-2024屆高考英語(yǔ)二輪復(fù)習(xí)讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)之學(xué)校師者引導(dǎo)課件

讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)故事模型一

學(xué)校----師者引導(dǎo)(貴州遵義.高一統(tǒng)考期末)Yearsago,mydaughterHopewasinafourth-gradeclasswithagroupofchildrenintheneighborhood.MostofthechildreninHope'sclasshadatleastoneparentworkinginafactoryHopelovedherclassandoftentoldmestoriesofherclassmates,includingabovnamedRobertwhowasintroublealot.Healwaysstoodinthecornerforpoorbehaviorinclass.Ivolunteeredtoactas"theclassroommom".meaningbringingsnacksandplanningpartiesandspecialoutingsforheclass,eventhoughIworkedfull-timeasasocialworkerOnedayIsawRobertstandinginthecornerandaskedtheteacherifhecouldjoinourMother'sDayparty.Sherefused,sayingheneededtolearnalesson.Iwasn'tsurewhathehaddonetomaketheteacherplacehiminthecorner,butIfeltsadforhimasweatecakesandplayedgameswhilehecontinuedtofacethecorner.Aftertheparty,IaskedHopewhatwaswrongwithRobert."Itseemedthathewenttoschoolonlyforbasketball.Hedidn'tlistentoourteacherinclassandhetalkedback.Ifyouwerehismother,Ibethewouldn'ttalkback,"Hopesaid.IknewRobert'smotherworkedlonghoursinthepaper-makingfactory.Iknewshewasagoodwoman,whofoundithardtocareforherfourchildrenalone.Shetriedherbest,butIwassurethereweredayswhenshefelthopelessandwasunabletomanageit.HopesaidRobertoftengotangryinclasswhenhedidn'tknowtheanswertoaquestionandcouldn'treadaswellastheotherchildren.Hope'swordsstruckmeandmademethinkaboutwhetherIcouldhelpRobertonaone-to-onebasis.HisteacherallowedmetocometwodaysaweekduringmylunchbreakandhelpRobertwithreading.Wereadsecond-grade-levelbooks,thehighestlevelhecouldmasterSloolyhebegantomasterthesebooks,almostenjoyingthem.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Attheendofthefourthgrade,Robertandhisclassmatestookthefinalexams._____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________一、情節(jié)梳理1.預(yù)設(shè)情節(jié)填空

本文以人物為線索，講述了作者的女兒回家后經(jīng)常和作者提到她的同學(xué)Robert。他經(jīng)常因?yàn)樵趯W(xué)校表現(xiàn)很差被老師批評(píng)罰站。有一天作者帶著零食去學(xué)校組織活動(dòng)的時(shí)候，看到Robert又在墻角罰站，所以她決定幫幫這個(gè)孩子。與老師溝通后，老師允許她一周兩次，在午休時(shí)間幫助這個(gè)孩子閱讀。

Hope，mydaughterinthefourthgrade,often(1)___________storieswithmeaboutherclassmates,includingRobert.Robertwasalways(2)_________forhisbadbehaviorinclass:paying(3)___________attentioninclasstalkingbackgetting(4)___________whennotknowingtheanswerRobert’smomhadlittletimeto(5)_____________herforfourchildren.Idecidedto(6)___________Robert,startingwith(7)_________________________books.sharedangrynopunishedsecond-grade-levelhelptakecareof一、情節(jié)梳理2.續(xù)寫(xiě)情節(jié)指引（1)由第一段首句內(nèi)容“慢慢地，他開(kāi)始掌握這些書(shū)里面的內(nèi)容，而且?guī)缀跸矚g上了。”可知，第一段應(yīng)該主要描寫(xiě)Robert在作者的幫助下取得進(jìn)步的具體表現(xiàn)。

Q1:HowdidRobertbehaveinclassnow?(對(duì)照預(yù)設(shè)情節(jié)中badbehavior的三點(diǎn)表現(xiàn)來(lái)思考)

Q2:Howdidtheteacherencouragehim?

Q3:WhatprogressdidRobertmakeinreading?(對(duì)照預(yù)設(shè)情節(jié)中他原來(lái)的readingability來(lái)思考）

一、情節(jié)梳理2.續(xù)寫(xiě)情節(jié)指引（2)由第二段首句內(nèi)容“四年級(jí)結(jié)束時(shí)，Robert和他的同學(xué)參加了期末考試。”可知，第二段可描寫(xiě)Robert覺(jué)得他在考試中表現(xiàn)很好，來(lái)作者家里感謝作者。QI:WhatnewsdidRobertbringme?(往正向結(jié)局的方向思考)Q2:WhatdidIdotoencouragehim?Q3:Howdidhereacttomyencouragement?Q4:Whatwasmythinkingintheend?一、情節(jié)梳理3.故事模型

通用故事模型概述

遭遇困難：學(xué)業(yè)不順、交友困難、家境貧寒、突發(fā)事故、自卑

伸出援手：老師、長(zhǎng)輩

情況改善：措施：語(yǔ)言上----談心、表?yè)P(yáng)鼓勵(lì)

行動(dòng)上----提供輔導(dǎo)；傳授方法；走訪家庭；物質(zhì)幫助

改變：情況得到改善

升華主題：感激、感悟

本篇故事模型分析：

主要問(wèn)題：上課注意力不集中、頂嘴、回答不上問(wèn)題時(shí)惱羞成怒、閱讀能力只能達(dá)到2級(jí)水平

伸出援手:“我”幫助

“上課注意力不集中”一“思維更靈活，上課更專注”;

“頂嘴、回答不上問(wèn)題時(shí)惱羞成怒”一“因課堂認(rèn)真并正確回答問(wèn)題而受

到老師的表?yè)P(yáng)”;

“閱讀能力只能達(dá)到2年級(jí)水平”一“閱讀能力提升到4年級(jí)水平”。

預(yù)設(shè)情節(jié)中的人物除了“我”和Robert之外，還有Hope，以及學(xué)校的老師，在續(xù)寫(xiě)情節(jié)中，可以加入這些人物的情感或動(dòng)作來(lái)推動(dòng)故事的發(fā)展。切忌再憑空捏造其他不重要的人物。二、詞匯與短語(yǔ)1.文本詞匯(原文和范文中的詞匯)1)壞行為

2)自愿做某事

3)吸取教訓(xùn)

4)我打賭.....

5)照顧6)成功做成某事

7)觸動(dòng)某人

8)因某事表?yè)P(yáng)某人

9)某人繼續(xù)努力10)閃爍著興奮

11)輕拍某人的肩膀

12)臉紅

13)一個(gè)光明的未來(lái)14)無(wú)論什么參考翻譯：1)poorbehavior2)volunteertodosth.3)learnalesson4)Ibet(that)...5)carefor6)manageit7)strikesb.8)praisesb.forsth.9)continuewithone’sefforts10)flashwithexcitement11)patsb.gentlyontheshoulder12)withblushflashingonone’sface13)apromisingfuture14)nomatterwhat

二、詞匯與短語(yǔ)2、語(yǔ)料拓展1)givesbalectureonsth

2)accusesbofsth

3)tryadifferentapproach4)callsbabadwor

5)adeterminednod

6)failsb

7)makeacomplaint8)acarefreechildhood

9)despitesth/doingsth

10)bealuxuryforsb11)feelhonoredtodosth

12)one'sstomachdropstothefloor13)beamazedatsth

14)struggletodosth

15)Ithappenedthat...16)doubtscloudone'sface

17)skipclasses

18)beadmittedintoacollege參考翻譯：1）在某事上教育某人2）控告某人某事3）嘗試另外一種方法4）說(shuō)某人壞話5）堅(jiān)定地點(diǎn)頭6）讓某人失望7）抱怨8）無(wú)憂無(wú)慮的童年9）盡管（做了）某事10）對(duì)某人來(lái)說(shuō)很奢侈11）很榮幸做某事12）某人心一沉13）驚訝于某事14）努力做某事15）碰巧...16）某人一連疑云17）翹課18）被大學(xué)錄取

二、詞匯與短語(yǔ)3.描寫(xiě)小能手“感激”

1)expressone'sheartfeltgratitude

2)begratefultosbforsth

3)hugsb

4)givesba(tender)hug

5)holdsbtightlyinthearms

6)sendabunchofflowers

7)holdone’shandstightly

參考翻譯：

1）某人表達(dá)誠(chéng)摯的感激2）感激某人做某事3）擁抱某人

4）給某人一個(gè)（溫柔的）擁抱5）緊緊抱住某人6）送一束花

7）緊緊握著某人的手

二、詞匯與短語(yǔ)3.描寫(xiě)小能手

“感動(dòng)”

1)betouchedtofindthat..

2)betoucheddeeply/immensely

3)bemovedwithtearsflowingdownthecheek

4)tearswellupintheeyes

5)awarmcurrentflowsoverthebody6)withalumpinone'sthroat

7)misty/moisteyes

參考翻譯：1）因發(fā)現(xiàn)...而感動(dòng)2）深深地感動(dòng)3）感動(dòng)得淚流滿面4）熱淚盈眶5）一股暖流涌遍全身6）哽咽7）眼睛濕潤(rùn)了三、句式升級(jí)1.with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)總結(jié)

1)

Withabookinherhand,shewaswalkingonthestreet.

總結(jié):

with+n.+________

他眼含淚水走進(jìn)教室。

With______________________________,hewalkedintotheclassroom.

2)Shewentoutoftheroomwithallthewindowsopen.

總結(jié):

with+n.+_________

不要嘴里塞滿東西說(shuō)話。

Don’tspeakwith_____________________________

3)Hestoodinthecornerwithhisheaddown.

總結(jié):with+n.+_________

他穿著衣服躺在床上。

Hewaslyingonthebedwith____________________________

介賓短語(yǔ)hisintearseyes形容詞fullmouthyour副詞clothestheon三、句式升級(jí)1.with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)總結(jié)

4)Withsomanypeopletohelpus,wearesuretofinishitintime.

總結(jié):with+n.+________

要洗所有這些衣服，我無(wú)法出去了。

Ican’tgooutwith_____________________________________

5)Hefellasleepwiththewaterrunning.

總結(jié):with+n.+__________

在人群的歡呼聲中，他們驅(qū)車(chē)來(lái)到皇宮。

With________________________，theydrovetothepalace

6)Shehadtowalkhomewithherbikestolen.

總結(jié):with+n.+________

我在房間坐了一會(huì)兒，眼睛盯著天花板。

Isatinmyroomforafewminuteswith_____________________ontheceiling.不定式allclothestothe現(xiàn)在分詞cheeringcrowdthe過(guò)去分詞eyesmyfixedwash三、綜合練習(xí)（用with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)完成下列句子）1)汗水順著我的臉流下，我感到無(wú)法呼吸，因?yàn)槲业谋亲又茉鉀](méi)有足夠的空間。(2021.01浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)范文)_________________________________________,Ifeltbreathlesssincetherewasnoenoughspacearoundmynose.2)Elli張大了嘴，在那震驚不已。(2020.07-浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)范文)Elliwasshockedthere,___________________________________.

widemouthherrunningwithfacedownmysweatWithopen三、綜合練習(xí)（用with復(fù)合結(jié)構(gòu)完成下列句子）3)由于在圣誕節(jié)前夕禮物分配不公，這個(gè)家里最小的孩子一直在向她父母抱怨。(2022.廣東深圳?？寄M預(yù)測(cè))_____________________________________________onChristmasEve,theyoungestchildin

thefamilykeptcomplainingtoherparents.4)他們手里沒(méi)有武器，不敢跟狼搏斗。(2017.06，浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)范文)_____________________________________________,theydidn'tdaretofightagainstthewolf.5)相反，我一定顯得很無(wú)知，幾乎沒(méi)有什么可提供的。(2022.01，浙江卷讀后續(xù)寫(xiě)范文)I,ontheotherhand,musthaveseemednaive,____________________________unfairlydistributedgiftstheWithweaponnoWithhandstheirinoffertolittlewith參考范文：Slowelyhebegantomasterthesebooks,almostenjoyingthem.Beingmoreflexibleinthinkingandmorefocusedinclass,hemanagedtomakebigprogress.AccordingtoHope,Robertalmost