的要求，才能寫(xiě)出好的文章。具體說(shuō)來(lái)，審題包括四個(gè)方面：審體裁，審內(nèi)容，審人稱(chēng)，審時(shí)態(tài)。1.審題清審題是書(shū)面表達(dá)的第一步，也是關(guān)鍵一步。對(duì)讀寫(xiě)作文來(lái)202.概括絕在讀寫(xiě)作文中，30個(gè)字的概括既要求考生讀懂短文，又要求考生在讀懂的基礎(chǔ)上概括整理短文的要點(diǎn)。概括內(nèi)容：（1）精，準(zhǔn)，全

（2）杜絕抄原文

（3）控制好字?jǐn)?shù)2.概括絕21第一步：先通讀全文，找出幾個(gè)要素

who→誰(shuí)

what→何事

when→何時(shí)

where→何地

why→原因記敘文概括的方法---串聯(lián)要素法第二步：用自己的話(huà)串聯(lián)起來(lái)

第一步：先通讀全文，找出幾個(gè)要素記敘文概括的方法---串聯(lián)要22

LastSundayIwentfishing.Buttwohourslater,Ididn’tcatchanyfish.Igotveryangryandbegantopackupmystuff,preparingtogobackhome.Justthen,Isawanoldmansittingnearme.Tomysurprise,hisbasketwasfulloffish,soIwentovertohim,wantingtoknowwhy.“Excuseme,buthowlonghaveyousathere?”Iasked.“Aboutfourhours,”heanswered.“Fourhours?”Icouldn’tbelievemyears.“Yes.It’sveryimportanttobepatient,”theoldmansaid.“Don’tconsiderfishingatiringsport.Justenjoyit.”Suddenly,Iunderstoodwhathesaid.Imustlearntobepatient.ThenIsatthereandwaitedforfishpatiently.Atlast,Icaughtit.Inthefollowingsixhours,Icaughtover10fish.Igraduallyrealizedthatthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.

請(qǐng)用30個(gè)字概括短文

23第一步：請(qǐng)找出這篇短文的幾個(gè)要素：

who→誰(shuí)①_______________②________________

what→何事①____________________________②__________________________when→何時(shí)

where→何地

why→原因①_____________________________________

②______________________________________

asaresult→結(jié)果______________________________________________________I(thewriter)didn’tcatchanyfishanoldmanhisbasketwasfulloffishIt’svery

importanttobepatientlearntobepatient;caughtit.

第二步：用自己的話(huà)串聯(lián)起來(lái)

nopatienceandgotangry第一步：請(qǐng)找出這篇短文的幾個(gè)要素：I(thewriter24

Thepassagemainlytellsusthewriterwhohadnopatienceatfirstcaughtalotoffishafterbecomingpatientbecauseofbeinginfluencedbyanoldman.Finally,herealizedpatienceisthekeytosuccess.高考書(shū)面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)共優(yōu)質(zhì)公開(kāi)課課件25

Accordingtothepolice,initialon-siteinvestigationshowedthatat10:08amonFriday,thebus,identifiedasaNo22publicbus,abruptlyturnedwhencrossingtheSecondYangtzeRiverBridgeinChongqing.Itsteppedoverthecentrallinethatseparatesvehiclesrunninginoppositedirectionsandrammedintoaredcarinanotherlane.Thebusthenhitthepavement,brokethroughtheguardrail(護(hù)欄)andplunged(俯沖)intotheriver.Basedontheblack-boxrecordingdevicefromthebusandotherevidence,afemalepassengersurnamedLiu,48,missedherstopandaskedthedriversurnamedRan,43,tostopimmediately.Afterthedriverrefusedtostop,Liuhitthedriver’sheadwithhercellphone.Duringthefight,Ranlostcontrolofthebusandthevehiclebrokethroughaguardrail(護(hù)欄)andplungedintotheriverwithanestimated15passengersonboarddeadinChongqing.

以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容

Accordingtothepolice,i26第一步：請(qǐng)找出這篇短文的幾個(gè)要素：

who→誰(shuí)__________________________when→

何時(shí)____________what→何事__________________________where地點(diǎn)_____________________why→原因______________________________________asaresult→結(jié)果__________________________________________________第二步：用自己的話(huà)串聯(lián)起來(lái)afemalepassengerandabusdriveronFridayLiuhitthedriver’shead/fightthebusplungedintotheriver15passengersonboarddeadChongqing第一步：請(qǐng)找出這篇短文的幾個(gè)要素：afemalepass27

ThearticletellsusthatafightbetweenabusdriverandanangrypassengercausedthebustoplungeintoYangtzeRiveronFriday,whichleft15peopledead,saidChongqingpolice.Thearticletellsustha28議論文或說(shuō)明文概括的方法1.抓住關(guān)鍵詞，找出關(guān)鍵句。2.轉(zhuǎn)換視覺(jué)，以第三人稱(chēng)或無(wú)人稱(chēng)概括。3.簡(jiǎn)要轉(zhuǎn)述觀(guān)點(diǎn)議論文或說(shuō)明文概括的方法29Weknowthatfoodshouldnotbewasted,buttoooftenitis.TheUNfoodorganizationFAOestimatesthatgloballyupto50%offruitandvegetablesarelostbetweenfarmandfork.Transportanddistributionmayaccountforbetween5%and20%ofthelossdependingonthespecificregionoftheworld.OnFriday4thofOctober2013,DanishMinisterforFood,AgricultureandFisheries,KarenHakkerupopenedtheDenmark'slargesteventagainstfoodwaste:UnitedAgainstFoodWaste.TheCopenhagenTownHallSquarewasfilledwithfoodstallsandbetween2amand6pmthousandsoflocalpeopleandtouristswereofferedfreedeliciousfoodproducedbysomeextraamountoffoodfromthefoodindustryandretailers.Inaddition,visitorswillexperienceengagedtalksbyCEOofDenmark'slargestagriculturalorganizationDanish:AgricultureFoodCouncil,SorenGade,celebrity(A)chefBoJacobsenandtheinternationalfoodexpertDr.SilviaGaiani.Furthermore,theSecretaryGeneraloftheNordicCouncilofMinisters,DagfinnHoybraten,wasatpresentthefirstprizewinnerofthedesigncompetitionagainstfoodwaste.Finally,thepopularDJ,MasterFatman,providedthemusicandagreatatmospherethroughouttheday.以約30個(gè)詞概括上文的主要內(nèi)容_____________________________________________________________________Weknowthatfoodshouldnotb30Itis

saidthat50%offoodislostorwastedalongtheproductionlineoratdinnertable.UnitedAgainstFoodWaste,someactivitiesandmanyfamouspeopleinvolved,washeldinDenmark.Itissaidthat50%offoodis31圖表類(lèi)說(shuō)明文的步驟第一步：找出極值（最大值、最小值、不變值）第二步：分析數(shù)據(jù)第三步：描寫(xiě)趨勢(shì)切記：圖表描述要看極值：最大值、最小值、不變值。描寫(xiě)主要趨勢(shì)，不可把所有的數(shù)字都描述；你的描述要體現(xiàn)一種規(guī)律，不是干巴巴表達(dá)數(shù)據(jù)。圖表類(lèi)說(shuō)明文的步驟第一步：找出極值（最大值、最小值、不變值）32增長(zhǎng)/減少的表達(dá):表示上升的動(dòng)詞:表示上升的名詞:rise，increase,…;表示下降的動(dòng)詞:fall，decline，decrease，drop，godown,…;表示下降的名詞:fall，decline，decrease，drop,…；表示平穩(wěn):remainsteady/unchanged…rise，increase，climb，goup,…；增長(zhǎng)/減少的表達(dá):表示上升的動(dòng)詞:表示上升的名詞:rise，332017江蘇高考請(qǐng)認(rèn)真閱讀下面有關(guān)我國(guó)電影票房收入（box-officeincome）的柱狀圖及相關(guān)文字，并按照要求用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇150詞左右的文章。寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容：1.用約30個(gè)單詞概述柱狀圖信息的主要內(nèi)容。

2.我國(guó)電影票房收入變化的原因有哪些？簡(jiǎn)要談?wù)勀愕目捶?，不少于兩點(diǎn)。

3.談?wù)勀銓?duì)我國(guó)電影票房收入走向的看法，并簡(jiǎn)要說(shuō)明理由。2017江蘇高考寫(xiě)作內(nèi)容：1.用約30個(gè)單詞概述柱狀圖信息的34Asisindicatedinthegraph,thebox-officeincomeofChinesefilmsincreasedconstantlyfrom2012to2015,butitsgrowth,foronereasonoranother,sloweddownin2016.Asisindicatedinthegraph,35

請(qǐng)認(rèn)真閱讀下面有關(guān)我國(guó)共享汽車(chē)情況的柱狀圖及相關(guān)文字，并按照要求用英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)一篇150詞左右的文章。用約30個(gè)單詞概述柱狀圖信息的主要內(nèi)容。請(qǐng)認(rèn)真閱讀下面有關(guān)我國(guó)共享汽車(chē)情況的柱狀圖及相關(guān)文字，并36Accordingtothediagram,thenumberofsharedcarshaswitnessedaconstantincreasefrom28,000in2016topossibly100,000in2018,whichispredictedtotriplein2020.（30words）或：Asisindicatedinthediagram,thenumberofsharedcarsinChinahasbeenrisingquickly,fromonly28,000in2016topossibly10,000in2018,whichispredictedtotriplein2020.（34words）或：373.結(jié)構(gòu)整開(kāi)始部分：用一兩句話(huà)概括短文或圖表的要點(diǎn)。正文部分：過(guò)渡詞引出主題句，寫(xiě)出自已的觀(guān)點(diǎn)，舉例說(shuō)明。結(jié)尾部分：對(duì)全文的總結(jié)和概括。注意：主題句通常出現(xiàn)在段落的開(kāi)頭，含有該段落的主要意思，它能在文章中起到畫(huà)龍點(diǎn)睛的作用。3.結(jié)構(gòu)整開(kāi)始部分：用一兩句話(huà)概括短文或圖表的要點(diǎn)。38KnowledgeispowerEpidemicsarenotsomethingthatwecansimplyignore.EducationistheweaponwewillusetofightAids.HowcaneducationhelpusfightAids?SchoolshouldincludeinformationonthedeadlydiseaseintheBiologyclass.Inthisway,studentswilllearnmoreaboutthediseaseandhowitspreads.Teachersshouldteachstudentsnottodiscriminateagainstpeoplewiththedisease.Apersonwhoisillwiththediseasedoesnotneedtheadditionalpainthatthisadds.EducationistheweaponwewillusetofightAids.Knowledgeispower39寫(xiě)主題句應(yīng)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：（1）歸納出你要寫(xiě)的文章的幾個(gè)要點(diǎn)（2）提煉出一句具有概括性的話(huà)（3）主題句應(yīng)具有可讀性，抓住、吸引讀者。

寫(xiě)主題句應(yīng)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：40Whereveryougoinourschool,youseegreenlawnsandtreesandbeautifulflowers.Dottedamongthesetreesandflowersaremanybuildingsofdifferentstyles.Astreamrunsthroughourschoolandyoualwaysseeeverythingreflectedinthewater.Topicsentence:_____________Ourschoolisjustlikeagarden.

Whereveryougoinourschool,414.表達(dá)準(zhǔn)考生在做書(shū)面表達(dá)時(shí)，要使用正確的、地道的語(yǔ)言,不能使用晦澀難懂或者說(shuō)不符合英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣的語(yǔ)言。

(1)多讀

(2)多背

(3)多寫(xiě)4.表達(dá)準(zhǔn)考生在做書(shū)面表達(dá)時(shí)，要使用正確的、地道的語(yǔ)言,不能425.句式活在寫(xiě)作中使用較豐富的句式，靈活地運(yùn)用得當(dāng)?shù)木渥涌梢越o文章增色不少，從而使整篇文章因此而生輝。5.句式活在寫(xiě)作中使用較豐富的句式，靈活地運(yùn)用得當(dāng)?shù)木渥涌梢?3寫(xiě)對(duì)句子1.主語(yǔ)+系動(dòng)詞+表語(yǔ)（S+V+P）Ourschoolcampuslooksbeautiful.2.主語(yǔ)+謂語(yǔ)(S+V)Everythinggoeswell.3.主語(yǔ)+謂語(yǔ)+賓語(yǔ)(S+V+O)Wearediscussingwheretospendourholiday.4.主語(yǔ)+謂語(yǔ)+間接賓語(yǔ)+直接賓語(yǔ)(S+V+O+O)I’llbuymyfatherabirthdaygift.5.主語(yǔ)+謂語(yǔ)+賓語(yǔ)+賓補(bǔ)(S+V+O+C)WefinditalotoffuntolearnEnglish.寫(xiě)對(duì)句子44定語(yǔ)從句，名詞性從句，非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞，with的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)，強(qiáng)調(diào)句，倒裝句，被動(dòng)句子他昨天下午來(lái)的。1.Hecamehereyesterdayafternoon.2.Hedidn’tcomehereuntilyesterdayafternoon.3.Notuntilyesterdayafternoondidhecomehere.4.Itwasyesterdayafternoonthathecamehere.高考書(shū)面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)共優(yōu)質(zhì)公開(kāi)課課件45Ifyougothroughthegate,you’llfindtheentrancetoBearCountry.(一般)Gothroughthegate,andyou’llfindtheentrancetoBearCountry.(高級(jí))Igotuplatethismorning,otherwiseIcouldhavecaughttheearlybus.(高級(jí))Igotuplatethismorning.Ididn’tcatchtheearlybus.(一般)Themorehespoke,themoreexcitedhefelt.

(高級(jí))Whenhespoke,hefeltmoreandmoreexcited.(一般)Ifyougothroughthegate,yo46使用潤(rùn)色技巧,合并或改寫(xiě)下列句子。1.IrealizedtheimportanceofEnglishwhenIenteredseniorhighschool.(強(qiáng)調(diào)句)2.Wecanliveahappylifeonlybythismeans.(倒裝)3.Hefellasleep.Thelightswerestillon.(with結(jié)構(gòu))

4.Theywerefacedwithmanyproblems.Theydidn’tloseheart.(非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞)5.HeofferedmeapieceofadvicethatIshouldcheerupandstartalloveragain.(what引導(dǎo)的主語(yǔ)從句)Facedwithmanyproblems,theydidn’tloseheart．

ItwaswhenIenteredseniorhighschoolthatIrealizedtheimportanceofEnglish.

Onlybythismeanscanweliveahappylife.Hefellasleepwiththelightson.WhatheofferedmewasapieceofadvicethatIshouldcheerupandstartalloveragain.使用潤(rùn)色技巧,合并或改寫(xiě)下列句子。Facedwithm47Hejiankuihascreatedtheworld’sfirstgene-editedbabyandthatmakeshimbeaccusedbymanypeople.賀建奎完成首例基因編輯嬰兒，這讓許多人指責(zé)他。Hejiankuihascreatedtheworld’sfirstgene-editedbaby,whichmakeshimbeaccusedbymanypeople.ThatHejiankuihascreatedtheworld’sfirstgene-editedbabymakeshimbeaccusedbymanypeople.定語(yǔ)從句主語(yǔ)從句Hejiankuihascreatedtheworl48

HeJiankuihascreatedtheworld’sfirstgene-editedbaby,makinghimaccusedbymanypeople.HeJiankui’screatingtheworld’sfirstgene-editedbabymakeshimaccusedbymanypeople.HeJiankuihascreatedtheworld’sfirstgene-editedbaby,manypeopleaccusinghim.非謂語(yǔ)結(jié)構(gòu)獨(dú)立主格結(jié)構(gòu)動(dòng)名詞的復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)賀建奎完成首例基因編輯嬰兒，這讓許多人指責(zé)他。Hejiankuihascreatedtheworld’sfirstgene-editedbabyandthatmakeshimbeaccusedbymanypeople.HeJiankuihascreatedthewo49但是值得提醒的是，同學(xué)們?cè)谑褂脧?fù)雜的句型和結(jié)構(gòu)時(shí)，要有把握能正確地表達(dá)；也要注意分寸，應(yīng)根據(jù)書(shū)面表達(dá)的內(nèi)容和篇章結(jié)構(gòu)而定，做到地道得體，千萬(wàn)不能生搬硬套，畫(huà)蛇添足。多看多背多模仿多翻譯但是值得提醒的是，同學(xué)們?cè)谑褂脧?fù)雜的句型和結(jié)構(gòu)時(shí)，要有把握能506.邏輯順在寫(xiě)作時(shí)為了使得短文前后連貫，層次清晰，邏輯性強(qiáng)，考生應(yīng)認(rèn)真思考所給材料，找到短文表達(dá)的主旨大意及線(xiàn)索，然后在文意及線(xiàn)索的引導(dǎo)下，將短文內(nèi)容順暢地表達(dá)出來(lái)。為了增強(qiáng)文章的可讀性，考生應(yīng)該學(xué)會(huì)使用過(guò)渡及連接的詞匯，這樣就可以有效地增強(qiáng)文章的可讀性，增加文章的感情色彩。6.邏輯順在寫(xiě)作時(shí)為了使得短文前后連貫，層次清晰，邏輯性強(qiáng)，51正確使用有關(guān)連接詞

時(shí)間先后：轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系：but,however,onthecontrary,nevertheless因果關(guān)系：because,since,as,thanksto,owingto,asaresultof,forthereasonthat讓步關(guān)系：though,although,evenif,eventhough,inspiteofthefactthat遞進(jìn)關(guān)系：條件關(guān)系：表列舉：表總結(jié)：what’smore,inaddition,furthermoreontheonehand…ontheotherhand,if,unless,aslongas,onconditionthat…forexample/instance,take…forexample,that’stosay,inotherwords,asfollowsinshort,inbrief,inconclusion,inaword,onthewhole,ashasbeenstatedfirst,then,later,intheend,eventually,sincethen,afterawhile正確使用有關(guān)連接詞時(shí)間先后：轉(zhuǎn)折關(guān)系：but,howev52添加連接詞Ihadabadcoldlastweek.Ihadarunningnose.Ididnottakeitseriously.Ibegantocough.Ihadafeverandfeltweak.Iwassenttohospitalandhadtolieinbedforthreedays.Ihadabadcoldlastweek.AtfirstIhadarunningnose,butIdidnottakeitseriously.ThenIbegantocough.Afterthat,Ihadafeverandfeltweak.Finally,Iwassenttohospitalandhadtolieinbedforthreedays.添加連接詞Ihadabadcoldlastwee53Ladiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool.①Thisschoolisverysmall.Ithasnearly30teachersandabout500students.②Inthepast,itwaspoor.③Ithaschangedalotsince1980.Nowitistakingonanewlook.

Thankyou.Ladiesandgentlemen,Welcometoourschool.①Thisschoolisasmallonewhichhasnearly30teachersandabout500students.②Itusedtobeverypoor.③However,ithaschangedalotsince1980.Nowitistakingonanewlook.

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④Theschoolherewasverysmall.⑤Nowithasbeenrebuilt.Thenewlybuiltteachingbuildinghas6storeys.Itisthemostbeautifulbuildingintheschool.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.⑥Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.Thankyou.④Theschoolherewassosmallthatchildrennearbycouldn’tgotoschool.⑤Butnowithasbeenrebuiltandthenewlybuiltteachingbuildingwhichhas6storeysisthemostbeautifuloneintheschool.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.⑥Inaddition,theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.Thankyou.④Theschoolherewasverysma557.卷面潔（1）注重書(shū)寫(xiě)

記住書(shū)寫(xiě)四要素：字正腔圓斬頭去尾間距相等基一條線(xiàn)（2）先草稿后謄寫(xiě)7.卷面潔（1）注重書(shū)寫(xiě)56書(shū)寫(xiě)小細(xì)節(jié)1.作文紙略向左傾斜2.大寫(xiě)字母應(yīng)稍大稍高于小寫(xiě)字母3.a與o,u與v,n與u等容易混淆的字母要分清4.adgoq要滿(mǎn)口5.ij上面別忘記加一點(diǎn)，t別忘記加一橫，f,p,j占四線(xiàn)三格6.連寫(xiě)不要連成兩個(gè)字母都分不清了書(shū)寫(xiě)小細(xì)節(jié)57Neat!Neat!58一篇檔次較高、得分較多的書(shū)面表達(dá)，給閱卷老師的印象應(yīng)該是：語(yǔ)意要合情合理，過(guò)渡自然；語(yǔ)句要有簡(jiǎn)有繁，隨“意”而安；語(yǔ)法要結(jié)構(gòu)正確，無(wú)懈可擊；語(yǔ)言要地道流暢，書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范。一篇檔次較高、得分較多的書(shū)面表達(dá)，給閱卷老師的印象應(yīng)該是：59也許我們還不能做到優(yōu)秀，但我們不能停止追求優(yōu)秀的腳步。也許我們還不能做到優(yōu)秀，但我們不能停止追求優(yōu)秀的腳步。60Thankyou，goodbye愿同學(xué)們像這匹駿馬，馳騁在高考的征程中，創(chuàng)造自己的輝煌！GoodLuckToYouThankYouThankyou，goodbye愿同學(xué)們像這匹駿馬，馳騁61高考書(shū)面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)高考書(shū)面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)62年份形式話(huà)題2019讀寫(xiě)概要式（文字材料）中國(guó)傳統(tǒng)服裝2018年讀寫(xiě)概要式（文字材料）利用排名進(jìn)行消費(fèi)2017年讀寫(xiě)概要式（柱狀圖+文字）我國(guó)電影票房收入2016年讀寫(xiě)概要式（文字材料）網(wǎng)絡(luò)投票2015年讀寫(xiě)概要式（曲線(xiàn)圖+文字）交通2014年讀寫(xiě)概要式（文字材料）漢語(yǔ)詞典收錄英文詞匯年份形式話(huà)題63一、書(shū)面表達(dá)常見(jiàn)的失分點(diǎn)二、針對(duì)失分點(diǎn)的改進(jìn)策略一、書(shū)面表達(dá)常見(jiàn)的失分點(diǎn)641.審題不嚴(yán)高考時(shí)間緊，有些考生急于答題，卻很容易忙中出亂。審題不清，扣不住主題。僅憑短文的開(kāi)頭內(nèi)容就匆忙提煉文章的概要，往往以偏概全。1.審題不嚴(yán)高考時(shí)間緊，有些考生急于答題，卻很容易忙中出亂。652.總結(jié)文章能力欠缺任務(wù)型讀寫(xiě)要求學(xué)生用30個(gè)詞歸納總結(jié)文章。常見(jiàn)問(wèn)題如下：（1）概括內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)不完整（2）使用太多細(xì)節(jié)內(nèi)容而不是用概括的語(yǔ)言（3）過(guò)多引用原文詞句（4）詞數(shù)過(guò)多（5）用第一人稱(chēng)而不是第三人稱(chēng)轉(zhuǎn)述（6）時(shí)態(tài)錯(cuò)誤2.總結(jié)文章能力欠缺66

LastSundayIwentfishing.Buttwohourslater,Ididn’tcatchanyfish.Igotveryangryandbegantopackupmystuff,preparingtogobackhome.Justthen,Isawanoldmansittingnearme.Tomysurprise,hisbasketwasfulloffish,soIwentovertohim,wantingtoknowwhy.“Excuseme,buthowlonghaveyousathere?”Iasked.“Aboutfourhours,”heanswered.“Fourhours?”Icouldn’tbelievemyears.“Yes.It’sveryimportanttobepatient,”theoldmansaid.“Don’tconsiderfishingatiringsport.Justenjoyit.”Suddenly,Iunderstoodwhathesaid.Imustlearntobepatient.ThenIsatthereandwaitedforfishpatiently.Atlast,Icaughtit.Inthefollowingsixhours,Icaughtover10fish.Igraduallyrealizedthatthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.

請(qǐng)用30個(gè)字概括短文

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學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤1:

ThepassagetellsusthatlastSundayamanwentfishingbuthedidn’tcatchanyfishintwohours.Atthistimehesawanoldmansittingnearhim.Thewriteraskedthemanhowtocatchfishes.Theoldmansaidthatyoushouldbepatient.

學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤1:

68學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤2:

Thestorymainlytellsusthatthewriterwasfishinganddidn’tcatchanyfish.Whenhepreparedtogobackhome,hefoundanoldmansittingthereandhisbasketwasfulloffish.Intheend,hecaughtmanyfish.高考書(shū)面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)共優(yōu)質(zhì)公開(kāi)課課件69學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤3:

Thestorymainlytellsusthatthewriterwasfishingbutmadenoachievementsandpreparedtogobackhome.Whileanoldmanwhosebasketwasfulloffishtoldhimthatfishingisveryimportanttobepatient.Theauthorlearnedtobepatient.Atlast,theauthorcaughtfishandrealizedthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.

學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤3:70學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤4:

Thewritertellsusthathewentfishingbutdidn’tcatchanyfishafterwaiting2hours.Thenanoldmansittingnearmetoldmehissecretoffishingwaspatience.Finallythewritersucceeded.

學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤4:71學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤5:

Thepassagemainlytellsusthatthewriterdidn’tcatchanyfishbecauseofhisimpatience.Hebecomeshappywhenheunderstandsthepatienceisthekeytosuccess.

學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤5:72ThearticletellsusthatafightbetweenabusdriverandanangrypassengercausedthebustoplungeintoYangtzeRiveronFriday,whichleft15peopledead,saidChongqingpolice.ij上面別忘記加一點(diǎn)，t別忘記加一橫，f,p,j占四線(xiàn)三格It’sveryimportanttobepatient,”theoldmansaid.ThatHejiankuihascreatedtheworld’sfirstWelcometoourschool.第三檔：10~15分學(xué)生習(xí)作常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤5:nopatienceandgotangryTheyenjoyfreeeducationinit.Ourschoolisjustlikeagarden.圖表描述要看極值：最大值、最小值、不變值。⑥Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.Basedontheblack-boxrecordingdevicefromthebusandotherevidence,afemalepassengersurnamedLiu,48,missedherstopandaskedthedriversurnamedRan,43,tostopimmediately.議論文或說(shuō)明文概括的方法Justenjoyit.連寫(xiě)不要連成兩個(gè)字母都分不清了記敘文概括的方法---串聯(lián)要素法LastSundayIwentfishing.一、書(shū)面表達(dá)常見(jiàn)的失分點(diǎn)3.邏輯不順不少考生在寫(xiě)作時(shí)，雖然文章達(dá)到規(guī)定的字?jǐn)?shù)，卻毫無(wú)邏輯可言。這使得短文前后不連貫，層次不清晰，邏輯性不強(qiáng)，沒(méi)有語(yǔ)篇意識(shí)。誤：Someridersofe-bikesandbicyclesagainstrulessothataccidentsistakenplaceeasily.正：Someridersofe-bikesandbicyclesgoagainstrulessothataccidentstakeplaceeasily.Thearticletellsusthatafi734.表達(dá)不地道，英語(yǔ)思維缺乏很多考生寫(xiě)作時(shí)，因?yàn)橐资軡h語(yǔ)習(xí)慣的影響和英語(yǔ)思維的缺乏，所寫(xiě)的句子不符合英語(yǔ)表達(dá)習(xí)慣的中式英語(yǔ)。這樣的句子讀起來(lái)令人費(fèi)解，看起來(lái)也會(huì)顯得不倫不類(lèi)。誤：Myheightis180centimetersandmybodyishealthy.誤：Welcomeyoucometoourschooltovisit.誤：Becausethetrafficiscrowded,soweshouldwalktoschool.正：I’m180centimeterstallandI’mhealthy.正：You’rewelcometovisitourschool.正：

Becausethetrafficiscrowded,weshouldwalktoschool.4.表達(dá)不地道，英語(yǔ)思維缺乏很多考生寫(xiě)作時(shí)，因?yàn)橐资軡h語(yǔ)習(xí)慣745.句式結(jié)構(gòu)單一有的考生的書(shū)面表達(dá)從頭到尾幾乎全是簡(jiǎn)單句，不會(huì)靈活交叉使用長(zhǎng)句和短句、簡(jiǎn)單句和復(fù)雜句，句式單一，讀起來(lái)乏味。

Welcometoourschool.Thisschoolisverysmall.Ithasnearly30teachersandabout500students.Itusedtobeverypoor.Ithaschangedalotsince1980.Nowitistakingonanewlook.Theschoolherewasverysmall.Nowithasbeenrebuilt.Thenewlybuiltteachingbuildinghas6storeys.Itisthemostbeautifulbuildingintheschool.Alltheschool-agechildrencanstudyhere.Theyenjoyfreeeducationinit.5.句式結(jié)構(gòu)單一有的考生的書(shū)面表達(dá)從頭到尾幾乎全是簡(jiǎn)單句，756.低級(jí)錯(cuò)誤頻現(xiàn)Therewerehundredofstudentscouldn’tgotoschoolbecausetheywerepoor.Inadditionto,wemustreadtherulesandregulations.

Herememberedhiswallethadlostinthebus.Theyareclassrooms，library,

andteachingbuilding.Thereasonisbecausehedoesn’tknowwhattodonext.一些考生由于英語(yǔ)基本功薄弱和語(yǔ)法知識(shí)掌握不牢，在寫(xiě)作時(shí)會(huì)出現(xiàn)各種各樣的錯(cuò)誤。常見(jiàn)錯(cuò)誤有時(shí)態(tài)，語(yǔ)態(tài)，主謂一致，短語(yǔ)搭配，單詞拼寫(xiě)，標(biāo)點(diǎn)符號(hào)等等。6.低級(jí)錯(cuò)誤頻現(xiàn)Therewerehundredof76Worse!7.卷面差強(qiáng)人意有的考生卷面不整潔，亂涂亂畫(huà)，而且字跡潦草，第一眼就給閱卷老師留下了不好的印象。

Worse!7.卷面差強(qiáng)人意有的考生卷面不整潔，亂涂亂畫(huà)，77二、針對(duì)失分點(diǎn)的改進(jìn)策略高考書(shū)面表達(dá)指導(dǎo)共優(yōu)質(zhì)公開(kāi)課課件78NMET書(shū)面表達(dá)評(píng)分原則第五檔：20~25分第四檔：15~20分第三檔：10~15分第二檔：5~10分第一檔：0~5分NMET書(shū)面表達(dá)評(píng)分原則第五檔：20~25分791.審題清2.概括絕3.結(jié)構(gòu)整4.表達(dá)準(zhǔn)5.句式活6.邏輯順7.卷面潔英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作應(yīng)注意七大點(diǎn)二、針對(duì)失分點(diǎn)的改進(jìn)策略1.審題清英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作應(yīng)注意七大點(diǎn)二、針對(duì)失分點(diǎn)的改進(jìn)策略801.審題清審題是書(shū)面表達(dá)的第一步，也是關(guān)鍵一步。對(duì)讀寫(xiě)作文來(lái)說(shuō)，審題尤為重要。考生在真正開(kāi)始寫(xiě)作之前，必須舍得花相當(dāng)一部分時(shí)間做寫(xiě)前準(zhǔn)備工作。只有審準(zhǔn)了題目，弄清了題目的要求，才能寫(xiě)出好的文章。具體說(shuō)來(lái)，審題包括四個(gè)方面：審體裁，審內(nèi)容，審人稱(chēng)，審時(shí)態(tài)。1.審題清審題是書(shū)面表達(dá)的第一步，也是關(guān)鍵一步。對(duì)讀寫(xiě)作文來(lái)812.概括絕在讀寫(xiě)作文中，30個(gè)字的概括既要求考生讀懂短文，又要求考生在讀懂的基礎(chǔ)上概括整理短文的要點(diǎn)。概括內(nèi)容：（1）精，準(zhǔn)，全

（2）杜絕抄原文

（3）控制好字?jǐn)?shù)2.概括絕82第一步：先通讀全文，找出幾個(gè)要素

who→誰(shuí)

what→何事

when→何時(shí)

where→何地

why→原因記敘文概括的方法---串聯(lián)要素法第二步：用自己的話(huà)串聯(lián)起來(lái)

第一步：先通讀全文，找出幾個(gè)要素記敘文概括的方法---串聯(lián)要83

LastSundayIwentfishing.Buttwohourslater,Ididn’tcatchanyfish.Igotveryangryandbegantopackupmystuff,preparingtogobackhome.Justthen,Isawanoldmansittingnearme.Tomysurprise,hisbasketwasfulloffish,soIwentovertohim,wantingtoknowwhy.“Excuseme,buthowlonghaveyousathere?”Iasked.“Aboutfourhours,”heanswered.“Fourhours?”Icouldn’tbelievemyears.“Yes.It’sveryimportanttobepatient,”theoldmansaid.“Don’tconsiderfishingatiringsport.Justenjoyit.”Suddenly,Iunderstoodwhathesaid.Imustlearntobepatient.ThenIsatthereandwaitedforfishpatiently.Atlast,Icaughtit.Inthefollowingsixhours,Icaughtover10fish.Igraduallyrealizedthatthesecretofsuccesswaspatience.

請(qǐng)用30個(gè)字概括短文

84第一步：請(qǐng)找出這篇短文的幾個(gè)要素：

who→誰(shuí)①_______________②________________

what→何事①____________________________②__________________________when→何時(shí)

where→何地

why→原因①_____________________________________

②______________________________________

asaresult→結(jié)果_______________