讀后續(xù)寫魔術(shù)師的秘密（拉波夫敘事理論分析）課件高考英語復(fù)習(xí)寫作專項

Continuationwriting——Textanalysis解題技巧“拉波夫”敘事分析模式312654點題（Abstract）是對語篇的簡要概括，即：Whatisthestoryabout？指向（Orientation）是故事發(fā)生的時間、地點、人物或當(dāng)時的情景，即故事的背景。進展（Complication）指故事發(fā)生的經(jīng)過，占據(jù)語篇的最大篇幅，包含一系列事件，同時包括事件的沖突和轉(zhuǎn)折點。回應(yīng)（Coda）與主題前后照應(yīng)，增強故事的完整性，使聽者對敘述有一個完整的了解，對故事有一個有頭有尾的滿意感。結(jié)局（Resolution）指一系列事件的結(jié)束，包括故事的結(jié)局以及人物命運的變化。評議（Evaluation）是敘述者或他人對人物、事件等的看法、評議和態(tài)度。AMagician’ssecret閱讀下面短文，根據(jù)所給情節(jié)進行續(xù)寫，使之構(gòu)成一個完整的故事Martywasnewatschool.Usuallywhenyou’rethenewkid,youlaylow,butnotMarty.Onhisfirstday,hemadeatoothpick(牙簽)disappear.Onesecondhewasholdingthetoothpick,andthenextseconditwasgone!Everyonewasaskinghimhowhedidit.“It’smagic!Atmyoldschool,theyactuallycalledmeMagicMarty.”Martysaidproudly.“Isheserious”IaskedmyfriendBrian.“Idon'tknow,butthatwasprettycool,”Briansaid,stillwatchingMarty.IknewMarty’smagicwasfake,butIjustcouldn’tproveit.Anothertime,Martypulledawaterbottleoutofhisbag,alongwithacupandcarefullypouredwaterintoit.Martygotahandfuloficecubes!Applausefilledthehallway.Whenaskedhowhedidit,hejustsmiled,“Sorry,butthat’sthefirstlawofmagic.Amagicianneverreveals(揭露)hissecrets.”Well,hewon’thaveto,Ithoughttomyself.I’llrevealhissecretsforhim.Thatnight,athome,Isatatthekitchentableforalmostanhour,tryingtofigureoutthetrick.Mymomwatchedmewiggle(擺動)myfingershopelesslyoveracupofwater.“He’strickingpeople!”Icried.“Soundsasifhe’stryingtomakefriends.”Mymompattedmyarm.MagicMartyhadmestumped(把...難住)，butthenextdayIcaughtaluckybreak.Atlunch,Martywasgoingonabouthowhecouldmakethingsfloat.Hehadaringinonehandandapencilintheother.That’swhenIsawit:athinpieceoffishinglinetiedaroundtheendofthepencilandattachedtoabuttononMarty’sshirt!Sureenough,hemadethering“float”byslidingitoverthepencilandhangingitfromtheline.Nooneelsenoticed,andsoonthewholecafeteriawasclapping.However,Iwasn’t.續(xù)寫：Paragraph1:ItwastimetoputanendtotheMagicMartyshow.______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________Paragraph2:“Wait!”Martyjumpedinfrontofme.____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________1.Abstract(點題):IwantedtorevealMarty’ssecret.Whatisthisstoryabout2.Orientation(指向)whoMartyBrianIMomclassmatesclassmatesnewatschoolnotlaylowwhereinmyschoolwhenOnhisfirstday...Anothertime...Thenextday...3.ComplicationandEvaluation(進展和評議)threemagictricks①②③OnhisfirstdayAnothertimeThenextdayFirstmagic:Martymadeatoothpickdisappear.Secondmagic:Martyturnedwaterintoicecubes.Thirdmagic:Martymadetheringfloat.timeorder1.Inwhatorderisthetextorganized2.WhatarethethreemagictricksOnhisfirstday---thefirstmagicMarty’sactionsandwordsReactionsorComments:I

Others3.ComplicationandEvaluation(進展和評議)proudcurious,doubtful,envious/jealousHemadeatoothpickdisappear.Onesecondhewasholdingthetoothpick,andthenextseconditwasgone!“It’smagic!Atmyoldschool,theyactuallycalledmeMagicMarty.”Martysaidproudly.IknewMarty’smagicwasfake,butIjustcouldn’tproveit.Brian:Thatwasprettycool.Everyone:Askinghimhowhedidit.HowdidMartyandIfeel3.ComplicationandEvaluation(進展和評議)Anothertime---thesecondmagicMarty’sactionsandwords:ReactionsorComments:IOthersHowdidMartyandIfeelMartypulledawaterbottleoutofhisbag,alongwithacupandcarefullypouredwaterintoit.Martygotahandfuloficecubes!Whenaskedhowhedidit,hejustsmiled,“Sorry,butthat’sthefirstlawofmagic.Amagicianneverrevealshissecrets.”confident1.I’llrevealhissecretsforhim!3.“He’strickingpeople!”Icried.2.Myfingerswiggledhopelesslyoveracupofwater.angry,anxious,hopelessEveryone:Applausefilledthehallway.Mother:

“Soundsasifhe’stryingtomakefriends.”Thenextday---thethirdmagicMarty’sactionsandwordsReactionsorComments:IOthers3.ComplicationandEvaluation(進展和評議)Hehadaringinonehandandapencilintheother.AthinpieceoffishinglinetiedaroundtheendofthepencilandattachedtoabuttononMarty’sshirt!contentIwasstumped(把...難住),butthenextdayIcaughtaluckybreak.InoticedafishinglineandIdid’tclap!Everyone:Nooneelsenoticed,andsoonthewholecafeteriawasclapping.delightedHowdidMartyandIfeel4.Resolution(結(jié)局)Paragraph1:ItwastimetoputanendtotheMagicMartyshow.____________

Paragraph2:“Wait!”Martyjumpedinfrontofme._________________Questions1)Did“I”reallyendthemagicshow3)DidMartydiscovermyintentionWhatdidhesayordoHowdidhefeelQuestions1)WhydidhejumpinfrontofmeWhatdidhedoHowdidhefeel2)WhatwasmyresponseHowwouldthisstoryend解讀續(xù)寫首句Maybenot!2)WhatdidIsayordoHowdidIfeel5.Coda(回應(yīng))Whatdidthestorywanttotellus2.Themagicis

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銜接情節(jié)語言連貫ScoringCriteria(評分標(biāo)準(zhǔn))Martywasnewatschool.Usuallywhenyou’rethenewkid,youlaylow,butnotMarty.一系列事件的結(jié)束，包括人物的下場，目的的實現(xiàn)或失敗四、結(jié)局/結(jié)果result/resolution指向部分：(照應(yīng)）結(jié)尾：

Aftertheshow,Martywasstillnotalow-keyboybutatruesuperstar.Hekeptperformingmagicshowsforus,withmeashisonlyassistant.品讀首段Onhisfirstday,hemadeatoothpickdisappear.Onesecondhewasholdingthetoothpick,andthenextseconditwasgone!Everyonewasaskinghimhowhedidit.“It’smagic!Atmyoldschool,theyactuallycalledmeMagicMarty.”Martysaidproudly.“Isheserious”IwhisperedtomyfriendBrian.“Idon'tknow,butthatwasprettycool,”Briansaid,stillwatchingMarty.IknewMarty’smagicwasfake,butIjustcouldn’tproveit.關(guān)注特定情節(jié)照應(yīng)（結(jié)尾）Martykeptperformingmagicshowsatschool.Hefinallybecameour“MagicMarty”.照應(yīng)（續(xù)寫第一段)Luckily,theevidencebroughtthepossibilityofprovinghismagicwasfake.Anothertime,Martypulledawaterbottleoutofhisbag,alongwithacupandcarefullypouredwaterintoit.Martygotahandfuloficecubes!Applausefilledthehallway.Whenaskedhowhedidit,hejustsmiled,“Sorry,butthat’sthefirstlawofmagic.Amagicianneverrevealshissecrets.”Well,hewon’thaveto,Ithoughttomyself.I’llrevealhissecretsforhim.Thatnight,athome,Isatatthekitchentableforalmostanhour,tryingtofigureoutthetrick.Atitagain,honey”Mymomwatchedmewiggle(擺動）myfingershopelesslyoveracupofwater.“He’strickingpeople!”Icried.“Soundsasifhe’stryingtomakefriends.”Mymompattedmyarm.照應(yīng)（結(jié)尾）：Weperformedthemagicshowstogether,withapplausefillingthewholeroom.照應(yīng)（第二段）：（Marty向我解釋）withdetermination,helookedintomyeyes,”IknowyouthinkI’mtrickingpeople.Butasamagician,neverrevealinghissecrectsisthefirstlawofmagic.Ijustwanttobringhappinesstoothers.I...I’mjusttryingtomakefriendsinthisschool.”Helookedovermyshoulders,astronglonelinessenvelopinghim.照應(yīng)（第一段）：（afterdiscoveringthesecret)”Cheater!”Curlingmyfistangrily,Icouldn’twaittorevealhissecrets,關(guān)注高頻詞MagicMartyhadmestumped(把...難住)，butthenextdayIcaughtaluckybreak.Atlunch,Martywasgoingonabouthowhecouldmakethingsfloat.Hehadaringinonehandandapencilintheother.That’swhenIsawit:athinpieceoffishinglinetiedaroundtheendofthepencilandattachedtoabuttononMarty’sshirt!Sureenough,hemadethering“float”byslidingitoverthepencilandhangingitfromtheline.Nooneelsenoticed,andsoonthewholecafeteriawasclapping.However,Iwasn’t.照應(yīng)（續(xù)寫第一段）Iwouldnevermissedtheluckybreak--Imustprovehewastrickingeveryone.Thefishinglinewasthesecret.照應(yīng)（續(xù)寫第一段）Hearingmywords,thewholecafeteriawasboiling.possibleversion1Paragraph1：ItwastimetoputanendtotheMagicMartyshow.Iwalkedover.“Itwasfishingline.”Isneered,foldingmyarms.Martysubconsciouslyfingeredthefishinglineandnervouslywhispered,“So,areyougoingtotellpeople”Seeingthepanicinhiseyes,somehow,Ihesitated.ShouldIrevealthesecret,Martymightlosehisnewfriends.Finally,afterstrugglingforamoment,Ireplied,“Nah,Iwon’tsayanything.”Martyletoutarelievedsigh,andIturnedtowalkaway.Paragraph2：“Wait!”Martyjumpedinfrontofme.Unexpectedly,hepattedmyarm,grinning,“You’vegotaprettygoodeyeformagic.Wanttojoinme”Inoddedjoyfully.That’showtheMagicMartyandMysteriousMattLunchShowbegan.Nowwe’vebeenamagicteamforthreemonths.AndsinceIbecameafellowmagician,Martyhasletmeinonsomeofhisothertricks.Itturnsoutthatinsteadofafakemagician,Martyisarealfriend.照應(yīng)原文結(jié)尾照應(yīng)特定情節(jié)照應(yīng)開頭照應(yīng)廚房練習(xí)情節(jié)照應(yīng)文章主題結(jié)果/結(jié)局:Ididn’trevealthesecret.Martyandbecamefriends,andplayedmagictogether.回應(yīng):魔術(shù)假，友情真。Possibleversion2:Paragraph1：

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