訓(xùn)練13讀后續(xù)寫示例與寫作訓(xùn)練082022年新高考英語讀后續(xù)寫概要寫作能力提升訓(xùn)練

讀后續(xù)寫示例與寫作訓(xùn)練8【寫作示例】【原文呈現(xiàn)】閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。Atruckdriverwasenjoyinghismealatalocalrestaurantwhenanoldladycamein.Tohissurprise,theownerandalltheservershurried

behindthecountertomeether.“Mrs.Cosby!”Theyshouted,“Howpleasedtoseeyou!”Theoldladysmiledandgreetedthemall.Bob,theownersaid,“Sitdownandmakeyourselfcomfortable,Mrs.Cosby!Whatwouldyouliketoeat?”WhenBobpassedhistable,thetruckdrivercouldnotresisttoaskwhatissospecialabouttheoldlady.“I’llexplainifyouareinterested,”Bobsmiled.“Everyschoolseemstohaveaclassthateveryonethinkswillnevergraduate.Troublemakers,that’swhatwewere.Noneofourteachersstayedforlong.Onemorning,thedoortotheclassroomopenedandanewteacherwalkedin.Wesuregaveherahardtime.Butsheneverlosthertemper,nomatterwhatwedid.“Onedayafteramonth,Mrs.Cosbyopenedherbriefcaseandtookoutabunchofpapers,somethingtotally

dus.Sheaskedeachoneofustocometothefrontoftheclass,onebyone,andgaveuseachapaper.Oneachpapershehadwrittenwhatthestudentinquestionhadbeengoodatduringthelastmonth.“Noonehadeverbelievedinus.Nooneeverlikedus.Wewereconstantlytoldhowgood-for-nothingwewere.Graduallywehadstartedtobelieveitourselves.Theteacherattitudewehadmetwithbeforedidn’tencourageustoholdbeliefinourselves.“Suddenly,therecamesomeonewhocouldfindsomethingpositivetosayabouteachande

oneofus.Onceshehaddeliveredthepapers,shecontinuedwithherteachingandforthefirsttimeweforgottomakeherlifemiserable.Mrs.Cosbydidthise

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thenon.Eachmonthwegotapaperthatemphasizedourstrengths,whatwehadbeengoodat.Webegintoactasifthatwastrue.Westarttolearnmoretobeevenbetter,toprovethemright.Withherpositiveteacherattitude,shetransformedourclass.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.應(yīng)使用5個以上短文標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞。Paragraph1:“Andthencamethedayofourgraduation._______________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Bobwenttogetthebillandwhenhereturnedhesawthetruckdrivertalkingon

cellphone._______________________________________________________________________________【思維路徑】[核心內(nèi)容]文本主要內(nèi)容為：一個卡車司機在飯店吃飯，看到一位老太太受到飯店老板的熱情招待。出于好奇，他詢問老板Bob其中緣由。原來Mrs.Cosby曾經(jīng)是Bob的老師。她用贊美和肯定的教學(xué)態(tài)度以及每月一張的優(yōu)點記錄單一點點改變了那些像Bob一樣長期被否定的差生，使他們重拾信心、認(rèn)真學(xué)習(xí)。[寫作思路]（1）明確故事人物關(guān)系（characters）。卡車司機、飯店老板Bob、服務(wù)員們、Mrs.Cosby。（2）理清故事主要事件(events)?？ㄜ囁緳C吃飯；Mrs.Cosby受到熱情招待；好奇詢問；Mrs.Cosby和學(xué)生們的故事。（3）根據(jù)已知人物、事件及續(xù)寫段落首句預(yù)測故事發(fā)展（development）。故事總體的發(fā)展應(yīng)該是在畢業(yè)那天，Mrs.Cosby贈送了學(xué)生畢業(yè)禮物并一如既往地鼓勵他們，卡車司機聽完Mrs.Cosby的故事后，應(yīng)該受到感動和啟發(fā)，可能會給妻子打電話并學(xué)著像Mrs.Cosby一樣贊美妻子。續(xù)寫第一段：畢業(yè)典禮上，Mrs.Cosby把每月一張的優(yōu)點記錄單集結(jié)成冊，送給每一位學(xué)生，同時鼓勵他們相信自己，去實現(xiàn)自己的理想。續(xù)寫第二段：卡車司機聽完故事給妻子打了電話，聽到妻子給他做面條時，試著去贊美妻子的廚藝，令妻子非常開心等。（4）結(jié)合下劃線詞羅列寫作要點（points）結(jié)合下劃線詞和文本內(nèi)容，盡可能展開豐富的想象，羅列出盡可能多的故事發(fā)展情節(jié)。例如：第一段可以通過問以下問題來獲取寫作要點:“WhatdidMrs.Cosbydothatday?Didshepresentanygift?Whatwouldshesaytotheclass?Whatchangesdidshemakeonthestudents?”第二段可以通過下列問題來組織內(nèi)容：“HowdidthedriverfeelafterhearingthestoryofMrs.Cosby?WasheinfluencedbyMrs.Cosby’sstory?Whomdidhetalktoonthephone?Whatmighthesay?等”[參考范文]“Thencamethedayofourgraduation.Mrs.Cosbyhuggede

oneofus,andtolduswithtearshowproudshewasofus.Thenshehandedeachoneofusabook.Alltheencouragingpapersthroughtheyearswerethere,inhardcover.Shewantedustokeepthatbook.Wheneverwefeltunworthy,openitandreadhowgoodwewere.Shewasconvincedthatwecouldbeanythingwewantedtobeaslongaswebelievedinourselves.Sowedid.Sheturnedabunchoftroublemakersintopeoplewhocouldachieve

things.Wewentontofulfillourdreamsandmakeourlifebetter.MinewastoownarestaurantandhereIam.Nowyou

whythatoldladydeservesalltherespectwecangiveher.”Thetruckdrivernodded.Thenheaskedforhisbill.Bobwenttogetthebillandwhenhereturnedhesawthetruckdrivertalkingon

cellphone.“Honey?Itisme.IthoughtIwoulddrivehometonight.Youmightmakethatspecialnoodlesforme?Yes,I’dreallyliketohavesome.Youshouldsellthosenoodles,theyaresogood,betterthananyoneelse’s!What?WhydoIsayso?WellbecauseIwanttoshowmyattitude.JustwantedtoletyouknowyouarethebestcookIhaveevermet!That’syourstrength!Youwill?Great,seeyouintheevening!Loveyoutoo!”[范文解析]范文圍繞文章的內(nèi)容進行了合情合理的拓展。Mrs.Cosby一直以贊美和肯定的態(tài)度挖掘?qū)W生的優(yōu)點。因此，第一段畢業(yè)典禮時，她送給每位學(xué)生精心裝訂的每月優(yōu)點清單合集。一個月一個月逐漸積累下來的冊子凝聚了Mrs.Cosby對學(xué)生的信任和肯定。Mrs.Cosby最后一次激勵學(xué)生相信自己、追求夢想。第二段，卡車司機聽完這樣一個令人動容和深思的故事，又看到了飯店老板和服務(wù)員們積極樂觀的現(xiàn)狀，深受觸動。在給妻子打例行電話時，不由自主地改變態(tài)度學(xué)著去稱贊和肯定妻子，令妻子意外和驚喜。這樣的思路非常符合故事發(fā)展的邏輯。最后一段司機的做法首尾呼應(yīng)，突出贊美的巨大影響力，突出故事的主題。[提煉歸納]1.合理拓展情節(jié)讀后續(xù)寫離不開對文本的把握和合理的推測。在正確理解的基礎(chǔ)上才能對故事的發(fā)展做出合情合理又合乎邏輯的預(yù)測。為了使故事發(fā)展更具明確性，可以通過設(shè)問等方式將故事的后續(xù)發(fā)展凸顯出來，以便于續(xù)寫時信息的整理以及恰當(dāng)?shù)恼Z言組織。在本練習(xí)中，我們通過一系列的問題來拓展并整理自己的寫作思路。第一段的設(shè)問以Mrs.Cosby為主體，正面描寫Mrs.Cosby對學(xué)生的付出；第二段的設(shè)問以卡車司機為表達的主體，側(cè)面描寫Mrs.Cosby的贊美和肯定的態(tài)度對他人帶來的巨大影響。2.首尾呼應(yīng)，升華主題這是贊美產(chǎn)生的奇跡。這個奇跡沒有通過直接的描述，而是通過這種態(tài)度的受益者——飯店老板Bob之口進行敘述，卡車司機作為故事的聆聽者，和讀者一起感受Mrs.Cosby帶給學(xué)生的巨大變化，體會著贊美對人的巨大影響。作為一個完整的故事，在寫作上做到首尾呼應(yīng)常常必不可少。根據(jù)故事情節(jié)，首尾呼應(yīng)不僅使故事情節(jié)具有嚴(yán)密性，還突出了故事的中心，升華了主題?！緦懽餮菥殹?.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。TheMake-upGuyDavewasamake-up(化妝)artistwhoregularlyheldmakeupartistryclassesatthelocalcommunitycollege.Hewaswellknownasanexcellenttrainerandenjoyedgreatpopularity.Usually,themajorityofhisstudentsweremiddle-agedhousewives,whowantedtofine-tunetheirmake-upskillssoastomakethemselvesmoreattractive.Butthistime,itwasbeyondhimthathisclasswasattendedbyamanaswell.Thenewstudentwasagentlemaninhisbestyearswithaseeminglyboundlessinterestinmake-upartistry.Hewaskeentolearnasmuchashepossiblycouldandaskedquestionswheneverandwhereverpossible.Hewassoabsorbedinlearningthathewouldn?tstopuntilhewassatisfiedwiththeresultofhiswork.Understandably,themanwasthenumberonesubjectofconversationwhentheotherwomenwerealone.Speculations(猜測)quicklystartedtospread.Whydidhelearnmake-up?Washetoseekforawomantobehislifepartner?Howaboutmyneighbor’syoungestdaughter?Whyonearthwouldheattendsuchawomanclass?Whocoulditbe?Doubtslikethiscamecrowdingin.Thecommunitycollegewasplacedinaremoteruralarea,whichwaswhytheotherparticipantswerequitedoubtfuloftheman?sintentions.Throughoutthelessons,ignoringthecuriouswomenaroundhim,themancarefullylistenedandwroteeverythingdownhelearned,leavingthewomenmoreandmorecuriousandpuzzled.Whenthedayandclasswereslowlycomingtoanend,thegossipingwomensimplycouldnothidetheircuriosityanylonger,fortheyknewitwastimetoremovetheirdoubts,otherwise?Finally,oneofthemcouldn?tresisthercuriosity,soshepickedupthecourageandaskedhimwhyhewassointerestedinmake-upartistry.Whatfollowedwasadeadsilence.Afterwhatseemedacentury,heslowlyopenedhismouthandherecamethemostinspiringbeautifulreply.Paragraph1:Hesaidhisbelovedwifepartiallylosthereyesightbecauseofdiabetes(糖尿病)andshewasnolongerabletoapplyhermake-up.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Sohedecidedtotakethecoursetosurprisehiswife.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Iwokeat5:30A.M.afterarestlessnight’ssleep.Islowlyunzippedthetentdoortoinspectthenewday.Justlikeyesterday,thewindhaddropped.ItwasanotherbeautifulArcticday.Icrawledoutofmysleepingbagunwillingly.Iamnormallyamorningpersonbuttheintensecoldoutsidemadethatmorningmostunappealing.Anyhow,itwastimetogreetCharlieandstarttheday.MydogCharliewasupanditwasbouncingupanddownattheendofhischainlookingwellrested.Ipouredwhatlookedlikeapoundofdogfoodintohisbowl.Steppingoutofthetent,Ilookedaroundforbearsortracksandsawnone.Itwouldneverbeagoodthingtomeetapolarbear.AnInuit(因紐特人)oncetoldmethatIshouldwatchoutforpolarbears.HesaidthatifImetapolarbear,Ishouldkeepthefollowingrulesinmind.First,keepeyecontact,movesidewaysorslightlyforward,neverbackward,staycalm.Donotshowfearandstandbesidealargeobjecttomakemyselfappearaslargeaspossible.Weaponslikeflaregun(信號槍)arenecessary,butdonotshootunlessforcedto.Don’twoundabear,oryou'llmakeitevenmoredangerous,andneverrun.Itwasonlysixo’clock,soIdecidedtohavealeisurelybreakfastofabowlofmilkpowder,coconutflakes,andbuttermixedwithwarmwater.Isatonmysled（雪橇）toenjoymyfirstbreakfastoftheexpeditiononlytofindthatafterthethirdspoonfulitwasfrozen.Somuchforleisurelybreakfasts!Iaddedmorewarmwaterandatetherestasfastaspossible.SuddenlyIheardadeep,longgrowlcomingfromCharlie’sthroat.InaflashIlookedathimandtheninthedirectioninwhichhewasstaring.Itwasafemalepolarbearfollowedbytwocubs（幼崽）slowly,purposefully,towardme.Theyweretwohundredyardsaway.Paragraph1:Withmyheartquickening,IgrabbedmyloadedflaregunandcarefullywalkedsidewaysafewstepstoCharlie.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thewholeeventlastedfifteenminutesbutseemedyearslong.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.閱讀下面材料,根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段,使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右。Azookeeperhadbeenworkingatazoofor15yearsandneverexperiencedanyproblems.Healwaysworkedtheeveningshifts(夜班)becausehewastrustedtoproperlylockupthezoo.OnawarmsummernightinlateJune,thezookeeperturnedoffthelightsandwishedallofhisanimalsagoodnight.Heleftthezooandwalkedtohiscarintheparkinglot.Ashereachedinhispocket,herealizedthathiskeyshadbeenleftintheoffice.Hequicklywalkedbacktothezoo.Whenhearrivedatthedoor,tohissurprise,itwasunlocked.Infearoftriggering(觸發(fā))thealarmthathehadjustset,hedidnotturnonthelights.Heturnedontheflashlightonhisphoneandbegantomakehiswaytotheoffice.Whenhewalkedbythepanther's(豹)cages,hesawtheyoungcubsplayingtogether.Helikedthezoobetteratthishourbecauseatnightwaswhentheanimalscometolife.Atlast,hemadeitbacktotheoffice.Unfortunatelythistimetheofficedoorwaslockedandheknewthatifheweretobreakthewindow,hewouldsetoffthealarm.Knowingtherewasnowayinside,hedecideditwouldbebesttospendthenightinsidethezoo.Thezookeeperwalkedtowardsthebirdcagesbecauseheknewhecouldsleepcomfortablyonthebenchesnearthecages.Afewhourslater,thezookeeperheardadoorslam(砰的一聲)thatwokehimup.“Quiet!"avoicewhispered.“What?There'snoonehere,anothervoicesaid."Theoldmanlefthoursago”"Alright,let'sjustgrabtheanimalsandgetoutofhere.”Thezookeeperdidn'tknowwhattodo.Hebegantoweighhisoptions:hecouldtriggerthealarmbutthatwouldraisequestionsastowhyhewasinside,orhecouldfacethethievesbutthatcouldpotentiallyputhimindanger.Thenheturnedthecornerbutmadesurenottobeseensothathecouldseewhohadenteredthezoo.Para.1:Thezookeeperwasnotfrightenedbythetwomenwhowantedtostealtheanimals.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Para.2:Thenthezookeeperfoundthetwostrings.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________4.閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。續(xù)寫的詞數(shù)為150左右。Arthurwasmessy.Hedidn’ttrytomakemesses,buthedidn’ttrytocleanupmuch,either.Therewerealwayssmallpiecesoffoodonthetablewhenhewasdoneeating.Hissocksnevermadeitintothehamper(洗衣籃).AndheonlypickeduphistoyswhenMomthreatenedtothrowthemaway.Mostdays,MomfollowedArthuraroundthehouseandcleanedupafterhim.Shebrushedthecrumbs(碎屑)intoherhandandthrewthemawayaftermeals.Shepickeduphissocksandmadesuretheygotwashed,driedandfoldedneatlybeforegoingbackinthedrawer.Sheoftenpickeduphistoyswhenheleftthemtodosomethingelse.Oneday,MomaskedArthurtopickuphistoytrains.“Notrightnow,”Arthursaid.Hewasreadingacomicbook.Thetrainshadbeenonthelivingroomfloorsincethemorning.“Youknowwhat,Arthur?I’mnotgoingtoaskyouagain.I’mdonecleaningtoday.”Andwiththat.Momputherfeetuponthesofaandpickedupabooktoread.Atdinnertime,Arthurnoticedthattherewasabigpileofcrumbsathisplaceatthetable.Mom’sspotwasniceandclean.Arthurdidn’tlikethecrumbsverymuch.Afterdinner,Arthur’sfeetfeltcold.Hewenttohisroomandopenedhisdrawer,butthedrawerwasempty.“Mom,wherearemysocks?”Arthurcalled.“Thereweren’tanysocksinyourhamper,soIdidn’twashthem,”Momsaid.Arthurfeltunhappy.Nowhisfeetwouldbecold,unlesshewantedtoweardirtysocksfromthefloor.Hedecidedtostaybarefoot.Whenitwastimeforbed,ArthursaidgoodnighttoMomandturnedtogoupstairs.Arthursteppedrightonhistoytraininhisbarefeet.“Ouch!”criedArthur.“Thatreallyhurt!”Paragraph1:However,Momwasstillreadingandsaidnothing.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:“Mom?”saidArthur.“TomorrowcanyoushowmehowtodothewashingsoIcanwashmysocks?”______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________5.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事。In1989,freshoutofhighschool,Ihadthedifficulttaskofchoosingacareerpathbeforecollegestartedinthreemonths.InthosedaysinPakistan,therewerelimitedchoices:becomingadoctororanengineer,orenteringthefinancialworldaftergettingabusinessdegree.Iwasn’tinterestedinengineering,sothatIwasleftwithmedicineorbusiness.Icouldn’tdecide.MyunclesuggestedthatIdoaworkplacement(實習(xí))toexperienceitforamonthinaninternationalcompanyfollowedbyamonthinahospital.Afterthat,Icouldmakeadecision.Itseemedlikeagoodidea.Iwasacceptedforamonth’splacementataforeignbankinKarachi.Igotafeelforhowtheworldoffinancefunctioned,madenewfriends,andgenerallyenjoyedthemostlyeasy-goingworksurroundings.Themonthpassedrapidly,andsoonIbeganworkingataleadinghospitalinKarachi.Theexperiencecouldn’thavebeenmoredifferent.Thehospitalhadastressfulenvironment.Thedaysstartedearly(at7am,comparedto9amatthebank),andwerefilledwithendlessduties.Andthenightcalls!Thiswascrazy,workingallday,throughthenight,andagainthenextday.Ibeganthinkingaboutmytwoexperiences.Thebankhadofferedamorerelaxingatmosphere,betterworkinghoursandlessstress.Thehospitalwasfullofexcitement,butthestudyingandtrainingwasdifficult.Itseemedthatthebusinesschoicewasgoingtowinout.Neartheendofmymonthatthehospital,Iwasdrivinghomeafteranespeciallybusynightcall.Infrontofmewasapublicbus,withcollegestudentssittingonthetop.Asthedriverweavedthrough(穿梭)traffic,Icouldseetheboysshakingfromsidetoside.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.應(yīng)使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語；Paragraph1:Suddenly,aboyfelloffthebackofthebus.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:Thenextday,whenIwenttothehospitaltoseetheboy,allhisfamilygotup,withgratefulsmilesontheirfaces.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________答案與解析1.【參考范文】Hesaidhisbelovedwifepartiallylosthereyesightbecauseofdiabetesandshewasnolongerabletoapplyhermake-up.Fearingbeinglaughedat,shelockedherselfinherroom,abandoningherselftogreatgrief.Shewasabsolutelybeautifulevenwithoutmake-up.Butwhatupsetherwasthatshesimplyfeltnotcomfortableleavingthehomewithoutmake-up.Sensingherlonelinessinacolorless-world,Iwasalsoatalossastowhattodo.Onceinformedofthisclass,Ideterminedtolearnmake-upwithouthesitation,hopingtomakeadifference.Sohedecidedtotakethecoursetosurpriseher.Withoutapause,hesharedhisstory.Hemasteredawiderangeofpracticalskills,allowinghimtohelphertakeonanewlook.Surely,beingenvelopedbyanatmosphereoflove,hisbelovedwifeatpresentwasdeeplyaffected.“Inotonlywanttolearnhowtoapplyhermake-up,Iwanthertowearthemostbeautifulmake-upsoherinnerbeautyalsoshinesontheoutside.”heannounced,“Itishersmilethattouchesmostmyheart,notthemake-up.”【解析】本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。要求考生根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。通過閱讀所給文章可知，正?；瘖y課的授課對象都是女性，但一天一位男士來上化妝課，而且聽課十分認(rèn)真，這引起在座其他同學(xué)（主要是家庭主婦們）的好奇和各種猜疑。在課程結(jié)束時，終于有人問出了他們的疑惑——他為什么來上化妝課？續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：他的愛妻因為糖尿病，視力受損，不能在自己涂化妝品，所以應(yīng)該寫他妻子的一些情況，不能化妝對他妻子的一些影響，以及他對于愛妻痛苦的回應(yīng)。第二段開頭是：所以他決定來上這個課，給妻子一個驚喜。本段應(yīng)該寫他利用所學(xué)內(nèi)容如何幫助了妻子，以及妻子的一些轉(zhuǎn)變。最后不忘初心，總結(jié)一下自己上化妝課的原因和目的。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右?！痉段狞c評】本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：abandononeselfto，ataloss，withouthesitation等高級詞匯；主語從句和表語從句whatupsetherwasthatshesimplyfeltnotcomfortableleavingthehomewithoutmake-up.非謂語動詞Fearingbeinglaughedat,和allowinghimtohelphertakeonanewlook強調(diào)句Itishersmilethattouchesmostmyheart,notthemake-up.2.【參考范文】Withmyheartquickening,IgrabbedmyloadedflaregunandcarefullywalkedsidewaysafewstepstoCharlie.Withouttakingmyeyesoffthebear,Iledhimtothesledandfastenedhischaintoarope.Thebearwasgettingcloser.RememberingalltheInuithadtoldme,Ifiredawarningshottothebear’sleft.Butonshecame.Then,Ifiredaflarerightinfrontofher.Shestoppedandlookedatme.ThenshefixedhereyesonCharlie,whowasbarkingwildly.Shelookedbackathercubsandwaitedforthemtocatchup,thenfinallymovedawaytowardmyright.Thewholeeventlastedfifteenminutesbutseemedyearslong.MyhandswereshakingasIstoodstill,watchingthethreeslowlymovenorth.Butdespitethefear,Icouldfeeldeepdowninsidearealsatisfaction.InowknewthatIcouldstanduptoabearinthewildandstaycalmenoughtofunctionandstillrememberthewordsfromtheInuit.WithCharlie’shelpIhadpassedmyfirsttest.【解析】本篇書面表達是讀后續(xù)寫。通過閱讀所給文章可知，作者早上從北極的帳篷中醒來，給他的狗Charlie喂了食，走出帳篷沒看到任何熊的蹤跡，想起因紐特人說的遇到熊的做法，因為時間還早所以決定悠閑地吃一頓早飯，突然看到一只母熊帶著兩只幼崽向自己走來。續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，第一段開頭是：心跳加快，我抓住信號槍，小心地向一邊的Charlie走了幾步……所以應(yīng)該寫作者看到熊后的反應(yīng)，即走向Charlie把它拴在繩子上，抓住信號槍向熊開槍警告，熊聽到槍聲后的反應(yīng)及Charlie看大熊后的反應(yīng)內(nèi)容等。第二段開頭是：整個事件持續(xù)了十五分鐘，但似乎是持續(xù)了幾年……本段應(yīng)該熊離開后作者的反應(yīng)，比如是否會感到害怕，以及從這次與熊的相遇中的收獲等內(nèi)容。續(xù)寫時要求使用5個以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語增加了寫作難度，我們要熟悉所給劃線詞語，恰當(dāng)?shù)臅r候加以運用。最后還要注意所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語。按要求完成寫作任務(wù)?！痉段狞c評】本文描寫詳略得當(dāng)，使用了高級詞匯和高級句子。如：takeoff，infrontof，moveaway等高級詞匯；thatIcouldstanduptoabearinthewildandstaycalmenoughtofunctionandstillrememberthewordsfromtheInuit引導(dǎo)的賓語從句，asIstoodstill引導(dǎo)的伴隨狀語從句，Withmyheartquickening...with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)等高級句式。3.【參考范文】Thezookeeperwasnotfrightenedbythetwomenwhowantedtostealtheanimals.Hesquattedonthegroundatthecornerandstaredatthetwomentoseewhoonearthhadenteredthezoo.Whathesawwastwothinandshortmenwithasackunderthearm.Heknewtheyjustwantedtosteallittleanimals.Sohemadeuphismindtofrightenthembyimitatingthevoiceoftigers.Thereafterthevoiceoftigersroaredloudlyoneafteranother.Thetwomenwassofrightenedthattheybegantorunaway.Butitwassodarkthattheycouldn’tseeclearly,theyfellheavilyonthegroundandcouldn’tmoveanylonger.Thenthezookeeperfoundthetwostrings.Hetiedthemtothetreesandwaitedforthedaytimecomingtotransferthemtothepolice.It’snotthecouragebutthewisdomthathelpsthezookeepercatchthethieves.【解析】這是一篇讀后續(xù)寫。一個動物園飼養(yǎng)員總是被安排值夜班，因為他被信任能夠恰當(dāng)?shù)劓i好動物園的門。一天晚上，他發(fā)現(xiàn)鑰匙忘記放在辦公室里了，返回地時候發(fā)現(xiàn)動物園的門沒有關(guān)，可到了辦公室門口發(fā)現(xiàn)辦公室的門已經(jīng)關(guān)了，他知道如果他破窗而入會引發(fā)報警器，于是決定在動物園呆一晚上。幾個小時后飼養(yǎng)員聽見砰的一聲門響動的聲音驚醒了他。有人想抓動物出去。這個飼養(yǎng)員不知道該怎么辦，他開始權(quán)衡他的選擇：他可以觸發(fā)報警器但那樣會出現(xiàn)為什么他會在里面，或者他會面對小偷，那會對他產(chǎn)生潛在的危險，于是他轉(zhuǎn)過墻角但確保自己不被看見這樣以便可以看清是誰進入了動物園。審題得知根據(jù)所讀內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。注意，續(xù)寫詞數(shù)要求為150詞左右。這里可以根據(jù)末尾一段的描述來進行續(xù)寫——智抓小偷的故事。第一段：描述飼養(yǎng)員在動物園角落里看見的是誰進來偷盜動物，以便為接下來的講述做鋪墊。第二段在模仿動物叫聲的基礎(chǔ)上，出現(xiàn)在他們面前，讓他們驚恐無比，使得他們嚇癱在地，束手就擒。續(xù)寫部分最后強調(diào)要智斗，不要直取，這樣就會避免自身的危險和潛在的威脅?！痉段狞c評】本續(xù)寫詳略得當(dāng)，重點突出。智斗竊賊描寫生動活潑。全文使用了高級詞匯和句型：比如被動語態(tài)befrightenedby被驚嚇；not…but…不是……而是；介詞賓語短語結(jié)構(gòu)withimitatingthevoiceof模仿……的聲音；高級詞匯staredat盯著；onearth究竟；roaredloudlyoneafteranother虎嘯聲此起彼伏；tiethemtothetrees捆在樹上；transferthemto移交給……；fightagainst和……斗爭。強調(diào)句型It’snotthecouragebutthewisdomthatcanhelpsthezookeepercatchthethieves.who引導(dǎo)的定語從句Thezookeeperwasnotfrightenedbythetwomenwhowantedtostealtheanimals.彰顯作者的高水平的寫作能力。4.【參考范文】Paragraph1However,Momwasstillreadingandsaidnothing.Arthurwasn’tsureifshehadheardhimornotsohecalledforhelpagain,butstillMomdidn’tcome.ThenArthurrealizedmaybeitwashethatcouldsolvehisproblematthatverymoment.Hequietlypickedupthetoytrainandputitinthebox.Itonlytookaminuteforhimtoputthetoyaway,andnowhewouldn’thavetoworryabouthurtinghisfeetagain.Paragraph2“Mom?”saidArthur.“TomorrowcanyoushowmehowtodothelaundrysoIcanwashmysocks?”“Ofcourse,”saidMom.“It’s