讀后續(xù)寫第一課課件2023屆高考英語寫作專項

后續(xù)寫讀目錄如何構思續(xù)寫的內容讀后續(xù)寫的高分攻略21讀后續(xù)寫的具體要求

提供一段350詞以內的語言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內容、所給段落開頭語和所標示關鍵詞進行續(xù)寫（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結構完整的短文。讀后續(xù)寫的具體要求

提供一段350詞以內的語言材料，要求考生依據(jù)該材料內容、所給段落開頭語和所標示關鍵詞進行續(xù)寫（150詞左右），將其發(fā)展成一篇與給定材料有邏輯銜接、情節(jié)和結構完整的短文。--《考試說明》讀后續(xù)寫的高考評分標準一.評分原則：1.本題總分為25分，按5個檔次給分。2.評分時，先根據(jù)所續(xù)寫短文的內容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量、確定或調整檔次，最后給分。3.評分時，應主要從以下四個方面考慮：（1）與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；（2）內容的豐富性和對所標出關鍵詞語的應用情況；（3）應用語法結構和詞匯的豐富性和準確性；（4）上下文的連貫性；4.拼寫與標點符號是語言準確性的一個重要方面，評分時，應視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮。5.如書寫較差，以至影響交際，可將分數(shù)降低一個檔次。6.詞數(shù)少于130的，從總分中減去2分。讀后續(xù)寫1一、新題型的高考真題到底長什么樣？閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構成一個完整的故事

(2018年6月浙江高考真題)Itwassummer,andmydadwantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.HedecidedtotakemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico.WereachedAlbuquerqueinthelateafternoon.UnclePaul,mydad'sfriend,pickedusupfromtheairportanddroveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacookedusadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.MydadandIspentthenightintheguestroomofthefarmhouselisteningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdowntherivernearby.Veryearlyinthemorning,UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.“Thedaystartsatdawnonmyfarm,”hesaid.Afterbreakfast,IwenttohelpAuntTinafeedthechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethesheepouttograze(吃草).IwasimpressedtoseemydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.Theylookedreallycool.

Intheafternoon,IaskedUnclePaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,andhesaidyes,aslongasmydadwentwithme.Iwasn'tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.So,mydadandIputonournewcowboyhats,gotonourhorses,andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.“Don'tbelateforsupper,”UnclePaulcried,“andkeeptothetracksothatyoudon'tgetlost!”“OK!”mydadcriedback.AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutofsight.Itwassopeacefulandquietandthecolorsofthebrownrocks,thedeepgreenpinetrees,andthelateafternoonsunmixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautifulwoven(編織的)blanketspreadoutuponthegroundjustforus.注意:1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.__________________________________________________________________________________________________________Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________讀后續(xù)寫步驟2feed

thechickensRivertakethesheepouttograzetrackUncle

Paul,farmhouseDon’tbelateforsupper!Mydad二、如何寫續(xù)寫（5步驟）（一）確定文章線索之一：腦中意象：AstorywhowhenwherewhywhatAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNewMexico,farm,farmhousetheywanttospendasummervocationinUnclePaul'sfarmhouse,ridinghorseslookedreallycoolexperiencethefarmlife,mydadandItookahorserideI,mydad,UnclePaul,AuntTina,RyanandKyleonesummer,intheafternoonHowsixelements(六要素)plane,drovehomecool,peacefulmagicsceneawovenblanket（一）確定要素5W+1H

Itwassummer,andmy

dad

wantedtotreatmetoavacationlikeneverbefore.

Hedecidedto

takemeonatriptotheWildWest.WetookaplanetoAlbuquerque,abigcityinthestateofNew

Mexico.

Wereached

Albuquerqueinthelateafternoon.

Uncle

Paul,

mydad's

friend,

picked

usupfromtheairportand

droveusuptohisfarminPecos.HiswifeTinacooked

usadeliciousdinnerandwegottoknowhissonsRyanandKyle.

Mydad

andIspentthenightintheguestroomofthe

farmhouse

listeningtothefrogsandwaterrollingdown

the

river

nearby.

Veryearlyinthemorning,

UnclePaulwokeusuptohavebreakfast.

“Theday

startsatdawnonmyfarm,”

hesaid.

Afterbreakfast,

IwenttohelpAuntTina

feed

thechickens,whilemydadwentwithUnclePaultotakethe

sheep

outto

graze(吃草).Iwasimpressedtosee

mydadandUnclePaulridinghorses.

Theylooked

reallycool.Intheafternoon,

IaskedUncle

PaulifIcouldtakeahorseride,

andhesaidyes,

aslongas

mydadwentwithme.

Iwasn‘tgoingtotakeahorseridebymyselfanyway.

So,

mydadandIput

onournewcowboyhats,

gotonourhorses,

andheadedslowlytowardsthemountains.

“Don’tbe

late

forsupper,”

UnclePaul

cried,

“andkeeptothe

track

sothatyoudon’t

getlost!”“OK!”

my

dad

criedback.

AfterawhileUnclePaulandhisfarmhousewereoutof

sight.

Itwassopeaceful

and

quietandthecolorsofthebrown

rocks,

thedeepgreenpine

trees,

andthelateafternoonsun

mixedtocreateamagicscene.Itlookedlikeabeautiful

woven(編織的)

blanketspreadoutupon

thegroundjustforus.Mydaddecidedto

takemeonatriptotheWildWest.Wewereenjoyingvariousfarmlives.

Werodethehorsetowardsthemountains段落大意（二）仔細審題，明確續(xù)寫要求：一般短文后面的“注意”都有對此短文續(xù)寫的具體要求，如字數(shù)限制、使用幾處下劃線關鍵詞語、續(xù)寫段落的首句提示。注意:1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應為150左右；2.至少使用5個短文中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請用下劃線標出你所使用的關鍵詞語。已給提示詞匯：dad，UnclePaul，farmhouse，river，feed，sheep，late，track，getlost，sightSuddenly?a?little?rabbitjumped?out?in?front?of?my?horse.________________We?had?no?idea?where?we?were?and?it?got?dark.第一段方法提示：兩段首句定一框好奇，追兔子被兔子帶迷路了（三）合理想象，揣摩續(xù)寫思路。由續(xù)寫的第一段首句與第二段首句確定第一段的框架（三）合理想象，揣摩續(xù)寫思路。段首的提示句+文章劃線詞語提示，確定續(xù)寫段落的內容。Paragraph1:Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.

這一句是故事發(fā)展的轉折點。Whathappenedaftertherabbitappeared?Wasthehorsesoscaredthatitranaway?Didtheauthorgetlostbecauseofchasingtherabbit?無論從何角度拓展，需注意與續(xù)寫第二段首句呼應。Paragraph2:Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.

Itmeanedthattheygotlost!呼應前文UnclePaul'ssaying,

“Don'tbelateforsupperand...”,sowecanfindoutthewaybacktothefarm,再加上前文提示農場附近有河流，并且river為標有下劃線的關鍵詞語，所以可以從沿著河流回到農場的角度拓展。具體分析（兩段首句定一框）（四）擬寫草稿，修改錯詞病句。

在確定了思路和內容之后，最關鍵的就是結合提示語或者文中劃線的關鍵詞語擬寫草稿。擬寫時，注意句子結構的多樣性、語言的豐富性，并通過句與句之間連接詞的正確使用，使上下文連貫。這一步是得分的關鍵。

必殺技：使用2-5個動作描寫，1-2個環(huán)境描寫，1-2個對話，1-2個表情或者心情。方法提示方法提示：環(huán)環(huán)說情話，我就動心了動作描寫2-5個環(huán)境描寫1-2個對話1-2個表情或心理1-2個：run，cry，find,decide,shout,lost...scenery，mountain，range，valley，river，lake，forest，sun，set，wind，blow...thinktooneself，comeback,...panic，relief，nervous，worried...(環(huán)境+表情+對話+動作+心理）Paragraph1:

Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.

動作一：我們發(fā)現(xiàn)兔子太可愛了以至于決定去追它.

We_____therabbit________cute____we_______________chaseit.連接詞+動作二：不一會/過了好久，我們完全迷失在森林之中。___________________________,wewerecompletely____inthe_______.環(huán)境:周圍除了樹什么都沒有。Therewas________leftinoursightbutthe_______.foundwassothatdecidedtoAfterawhile/Afteralongtimelostforestnothingtrees第一段具體描寫對話/自言自語:我對自已說：“我們可能回不去農舍吃晚餐了”?！癢emaynot_______backtothe__________intimeforsupper.”Isaidtomyfather/thoughttomyself.動作三+心情表情:嘗試了好幾次找出路，我們真是又累又餓。Wetried____________tofindawayout,wefelt_____and_______.comefarmhousemanytimestiredhungry第二段方法提示：二框二首正能量We?had?no?idea?where?we?were?and?it?got?dark.被兔子帶迷路了最后經(jīng)過各種困難回到農場了不建議的劇情：追兔子迷路，進入迷宮發(fā)現(xiàn)寶藏（扯太遠了回不來）追兔子迷路，森林里亂竄結果碰到了家或熟人或救援隊，安全返回（強行結尾，無邏輯）追兔子迷路，晚上點燃火柴，燭光中看到了溫暖的家（悲劇結尾）第二段的框架，由第二段首句與正能量結尾來確定注意：故事內容一定要正能量，弘揚社會主義核心價值觀。如：迷路了但最終一定回到了家；失敗了或遇到困難了，但最終一定成功了；吵架了但最后一定是言歸于好，和睦相處；犯錯了，最后一定會改過自新，重新做人；賊逃了，最后一定是繩之以法，等等。千萬不能寫成悲劇或毫無邏輯可言的玄幻小說。方法提示：環(huán)環(huán)說情話，我就動心了第二段的描寫同樣用上面的方法，你能標出來嗎？Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.（已給出

）

Wegotstuckintheforest.Andanunexpected

shower

addedtothedifficultyofusinfindingawayhome,forallthe

tracks

wehadmadedisappearedbecauseoftherain.Iwasalmostbreakingdownwhenmyfathersaid,“Don’tworry,myson.Irememberthereisarivernearthefarmhouse.Findtheriverandwewillbebackhome.”

Finally,we

found

theriverand

gotbacktothehousealongit.Needlesstosay,weatealatedinner.動作一環(huán)境心理二動作二心理一對話Readaloudthefollowingsample:Paragraph1:

Suddenlyalittlerabbitjumpedoutinfrontofmyhorse.DadandIfounditwassocutethatwedecidedtochaseit（動作一）.Afterawhile,wewerecompletelylostintheforest.（連接詞+動作二）Therewasnothingleftinoursightbutthetrees.（環(huán)境）“Wemaynotbeabletomakeitbacktothefarmhouseintimeforsupper.”Ithoughttomyself.（對話，自言自語）Afteraseriesoffruitlessattemptstofindawayout,wefelthungryandtired.（動作三+心情表情）Paragraph2:

Wehadnoideawherewewereanditwasgettingdark.Wegotstuckintheforest（動作一）.Andanunexpected（心理一）showeraddedtothedifficultyofusinfindingawayhome,forallthetrackswehadmadedisappearedbecauseoftherain（環(huán)境）.Iwasalmostontheedgeofbreakingdown（心理二）whenmyfathersaid,“Don'tworry,myson.Irememberthereisarivernearthefarmhouse.Findtheriverandwewillbebackhome.”（對話）Finally,wefoundtheriverandgotbacktothehousealongit.Needlesstosay,weatealatedinner.（動作二）（五）不忘細節(jié)——標出續(xù)寫部分中使用到的原材料中標有下劃線的關鍵詞語。

這一點可以幫助考生檢查關鍵詞語的使用情況并根據(jù)情況做出修改。最后在謄寫文字時，務必做到“字跡工整、清晰”。讀后續(xù)寫語言表達3讀后續(xù)寫語言表達2句式要豐富1寫好句子（主謂賓）34敘述和描述要兼顧適當使用積累的素材非謂語狀語從句定語從句名詞性從句倒裝句強調句虛擬語氣形容詞作狀語無靈主語····1寫好句子（主謂賓）語言錯誤多，中式表達，詞性錯用，長難句結構混雜濫用、誤用高級大詞和低頻詞，套句現(xiàn)象嚴重，與原文語言風格不融洽【題型解讀】

動作描寫主要是通過對人物的動作、行為和活動的描寫來展示人物的性格、品質、身份、地位、處境和狀態(tài)等。好的動作描寫可以使人物形象栩栩如生、活靈活現(xiàn)，個性特征更加鮮明。

讀后續(xù)寫的體裁是以人物為中心的敘事性記敘文，需要大篇幅的動作描寫，因此做好人物的動作描寫顯得尤為重要。1.有過程。記敘文中在描寫人物個性的動作時，如果我們蜻蜒點水、一筆帶過，就很難突出人物形象，也很難給人以深刻的印象。而應按照順序描寫一連串動作過程，既要把人物做事情的過程寫清楚，又要把人物活動的步驟寫具體，這樣才能夠使得人物形象鮮明，文章層次清楚。試比較下面兩句：例：Mr.Hamliton向Ms.Popovisi表達了感謝。常規(guī)表達：Mr.Hamliton

expressedhisgratitudetoMs.Popovisi.提升表達：（具體化:構造動作鏈）1.句子+句子如：

Mr.Hamliton

approachedMs.Popovisi.Hebowedtoher.2.句子and句子Mr.Hamliton

approachedtoMs.Popovisi，bowedandgaveherabunchofflower.3.主句+從句WhenMr.HamlitonapproachedMs.Popovisi，hebowedandgaveherabunchofflower.4.句子，非謂語句型1：謂語,非謂語或非謂語，謂語(doing)原句：Mr.Hamliton

approachedMs.Popovisi，bowedandgaveherabunchofflower.（并列句轉換為非謂語）非謂語doing1：Mr.Hamliton

approachedMs.Popovisiandbowedtoher，givingherabunchofflower.非謂語doing2：ApproachingMs.Popovisi，Mr.Hamlitonbowedtoher

andgaveherabunchofflower.非謂語doing3：ApproachingMs.Popovisi，Mr.Hamlitonbowedtoher，givingherabunchofflower.4.句子，非謂語句型1：謂語,非謂語或非謂語，謂語(doing)原句：WhenMr.HamlitonapproachedMs.Popovisi，hebowedandgaveherabunchofflower.（狀語從句轉換為非謂語）非謂語doing：(When)ApproachingMs.Popovisi，hebowedandgaveherabunchofflower.4.句子，非謂語句型2：謂語,非謂語或非謂語，謂語(done)如：看到那位幫助過他的女士，漢密爾頓先生欣喜若狂，跳了起來。原句：Mr.Hamliton

wasoverwhelmedbythe

joyofseeingthewomanwhohadhelpedhimandhejumpedintotheair.非謂語done：

Overwhelmedbythejoyofseeingthewomanwhohadhelpedhim,hejumpedintotheair.beencouragedby→Encouragedby···非謂語特殊句型（名詞、連詞、副詞、介詞）+非謂語Whilewalking（連詞+非謂語）Whenaskedwhy···，she···2.Tearsrollingdown（名詞+非謂語）獨立主格

···，thusmakingyouhealthy（副詞+非謂語）on/upondoing（介詞+動名詞）4.句子，非謂語句型3：Havingdone···，謂如：（三模）等了幾個小時后，他收到了一條信息。原句：Afterwaitingafewhours,amessagewassenttohim.非謂語：Havingwaitedafewhours,amessagewassenttohim.練習：收到禮物后，他高興得不知所措（atalosswhattodo）。句子and句子：Hereceivedthegift

andhewassohappythathewasatalosswhattodo.主句+從句After

hereceivedthegift，hewassohappythathewasatalosswhattodo.非謂語句型:謂語,非謂語Hereceivedthegift,

beingsohappythathewasatalosswhattodo.Receivingthegift,hewassohappythathewasatalosswhattodo.非謂語句型:Havingdone···，謂語Havingreceivedthegift,

he

wassohappythathewasatalosswhattodo.句型4：感官動詞/使役動詞+非謂語如：Isawherdancing.（seesbdoing）Dadhadthedeskrepaired.(havesthdone)句型5：with+賓語+賓補（非謂語）如：Withhandshaking,Mr.Hamiltoncouldn’tsayaword.Hesatsilentlyinhisroom,withhiseyesfixedontheceiling.Withhomeworktodo，Icouldn’tgotoplaybasketball.

句型5：獨立主格非謂語的邏輯主語，和主句的主語不一致,則此非謂語要加上自己（獨立）的邏輯主語,如：Tearsrollingdown

herface，shewasexcited.淚水順著她的臉頰流了下來，她很興奮。rolling的邏輯主語不是she，是tears，因此要把roll這個動作真正的邏輯主語tears加上去，類似：Handsshaking，shefishedoutthebillfromherpocket.Weatherpermitting，wewillgopanic.Herworkfinished,shesatdownforacupoftea.動作面（描寫著急，不知所措）Doris在原地踱步，搔頭，急的滿臉通紅。

腿部手部

臉部Dorispacedaround，scratchinghishead,withfaceflushing.

升級：Chrispacedaroundworriedly，constantlyscratchinghishead,withfaceflushing.

使動作形象生動的方法一：副詞好奇地問askcuriously緊緊擁抱hugtightly輕輕地拍patsoftly快速地沖過去rushswiftly興奮地拍手clapexcitedly不情愿地同意agreeunwillingly使動作形象生動的方法二：with+情緒名詞好奇地問askwithcuriosity震驚地看著starewithshock心滿意足地離開leavewithsatisfaction如釋重負地舒了一口氣sighwithrelief可也把with結構放在句首：Withcuriosity，heaskedwhatwashappening.1.and（可轉化為非謂語）2.狀語從句（可轉化為非謂語）3.非謂語（1）非謂語doing+句子（2）非謂語done+句子（3）havingdone+句子特殊形式：（名詞、連詞、副詞、介詞）+非謂語（4）感官動詞+非謂語（5）with+賓語+非謂語（6）獨立主格續(xù)寫常用句型一：非謂語1.當/突然：wasdoing…when...wasabouttodo…when...2.before：···beforesbknew/realizedit不知不覺地;很快;突然

Itwas+時間段+before過了多久才……3.一…就···，倒裝句：hardly···when···Nosooner···than···

一···就···：on/upondoing4.sothat倒裝句：so+adj+系動詞+主語+that···so+adv+助動詞+主語+動詞+that···5.notuntil強調句：Itwasnotuntil···that····續(xù)寫常用句型二：狀語從句1.常規(guī)：which，that，who，whose，where，when等2.提升：介詞+which，介詞+whom，不定代詞或數(shù)詞（many,most,each等）+ofwhich/whom，如：Thecompetitionismeaningful，throughwhichstudentscultivatecooperation.Heissuchahero，fromwhomIlearnedalot.續(xù)寫常用句型三：定語從句1.主語從句：what；it作形式主語Whatimpressedmemost/wasthat···Itissuggestedthatyou(should)···（it作形式主語）2.賓語從句：（1）把對話轉化為賓語從句：Hesaidthat···（2）IfinditdifficulttolearnEnglishwell.（it作形式賓語）3.表語從句：Thereasonwhy……isthat…………4.同位語從句：Ihavelearnedthenewsthatyou···續(xù)寫常用句型四：名詞性從句Depressed,Ericburstintotears.（Eric大哭是因為沮喪，，該句使用了形容詞depressed作原因狀語）Ericfinallymadeittothetopofthemountain,excited.（Eric最后登上山頂時的狀態(tài)是很興奮的，該句使用了形容詞excited作結果狀語）Thechildwaslyinginbed，lostinthought.（孩子躺在床上時的狀態(tài)是沉思著的，該句使用了形容詞短語lostinthought作伴隨狀語）Desperateandhopeless,Janekneltdown,tearsstreamingdownherface.續(xù)寫常用句型五：形容詞（及短語）作狀語續(xù)寫常用句型六：虛擬語氣1.IfIwereyou,Iwould···.（對現(xiàn)在的虛擬）2.Ifithadnotbeenfortheirhelp,wewouldn’thavesucceeded.（對過去的虛擬）（要不是他們的幫忙，我們不會成功）→Haditnotbeenfortheirhelp,wewouldn'thavesucceeded.（感激