讀后續(xù)寫火災(zāi)遇險救人類TomandJaneRescuedAnOldLady講義-高三英語一輪復(fù)習(xí)

大火中救老人讀后續(xù)寫原題目呈現(xiàn)：Theeventthatstandsoutin

Tom’smemoryhappenedonemorningwhenTomwasonlytenyearsold.Hewasathomewithhiseldersister

Jane.Tomwasdoinghishomeworkwhenheheardraisedvoices.Atfirsthethoughtnothingofitsincecustomersinthemotorcycleshopdirectlybelowtheir

flat

oftenbecameloud,buthesoonrealizedthistimeitwasdifferent.“Quick!

Quick!Removethemotorcyclesfromtheshop.”someoneyelled.Thenathickburningsmellfilledtheair.WhenTomopenedthefrontdooroftheirflattoinvestigate,athickcloudof

smoke

greetedhim.Themotorcycleshophadcaughtfireandpeoplewererunningandcrying.Jane,whohadbeenplayingtheviolininherroom,hurriedtothelivingroom.They

rushed

outof

thedoor

andalongthecorridor(走廊)

throughthesmoke.Theywereheadingtowardsthestairwayatthefar

endofthe

corridor

whenJanestoppedinhertrack.Sheturnedaroundandheadedbackthewaytheycame.Tomhadnoideawhatshewasdoing,buthefollowed

her.Janehadsuddenlyrememberedtheladyinher70swholivednextdoortothem,whotheycalled

Makcik,Malayforauntie.Janebegan

banging

onMakcik’sdoor,but

gotnoanswer.Asthesmokethickenedaroundthem,Tomcouldseemanyoftheirneighbors—somestillintheirpyjamas(睡衣；寬長褲)—runningforsafety.Thethoughtof

fear

crossedhismind.“She

might

haverunforsafetylikeeveryoneelse!”Tomcried.However,Janerefusedtogiveup.“IknowMakcik’sstillinside.”ShesaidshewasfamiliarwithMakcik’sdailyroutineandwascertainshewouldstillbesleeping.She

pounded

thedoor.“Go

downstairs.Gonow!Go!”注意：

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1:TomnoticedtheflamewasreachingupParagraph

2:Luckily,someneighborspassingbystoppedandofferedhelp.

【解析】湯姆家樓下汽車店發(fā)生了火災(zāi)，湯姆和姐姐Jane趕緊從家里從出來逃生?？斓阶呃缺M頭的時候，Jane突然停了下來，往回跑去。原來，她是要去救同住一樓的70多歲的Makcik。所給短文寫到Jane堅持不懈的敲Makcik的門。要求學(xué)生續(xù)寫這個故事。所給故事比較好理解，主要考查學(xué)生的基本理解能力和表達能力。

所給范文符合故事的情節(jié)發(fā)展，突出了“正能量”。范文中，不僅描述了人物的具體行動，還描述了人物的內(nèi)心感受，內(nèi)容充實，符合實際。參考范文1

Paragraph1:

Tom

noticedtheflamewasreachingup.

Frozenwithfear,hestoodrootedtothespot.Heprehendedthegravityofthesituationandheld

Jane'shandtightly.Bothofthemwerecoughingandtheireyeswerestinging.Timeseemedtostandstill,thoughtheywereprobablythereforonlytwoorthreeminutes.

Tom

beggedJanetorunforsafetyasquicklyaspossible.Janetriedtoshieldhernosefromthechoking

smoke

andshookherhead.Shekeptpoundingagainst

thedoor.Tomburstoutcrying.Paragraph2:Luckily,someneighborspassingbystoppedandofferedhelp.

AsenseofstrengthimmediatelyreplacedthemountingfearandanxietyinJane'smind.ShetoldthemMs.Makcikmustbestillintheroom.Theyforcedthedooropenwithalltheirmight.Sureenough,Makcikwaslyinginbed,unconscious.Shewascarried

downstairs

andthen

rushed

tothehospital,whereshefinallycametoherself.PeopleintheneighborhoodfeltrelievedandJaneandTomwereveryhappy.參考范文2【答案2】Onepossibleversion:

Tomnoticedtheflamewasreachingup.

Frozenwithfear,hestoodrootedtothespot.Heprehendedthegravityofthesituationandheld

Jane’shandtightly.Bythen,bothofthemwerecoughingandtheireyeswerestinging.Timeseemedtostandstill,thoughtheywereprobablythereforonlytwoorthreeminutes.

Tom

beggedJanetorunforsafetyasquicklyaspossible.Janetriedtoshieldhernosefromthechoking

smoke

andshookherhead.Shekept

pounding

against

thedoor.Tomburstoutcrying.

Luckily,someneighborspassingbystoppedandofferedhelp.

Asenseofstrengthimmediatelyreplacedthemounting

fear

andanxietyinJane’smind.ShetoldthemMs.Makcikmustbestillintheroom.Theyforcedthedooropenwithalltheirmight.Sureenough,Makcikwaslyinginbed,unconscious.Shewascarried

downstairs

andthen

rushed

tothehospital,whereshefinallycametoherself.PeopleintheneighborhoodfeltrelievedandJaneandTom’sjoywasimmense.參考范文3Paragraph1:Tomnoticedtheflamewasreachingup.

Itsoundedlikeawildanimalwasroaringatthem.Withinsecondsthecorridorwasfullofchoking

smoke.Itstungtheireyesandleftthemgaspingforbreath.Atthispoint,

Tom

begantopanic,forhecouldbarelymakeouthissisterthroughthesmoke.Coughingandrubbinghiseyes,hecroucheddownbesideher,notknowingwhattodo.Totallyoverwhelmedby

fear,hewasclosetotears.But

Jane

keptbangingon

thedoor

andshouted,“Quick!

Openthedoor!The

flat

isonfire...”Paragraph2:

Luckily,someneighborspassingbystoppedandofferedhelp.

Togetherthey

pounded

atthedoorwiththeirfists.Aftertryinginvaintowakeuptheoldlady,theymanagedtobreakitdown.Inaninstant,JaneandTom

rushed

in,followedbytheirneighbors,onlytofindMakcik

lyingunconsciousinbed.Inrecordtime,theycarriedherout,headedtowardsthestairway,andthendashed

downstairs.Whatanarrowescape!Whenthefirefightersetotheirrescue,allofthem

breathedasighofrelief.WhatmadeTomproudwasthatafewdayslater,hiseldersisterwasgivenanawardfor

her

bravery

andquickaction.參考范文4Paragraph1:Tom

noticed

the

flame

was

reaching

up.

Stickingoutthetongue,thefireseemedtodevoureverythingandeveryoneinthebuilding.(擬人)

Frozenwithfear,Tom

stoodrootedtotheground(呆住不動),notknowingwhattodoandjustholdingJane’shandtightly.

Soheavywasthesmokethattheycouldn’thelpcoughingandtheireyeswerestinging.（so倒裝）

Therewasapausethatseemedtolastforever

before

Tombeggedhissistertorunforsafetyassoonaspossible.But

anticipatingthat

Makcik

woulddieinsidewithouttheirhelp,（原因狀語）

Janeshookherhead

indisapproval.

NotonlydidJanepoundthedoor,(否定句首倒裝)

butsheshoutedhysterically,hopingtowake

Makcikup.

Butbothdidn’twork.

Whatmadethemmorefrightenedwasthattherewereshoutsandcries

echoing

downthecorridor.Paragraph2:Luckily,someneighborspassingbystoppedandofferedhelp.

Afterfiguringoutwhatwasgoingon,oneofthementhoughtthatchildren'ssafetywas

atoppriority(當務(wù)之急）.Soheaskedhiswifetotakeallchildrenouttoasafeplace.Acoupleofmenstayedthere,readytorescue

Makcik.Theydidn’tmessabout,

onemanpoundingthedoor,onefindinganironbar,anotherhurlinghimselfagainstthedoor.

（伴隨）Suddenly,thedoorwasopenedwhentheywerereadytoforce

thedooropen.Thereatthedoorstood

Makcik,whohadbeensufferingfromhearinglossformanyyears.Innotime,shewascarrieddownstairs

before

shecouldrealizewhathadhappened.

HavingseenMakcikwasrescuedandtakentothesafeplace,(havingdone做時間狀語)

Janefeltasenseofreliefanddelightsurgingthroughher.

Agustof

morning

breezeblewtoher,seemingto

whisper:”You’resogreatandbrave.”（擬人）(317words)參考范文5Paragraph1:

Tomnoticedtheflameswasgrowinghigherandhigher.

Unluckily,therewasno

sign

ofansweringthe

door.

Withnotimeleft,

Jane

tookadeepbreath,

breakinginto

thehouse.

Strugglingto

controlhis

fear

,TomfollowedhissisterdirectlyintoMakcik's