讀后續(xù)寫：難忘的感恩節(jié)講義-高考英語作文備考

試題呈現(xiàn)：閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事。TheexcitementaboutThanksgivingwasreallybuilding.Grandmaarrivedwithahomemadepecanpie.Dadwassearchingforhiselectriccarvingknife.Mamawasinthekitchenhummingasong.LittlebabyLonniebouncedupanddown.Dadsmelledtheairandsighed.Mybigbrother,Slim,whowasanythingbutslim,sneakedofftohisroomwithasliceofthepecanpie.EvenourdogFidowaswagginghistail.Havingsetaprettytable,Mamalookedup,smiling."Helpmecarryinthefood,“shesaid.Slim,whohadcomeoutofhisroombythistime,wentracingintothekitchen.nY\\getit!Tilgetit!"Therestofuspiledinbehindhim,everyonegrabbingadish.ThenwewatchedDadcarryinthebiggest,brownest,best-smellingturkeywehadeverseenwithMama'shandundertheplate,justincase.Togethertheyloweredtheturkeytoitsplaceatthetable.Itwasthetraditioninourfamilytothinkofsomethingforwhichweweremostthankful.Weallrantothetableyellingsomethinglike'Tmthankfulforschoolbeingout"orTmthankfulforpecanpie!”Alleyeswereonthatenormousturkeyaswetookourseats.Yes,everythingwasperfectexceptforonething.Onthatspecialday,itwasDadwhosatattheheadofthetableandcarvedtheturkey.Itwasanhonorthathehadeagerlyexpectedfordays.MamaalwayscalledDadaclumsyox.Hefrequentlytripped（絆倒）overhisowntwofeetzandhecoulddropjustaboutanything.WeautomaticallyeasedbackwhenDadtestedtheelectriccarvingknifeintheair.Dadwenttoworkonthewhitemeatfirstwithsurprisinglyfewproblems.Sliceafterslicelandedneatlyontheplatewiththickgravy（肉汁）.Dadleanedforwardandgrabbedtheendoftheleftturkeylegandcutitoff,placingitwholeontheplate.Hisoilyfingersshonebrightlyinthelightofthechandelier（大吊火?。?andMamawavedhernapkin."I'mallright,Mama/'hesaid.Tmallright."Paragraph1:ButwhenDadpulledbacktherightturkeyleg,itslippedfromhisoilyfingers.Paragraph2:AsLonnieyelled,wefoundaturkeylegwasmissing. 審題：兩個續(xù)寫段落的首句都出現(xiàn)了turkey一詞，以及前文最后幾個段落都著重描寫爸爸處理turkey的細節(jié)，據(jù)此我們可以斷定：續(xù)寫部分內容必須圍繞turkey來展開情節(jié)。第一段續(xù)寫的重點應該是slip的后續(xù)，包括turkeyleg的去向，它所造成的慌亂、尷尬和溫暖的場景。然后根據(jù)第二段首句可以得出，在第一段結束時Lonnie是喊叫了，我們需要合理地設置一個情節(jié)來解釋她喊叫的緣由。第二段我們發(fā)現(xiàn)一只turkeyleg不見了。這應該不是第一段的那只。本段需要解決我們如何找turkeyleg,最終turkeyleg又落在哪里這兩個故事環(huán)節(jié)。情節(jié)構思：.Given-New策略Paragraph1:ButwhenDadpulledbacktherightturkeyleg,itslippedfromhisoilyfingers.QI:Wheredidtheturkeyendandwhathappenedconsequently?Q2:Whatdideachofusreacttotheunexpectedincident?Q3:Whatmessdidmake?Q4:WhatmadeLonnieyell?Paragraph2:AsLonnieyelled,wefoundaturkeylegwasmissing.QI:Whereandhowdidwesearchforthemissingturkeyleg?Q2:Wheredidwefinallyfindtheturkeyleg,underthetable,inFido'sstomach?Q3:Followingtheincident,howdidwespendthespecialThanksgiving?.人物三角關系互動法確定段落里需要的三個元素（可以是人、事物或者事件），搭建一個三角形，然后編排兩兩之間可以產生的情節(jié)互動（單向或者雙向），選擇緊扣文本主線的情節(jié)，剝離無關緊要的。在此基礎上，加以適當?shù)木涫酱B、配上情感、心理活動，組成有血有肉的情節(jié)鏈。如續(xù)寫第一段我們可以選取dad,turkey,othermembers構建三角圖。第二段可以選取we,turkeyleg,Fid。來構建三角圖，快速構建情節(jié)。參考范文.Paragraph1:ButwhenDadpulledbacktherightturkeyleg,itslippedfromhisoilyfingers.Itpoppedbacktoitsoriginalposition,splatteringDad'ssweaterwithgravy.AsDadjumpedbackwardtoavoidthegravy,heaccidentallydroppedthecarvingknife.Itfelltothefloorwithabangandbeganchewingthetableleg.Dadbenttohavealookandlosthisbalance.Ashestartedtofall,hetossedtheturkeyintheair.Fortunately,heregainedhisfootingjustintimetograbthefallingturkey.Mamaquicklyunpluggedthecarvingknifeandplaceditonthetable."Tuckyleg!Tuckyleg!,zscreamedLonnie,bouncingandkickinginhisseat.Paragraph2:AsLonnieyelled,wefoundaturkeylegwasmissing.Welookedaroundtheroom,underthetableandateachother.WelookedatFido,whowasstandingatthegatelickinghislips.LittleLonniebegantocrysoftlyforhewastheonewhohadexpressedthathewasmostthankfulforturkeylegs.Justthenabrowndropofturkeygravylandedonthetable.Everyonelookedupward.There,balancedonthetopofthechandelier,wasthemissingturkeyleg."Clumsyox,"mutteredMamaunderherbreath.下水作文：ButwhenDadpulledbacktherightturkeyleg,itslippedfromhisoilyfingers.Asifbymagic,theturkeylandedperfectlyontheplatewiththickgravy,leavingthegravysplashedallover.AndsomeevenendeduponDad'ssweater.Instinctively,hebentdowntohavealook,butattheverymoment,thecarvingkcifeslippedoutofhishandandmadeitswayintotheair.Obviouslyfrightenedbytheflyingweapon,allofussteppedbacktoavoidbeinginjured.Almostsimultaneously,someoneaccidentallytouchedthetable,leavingthetableoffoodunsteadyandsenttheturkeyoffthetableandluckilydownback."Oh,myturkeyleg!"screamedLonnie.(106)AsLonnieyelled,wefoundaturkeylegwasmissing.Puzzled,welookedaround,butwithnoluck.Notwantingtoacceptthefact,welookedupandateachother,wonderingifanyoneofushadtakenadvantageofthemessysituationandenjoyedthechickenlegsecretly.LittleBonnieeventhrewherselfontothefloor,cryinghard,forshehasexpressedgratitudetoGodfortheturkeylegs.Justasweweretogowithonlyoneturkeyleg,whenourdogFidoappearedoutofnowhere,lickinghislips,satisfied.(83)"更多的結尾思路：Greetedwithsuchascene,weallburstintolaughter,sayin