讀后續(xù)寫倔強(qiáng)父子重新和好（Z20名校聯(lián)盟-浙江省高三名校聯(lián)盟第二次聯(lián)考）講義-高考英語作文專項(xiàng)

題目JeffandIhadmanyconversationsduringtheyear,butIwillalwaysrememberthetimehetoldmeabouthisfamily.Hisfather,asuccessfulphysician,wascoldandstrictinJeff’swords.HisfatherhadevenpavedthewayforJefftoattendthesamecollegefromwhichhehadgraduated.Jeffwastwentysevenandasuccessfulbusinessplanneratapanywithoutadegree.Hispassionwasskiing.Whenhegraduatedfromhighschool,hedecidedtodeclinehisfather'sofferand,instead,toworkwithaskipatrol(滑雪巡邏隊(duì)).Withpaininhiseyes,Jefftoldmehestillrememberedthedaywhenhetoldhisfatherhewasgoingtogiveupcollegeandtakeajobataskiresort.HearingJeff’sdecision,hisfatherlookedoffintothedistance.ThencamethewordsthatstillechoedinJeff’smind:“Youlazykid.Nosonofmineisgoingtoworkwithaskipatrolanddoesnotattendcollege.Ishouldhaveknownyou’dneveramounttoanything!”Thetwohadnotspokensincethatconversation.Later,hewasbackintheareanearwherehegrewupandhecertainlydidnotwanthisfathertoknowhewasattendingcollege.Hewasdoingthisforhimself,notforhisfather.Hesaiditoverandoveragain.Jeff’ssisterhadalwaysremainedsupportiveofJeff’sdecisions.Shestayedincontactwiththeirfather,butJeffhadmadeherpromisethatshewouldnotshareanyinformationabouthislifewithhim.Thedaywhenthegraduationceremonycame,Iwalkedaroundtalkingtopeoplebeforeitstarted.Inoticedamanwithaconfusedexpression.“Excuseme,”hesaidashepolitelyapproachedme.“Whatishappeningheretoday?”“It’sgraduationday,”Ireplied,smiling.“Well,that’sodd,”hesaid,“mydaughteraskedmetomeetheratthisaddress.”Hiseyessparkledandhesmiled.“Maybeshepletedherassociate’sdegreeandwantedtosurpriseme!”Ihelpedhimfindaseat.Paragraph1:AsIlefthim,hesaid,“Thankyou.Bytheway,myname’sDr.Holstrom.”Paragraph2:Jeffwasthelastpersontocrossthestage.文本分析：故事大意：Jeff和他的父親關(guān)系疏遠(yuǎn)，他的父親是一個(gè)成功的醫(yī)生，對Jeff很冷淡且嚴(yán)格。Jeff沒有上大學(xué)，而是在一家公司做商業(yè)規(guī)劃，他熱愛滑雪。高中畢業(yè)后，他決定放棄父親的提議，去滑雪巡邏隊(duì)工作。他告訴父親這個(gè)決定后，父親憤怒地指責(zé)他是一個(gè)懶惰的孩子，他們自此之后就沒有再交流。后來，Jeff回到他成長的地方，并進(jìn)入大學(xué)學(xué)習(xí)。他反復(fù)強(qiáng)調(diào)他做這一切是為了自己，而不是為了父親。Jeff的姐姐一直支持他的決定，并向Jeff保證不向父親透露Jeff的生活信息。在畢業(yè)典禮那天，我遇到了一個(gè)表情困惑的男士并幫他找到了座位。段首句1：AsIlefthim,hesaid,“Thankyou.Bytheway,myname’sDr.Holstrom.”段首句2：Jeffwasthelastpersontocrossthestage.矛盾沖突：conflict1:HisfatherhadevenpavedthewayforJefftoattendsamecollegefromwhichhehadgraduated.conflict2:Thetwohadnotspokensincethatconversation.conflict3:Jeffhadmadeherpromisethatshewouldnotshareanyinformationabouthislifewithhim.文本語言簡單樸實(shí)，以“我”的視角，講述了Jeff和他父親的故事，見（聽）證了父子之“不和“到”和“的種種事件。本次學(xué)生習(xí)作問題闡述1.故事構(gòu)思不合理，人物關(guān)系錯(cuò)亂；2.敘述角度過渡聚焦“I“，以至于重心偏離。續(xù)寫要回答的問題：Para.1AsIlefthim,hesaid,“Thankyou.Bytheway,myname'sDr.Holstrom.WhatdidIdo?OrwhatdidIthink?What'smyreactionwhenIheardthename?HowtoconnectthefirstPara.andthesecondPara?inthegraduationceremonymaybe,thedeanwouldsaysomething.Para.2Jeffwasthelastpersontocrossthestage.WhatdidJeffdo?WouldJeffrecognizehisfatherinthecrowd?thelovebetweenJeffandhisfather.高潮：續(xù)寫第二段，父子相認(rèn)Jeffwasthelastpersontocrossthestage.Havingreceivedhisdiploma,heturnedtowardtheaudience,radiantwithjoy.Suddenly,alongfigurepoppedintohiseyesDr.Holstrom.IwasnotsurehowJeffspottedhiminthecrowd,butIcouldtelltheireyesmet.Dr.Holstrom,gazingatJeffthoughtfullyforafewseconds,openedhisarmsasiftoembracetheairaroundhim.Foramomenttimeseemedtostandstill.翻譯：杰夫是最后一個(gè)跨過舞臺的人。拿到畢業(yè)證書后，他轉(zhuǎn)向觀眾，容光煥發(fā)。突然，一個(gè)長長的身影出現(xiàn)在他的眼睛里——霍爾斯特羅姆醫(yī)生。我不知道杰夫是怎么在人群中認(rèn)出他的，但我能看出他們的目光交匯了?；魻査雇心丰t(yī)生若有所思地盯著杰夫看了幾秒鐘，張開雙臂，好像要擁抱周圍的空氣。一時(shí)間似乎靜止了。主題：重建父子交流主題意義：杰夫與父親的關(guān)系以及它對他人生選擇的影響。是追隨自己的熱情與欲望，還是滿足父母的期望和認(rèn)可之間的斗爭。杰夫的父親對他有很高的期望，希望他上大學(xué)并有一個(gè)成功的職業(yè)，但杰夫選擇追求他對滑雪的熱情。這個(gè)決定導(dǎo)致杰夫和他父親之間產(chǎn)生了分歧，使他們的關(guān)系變得緊張。然而，杰夫的姐姐對他的選擇保持支持，并且對他們的父親隱瞞了杰夫的生活情況。這段文字還突出了個(gè)人成長和自我實(shí)現(xiàn)的主題，因?yàn)榻芊蛟跊]有父親的知情下上大學(xué)，并最終畢業(yè)，讓他的父親感到驚訝，并改變他們的關(guān)系。下水文：ParagraphI:AsIwasleaving,hesaid,“Thankyou.Bytheway,mynameisDrHolstrom.”Notpayingtoomuchattentiontothename,Iwalkedawayandcontinuedtowanderaround,talkingtoothers.However,thename“Holstrom”keptlingeringinmymind.Itsoundedfamiliar,asifIhadhearditmanytimesbefore.Unfortunately,lcouldn'trecallanyspecificdetailsaboutit.Soon,thegraduationceremonybegan,andhurriedtothesideofthestagewithmyfellowclassmates,waitingformyturntocrossthestage.Suddenly,thesoundofsmoothmusicfilledtheair,andthefirstnamewascalled,followedcloselybythenext.Paragraph2:Jeffwasthelastpersontocrossthestage.“JeffHolstrom,thevoiceannounced.Atthatmoment,asparkofrecognitionflashedinmymind.HolstromwasJeff'sfamilyname!ItdawnedonmethatthemanIhadmetearlierwasprobablyJeff'sfather.AsIlookedinthedirectionwherethemanwasseated,IsawamixtureofconfusionandsurpriseonhisfaceashewatchedJeffwalkonstage.However,thoseemotionsquicklytransformedintosheerhappiness,evidentbytheenormoussmileonhisface.Afterthe