高二下學期期中讀后續(xù)寫解讀與示范講義

高二下期中讀后續(xù)寫解讀與示范第二節(jié)(滿分15分)閱讀下面材料，根據(jù)其內(nèi)容和所給段落開頭語續(xù)寫兩段，使之構成一篇完整的短文。人與自我——家庭親情——對接B1U3MayaandherolderbrotherMarcuslivedwiththeirgrandma.Theirparents,busywithworkinanothercity,couldonlyreturnhomeduringthewinterholiday.Grandmawasgoodatpaper-cutting,andshedecoratedthewholeroomwithprettyshapesofanimalsandflowers,devotingherselftokeepingMayaandMarcushappy.However,despitehergrandmother'slove,Mayaoftenfeltdeepfrustration,complainingwhyshecouldn'tstaywithherparents.Asthedaysgrewshorterandcolder,Maya'sexcitementcameback.Sheknewthatwiththearrivalofsnow,thewinterholidaywouldcome,aswellasthereturnofherparents.Oneday,theweatherforecastpredictedsnowduringdaytime,soMayaeagerlyrosefrombed,pressinghernoseagainstthewindow,andwaitingforthefirstprettysnowflaketodropfromthesky.However,asitwasgettinglate,Maya'sexcitementturnedintodisappointment.Sensinghersadness,grandmacomfortedher,“Bepatient,dear.Thesnowwillcomesoon.”Marcus,too,triedtobeanolderbrother,remindingMayathatthesnowcouldfallatnight.Yet,despitetheirefforts,Mayaremainedupset.Nightfellandnotasinglesnowflakewasinsight.Sadly,Mayawenttobedwithouteatinganything,goingtoherdreamswithtearsinhereyes.注意：1.詞數(shù)應為120個左右；2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。Paragraph1TocheerMayaup,grandmaandMarcusdecidedtomakesnowflakesthemselves.________________________第一段續(xù)寫：為了讓Maya開心，祖母和Marcus決定自己制作雪花?！径卫m(xù)寫的關鍵在于祖母與Marcus通過彼此的愛為Maya制作手工雪花，同時考慮語篇材料的結尾和二段提示句的內(nèi)容得知，本段的結尾要有時間的變化——即“出現(xiàn)第二天清晨”——參考詞匯有：Marcus；grandma；snowflakes；Maya；window；glass；devoteoneselftopaper-cutting分析與示范：Paragraph1TocheerMayaup,grandmaandMarcusdecidedtomakesnowflakesthemselves.Grandmaimmediatelydevotedherselftopaper-cutting,makingeachpaperinherhandsthenbecomeelegantanddelicatesnowflakes.Atthesametime,Marcuswenttogreatlengthtolearnhowtomakesnowflakebyfollowinggrandma’stechnique.Onehourlater,allkindsofsnowflakespileduplikeahillonthetable.ThenMarcusstuckthemonthewindowsandpicturedhowexcitedMayawouldbeatthesightofthem.Thenextday,Mayawokeupalone,spottingsomethingunusualontheglass.（5句）Paragraph2Mayarushedtothewindows,andfoundsnowflakesofallshapesandsizesontheglass.___________________第二段續(xù)寫：Maya沖向窗戶，發(fā)現(xiàn)玻璃上各種形狀和尺寸的雪花。——本段續(xù)寫的核心在于，Maya被祖母和Marcus前夜的行為所感動，同時受到心靈的感動——明白了家庭親情的價值（注：最巧妙地方式莫過于無聲勝有聲——最好讓祖母和Marcus繼續(xù)處于睡覺中，讓Maya實現(xiàn)心理的升華，是不是比三人直接交集更震撼呢？）——參考詞匯：Maya；winter；snow；Marcus；grandma；parents；droppedfromthesky分析與示范：Paragraph2Mayarushedtothewindows,andfoundsnowflakesofallshapesandsizesontheglass.Atthatmoment,Mayaunderstoodwhathadhappenedlastnight.Despitethefactthatoutsidefellnosnowstill,theseartificialsnowflakesprovedtobethebestsnowinthewinter.Inthedaylight,theyseemedasiftheyhadtrulydroppedfromthesky,whichmadeMayareconsiderhernegativeemotionsshehadexpressed.Turningback,sherestedhereyesonMarcusandgrandmawhowerestillasleep.Atoncesheacknowledgedthatitwasthemwhoalwaysaccompaniedherduringherparents’absence.（5句）點評：本次高二英語下期中讀后續(xù)寫是一篇典型的人與自我（家庭親情方向的命題），主題及形式和新課標命題緊密結合。但是作為一篇同步命題，由于本學期考試范圍的調(diào)整，感覺選材有些偏失（下雪的內(nèi)容與X3U6更為貼切），因為本次期中范圍為（X2U6-X3U4），所以主題細節(jié)更像是過去兩年命題的預備版。如果今年期中能嚴格按照同步課本的范圍與主題命題，我個人感覺效果會更好。續(xù)寫作文：Paragraph1TocheerMayaup,grandmaandMarcusdecidedtomakesnowflakesthemselves.Grandmaimmediatelydevotedherselftopaper-cutting,makingeachpaperinherhandsthenbecomeelegantanddelicatesnowflakes.Atthesametime,Marcuswenttogreatlengthtolearnhowtomakesnowflakebyfollowinggrandma’stechnique.Onehourlater,allkindsofsnowflakespileduplikeahillonthetable.ThenMarcusstuckthemonthewindowsandpicturedhowexcitedMayawouldbeatthesightofthem.Thenextday,Mayawokeupalone,spottingsomethingunusualontheglass.（5句）Paragraph2Mayarushedtothewindows,andfoundsnowflakesofallshapesandsizesontheglass.Atthatmoment,Mayaunderstoodwhathadhappenedlastnight.Despitethefactthatoutsidefellnosnowstill,theseartificialsnowflakesprovedtobethebestsnowinthewinter.Inthedaylight,theyseemedasiftheyhadtrulydroppedfromthesky,whichmadeMayareconsiderhernegativeemotionsshehadexpressed.Turningback,sherestedhereyesonMarcusandgrandmawhowerestillasleep.Atoncesheacknowledgedthatitwasthemwhoalwaysaccompaniedherduringherparents’absence.（5句）續(xù)寫亮點：Grandmaimmediatelydevotedherselftopaper-cutting,makingeachpaperinherhandsthenbecomeelegantanddelicatesnowflakes.運用了分詞短語作狀語。Atthesametime,Marcuswenttogreatlengthtolearnhowtomakesnowflakebyfollowinggrandma’stechnique.運用了復合結構作賓語。ThenMarcusstuckthemonthewindowsandpicturedhowexcitedMayawouldbeatthesightofthem.運用了賓語從句。Thenextday,Mayawokeupalone,spottingsomethingunusualontheglass.運用了分詞短語作狀語。Atthatmoment,Mayaunderstoodwhathadhappenedlastnight.運用了賓語從句。Despitethefactthatoutsidefellnosnowstill,theseartificialsnowflakesprovedtobethebestsnowinthewinter.運用了同位語從句。Inthedaylight,theyseemedasiftheyhadtrulydroppedfromthesky