2024屆高考專題復習2023年高考二卷讀后續(xù)寫writing contes課件

評分標準壹真題分析貳參考范文叁目錄書面表達：續(xù)寫2023新高考真題續(xù)寫評分參考【評分原則】1.本題總分為25分，按5個檔次給分。2.評分時，先根據所續(xù)寫短文的內容和語言初步確定其所屬檔次，然后以該檔次的要求來衡量、確定或調整檔次，最后給分。3.詞數少于130的，從總分中減去2分。4.評分時，應主要從以下四個方面進行考慮：①與所給短文及段落開頭語的銜接程度；②內容的豐富性；③應用語法結構和詞匯的豐富性和準確性；④上下文的連貫性。5.

拼寫與標點符號是語言準確性的一個重要方面，評分時，應視其對交際的影響程度予以考慮。6.如書寫較差以致影響交際，可將分數降低一個檔次。續(xù)寫評分參考【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】第五檔：（21—25分）1.與所給短文融洽度高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接合理。2.所使用語法結構和詞匯豐富、準確，可能有些許錯誤，但完全不影響意義表達。3.有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結構緊湊。第四檔：（16—20分）1.與所給短文融洽度較高，與所提供各段落開頭語銜接較為合理。2.所使用語法結構和詞匯較為豐富、準確，可能有些許錯誤，但不影響意義表達。3.比較有效地使用了語句間的連接成分，使所續(xù)寫短文結構緊湊。續(xù)寫評分參考【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】第三檔：（11—15分）1.與所給短文關系較為密切，與所提供各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接。2.應用的語法結構和詞匯能滿足任務的要求，雖有一些錯誤，但不影響意義表達。3.應用簡單的語句間連接成分，使全文內容連貫。第二檔：（6—10分）1.與所給短文有一定的關系，與所提供各段落開頭語有一定程度的銜接。2.語法結構單調，詞匯項目有限，有些語法結構和詞匯方面的錯誤，影響了意義的表達。3.較少使用語句間的連接成分，全文內容缺少連貫性。續(xù)寫評分參考【各檔次的給分范圍和要求】第一檔：（1—5分）1.與所提供短文和開頭語的銜接較差。2.語法結構單調，詞匯項目很有限，有較多語法結構和詞匯方面的錯誤，嚴重影響了意義的表達。3.缺乏語句間的連接成分，全文內容不連貫。不得分：（0分）白卷、內容太少無法評判或所寫內容與所提供內容無關。寫作第二節(jié)（滿分25分）

WhenIwasinmiddleschool,mysocialstudiesteacheraskedmetoenterawritingcontest.Isaidnowithoutthinking.Ididnotlovewriting.MyfamilycamefromBrazil,soEnglishwasonlymysecondlanguage.WritingwassodifficultandpainfulformethatmyteacherhadallowedmetopresentmypaperonthesinkingoftheTitanicbyactingoutaplay,whereIplayedalltheparts.Noonelaughedharderthanhedid.

So,whydidhesuddenlyforcemetodosomethingatwhichIwassuretofail?Hisreply:“BecauseIloveyourstories.Ifyou’rewillingtoapplyyourself,Ithinkyouhaveagoodshotatthis.”Encouragedbyhiswords,Iagreedtogiveitatry.

IchosePaulRevere’shorseasmysubject.PaulReverewasasilversmith（銀匠）inBostonwhorodeahorseatnightonApril18,1775toLexingtontowarnpeoplethatBritishsoldierswerecoming.Mystorywouldcomestraightfromthehorse’smouth.Notabrilliantidea,butfunny;andunlikelytobeanyoneelse’schoice.

Whatdidthehorsethink,ashespedthroughthenight?Didhegettired?Havedoubts?Didhewanttoquit?Isympathizedimmediately.Igottired.Ihaddoubts.Iwantedtoquit.But,likeRevere’shorse,Ikeptgoing.Iworkedhard.Icheckedmyspelling.Iaskedmyoldersistertocorrectmygrammar.IcheckedoutahalfdozenbooksonPaulReverefromthelibrary.Ievenreadafewofthem.

WhenIhandedintheessaytomyteacher,hereadit,laughedoutloud,andsaid,“Great.Now,writeitagain.”Iwroteitagain,andagainandagain.WhenIfinallyfinishedit,thethoughtofwinninghadgivenwaytotheenjoymentofwriting.IfIdidn’twin,Iwouldn’tcare.注意:1.續(xù)寫詞數應為150個左右;

2.請按如下格式在答題卡的相應位置作答。

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.故事概要:一名以英語作為第二語言的古巴移民的孩子，在老師的鼓勵下參加作文競賽，寫作過程中他不斷克服困難，最終享受到寫作的快樂并獲獎。

在老師的幫助下克服困難，實現個人成長。

故事的主題:

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Iwenttomyteacher’soffice

after

theawardpresentation.消息的內容“我”收到消息后的反應、情緒等參加頒獎典禮“我”跟老師的互動總結這次比賽對“我”的影響升華主題語料積累：1.表達“吃驚”：

besurprised\amazed\astonished\shockedby對…感到吃驚

toone’ssurprise\amazement\astonishment\shock令某人吃驚的是

in\withsurprise\amazement\astonishment\shock吃驚地

beyondone’sexpectations\imagination出乎…的意料得知了比賽的結果:The

moment

I

saw

my

name

in

the

winner’s

list,

my

heart

leaped

with

joy.

當我看到自己的名字在獲獎名單上時，我的心跳躍起。

A

wave

of

disbelief

washed

over

me,

followed

by

an

overwhelming

sense

of

accomplishment.

我首先感到難以置信，隨后是一種壓倒一切的成就感。

My

eyes

widened

in

surprise,

I

could

hardly

believe

the

words

printed

in

front

of

me.

我的眼睛驚訝地睜大，我?guī)缀醪桓蚁嘈叛矍坝∷⒌淖衷~。獲獎時的場景:

As

I

stepped

onto

the

stage,

the

applause

from

the

audience

filled

my

ears.

當我走上舞臺，觀眾的掌聲充滿了我的耳朵。

Holding

the

award,

I

felt

a

rush

of

pride

and

gratitude.

握著獎杯，我感到一陣驕傲和感激。

The

bright

lights

shone

on

me,

the

cheering

crowd

below

was

a

blur,

but

the

joy

I

felt

was

crystal

clear.

亮光照耀在我身上，下面的歡呼人群模糊不清，但我感到的快樂卻清晰明了。來到老師辦公室時的場景

I

walked

into

my

teacher’s

office,

the

sense

of

victory

still

lingering

in

my

heart.

我走進老師的辦公室，勝利的感覺仍然縈繞在我的心中。

The

look

of

pride

on

my

teacher’s

face

was

the

best

reward.

老師臉上的驕傲表情是最好的獎賞。

Sharing

this

moment

of

success

with

my

teacher,

I

felt

a

deep

sense

of

gratitude

for

her

unwavering

support.

與老師分享這個成功的時刻，我對她堅定不移的支持感到深深的感激。

Afewweekslater,whenIalmostforgotthecontest,therecamethenews.

Incredibly,Iwonthefirstprize.Themanonthephonetoldmetoattendtheawardpresentationthenextday.However,Iwastooastonishedtoutteraword.Atnight,Ikepttossingandturninginbed,allmyheartfilledwithsuspicion.Whatifthemancalledthewrongnumber?DidIreallyhearhimclearly?Asdawnfinallybroke,Iwassoonup,headingfortheawardpresentationwithtwobigdarkcirclesundermyeyes.WhenIwaspresentedwiththeprizeandcongratulated,agenuinefeelingofhappinesssweptoverme.Itwasatthatmomentthatmydoubtsaboutmywritingskillsvanishedintothinair.例文講解

Iwenttomyteacher’sofficeaftertheawardpresentation.Ihandedhimmyprize,sayingthanksinasoftbutconfidentvoice.Overjoyedandthrilled,hegavemeabighug.“Itoldyou,youcanmakeit.Iamsoproudofyou.”Asalways,hehadgreatfaithinme.Withoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavewontheprize.Withoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavefoundmypassionforwriting.Andwithoutthatfaith,neverwouldIhavebeenmotivatedtobeawriter.例文講解AsIlefthisoffice,Ilookedupatthesky.Theskywasbluewiththesuncastingagoldenlightovertheteachingbuildings.Whatagreatday!Ifeltmyheartfullofhope.NeverwouldIforgetthisexperienceandmyteacher.Paragraph

1:

A

few

weeks

later,

when

I

almost

forgot

the

contest,

there

came

the

news.

I

was

told

that

I

won

the

first

prize

in

the

writing

contest!

I

couldn’t

believe

my

ears

because

I

knew

for

sure

that

I

didn’t

have

any

advantages

writing

in

English,

my

second

language.

Therefore,

my

heart

was

filled

with

a

mix

of

excitement

and

disbelief.

I

thought

I

didn’t

care

about

winning,

but

realizing

that

all

my

hard

work

and

perseverance

paid

off

gave

me

a

surge

of

confidence.

Then

I

was

invited

to

the

award

presentation

of

the

writing

contest,

which

was

a

great

momen