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It

was

dreadfully

cold;

it

was

snowing

fast,

and

was

almost

dark,

as

evening

came

on

-

the

last

evening

of

the

year.

In

the

cold

and

darkness,

there

went

along

the

street

a

poor

little

girl,

bareheaded

and

with

naked

feet.

When

she

left

home

she

had

slippers

on,

it

is

true;

but

they

were

much

too

large

for

her

feet

–

slippers

that

her

mother

had

used

until

then

… Itwasdreadfullycold;itwa2

The

snow

flakes

fell

on

her

long

flaxen

hair,

which

hung

in

pretty

curls

about

her

throat;

but

she

thought

not

of

her

beauty

nor

of

the

cold.

Lights

gleamed

in

every

window,

and

there

came

to

her

the

savory

smell

of

roast

goose,

for

it

was

New

Year’s

Eve.

And

it

was

of

this

which

she

thought. Thesnowflakesfellonherl3

Yet

she

dared

not

go

home,

for

she

had

sold

no

matches,

and

could

not

bring

a

penny

of

money.

Her

father

would

certainly

beat

her;

and,

besides,

it

was

cold

enough

at

home,

for

they

had

only

the

house

roof

above

them;

and

though

the

largest

holes

had

been

stopped

with

straw

and

rags,

there

were

left

many

through

which

the

cold

wind

whistled. Yetshedarednotgohome,fo4小結(jié)緊扣主題。在有限的篇幅內(nèi)選擇景物要慎重，一定要與主題有密切關(guān)聯(lián)。細(xì)致深入。所選景物一定要運(yùn)用所學(xué)過的詞匯和語法進(jìn)行細(xì)致深入的描寫。相輔相成。環(huán)境描寫一定要與動(dòng)作和心理活動(dòng)等相結(jié)合，才能更好完成寫作任務(wù)。小結(jié)51.請(qǐng)描述自己迷路的經(jīng)歷，運(yùn)用對(duì)環(huán)境的描寫來營造氛圍，為后文做鋪墊、烘托自己的心理及體現(xiàn)個(gè)人的性格。80詞左右。________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.請(qǐng)描述自己迷路的經(jīng)歷，運(yùn)用對(duì)環(huán)境的描寫來營造氛圍，為后61.請(qǐng)描述自己迷路的經(jīng)歷，運(yùn)用對(duì)環(huán)境的描寫來營造氛圍，為后文做鋪墊、烘托自己的心理及體現(xiàn)個(gè)人的性格。80詞左右。迷路會(huì)引起人的不安和焦躁的心理，與之對(duì)應(yīng)的環(huán)境描寫，可以是天氣，比如雨霧等，還可以描寫陌生的建筑和自然景色。1.請(qǐng)描述自己迷路的經(jīng)歷，運(yùn)用對(duì)環(huán)境的描寫來營造氛圍，為后7 I

was

lost

in

the

mountain

which

was

settled

by

almost

no

people.

I

had

a

map

in

my

hand

but

had

no

idea

where

my

position

was.

The

air

seemed

wet,

as

though

the

symbol

of

mountains

–

the

high

concentration-of-oxygen

air

was

replaced

by

the

uncomfortable,

choking

water.

It

was

going

to

rain.

The

fear

surrounded

me

like

a

devil’s

frozen,

sharp

hands.

I

struggled

to

adjust

my

mood

but

in

vain. Iwaslostinthemountainwh82.午夜時(shí)分，咖啡館里只剩下最后一位顧客，他是位雙耳失聰、孤寂苦悶的老人。請(qǐng)根據(jù)所給的時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)及老人的特點(diǎn)，針對(duì)小餐館及周圍的環(huán)境，設(shè)計(jì)一段描寫，詞數(shù)80左右。It

was

very

late

and

everyone

had

left

the

café

except

an

old

man.

_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________2.午夜時(shí)分，咖啡館里只剩下最后一位顧客，他是位雙耳失聰、92.午夜時(shí)分，咖啡館里只剩下最后一位顧客，他是位雙耳失聰、孤寂苦悶的老人。請(qǐng)根據(jù)所給的時(shí)間和地點(diǎn)及老人的特點(diǎn)，針對(duì)小餐館及周圍的環(huán)境，設(shè)計(jì)一段描寫，詞數(shù)80左右。時(shí)間：午夜

地點(diǎn)：咖啡館為了符合午夜和老人的內(nèi)心特點(diǎn)，需要營造寂靜的周圍環(huán)境?？梢蕴砑右恍└郊有畔?，如天氣和周邊的景物等（斑駁的樹影、昏暗的路燈和寒風(fēng)）來營造陰郁氛圍。除了老人，其他人也是故事環(huán)境的有效組成部分，如冷漠的服務(wù)員或是零星的路人。2.午夜時(shí)分，咖啡館里只剩下最后一位顧客，他是位雙耳失聰、10It

was

very

late

and

everyone

had

left

the

café

except

an

old

man.

He

sat

in

the

shadow

of

the

leaves

of

the

tree

that

swung

lonely

in

the

cold

wind.

The

street

light

was

slightly

gloomy.

In

the

day

time

the

street

was

noisy

and

dusty,

but

at

night

silence

settled

the

dust.

The

old

man

liked

to

sit

late

because

he

was

deaf

and

only

at

night,

when

people

were

fewer

and

fewer,

could

he

feel

the

difference.

The

two

waiters

there

knew

that

if

he

became

too

drunk

he

would

leave

without

paying,

so

they

kept

watching

on

him.Itwasverylateandeveryone11實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練實(shí)戰(zhàn)演練123.王姥姥第一次進(jìn)城看女兒，在車站周圍看到“好運(yùn)大抽獎(jiǎng)”的活動(dòng)遍毫不猶豫地參加了。為了贏得終極大獎(jiǎng)：40寸大彩電，她連續(xù)參加五次，把身上僅有的200塊錢都花光了也沒有贏到獎(jiǎng)，請(qǐng)?jiān)O(shè)計(jì)一段環(huán)境描寫突出表現(xiàn)離開的路上王姥姥受騙后的心情。 Grandma

Wang

was

extremely

blue

having

spent

all

the

200

yuan.

___________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________3.王姥姥第一次進(jìn)城看女兒，在車站周圍看到“好運(yùn)大抽獎(jiǎng)”的13Grandma

Wang

was

extremely

blue

having

spent

all

the

200

yuan.

She

stood

rooted

to

the

spot

with

her

mind

totally

blank.

Recalling

the

moment

when

they

noticed

she

had

no

more

money

to

continue

the

game,

their

faces

turned

from

flower

to

ice,

Grandma

Wang

quickly

escaped

from

the

bustling

station.

People

on

the

street,

not

like

the

villagers,

came

and

went,

nobody

greeting

each

other.

The

high

buildings

alongside

the

streets

covered