2024屆高三讀后續(xù)寫之系列講座八動(dòng)作描寫（3）學(xué)案

屆高三讀后續(xù)寫之系列講座八動(dòng)作描寫（3）高考讀后續(xù)寫真題分析年份試卷版本情節(jié)側(cè)重點(diǎn)2022.6新高考Ⅰ卷患有大腦疾病的大衛(wèi)完成賽跑語(yǔ)言描寫和動(dòng)作描寫2021.6新高考Ⅰ&Ⅱ卷兄妹倆為媽媽準(zhǔn)備早飯動(dòng)作描寫2020.7新高考Ⅰ卷幫助貧困家庭解決經(jīng)濟(jì)困難動(dòng)作描寫2020.7浙江卷熊口脫險(xiǎn)記動(dòng)作描寫2020.1浙江卷主人與寵物狗之間的深厚感情心理描寫2018.6浙江卷和父親去西部荒原度假時(shí)，騎馬迷路環(huán)境描寫2017.6浙江卷和朋友騎行途中遇狼動(dòng)作描寫2016.10浙江卷Jane在野營(yíng)時(shí)和丈夫迷路并走散心理描寫和動(dòng)作描寫好詞積累1.心跳停一拍Herheartseemedtomiss/skipabeat.

我的心跳仿佛停了一下。Thisstorymademyheartskipabeatandbroughttearstomyeyes.

故事讓我的心停跳一拍，然后讓我哭。2.心痛Herwordsstungmyheart.她的話刺痛了我的心。Withaheavy/sinking/brokenheart,shesaidgoodbyetohim.她和他告別，心很沉重/心碎了。MyheartachedwhenIthinkoftheirsorrow.

當(dāng)我想到他們的悲痛時(shí)，我的心很痛。3.心跳加速M(fèi)yheartbeatquickly/violently/wildly.我心跳加速。Myheartraced.我心跳加速。Myheartbegantothumpwildly.我的心開始狂跳起來(lái)。Herheartwaspoundingwithexcitement.她的心激動(dòng)地砰砰直跳4.心碎Inside,hisheartwasslowlybreaking.在內(nèi)心，他的心在慢慢地碎裂。5.心融化Hiscoldheartbegantomeltslowly.他冰冷的心開始慢慢融化了。6.其他Hesetoffwithalightheart.他出發(fā)了，心情很輕松。Justfollowyourheartandyou'llbehappy.聽(tīng)從你的內(nèi)心，你才會(huì)快樂(lè)。Finally,hebrokedownintearsandpouredouthishearttoher.他忍不住痛哭，向她傾訴了他的心聲頭部動(dòng)作訓(xùn)練抬/低/點(diǎn)/搖頭轉(zhuǎn)頭抓頭陷入沉思小試牛刀1.Heinshame.他羞愧地低下了頭。2.Theyinagreement.

他們點(diǎn)頭同意。3.Sheindisbelief.她懷疑地?fù)u搖頭。4.Hewithashysmile.他害羞的笑著撓了撓頭。5.He,greatlyannoyed.他雙手抱頭，十分生氣。腿部動(dòng)作熱身訓(xùn)練rushintofleeawaydragone’slegskneeldownstrideawaystormoutspringtoone’sfeetquickenone’spacestruggletoone’sfeet添加介詞短語(yǔ)/副詞修飾動(dòng)作①with+情緒名詞delight/excitement/pleasure/happiness/joy/satisfaction/anger/patience/terror/confidence/certainly②with+身體部位withitseyeswithitsteethwithherpalelips③in+名詞insurprise/amazement/shock/fear/reliefinavoice④副詞suddenly;immediately;instantly;slowly;angrily;happily牛刀小試Shegazedatme.(in+名詞)TheferociouswolfstaredatMacwith.(adv),hejumpedoverthebrokenglasses.運(yùn)用明喻，暗喻，擬人夸張等手法Shehowled.（像一頭兇猛的狼)Shewenthome.（她淚如泉涌）Mythroat.(緊成了一個(gè)節(jié)）明喻常見(jiàn)的詞語(yǔ)①likeThesmileonherfaceshonelikeadiamond.Theicywindstartedhowling,cuttingmyfacelikeasharpknife.②as...asFatherrushedtohisson’sschool,onlytodiscoverthebuildingwasasflataspancake.Thesmileonherfacewasasvibrantasthesunonasummerday.③asifHelookedatmeinnocentlyasifhedidn’tknowanything.Sheswepthersonintoherarmswithhereyeswetasifshewantedtosqueezethebreathoutofhim.暗喻常見(jiàn)方法①通過(guò)be動(dòng)詞聯(lián)系Lifeisanunexploredriverfulloftwistsandturns.Herhairwasaflowinggoldenriverstreamingdownhershoulder.②通過(guò)動(dòng)聯(lián)系詞Ifeltalumpinmythroat,tearingwellingupinmyeyes.Myverythoughtwasliketheghostlyrustleofdeadleaves.擬人①把自然現(xiàn)象當(dāng)做人來(lái)寫Immediately,anabsolutedarknessruledtheforest.Thefetherysnowflakesdancedinthenightair,makingabbeautifulpicture.②把抽蓄抽象的概念當(dāng)做人來(lái)描寫Fearseized/swallowedhim.Excitementdeprivedmeofallpowerofspeech.③把動(dòng)物當(dāng)做人來(lái)描寫Inthedeadofnight,thecricketsplayedontheterraceofthehouse.真題鏈接：Mac在野外騎自行車，途中遇到狼緊追不舍，這時(shí)朋友的車開了過(guò)來(lái)，分解Mac接下來(lái)的動(dòng)作。Para1:Thecarabrutlystoppedinfrontofhim.動(dòng)作分解：組成句子：狀語(yǔ)從句引導(dǎo)（when,while,as,before,after）受驚嚇的Mac沖向了車的后座，在狼襲擊到他之前把門關(guān)上。.并列謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞（AandB;A,BandC）麥克毫不猶豫跳下自行車，沖向車的后門，猛烈地關(guān)上車門。.非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞doing(A-doing,B;A,B-doing;...)想到血淋淋的嘴，Mac嚇得要死了，喘不上氣。（thinking,deadwithhorror）.狼繼續(xù)追著車，猛烈地拍打著窗戶并咆哮。.Havingdone...,主句已經(jīng)距離狼有幾英里了，Mac還是僵在恐懼中。.與情感，心理環(huán)境描寫相結(jié)合（怒火中燒），她（怒視）mewithherbigfrighteningeyes,yelling,“Youaresuchanidiot.”（夜幕降臨），Janeonthegrass,thevastsky,frightenedandhungry.閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進(jìn)行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個(gè)完整的故事。Onabright,warmJulyafternoon,MacHollan,aprimaryschoolteacher,wascyclingfromhishometoAlaskawithhisfriends.Oneofhisfriendshadstoppedtomakeabicyclerepair,buttheyhadencouragedMactocarryon,andtheywouldcatchupwithhimsoon.AsMacpedaled(騎行)alongalone,hethoughtfondlyofhiswifeandtwoyoungdaughtersathome.Hehopedtoshowthemthisbeautifulplacesomeday.ThenMacheardquickandloudbreathingbehindhim.“Man,that’sabigdog!”hethought.Butwhenhelookedtotheside,hesawinstantlythatitwasn’tadogatall,butawolf,quicklycatchingupwithhim.Mac’sheartjumped.Hefoundouthiscanofbearspray.Withonehandonthebars,hefiredthesprayatthewolf.Abrightredcloudenvelopedtheanimal,andtoMac’srelief,itfellback,shakingitshead.Butaminutelater,itwasbyhissideagain.ThenitattackedthebackofMac’sbike,tearingopenhistentbag.Hefiredatthewolfasecondtime,andagain,itfellbackonlytoquicklyrestartthechase(追趕).Macwaspedalinghardnow.Hewavedandyelledatpassingcarsbutwascarefulnottoslowdown.Hesawasteepuphillclimbbeforehim.Heknewthatoncehehitthehill,he’dbeeasycaughtupandthewolf’steethwouldbetearingintohisflesh.Atthismoment,PaulandBeckyweredrivingtheircarontheirwaytoAlaska.Theydidn’tthinkmuchofitwhentheysawtwocyclistsrepairingtheirbikeonthesideoftheroad.Abitlater,theyspottedwhatthey,too,assumedwasadogrunningalongsideamanonabike.Astheygotcloser,theyrealizedthatthedogwasawolf.Macheardalargevehiclebehindhim.Hepulledinfrontofitasthewolfwascatchingupfast,justadozenyardsawaynow.注意：1.所續(xù)寫短文的詞數(shù)應(yīng)為150左右；2.應(yīng)使用5個(gè)以上短文中標(biāo)有下劃線的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)；3.續(xù)寫部分分為兩段，每段的開頭語(yǔ)已為你寫好；4.續(xù)寫完成后，請(qǐng)用下劃線標(biāo)出你所使用的關(guān)鍵詞語(yǔ)。Para1.Thecarabrutlystoppedinfrontofhim.寫作思路：本段應(yīng)該是Mac跳上車逃脫狼的追捕的過(guò)程。Macjumpedoffhisbicycle.Hewenttothecar.Thewolfcaughtup.Macusedsprayandrantothecarandclimbedin.句子潤(rùn)色：貝西從后窗往外看，看見(jiàn)狼站在麥克的自行車上，好像那是一場(chǎng)殺戮。.麥克跳下自行車，沖向車門。.但車門似乎鎖了，麥克還沒(méi)來(lái)得及開門，狼就追上了，撲了上去。.幸運(yùn)的是，魔法噴霧第三次救了麥克。.不久，那只動(dòng)物跑了。.看到狼退后，保羅迅速打開車門，受驚的人很快爬上車，重重地關(guān)上身后的車門。.Para2.Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.寫作思路：表明上一段落狼可能沒(méi)有離開，這一段應(yīng)該續(xù)寫兩個(gè)男孩加入一起對(duì)抗狼。MachugwithhisfriendsTheywereshocked.Theysay“thankyou”Theythrowmeattothewolf.TheyreturnedhomeThewolfranintothewoods.Theyeventuallygetridofthewolf.句子潤(rùn)色：麥克跑下車，與他的朋友緊緊擁抱在一起。.麥克感謝保羅和貝基，“你停下來(lái)救我，我真是太感謝你了，我還活著，這都?xì)w功于你?！?3.由于麥克受傷，這三個(gè)人不得不放棄剩下的旅程回家。.范文賞析根據(jù)漢語(yǔ)提示補(bǔ)充范文中的動(dòng)詞或短語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞，使情節(jié)連貫，銜接合理。Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Mac（跳下）hisbikeand（沖向）thebackdoorofthecar.Itwaslocked.He（繞到）tothepassengerdoor,butitwaslocked,too,sohebeganto（爬進(jìn)）theopenwindow.Paulquickly（鎖上）thedoor,andthefrightenedman（跳進(jìn)去）,（狠狠關(guān)上）thedoorbehindhim.BeckylookedoutthebackwindowandsawthewolfstandingoverMac’sbikeasifitwereakill.Shortlyafter,theanimal（跑掉）.

Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Mac（下車）thecarand.（擁抱）hisfriends.“Awolfchasedme.IthoughtIwasgoingtodie,”Mactoldthem.“IthoughtIwouldneverseemywifeandmylovelydaughtersagain.”After（告別）toPaulandBecky,Mac（撿起）hisbicycle,andthethreemen（繼續(xù)）theirroadtrip,agreeingtokeepinoneanother’ssightline.Afewmiles’（踩踏板）downtheroad,Mac（靠邊停車）andcried.“Therestofthetripwasamazing,butIhadtoletthatemotionout.”參考范文Thecarabruptlystoppedinfrontofhim.Macjumpedoffhisbikeanddashedforthebackdoorofthecar.Itwaslocked.Heranaroundtothepassengerdoor,butitwaslocked,too,sohebegantoclimbthroughtheopenwindow.Paulquicklyunlockedthedoor,andthefrightenedmandivedin,slammingthedoorbehindhim.BeckylookedoutthebackwindowandsawthewolfstandingoverMac’sbikeasifitwereakill.Shortlyafter,theanimalranoff.Afewminuteslater,theothertwocyclistsarrived.Macemergedfromthecarandhuggedhisfriends.“Awolfchasedme.IthoughtIwasgoingtodie,”Mactoldthem.“IthoughtIwouldneverseemywifeandmylovelydaughtersagain.”AftersayinggoodbyetoPaulandBecky,Macretrievedhisbicycle,andthethreemenresumedtheirroadtrip,agreeingtokeepinoneanother’ssightline.Afewmiles’pedalingdowntheroad,Macpulledoverandcried.“Therestofthetripwasamazing,butIhadtoletthatemotionout.”課后作業(yè)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語(yǔ)續(xù)寫兩段，使之構(gòu)成一篇完整的短文。Itwasthedayofthebigcross-countryrun.Studentsfromsevendifferentprimaryschoolsinandaroundthesmalltownwerewarmingupandwalkingtheroute(路線)throughthickevergreenforest.IlookedaroundandfinallyspottedDavid,whowasstandingbyhimselfofftothesidebyafence.Hewassmallfortenyearsold.Hisusualbigtoothysmilewasabsenttoday.Iwalkedoverandaskedhimwhyhewasn’twiththeotherchildren.Hehesitatedandthensaidhehaddecidednottorun.Whatwaswrong?Hehadworkedsohardforthisevent!Iquicklysearchedthecrowdfortheschool’scoachandaskedhimwhathadhappened.“Iwasafraidthatkidsfromotherschoolswouldlaughathim,”heexplaineduncomfortably.“Igavehimthechoicetorunornot,andlethimdecide.”Ibitbackmyfrustration(懊惱).Iknewthecoachmeantwell—hethoughthewasdoingtherightthing.AftermakingsurethatDavidcouldrunifhewanted,Iturnedtofindhimcomingtowardsme,hissmallbodyrockingfromsidetosideasheswunghisfeetforward.Davidhadabraindiseasewhichpreventedhim